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* BerserkButton - At one point Heather witnesses a murder and decides she's had enough
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* BerserkButton - At one point Heather witnesses a murder and decides someone she's had enoughjust met killed by a soldier. The following occurs.
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I saw the Beholder tearing through that wall again. I saw the children hit with debris, killed where they stood.
If I’d been wearing the skates, I’d have been faster. He’d noticed me when I’d started my charge, and I saw him laugh. Adelaide had tried to grab me, but just like in that hallway, I knew exactly where everything was and where I had to be.
I saw the walls of my everything crumbling around me. I saw the bodies, crushed and bloody as they congratulated one another on a job well done. I saw it all. And then I hit him with it. All of it.
If I’d been wearing the skates, I’d have been faster. He’d noticed me when I’d started my charge, and I saw him laugh. Adelaide had tried to grab me, but just like in that hallway, I knew exactly where everything was and where I had to be.
I saw the walls of my everything crumbling around me. I saw the bodies, crushed and bloody as they congratulated one another on a job well done. I saw it all. And then I hit him with it. All of it.
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-->'''Heather:'''The tingle was so strong, it felt like my skin was on fire.
I saw the Beholder tearing through that wall again. I saw the children hit with debris, killed where they stood.
If I’d been wearing the skates, I’d have been faster. He’d noticed me when I’d started my charge, and I saw him laugh. Adelaide had tried to grab me, but just like in that hallway, I knew exactly where everything was and where I had to be.
I saw the walls of my everything crumbling around me. I saw the bodies, crushed and bloody as they congratulated one another on a job well done. I saw it all. And then I hit him with it. All of it.
-->'''Heather:'''The tingle was so strong, it felt like my skin was on fire.
I saw the Beholder tearing through that wall again. I saw the children hit with debris, killed where they stood.
If I’d been wearing the skates, I’d have been faster. He’d noticed me when I’d started my charge, and I saw him laugh. Adelaide had tried to grab me, but just like in that hallway, I knew exactly where everything was and where I had to be.
I saw the walls of my everything crumbling around me. I saw the bodies, crushed and bloody as they congratulated one another on a job well done. I saw it all. And then I hit him with it. All of it.
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*** "Probs" - members of the probabiity caste
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*** "Probs" - members of the probabiity Probability caste
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* RollerBladeGood - Techically Roller ''Skate'' Good
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* PreferredWeaponEffect - Heather's axe.
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** The "Beholder" that destroys the girls home at the outset is actually a completely technological [[SiegeEngines ''siege engine'']] (though obviously inspired by the mythological creature)
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** The "Beholder" that destroys the girls home at the outset is actually a completely technological [[SiegeEngines ''siege engine'']] ''[[SiegeEngines siege engine]]'' (though obviously inspired by the mythological creature)
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** The "Beholder" that destroys the girls home at the outset is actually a completely technological ''SiegeEngine'' (though obviously inspired by the mythological creature)
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** The "Beholder" that destroys the girls home at the outset is actually a completely technological ''SiegeEngine'' [[SiegeEngines ''siege engine'']] (though obviously inspired by the mythological creature)
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** The "Beholder" that destroys the girls home at the outset is actually a completely technological ''siege engine'' (though obviously inspired by the mythological creature)
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** The "Beholder" that destroys the girls home at the outset is actually a completely technological ''siege engine'' ''SiegeEngine'' (though obviously inspired by the mythological creature)
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* ImprovisedWeapon - Technically Heather's ''axe'' is one of these
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* ManlyTears - from a ''little girl'' no less.
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-->'''Heather:'''"The Beholder unit was giant sphere resplendent with glistening weaponry encircled by counter-rotating interlocking treads."
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* ReligiousAndMythologicalThemeNaming -
** The "Beholder" that destroys the girls home at the outset is actually a completely technological ''siege engine'' (though obviously inspired by the mythological creature)
** Adelaide's transport is called the "Kraken"
** The manufacturer of the Kraken's EMP weapon is Dragonwalk Industries. The EMP itself is simply referred to by Gunnar as a "Dragonwalk"
** The "Beholder" that destroys the girls home at the outset is actually a completely technological ''siege engine'' (though obviously inspired by the mythological creature)
** Adelaide's transport is called the "Kraken"
** The manufacturer of the Kraken's EMP weapon is Dragonwalk Industries. The EMP itself is simply referred to by Gunnar as a "Dragonwalk"
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-->'''Subject Five:''' "Survivors quelled the Beholder’s wrath, you were brought by Victor but not beholden be"
-->'''Subject Five:''' "Survivors quelled the Beholder’s wrath, you were brought by Victor but not beholden be"
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*** "Ours" - meaning the enhanced soldiers
*** "Otherkind" - meaning ordinary humans
*** "Kins" - members of the Kinetic caste
*** "Probs" - members of the probabiity caste
*** "Folding out" - transporting or moving things with the use of foldspace technology
*** "Ours" - meaning the enhanced soldiers
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*** "Otherkind" - meaning ordinary humans
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* GlowingEyesOfDoom - Sort of. They don't ''always'' mean doom, but they always mean ''something''
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* GlowingEyesOfDoom - Sort of. They don't ''always'' More like Glowing Eyes Of ''Activation'' that ''sometimes'' mean doom, Doom
-->'''Heather:''' "When I’d seen some of them stumble, I’d thought she’d made it happen, but her eyes hadn’t flashed; theyalways mean ''something''were just distracted."
-->'''Heather:''' "When I’d seen some of them stumble, I’d thought she’d made it happen, but her eyes hadn’t flashed; they
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-->'''Alison:''' "I couldn’t understand why he would choose to start a fight when surrounded by what he saw as the “enemy”.
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* BullyingADragon - an example that very nearly gets the 'bully' removed from play
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