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* BerserkButton: Hurting a snail turns out to be Fitch's trigger.
* FantasticReligiousWeirdness: Xemidas worships snails as holy creatures and uses them to help cleanse the souls. Capitalism doesn't exist there; food is exchanged for unburdening one's spirit and confession. At which point you get a snail burger to purify your soul.
* ForeignQueasine: Fitch is aghast that Xemidas makes burgers out of snails.
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** Countdown Town, place of countless stories with countless individuals
** Xemidas is a holy city with a religion centered on snails. Every visitor has one assigned to them.
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* AlienSky: The Sky of the Kinematic Envelope are thick and shadowy, covered in 'rusted, carmine clouds.'
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* EvilDuo: The "gentlemen," two [[ReptilesAreAbhorrent reptilian]] enforcers for Countdown Town's mob that become recurring antagonists in the story. [[spoiler:Mr. Hive sweet-talks them into becoming his CoDragons at the end of the ninth chapter.]]
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* SlaveryIsASpecialKindOfEvil: Hive's cruel enslavement of xenos for their steam is seen as especially monstrous, as is [[spoiler:Papa Sugar intending on selling others to cover his debts.]]
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* WretchedHive: Countdown Town is glitzier than the average wretched hive, but it's a cesspool of violence, hard drugs and barely-disguised HumanTrafficking operations and savage criminals underneath its surface. People casually have sex out in the open,
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* BeastMan: Many of the xenos, by their own admission, resemble animals, albeit with some differences.
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* ConsummateProfessional: Kindly is quite dedicated to the idea of capturing people to the letter of his contract, carving them up in the waiting room...but nothing beyond that. Professional standards are important.
* DealWithTheDevil: Mr. Hive is happy to offer bargains and alliances, but you do so at your peril with the rotting monster.
* PunchClockVillain: Played with for Kindly and Rudely. They do their jobs, but they rather enjoy their jobs and all the viciousness that results.
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* SceneryPorn: Countdown Town and indeed most of the locations are lovingly, vividly described through the story.
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** Special shoutout tot he Kinematic Envelope itself, described exquisitely and gorgeously.
* SpeedySnail: The chronautilids are beautiful flying snails. Can't get speedier.
* TheseHandsHaveKilled: [[spoiler:Sal is considerably shaken by killing Papa Sugar at first, being rather morose over it.]]
* VillainTeamUp: Kindly and Rudely make an alliance with the wicked Mr. Hive.
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* ThoseTwoBadGuys: The "gentlemen," two [[ReptilesAreAbhorrent reptilian]] enforcers for Countdown Town's mob that become recurring antagonists in the story. [[spoiler:Mr. Hive sweet-talks them into becoming his CoDragons at the end of the ninth chapter.]]
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** Feyf's bear plush [[spoiler:turns out to have a hidden hand-spike Sal uses to finish off Papa Sugar in a pinch.]]
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* ImpromptuTracheotomy: [[spoiler:Sal kills Papa Sugar this way, with one of Feyf's hand-spikes hidden inside of her bear plush.]]
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** Ransa is easily the most confrontation and irascible of the main group, but he's nevertheless steadfastly loyal to his friends, and moral to the point where Mould's BystanderSyndrome earnestly pisses him off.
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* CoolTrain: The Steam locomotives are this to a tee and are even capable of driving entirely off of railways. The Vanity Rail, Mr. Hive's chronoengine, is a strange GhostTrain that runs perfectly fine despite the rot marring it front-to-back, and Soot swipes a chronofreighter he finds appealing.
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* RailEnthusiast: Ramus is an "Anorak," a member of a group with particular interest and knowledge in Steam locomotives. He's able to repair the busted engine of Mr. Hive's borderline-GhostTrain in twelve hours. He even wears a parka, which is an image inseparable from British trainspotters.
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* UndyingLoyalty: The TrueCompanions in general are supremely loyal to each other [[VitriolicBestBuds no matter how much they get under each other's skin]], but this is most emphasized with Fitch toward Sal. Even in spite of being by far the most reluctant member of the group to have left Mould, Fitch tells Sal she's willing to follow him anywhere to ensure he's not alone for the future.
