I'm sure the jeweler will think there's nothing suspicious about a twelve-year-old boy with a bunch of bags' worth of jewels suddenly showing up to get them appraised. It's not like he'll assume that they're all stolen, and maybe call the police or something.
How come this is the first time we've ever heard about this wristwatch? Why did it never exist before now?
Lemme guess... it's gonna serve some plot purpose, right?
Aha! So he "lost" his suddenly existing wristwatch in the tunnels, around where the boxes were located. And so this is the author's transparent excuse to bring Archie back there for some reason.
Who is this book written for? Kindergarteners? This dialog is totally inane, repetitive, and merely restates the obvious.
Archie calls Billyhank about the three o'clock jewelry appointment, and he agrees. Then Archie asks him to come along back to the tunnel to serve as a lookout for neighbors, at which point Billyhank unexpectedly splits into two characters. Hank says his ankle is too injured from yesterday, while Billy agrees to come along. Finally, something to separate the two, even if it has nothing to do with personality.
Billy says he'll come at 1:30 PM because he has chores to do. Two sentences later, it's 1:30 PM, and Billy shows up. But before the two have a chance to leave Archie's house, they see police cars pull up in front of Amanda's house.
I honestly wonder if that detail is accurate. If so, then that, and the tunnel construction, are the only two things in this entire book that the author has any knowledge or understanding of whatsoever.
Amanda's mom comes to the front porch, crying, and shows the police a note. The police then enter her house with her.
It turns out that Amanda's family had been robbed by the gang of jewel thieves in the area, who have now kidnapped Amanda.
Gee, I wonder who the jewel thieves are, and where they might have taken Amanda? Maybe Archie will find out on the way to retrieve his missing wristwatch.
"Sure is!" Archie said. "And it happened only two doors away from me! That's something! Don't know if I feel safe around here anymore!"
And they go from talking like kindergarteners to talking like an elderly couple. Wow.
Soon afterwards, Archie and Billy head back to the tunnels so Archie can get to the pressing business of retrieving his wristwatch that spawned into existence this chapter. Archie tells Billy to stay behind and "just stay hid behind a bush" - exact typo. And to put the slate over the hole if he spots trouble, so if Archie spots the slate, he'll know to wait before coming up. This doesn't explain what Billy should do if, say, it takes longer than a few minutes before it's safe to come up. Or if he spots trouble but it would take too long to put the slate back over the hole, or it would be unsafe to do so. But whatever.
"Ummm-Ummm-Ummm!"
Who could be humming down here, in the dark with all the crates?
This happens at the bottom of page 117. Remember that for later.
Okay, considering Archie just learned about Amanda's kidnapping by the jewel thieves a few minutes ago and even made a big deal about it, he'd have to be a colossal fucking idiot to not be able to figure out the obvious.
Seriously, the clues are all here:
- There are jewel thieves in the area who have been mentioned repeatedly in the news, and Archie is aware of that.
- The kids overheard adults talking overhead while they were down in the tunnels. (The book mentioned that the voices were muffled and the kids couldn't make out what was being said, but the very presence of people in this area is still an obvious hint)
- The kids found jewels inside the tunnels.
- Someone had to have built those tunnels. Archie even notices evidence that they were built recently and appeared to be still maintained.
- Amanda was just kidnapped.
- Archie is in the tunnel where the jewels were found, and is hearing what sounds like a "muffled moan".
Only an idiot wouldn't be able to figure out what had happened here.
Let's see how long it takes Archie to figure it out.
I don't know, Archie. Amanda was kidnapped earlier in the day by jewel thieves, and you're down in their hideout where they kept their jewels. I can't figure it out.
"Ummm-Ummm-Ummm! Ummm-Ummm-Ummm! Ummm-Ummm-Ummm!"
Is that the sound of someone eating? Maybe the sound of someone who wants to say something, but is uncertain about what they want to say?
A human moan, huh? You don't say. I wonder if there might be somebody inside the crate.
How violently is that crate shaking? I mean, if it's shaking that violently, it really must be a pretty weak crate.
Oh sheeeet. Three exclamation points now! You know it's serious!!!
No, really? You think?
"Ummm-Ummm-Ummm!!! Ummm-Ummm-Ummm!!! Ummm-Ummm-Ummm!!!"
Hmm, I wonder if he should open the crate and let the person out. Anyway, I'm quoting the entire passage verbatim because it's just so god damn stupid that I can hardly believe it. Well, I can believe it, but barely. Why was this written this way?
Way to kill the suspense there with more matter-of-fact writing. And way to state the obvious. Seriously, these sentences could be much more easily condensed. Just imagine it being written like this: The moan sounded increasingly desperate, as if whoever was inside the crate couldn't breathe. There, isn't that much better? The whole book could have benefited from an editor who, if nothing else, could rewrite the adventurous parts to be more exciting.
My hero. Stand around and take your sweet time, Archie. I'm sure Amanda will appreciate it. Assuming that's Amanda inside the crate. Maybe the author will pull a surprise for once and have it be Hank or something. Maybe Hank heard about Amanda's kidnapping and decided to try to rescue her himself, only to get caught? That would, if nothing else, at least be unexpected.
