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** Shadow ripping Jack's circuits from his chest. Even though he has auto repair, it is still probably one of the most brutal injuries he's recieved in the entire series.
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** Shadow ripping Jack's circuits from his chest. Even though he has auto repair, it is still probably one of the most brutal injuries he's recieved received in the entire series.
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** When the group learns that the guy who tried to kidnap Socrates in Part 2 had a knife the whole time. Especially when the already horrified Socrates points out that he might come back '''[[AdultFear when Eliot and his parents are home]]'''. It's even [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]]:
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** When the group learns that the guy who tried to kidnap Socrates in Part 2 had a knife the whole time. Especially when the already horrified Socrates points out that he might come back '''[[AdultFear when '''when Eliot and his parents are home]]'''.home'''. It's even [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]]:
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** The scene on the ship at the beginning takes very obvious cues from slasher movies. [[spoiler: Sure, nobody got killed, but it was still pretty dark.]]
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** The scene on the ship at the beginning takes very obvious cues from slasher movies. [[spoiler: Sure, nobody got killed, but it was still pretty dark.]]
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** Then there's the ending: Thunderstorm and Shadow are apparently ''killed'' by the Slender Man. And it's implied that [he's supposed to be a ''good'' guy!
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** Then there's the ending: Thunderstorm and Shadow are apparently ''killed'' by the Slender Man. And it's implied that [he's he's supposed to be a ''good'' guy!
*** This:guy!
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''And a moment later, they heard [[spoiler: Thunderstorm's screams]]. He screamed and screamed as loud as he could, sounding as though his terror quadrupled as he continued to scream. The scream turned into a screech, and the screech turned into a shriek, and then the shriek continued for a solid three seconds.''\\
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''And a moment later, they heard [[spoiler: Thunderstorm's screams]].screams. He screamed and screamed as loud as he could, sounding as though his terror quadrupled as he continued to scream. The scream turned into a screech, and the screech turned into a shriek, and then the shriek continued for a solid three seconds.''\\
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** The guy with the knife easily took out ''Shadow'', the robot that posed a legitimate threat to the main cast, by ''stabbing him in the head'' and then ''pulled the knife out effortlessly'' to chase Dr. Thunderstorm. And if that wasn't enough, he then dodges the Servant Ray's beams without even trying.
*** [[MadeOfIron And it's implied that the explosion of the Servant Ray didn't actually kill him]].
*** [[MadeOfIron And it's implied that the explosion of the Servant Ray didn't actually kill him]].
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** The guy with the knife easily took out ''Shadow'', the robot that posed a legitimate threat to the main cast, by ''stabbing him in the head'' and then ''pulled the knife out effortlessly'' to chase Dr. Thunderstorm. And if that wasn't enough, he then dodges the Servant Ray's beams without even trying.
***trying. [[MadeOfIron And it's implied that the explosion of the Servant Ray didn't actually kill him]].
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