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* TheNicknamer: Feyf seems to spring these on everyone she meets: Sal is "salamander," Quine is "greenie," Ramus is "elf-ears," and so on.
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* ShoutOut: The Vanity Rail is a shout-out to the Vanity Fair from ''Literature/ThePilgrimsProgress'', with Mr. Hive taking the place of Beelzebub.
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** Feyf teases Fitch--who more than once is likened to a fairy--by calling her "[[Literature/PeterPan Tink]]."
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* CruelAndUnusualDeath: Anyone who Mr. Hive sets his flies on is bound for an agonizing end.
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* FireForgedFriends: Fitch, Sal, Ransa and Quine have been through a lot and share an unshakable bond as a result.
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** Downplayed with Fitch. She's less of a "jerk" and more just stressed out of her mind throughout the journey, which comes through as constant snark and sometimes lashing out at her friends.
** Ransa is easily the most confrontation and irascible of the main group, but he's nevertheless steadfastly loyal to his friends, and moral to the point where Mould's BystanderSyndrome earnestly pisses him off.
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* WretchedHive: Countdown Town is glitzier than the average wretched hive, but it's a cesspool of violence, hard drugs and barely-disguised HumanTrafficking operations and savage criminals underneath its surface. Ramus notes that people have something of a tendency to disappear in the town.
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* AffablyEvil: [[spoiler:Papa Sugar's warm, affable, and a FatBastard underneath the surface who cheerfully informs he's intending to sell Quine and Feyf to pay his outstanding debts in more-or-less the same amicable tone he welcomed them in.]]
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* ChekhovsGun: The Vanity Rail has numerous examples:
** Feyf's bear plush [[spoiler:turns out to have a hidden hand-spike Sal uses to finish off Papa Sugar in a pinch.]]
** Subverted with the ''actual'' gun, which is focused on at the start of the chapter and busted out at the end--whereupon it promptly fails to fire due to its age.
** Feyf's bear plush [[spoiler:turns out to have a hidden hand-spike Sal uses to finish off Papa Sugar in a pinch.]]
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* EvenEvilHasStandards: [[spoiler:Papa Sugar is willing to sell Quine and Feyf into slavery, but avoids picking Sal as he sees no potential use for him aside from serving him as food--and Sugar remarks he stays ''well'' away from the xenoflesh market.]]
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* BewareTheNiceOnes: Sal is pretty reasonable, but threaten his friends and he will fight back or use lethal force [[spoiler:as he does on Papa Sugar.]]
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* SuperhumanTrafficking: In Countdown Town, anything is for sale, even people. And the more special the individual, the hgiher the price, with a thriving slave trade.
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* MadeASlave: What happened to Feyf and Croque a long, long time before the plot started at the hands of Mr. Hive. Feyf's introduction has her liberate herself with the help of fellow save Croque.
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* AngerBornOfWorry: Most of Fitch's vitriolic behavior is out of concern for her friends. At one point she thinks when she sees Sal, she'll beat him up, bury him and dig him up again, though she's clearly beside herself in concern for him.
* FireForgedFriends: Fitch, Sal, Ransa and Quine have been through a lot and share an unshakable bond as a result.
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* GenkiGirl: Quine disposition is almost always energetic, and her enthusiasm for the journey outside of Mould is in stark contrast to the rest of her friends.
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* QuirkyTown: Countdown Town, place of countless stories with countless individuals there.
* SceneryPorn: Countdown Town and indeed most of the locations are lovingly, vividly described through the story.
* SeenItAll: Soot's been around and seen everything. Nothing phases him at all.
* SeriousBusiness: Papa Sugar says it best: to him, sugar whiskey is serious business and you can't 'just' serve it.
* SceneryPorn: Countdown Town and indeed most of the locations are lovingly, vividly described through the story.
* SeenItAll: Soot's been around and seen everything. Nothing phases him at all.
* SeriousBusiness: Papa Sugar says it best: to him, sugar whiskey is serious business and you can't 'just' serve it.
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* BystanderSyndrome: The populace of Mould is awed by the Skycavity, but they do remarkably little to save one of their own marooned upon it when it starts to fly away.