If the crate was that easy to open, I bet whoever was inside would have gotten out by now. If this story took place in the real world, at least. But it takes place in Archie Reynolds world, so hey, anything could happen.
Who are you talking to, Archie? The audience? We're not stupid. The narrator could tell us what Archie's thinking. The viewers? This isn't a TV show, and if it were, this is Nick Jr. dialog. Like something Dora the Explorer might say to the audience. "What's holding the crate down? Look! It's the tape! The tape is holding the crate down!
Okay, the use of a house key to cut tape actually makes sense and is a smart move. I suppose that's the third bit of knowledge I can credit the author with, along with his knowledge of tunnel construction and the fact (if it's even true) that police detectives use unmarked cars.
Great job announcing your plan to whoever's inside the crate. I hope s/he wasn't listening. And how can you not tell who the mysterious person in the crate is, you dumbass?
Yeah, that would probably explain the moan alright. I thought whoever was in the crate was eating and didn't want to be disturbed, but much to my surprise, it's someone who's bound and gagged instead. A young girl? Who could this girl be? I bet she's someone we've never heard of before.
OH MY GOD! What a twist!! Amanda was the one tied up in the crate held in the tunnel that previously held a bunch of hidden jewels! I'm sure this is in no way related to Amanda's kidnapping by jewel thieves mentioned earlier in the chapter. Wow. I'm floored.
This is page 120 now, btw. That means that nearly three pages were spent on Archie taking forever to recognize the obvious. This could have been accomplished in one page, but instead, it was drawn out for "suspense".
I'm guessing the readers knew before he ever did.
All it took was a split second for Archie to realize all that. He should have realized it, like, way before he rescued Amanda.
Really? The crooks live in this old house? I think we would have known that many chapters back. Maybe when you first discovered the jewels, for instance?
Charlie Brown finally figures it out.
No, but I'm pretty sure she heard him, considering how much talking Archie has been doing.
Archie, you are a condescending jackass. She's twelve, not three.
"We're in the crooks' hideout!" Archie continued. "It's a tunnel behind an old house, down the street from where we live! I just found you down here by accident! Now I'm going to get you loose so we can both get out of here! Don't cry or scream, alright?"
Now, here's my question. If the jewel thieves found out that their jewels had been stolen from their hideout, then why on earth would they kidnap a kid and stash her in the same place as their recently stolen jewels???! Did they not stop to consider that if someone knows where their hideout is, then this person might return later on? They could have hardly chosen a more obvious place to hide Amanda if they tried.
These kidnappers are brutal! But I question how Amanda was able to say "Ummm" in that condition. I mean, "Ummm" has a vowel in it. I'd imagine it would be kind of impossible to say.
Archie quiets Amanda after she expresses her relief, then uses the tip of his house key to pick apart the ropes on her hands and feet. Now that I find more questionable, though the book does say it took several minutes.
Archie then grabs his watch from behind one of the other crates and heads off.
When they reach the ladder, the stone slate is covering up the hole, so Archie recognizes that it means trouble. But he climbs up the ladder to listen, and they hear vibrations from above.
And that's chapter 15. Pretty much entirely dedicated to Amanda's kidnapping and Archie's standing around and being a huge dumbass before he eventually rescues her. It's loaded with stupid.
Now that I think about it, this is where the Idiot Plot all comes together. What is an Idiot Plot? It's a plot that can only work if every character in the story acts like an idiot. That is to say, their idiocy specifically has to drive the plot.
Let's analyze. I'll list each stupid action that drove the plot (not simply occurred within it, but drove it), and what it enabled.
- The jewel thieves dig a tunnel underground but hide the entrance to the tunnel with a very obvious stone slate in the backyard of an abandoned house.
- This allows Archie and friends to find it.
- The thieves hide a chest with their stolen jewels in it underneath some crates, and even lock it with a combination lock. However, they put the instructions on how to get the combination on a piece of paper on the back of the chest (also, how does the paper not get destroyed under all that dirt while being dug up?).
- This makes it easy for Archie and friends to find the combination.
- Archie and friends fail to pay any attention to the darkly overcast sky on the way to the graveyard.
- This causes them to have a wild ride through the river and over a waterfall on the way back.
- Archie and friends fail to recognize that the people talking over their heads when they're in the tunnel are obviously the bad guys.
- This results in them coming back to the tunnels, not realizing the danger.
- The jewel thieves kidnap Amanda and keep her in a crate in the same spot they'd hidden their jewels.
- This allows Archie to rescue her.
If not for the idiocy - primarily, believe it or not, of the bad guys - the plot could not have occurred. At least, not the way it did. It would have to be totally rewritten in order to make more sense.
The rest of the book is going to be stupid, but the actual Idiot Plot (that is, the plot itself being driven by idiot behavior) has pretty much stopped there. Stay tuned nonetheless; we've only got two more chapters to go! And you're not gonna believe what happens in the next one.