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* LesYay: While not intended to be a LoveInterest, some of the readers ship Julia (a confirmed lesbian) and Luz (who is canonically bisexual) who hit if off when they first meet [[spoiler:and Luz wants to avenge her murder]].
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* LesYay: While not intended to be a LoveInterest, some of the readers ship Julia (a confirmed lesbian) and Luz (who is canonically bisexual) who hit if off when they first meet [[spoiler:and Luz wants to avenge her murder]]. In the rewrite, they become an OfficialCouple.
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* TheyWastedAPerfectlyGoodPlot: Many readers had wished that Luz's rampage at the Death Camp included confronting The Governor and possibly killing his goons with her many Quirks to avenge her friends. Instead in the original he's arrested and sentenced to life in prison [[spoiler:before he's killed in the explosion that destroys Gravesfield]], and in the rewrite [[spoiler:Jonah is the one to do him in on Tyler's orders.]]
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** In the rewrite Arla was heavily implied to be The Governor's illegitimate daughter but didn't really amount to anything other than showing Maxwell is a hypocritical groomer. Alpha Squadron finding out could've caused drama in the team with half being distrustful towards TheMedic of the team and [[TokenEvilTeammate Judy]] accusing her of being a spy for her old man. Luz would defend Arla saying she ain't responsible for her dad's crimes, (which would strike accord with Julia) and lay down the law.
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** In the rewrite Arla was heavily implied to be The [[spoiler:The Governor's illegitimate daughter daughter]] but didn't really amount to anything other than showing Maxwell is a hypocritical groomer. groomer, [[spoiler:as she gets KilledOffForReal before anyone finds out.]] Alpha Squadron finding out could've caused drama in the team with half being distrustful towards TheMedic of the team and [[TokenEvilTeammate Judy]] accusing her of being a spy for her old man. Luz would defend Arla saying she ain't responsible for her dad's crimes, (which would strike accord with Julia) and lay down the law.
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** In the rewrite Arla was heavily implied to be The Governor's illegitimate daughter but didn't really amount to anything other than showing Maxwell is a hypocritical groomer. Alpha Squadron finding out could've caused drama in the team with half being distrustful towards TheMedic of the team and [[TokenEvilTeammate Judy]] accusing her of being a spy for her old man. Luz would defend Arla saying she ain't responsible for her dad's crimes, (which would strike accord with Julia) and lay down the law.
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* BrokenBase: The story's rewrite. Many readers welcome some of the changes to the stories, like fixing some plot holes and giving some characters more screen time, like Masha, Vee, Julia, etc. However, changes weren't well received at all, most notably Luz and Camila's AdaptationalJerkass, preferring their canon selves and original story's personalities.
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%%* EvilIsCool: All For One the EvilMentor, Millie the {{Elite Mook|s}} and Sophia the BloodKnight.
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*** This is mitigated in the rewrite when [[spoiler:All For One, possessing Luz, forces Kennedy to ressurect Julia with his [[{{Biomanipulation}} Cellular Manipulation]] Quirk before [[YouOutlivedYourUsefulness disposing of him after he was no longer useful]], thus allowing Julia to have stay around more time in the story.]]
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*** This is mitigated in the rewrite when [[spoiler:All For One, possessing Luz, forces Kennedy to ressurect resurrect Julia with his [[{{Biomanipulation}} Cellular Manipulation]] Quirk before [[YouOutlivedYourUsefulness disposing of him after he was no longer useful]], thus allowing Julia to have stay around more time in the story.]]
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* EvilIsCool: All For One the EvilMentor, Millie the EliteMook and Sophia the BloodKnight.
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* NeverLiveItDown: Camila's drunken verbal abuse towards Luz [[spoiler:where she wishes death on her own child and hates her while throwing awing glass at luz when she dares to call her out on her drunken behavior]] in the Chapter 2 rewrite paints her as an abusive mother and a danger towards Luz, despite the author claiming this is the first time Camila has done something violent when drunk. Many still claim this is extremely dismissive of any kids with bad home lives and is one of the main reasons the rewrite for ''Fanfic/AllForLuz'' is a BrokenBase among readers.