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* FaceOfAThug: Feyf has three eyes, a grin incapable of being anything else but a SlasherSmile and two enormous "hand-fangs" jutting out from underneath her hands. Despite this (and her morbid sense of humor), she's very quick to offer her hand in friendship to Sal and the others after her getaway plan succeeds.
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* TheBarnum: Mr. Hive is a particularly nightmarish example who goes around the Kinematic Envelope, roping in xenos with abundant Steam by luring the butterflies they chase to his "[[BazaarOfTheBizarre Vanity Rail.]]" There Mr. Hive tricks them into believing they'll never get back to their timelines, and offers the "next best thing"--artifacts made in and taken from other timelines--at the price of all their Steam. Mr. Hive conveniently fails to mention the extraction of the xenos' Steam is a fatal process, after which Mr. Hive flies out to find the next poor soul while taking a trophy from his victim as the newest item on display in the Vanity Rail's tock.
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* TheBarnum: Mr. Hive is a particularly nightmarish example who goes around the Kinematic Envelope, roping in xenos with abundant Steam by luring the butterflies they chase to his "[[BazaarOfTheBizarre Vanity Rail.]]" There Mr. Hive tricks them into believing they'll never get back to their timelines, and offers the "next best thing"--artifacts made in and taken from other timelines--at the price of all their Steam. Mr. Hive conveniently fails to mention the extraction of the xenos' Steam is a fatal process, after which Mr. Hive flies out to find the next poor soul while taking a trophy from his victim as the newest item on display in the Vanity Rail's tock.stock.
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Welcome to the Kinematic Envelope, a stretch of infinity where time does not exist. Sal, a xeno who landed in a settlement where the residents are unaging, unchanging, and content to spend eternity farming mould, is compelled back to his own timeline from the memories that haven't faded away, but the pursuit of it may as well be as fruitless as chasing butterflies through eternity.
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Welcome to the Kinematic Envelope, a stretch of infinity where time does not exist. flow so much as break apart. Sal, a xeno who landed in a settlement where the residents are unaging, unchanging, and content to spend eternity farming mould, content, is compelled back to his own timeline from the memories that haven't faded away, but the pursuit of it may as well be as fruitless as chasing butterflies through eternity.
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* TheBarnum: Mr. Hive is a particularly nightmarish example who goes around the Kinematic Envelope, roping in xenos with abundant Steam by luring the butterflies they chase to his "[[BazaarOfTheBizarre Vanity Rail.]]" There Mr. Hive tricks them into believing they'll never get back to their timelines, and offers the "next best thing"--artifacts made in and taken from other timelines--at the price of all their Steam. Mr. Hive conveniently fails to mention the extraction of the xenos' Steam is a fatal process, after which Mr. Hive flies out to find the next poor soul while taking a trophy from his victim as the newest item on display in the Vanity Rail's tock.
* BodyHorror: Fitch's body starts to grow and change unnaturally in response to time moving forward in the Vanity Rail. It merely starts out with her hair starting to grow out and a weird feeling that forces her to sit down; a few minutes later, her ''bones'' are growing out of place and her knee is permanently deformed from the stress of it when she escapes.
* DeadpanSnarker: Fitch, in a calm mood, dispenses sardonic barbs like Pez candies. Everyone has their moments, though, even Sal and Quine.
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* FauxAffablyEvil: Mr. Hive is polite, pleasant and easy to get on with, but is a sadistic and remorseless killer underneath it.
* FesteringFungus: There's a lot of strange, alien fungi about there.
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* FauxAffablyEvil: Mr. Hive is polite, pleasant polite and easy to get on with, but is pleasant, all part of his shtick as a roaming ConArtist who charms and tricks xenos who see the butterflies (i.e. those with excess Steam) into giving him their Steam. Beneath it, he's a sadistic and remorseless killer underneath it.
who's killed an indeterminate but lengthy amount of people via stealing their Steam.
* FesteringFungus: There's a lot of strange, alien fungi about there. Mould is an entire settlement dedicated to growing alien, multicolored mushrooms and lichen.
* FiveManBand: After Feyf joins the party, Sal's group rounds out to this:
** TheLeader: Sal, by virtue of being the primary factor tying the group together and inciting the journey to begin with.
