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Manraduk Since: Nov, -0001
#1: Apr 23rd 2022 at 5:20:43 AM

I would like some help in setting up my cold-based supernatural female who is named Arastellia. How can Improve her description so she sound like she has unearthly beauty and also make the description sound better? What do you think about me giving her a set of horns? What kind of supernatural being could she be? How can I show that she is very charismatic? Would you see her being graceful in her movements? What help can give in getting her back story started if she is from a dimension ice and cold.

Description: A statuesque woman walks in, moving with both surety and seduction. There is something sexy about the way she carries herself, a hidden power to her movements, but covered by a demure facade. She has an hourglass figure with luminous snow-white skin that is icy cold to the touch. Her radiant white hair flows down her back in cascading waves down to the ground. Her face has a forehead and jawline that is narrow, with regal, well-defined cheekbones. In both of her delicate pointed ears, she wears a large silver icicle-shaped earring. Her white peaked eyebrows lead to a dainty, upturned nose. Her perfectly curling long eyelashes bat sweetly over her eyes that are like shards of blue ice, seeming to look into the very soul of those she gazes upon. Her full crimson lips deceive her authority. The blue silk dress she wears has silver embroidered vine work that goes up and down the chest and the back of the dress. The dress is pinned together in the front with a small silver clasp and the dress has a contrasting simple cream undress. She tends to go about barefooted, each toe adorned with a gorgeous ring, much like her long fingers.

TitanJump Since: Sep, 2013 Relationship Status: Singularity
#2: Apr 23rd 2022 at 5:36:55 AM

[up] Huh, this one again?

(I recognize this one...)

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Too long.

Advice number 1: "Make it three sentences or less."

Go.

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Example: The door swung open and those closest to the breeze turned their heads in scowling as the cold licked their napes clean in chills.

Their scowls vanished in wide-eyed gawking as she walked in, followed her as she walked through the room, and remained on her as she claimed a seat as hers and hers alone.

Meanwhile, the freezing breeze, finishing its escort, pulled the doors shut behind it left the room and joined the winter outside.

Edited by TitanJump on Apr 23rd 2022 at 3:12:38 PM

ArsThaumaturgis Since: Nov, 2011 Relationship Status: I've been dreaming of True Love's Kiss
#3: Apr 23rd 2022 at 6:43:02 AM

[up] In fact, the description appears to be nearly word-for-word the same as in that previous post. But that one was made by another user—one who just posted another thread in this same sub-forum! (That being Visitantlord.)

Edited by ArsThaumaturgis on Apr 23rd 2022 at 3:44:34 PM

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TitanJump Since: Sep, 2013 Relationship Status: Singularity
#4: Apr 23rd 2022 at 6:45:13 AM

[up] Saw that one too.

Same writing-style, same vocabulary.

Is this supposed to be some sort of forum-prank or something by the OP-poster?

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