UncloudedTJ
Since: Oct, 2010
12/28/2010 15:36:44
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FanficRecs Even Unspeakables miss a trick or two
"Your typical Harry is being sent to Azkaban plot with a lot of twists involved. At the top of the list is Harry's friends don't abandon him but are stopped by a Kangaroo Court. At the center of this story is a very interesting take of the Unspeakables and who runs them. Amusingly there is an OC that has the code name of Mary Sue. The author doesn't have any planned pairings at the moment and the story is set after Order of the Phoenix (with some elements of the later books mixed in the later chapters)."
Not much else to say except that the story is altered. In his fifth year Harry was trained by Moody and Dumbledore instead of the canon events. Also wonderful integration of the sixth book when it got to that point.
FanficRecs It's the little things that kill you
The biggest problem with this fic isn't the story, which isn't anything really special, but isn't all that bad either. It's the little things. Starting with "James Pathertrory" that's how he spells the name. And as an alias it's an annoyance that will continue throughout the story. Weird spelling doesn't stop there, the fic is littered with spelling errors and grammar mistakes and dialogue that sounds flat out unnatural. Even "James Pathertrory's" characterization is nothing like that of Harry potter. None of these by itself is a game breaker, but they keep adding up and more and more keep appearing until the story is basically unreadable.