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*** This is mitigated in the rewrite when [[spoiler:All For One, possessing Luz, forces Kennedy to ressurect Julia with his Cellular Manipulation Quirk before [[YouOutlivedYourUsefulness disposing of him after he was no longer useful]], thus allowing Julia to have stay around more time in the story.]]
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*** This is mitigated in the rewrite when [[spoiler:All For One, possessing Luz, forces Kennedy to ressurect Julia with his [[{{Biomanipulation}} Cellular Manipulation Manipulation]] Quirk before [[YouOutlivedYourUsefulness disposing of him after he was no longer useful]], thus allowing Julia to have stay around more time in the story.]]
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*** This is mitigated in the rewrite when [[spoiler:All For One, possessing Luz, forces Kennedy to ressurect Julia with his Cellular Manipulation Quirk before [[YouOutlivedYourUsefulness disposing of him after he was no longer useful]], thus allowing Julia to have stay around more time in the story.]]
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* LesYay: While not intended to be a LoveInterest, some of the readers ship Julia (a confirmed lesbian) and Luz (who is canonically bisexual).
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* LesYay: While not intended to be a LoveInterest, some of the readers ship Julia (a confirmed lesbian) and Luz (who is canonically bisexual).bisexual) who hit if off when they first meet [[spoiler:and Luz wants to avenge her murder]].
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* HoYay: While not intended to be a LoveInterest, some of the readers ship Julia (a confirmed lesbian) and Luz (who is canonically bisexual).
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* HoYay: LesYay: While not intended to be a LoveInterest, some of the readers ship Julia (a confirmed lesbian) and Luz (who is canonically bisexual).
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** It would've been interesting for Camila to go to the Boiling Isles along with Luz, acting as her MoralityChain that hinders All For One's EvilPlan to CorruptTheCutie. [[spoiler:Instead she is KilledOffForReal halfway through the second season. It also would have been interesting for her to come back as a vestige in Luz's MentalWorld, had Luz manged to take her "Repair" Quirk back from her corpse and confront All For One.]]
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** It would've been interesting for Camila to go to the Boiling Isles along with Luz, acting as her MoralityChain that hinders All For One's EvilPlan to CorruptTheCutie. [[spoiler:Instead she is KilledOffForReal halfway through the second season. It also would have been interesting for her to come back as a vestige in Luz's MentalWorld, had Luz manged managed to take her "Repair" Quirk back from her corpse and confront All For One.]]
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* AwesomeEgo: [[EnemyWithin All For One]] is a narcissistic [[TheSociopath psychopath]] who aims to be the greatest villain of all time. However, it's not hard to see why he might believe that he is. He [[ManipulativeBastard plays people like pawns]], got into a 14-year long war with Emperor Belos nearly ruining his plans, acts as a helpful EvilMentor for Luz, and is single-handedly responsible for forcing All Might to go into retirement, albeit at the cost of his own life. [[SuperpowerLottery His incredibly useful superpower to both give and take away Quirks, and the way he passes that knowledge to Luz]]. [[spoiler:Not to mention that, he's not gonna let something like death stop his EvilPlan and get back to his home world]].
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* AwesomeEgo: [[EnemyWithin All For One]] is a narcissistic [[TheSociopath psychopath]] who aims to be the greatest villain of all time. However, it's not hard to see why he might believe that he is. He [[ManipulativeBastard plays people like pawns]], got into a 14-year long war with Emperor Belos nearly ruining his plans, acts as a helpful EvilMentor for Luz, and is single-handedly responsible for forcing All Might to go into retirement, albeit at the cost of his own life. [[SuperpowerLottery His incredibly useful superpower to both give and take away Quirks, and the way he passes that knowledge to Luz]]. [[spoiler:Not to mention that, he's not gonna let something like death stop his EvilPlan and get back to his home world]].world and take over TheMultiverse]].
