Well, you could always "spice up" the description of your creature with some Purple Prose. It's something I do in my stories, since I feel it adds detail and punch to some scenes. However I would warn against using too much of a good thing, since it can unravel a scene entirely if done incorrectly. Here is an example of what I mean, using some of your Visitant description as an example.
Perhaps it really had been human once, but now it was a monster, there was no other way to describe it. The skeleton was human, true...but it towered to a ludicrous ten feet, the bones grotesquely thickened as though to compensate for this height. Four arms sprouted from the sockets of the shoulders, tensed and ready to strike at a moment's notice, while leathery wings like those of a dragon spread out from its fleshless back, the decaying flesh of those wings sending waves of stinking air directly into the faces of those watching with each twitch and flap.
I hope this helps. I didn't use the whole thing, but I wanted you to see a little glimpse of what I was talking about.
Edited by Swordofknowledge on Sep 17th 2020 at 7:04:23 AM
Fear is a tyrant and a despot, more terrible than the rack, more potent than the snake. — Edgar Walllace
How can I improve the description I wrote of a Visitant? Also, what can do to make the Visitant an original undead? At one point when I was writing the description of a Visitant, it had the following in its description. Searing white-hot fire surrounds the bones on the right side of its body. The fire does not cause the bones on the right side of his body to be scorched or charred. Constantly moving bolts of lightning surrounds, the bones on the left side of its body.
Description: A Visitant appears as a ten feet tall humanoid skeleton with four arms. Protruding from its back is a pair of rotting green dragon wings. The wings crest a full two feet higher than the shoulders and have a wingspan of thirty feet. Its head is that of a monstrous-looking sheep skull. In its hollow eye sockets burn searing white-hot fire that serves as its eyes. Its head floats eight inches above the start of its neck which it does not seem to have. Both of its shoulders and knees are made from a monstrous skull. Snaking out from the end of his spine is a four feet long segmented tail made of bone that ends in a wicked barb.
Edited by shrinkinglass on Sep 11th 2020 at 5:11:27 AM