** TheLancer: Feyf, the most experienced and bold of the group.
** TheSmartGuy: Ransa, the most intelligent and practical of the group.
** TheBigGuy: Quine, the most active and physical of the group.
** TheChick: Fitch, the most passive and [[NonActionGuy non-action]] of the group.
* FesteringFungus: There's a lot of strange, alien fungi about there. Mould is an entire settlement dedicated to growing alien, multicolored mushrooms and lichen.
* FiveManBand: After Feyf joins the party, Sal's group rounds out to this:
** TheLeader: Sal, by virtue of being the primary factor tying the group together and inciting the journey to begin with.
** TheLancer: Feyf, the most experienced and bold of the group.
** TheSmartGuy: Ransa, the most intelligent and practical of the group.
** TheBigGuy: Quine, the most active and physical of the group.
** TheChick: Fitch, the most passive and [[NonActionGuy non-action]] of the group.
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* ObviouslyEvil: Hive looks like a rotting corpse and controls 'rot' flies. Any doubt this guy is bad, bad news?
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* FloatingContinent: The Skycavity, the floating island that Mr. Hive pilots, is a massive, floating black island named so because of all the cavernous "cavities" upon its surface.
* FourTemperamentEnsemble: Sal's core group of four:
** Quine is the Sanguine: cheerful, [[ThePollyanna unwaveringly perky]], eager to get out of Mould and always looking on the bright side.
** Ransa is the Choleric: logical, stubborn, ''very'' strongly opinionated and vitriolic but endlessly loyal to his friends.
** Sal is the Phlegmatic: quiet, downbeat, and something of a social outcast who spends most of his time daydreaming about butterflies.
** Fitch is the Melancholic: snarky, conflict-averse, occasionally rational but mostly cynical and apathetic toward the journey.
* GenkiGirl: Quine disposition is almost always energetic, and her enthusiasm for the journey outside of Mould is in stark contrast to the rest of her friends.
* HeroicSacrifice: [[spoiler:Feyf indicates Croque knew he was doomed either way, so he intentionally got himself thrown out of the Vanity Rail so he could come back and screw Mr. Hive over later so Feyf, Sal and the others can escape. The plan goes without a hitch--except for Croque's subsequent demise at the hands of the rot-flies.]]
* LovableCoward: Ransa's quick to run from any sign of actual danger and whines every step of the way out of Mould, but he's nevertheless absolutely loyal to his friends, which continually prevails over his attempt to hide away from the danger.
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* NiceGirl: Quine, in refreshing contrast to Ransa and Fitch, is nothing but earnestly cheerful and supportive of his friends.
* ObviouslyEvil: Mr. Hive looks like a rotting corpse and controls'rot' flies. swarms known as "rot-flies." Any doubt this guy is bad, bad news?
* FourTemperamentEnsemble: Sal's core group of four:
** Quine is the Sanguine: cheerful, [[ThePollyanna unwaveringly perky]], eager to get out of Mould and always looking on the bright side.
** Ransa is the Choleric: logical, stubborn, ''very'' strongly opinionated and vitriolic but endlessly loyal to his friends.
** Sal is the Phlegmatic: quiet, downbeat, and something of a social outcast who spends most of his time daydreaming about butterflies.
** Fitch is the Melancholic: snarky, conflict-averse, occasionally rational but mostly cynical and apathetic toward the journey.
* GenkiGirl: Quine disposition is almost always energetic, and her enthusiasm for the journey outside of Mould is in stark contrast to the rest of her friends.
* HeroicSacrifice: [[spoiler:Feyf indicates Croque knew he was doomed either way, so he intentionally got himself thrown out of the Vanity Rail so he could come back and screw Mr. Hive over later so Feyf, Sal and the others can escape. The plan goes without a hitch--except for Croque's subsequent demise at the hands of the rot-flies.]]
* LovableCoward: Ransa's quick to run from any sign of actual danger and whines every step of the way out of Mould, but he's nevertheless absolutely loyal to his friends, which continually prevails over his attempt to hide away from the danger.
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* NiceGirl: Quine, in refreshing contrast to Ransa and Fitch, is nothing but earnestly cheerful and supportive of his friends.