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** S2's "Death To Normality" arc: [[PsychoForHire Jonah Smith]] is a gigantic, sadistically violent assassin for Tyler Wittebane, known as the worst of the superhumans. [[DomesticAbuse Raping]] and [[TilMurderDoUsPart murdering]] his wife before gaining his Quirk and becoming an assassin, Jonah enjoys taunting and causing suffering to his victims before killing them. Getting orders to assassinate [[Characters/TheOwlHouseCamilaNoceda Camila Noceda]], Jonah taunts and throws the scared woman around as he laughs at her before killing her. During a brutal battle against Luz which destroys a chunk of Gravesfield and kills countless people, Jonah has Camila's body teleported to be destroyed by Luz, [[KickTheDog making her think she killed her mother for no reason other than spite]].
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** S2's "Death To Normality" arc: [[PsychoForHire Jonah Smith]] is a gigantic, sadistically violent assassin for Tyler Wittebane, known as the worst of the superhumans. [[DomesticAbuse Raping]] and [[TilMurderDoUsPart murdering]] his wife before gaining his Quirk and becoming an assassin, Jonah enjoys taunting and causing suffering to his victims before killing them. Getting orders to assassinate [[Characters/TheOwlHouseCamilaNoceda Camila Noceda]], Noceda, Jonah taunts and throws the scared woman around as he laughs at her before killing her. During a brutal battle against Luz which destroys a chunk of Gravesfield and kills countless people, Jonah has Camila's body teleported to be destroyed by Luz, [[KickTheDog making her think she killed her mother for no reason other than spite]].
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** Riley, Luz's cousin, becomes a RegretfulTraitor due to her attempted assassination on her cousin Luz. It would've been interesting to see her to become TheAtoner, protecting her Aunt Camila and possibly performing a HeroicSacrifice for her RedemptionQuest. [[spoiler:Instead she is unceremoniously KilledOffForReal at Luz's hands in a fit of rage for her betrayal. Its also unlikely she'll come back as a vestige either.]]
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** Riley, Luz's cousin, becomes a RegretfulTraitor due to her attempted assassination on her cousin Luz. It would've been interesting to see her to become TheAtoner, protecting her Aunt Camila and possibly performing a HeroicSacrifice for her RedemptionQuest. [[spoiler:Instead she is unceremoniously KilledOffForReal at Luz's hands in a fit of rage for her betrayal. Its also unlikely she'll come back as a vestige in Luz's MentalWorld either.]]
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* AwesomeEgo: [[EnemyWithin All For One]] is a narcissistic, [[TheSociopath psychopath]] who aims to be the greatest villain of all time. However, it's not hard to see why he might believe that he is. He [[ManipulativeBastard plays people like pawns]], got into a 14-year long war with Emperor Belos nearly ruining his plans, acts as a helpful EvilMentor for Luz, and is single-handedly responsible for forcing All Might to go into retirement, albeit at the cost of his own life. [[SuperpowerLottery His incredibly useful superpower to both give and take away Quirks, and the way he passes that knowledge to Luz]]. [[spoiler:Not to mention that, he's not gonna let something like death stop his EvilPlan and get back to his home world]].
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* AwesomeEgo: [[EnemyWithin All For One]] is a narcissistic, narcissistic [[TheSociopath psychopath]] who aims to be the greatest villain of all time. However, it's not hard to see why he might believe that he is. He [[ManipulativeBastard plays people like pawns]], got into a 14-year long war with Emperor Belos nearly ruining his plans, acts as a helpful EvilMentor for Luz, and is single-handedly responsible for forcing All Might to go into retirement, albeit at the cost of his own life. [[SuperpowerLottery His incredibly useful superpower to both give and take away Quirks, and the way he passes that knowledge to Luz]]. [[spoiler:Not to mention that, he's not gonna let something like death stop his EvilPlan and get back to his home world]].
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* {{Squick}}: The graphic descriptions of Luz's injuries can fall under this territory. [[spoiler:As well as, some of her more brutal kills, too]].
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* {{Squick}}: The graphic descriptions of Luz's injuries can fall under this territory. [[spoiler:As well as, as some of her more brutal kills, too]].
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** While afraid, the kids that were kidnapped to be part of the governor's DeadlyGame aren't as freaking out as much as you would expect.
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** While afraid, the kids that were kidnapped to be part of the governor's DeadlyGame aren't as freaking out or taking their fear and anger out on each other as much as you would expect.
