Reviews Fanfic / PrincessOfTheBlacks

Fanfic Perfection

Is what this story is. The author has a masterpiece of a series here. I can only giddily wait when time finally comes for the coronation of the Black Queen.

The story is full of surprises, character development, study on the Wizard World and the other magical communities and showing us what we didn’t see or think of before.

The main character, Jennifer ‘Jen’ Black, is flawed, like a real human being, yet perfect, in her own twisted way. She might be apathetic to the world and enjoy seeing her enemies die, but she also cares about her family, the Blacks, and her friends. She still has to learn and the author has promised to have Karma kick Jen when that time comes, but she is still magnificent.

The other characters, such as the Blacks, are also fleshed out and given depth. Some characters (i.e. Umbridge) are toned down and made plausible to exist in the world (Not that I don’t enjoy a good fic with Umbridge-bashing), some have actually become smarter and more devious actually making me cheer when they pull out something clever (i.e. Voldemort), others are changed from their characterization by isolating their lesser known virtues (i.e. Hermione), some are shifted into the necessary characterization as they didn’t have a whole lot of fleshing out in the books or movies (i.e. Luna). Even other lesser known characters are getting their dues.

The little things that Silently drops seem like throwaway lines, but are actually parts of the story in the future are amazing (i.e. In ‘Princess of the Blacks’ we are told about spells that can enslave others within the Black Library and in ‘Black Princess Ascendant’ Jen uses such a spell on Rita). And even the explanation on why none of the Light families can use White Magic makes sense. Of course, I would like to see a bit more in detail about this White Powers vs. Dark Powers and what it is about, but that’s just me.

The New Prophecy, however, is probably my favorite part. I’m not sure why, maybe its Dumbledore just screwing up Big Time or maybe its what Jen did in the Hall of Prophecies or the possibility of someone (Jen from the future would be cool or maybe its Baron Samedi himself) explaining to Dumbles that he caused Jen to become the dark witch he wanted to make sure never came to pass before he dies. Now that would be a scene.

This is one Black Witch I would love to see win.

Fanfic Frankly awful

The writing tends towards the unoriginal and the main character is horrendously over powered. It might be a mildly entertaining story if characters were not painfully coated in layers of 'grey' which tend to appear more like black or white depending on whether they side with or against the protagonist. The slightest feeling that the heroine might not win everything she tries at would improve it tenfold. To suggest that 'Jen' tends towards the divine in terms of her power would be a criminal understatement.