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* PettingZooPeople: The Xenos, by their own admission, resemble animals, albeit with some differences.
* PrettyButterflies: The 'Butterflies' of the title and all.
* TalkingAnimal: There seem to be a number of walking, talking animals about in the Envelope.
* TemporalMutability: There seem to be a number of timelines, with time being quite the interesting thing there.
* VitriolicBestBuds: Sal and Fitch can lobby insults and venom at one another, but are good friends in spite of it.
* PrettyButterflies: The 'Butterflies' of the title and all.
* TalkingAnimal: There seem to be a number of walking, talking animals about in the Envelope.
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* PrecisionFStrike: Passive, put-upon Sal who almost never utters a curse otherwise steps down when Mr. Hive attempts to prioritize his deal with Sal over Fitch's physical health:
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* PrettyButterflies: The'Butterflies' butterflies of the title and all.
* TalkingAnimal: There seem to be a number of walking, talking animals about inwhich drive the Envelope.
* TemporalMutability: There seem to be a number of timelines,plot. Sal's entire journey starts with time him being quite memorized by them; it's later explained that they're made of Steam, and they are naturally drawn back to their own timelines and other sources of Steam.
* SirSwearsALot: Ransa accounts for most of theinteresting thing there.
story's cursing, responds to stress with {{Cluster F Bomb}}s and, aside from Feyf, is the only particularly foul-mouthed character to begin with.
*VitriolicBestBuds: ShoutOut: The Vanity Rail is a shout-out to the Vanity Fair from ''Literature/ThePilgrimsProgress'', with Mr. Hive taking the place of Beelzebub.
* TrueCompanions: Sal, Ransa, Quine and Fitch. No matter how much they barb at each other and no matter what insane circumstances they end up in, their friendship is impenetrable and serves as the core of the story.
* VitriolicBestBuds:
** Sal and Fitch can lobby insults and venom at one another, but are good friends in spite ofit.it.
** Even more emphasized with Quine and Ransa. Almost all the page-time they share is spent with the two of them mutually driving each other up the wall, through Quine's naivity and Ransa's complaining.
* PrecisionFStrike: Passive, put-upon Sal who almost never utters a curse otherwise steps down when Mr. Hive attempts to prioritize his deal with Sal over Fitch's physical health:
-->'''Sal''': ''Screw'' your transaction! ''Stop the train now!''
* PrettyButterflies: The
* TalkingAnimal: There seem to be a number of walking, talking animals about in
* TemporalMutability: There seem to be a number of timelines,
* SirSwearsALot: Ransa accounts for most of the
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* TrueCompanions: Sal, Ransa, Quine and Fitch. No matter how much they barb at each other and no matter what insane circumstances they end up in, their friendship is impenetrable and serves as the core of the story.
* VitriolicBestBuds:
** Sal and Fitch can lobby insults and venom at one another, but are good friends in spite of
** Even more emphasized with Quine and Ransa. Almost all the page-time they share is spent with the two of them mutually driving each other up the wall, through Quine's naivity and Ransa's complaining.
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* EvilSoundsDeep: Mr. Hive's voice is described as a deep baritone.
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* TemporalMutability: There seem to be a number of timelines, with time being quite the interesting thing there.
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* TemporalMutability: There seem to be a number of timelines, with time being quite the interesting thing there.there.
* VitriolicBestBuds: Sal and Fitch can lobby insults and venom at one another, but are good friends in spite of it.
* YouOweMe: On taking a chance for Sal, Fitch remarks he "owes me a life of servitude for this!"
* VitriolicBestBuds: Sal and Fitch can lobby insults and venom at one another, but are good friends in spite of it.
* YouOweMe: On taking a chance for Sal, Fitch remarks he "owes me a life of servitude for this!"
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* BigBad: The villain of the story is the mysterious and sadistic Mr. Hive.
* CruelAndUnusualDeath: Anyone who Mr. Hive sets his flies on is bound for an agonizing end.
* DefiantToTheEnd: [[spoiler:When Croque is set upon by Hive's flies, all he does is laugh until the end.]]
* CruelAndUnusualDeath: Anyone who Mr. Hive sets his flies on is bound for an agonizing end.
* DefiantToTheEnd: [[spoiler:When Croque is set upon by Hive's flies, all he does is laugh until the end.]]
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* FauxAffablyEvil: Mr. Hive is polite, pleasant and easy to get on with, but is a sadistic and remorseless killer underneath it.
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* FliesEqualsEvil: Hive's wickedness is accentuated by the flies about him.
* ObviouslyEvil: Hive looks like a rotting corpse and controls 'rot' flies. Any doubt this guy is bad, bad news?
* PestController: Hive's power is seemingly to control his very, very deadly flies.
* PettingZooPeople: The Xenos, by their own admission, resemble animals, albeit with some differences.
* PrettyButterflies: The 'Butterflies' of the title and all.
* ObviouslyEvil: Hive looks like a rotting corpse and controls 'rot' flies. Any doubt this guy is bad, bad news?
* PestController: Hive's power is seemingly to control his very, very deadly flies.
* PettingZooPeople: The Xenos, by their own admission, resemble animals, albeit with some differences.
* PrettyButterflies: The 'Butterflies' of the title and all.
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* AlienSky: The Sky of the Kinematic Envelope are thick and shadowy, covered in 'rustic carmine clouds.'
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* AlienSky: The Sky of the Kinematic Envelope are thick and shadowy, covered in 'rustic 'rusted, carmine clouds.'
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''Chasing Butterflies'' is a Science Fiction and Adventure [[WebOriginalFiction web novel]] written by Tropers/{{Scraggle}}, meant to serve as a prequel to a forthcoming webcomic.
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''Chasing Butterflies'' is a Science Fiction and Adventure sci-fi/adventure [[WebOriginalFiction web novel]] written by Tropers/{{Scraggle}}, meant to serve as a prequel to a forthcoming webcomic.
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It can be read [[https://www.fictionpress.com/s/3338638/1/Chasing-Butterflies]].
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It can be read [[https://www.fictionpress.com/s/3338638/1/Chasing-Butterflies]].
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''Chasing Butterflies'' is a Science Fiction and Adventure [[WebOriginalFiction web novel]] written by Tropers/{{Scraggle}}, meant to serve as a prequel to a forthcoming webcomic.
Welcome to the Kinematic Envelope, a stretch of infinity where time does not exist. Sal, a xeno who landed in a settlement where the residents are unaging, unchanging, and content to spend eternity farming mould, is compelled back to his own timeline from the memories that haven't faded away, but the pursuit of it may as well be as fruitless as chasing butterflies through eternity.
It can be read [[https://www.fictionpress.com/s/3338638/1/Chasing-Butterflies]].
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!! The work contains examples of the following tropes:
* AlienSky: The Sky of the Kinematic Envelope are thick and shadowy, covered in 'rustic carmine clouds.'
* DontThinkFeel: At the end of chapter one, Sal decides the characters might as well be algae that need to 'drift' rather than thinking of it.
* FesteringFungus: There's a lot of strange, alien fungi about there.
* Talkinganimal: There seem to be a number of walking, talking animals about in the Envelope.
* TemporalMutability: There seem to be a number of timelines, with time being quite the interesting thing there.
Welcome to the Kinematic Envelope, a stretch of infinity where time does not exist. Sal, a xeno who landed in a settlement where the residents are unaging, unchanging, and content to spend eternity farming mould, is compelled back to his own timeline from the memories that haven't faded away, but the pursuit of it may as well be as fruitless as chasing butterflies through eternity.
It can be read [[https://www.fictionpress.com/s/3338638/1/Chasing-Butterflies]].
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!! The work contains examples of the following tropes:
* AlienSky: The Sky of the Kinematic Envelope are thick and shadowy, covered in 'rustic carmine clouds.'
* DontThinkFeel: At the end of chapter one, Sal decides the characters might as well be algae that need to 'drift' rather than thinking of it.
* FesteringFungus: There's a lot of strange, alien fungi about there.
* Talkinganimal: There seem to be a number of walking, talking animals about in the Envelope.
* TemporalMutability: There seem to be a number of timelines, with time being quite the interesting thing there.
