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!!Part 2 and 32
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--> Cmdr. Robinson looks at his daughter and smiled. "My how you're grown. [[YouTakeNoCandle Well who'll be it]], Steve? Mark?"
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--> Cmdr. Robinson looks at his daughter and smiled. "My how you're grown. [[YouTakeNoCandle [[YouNoTakeCandle Well who'll be it]], Steve? Mark?"
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!!Part 1
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* Jeff is a complete asshole who treats Shaider badly for being Asian. In the end Shaider throws him into a space time warp.
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* Jeff is a complete asshole who treats Shaider badly for being Asian. In the end Shaider throws him into a space time warp.warp.
*At one point, the skies turn "angry red".
!!Part 2 and 3
*The author gushing over Jamie with this rather plain description.
--> The morning in Camp Big Falcon is quite calm and quiet. Jamie enters the training center; she wears a different out fit from her usual uniform. This time, she wears a skin tight, stylized spandex costume based on the black, Ninja drab. But like her yellow, mini-skirted spandex, the out fit is alluringly sexy.
*The fight scene that the fic opens up with, which definitely sounded a lot more cooler in the author's head.
--> Cmdr. Robinson turns around to throw shuriken blades at his daughter who immediately countered with a Japanese native bomb.
--> The bomb blew the oncoming ninja stars off course.
--> Cmdr. Robinson threw himself away from the ninja stars shrapnel, only to receivethe ball and chain wrapping around his legs.
--> Off balance, Jamie lands on his stomach and aimed a micro knife at his eye.
*The sudden scene transition from a fight scene to an emotional daddy-daughter bonding moment.
--> Ninja fighting was replaced by Kodak moments as father and daughter exchange hugs.
--> "You're doing pretty well, Jamie. You have made our ancestors proud." Commander Robinson said with pride.
--> Jamie smiled yet she shook her head. "Yes, dad..."
--> Cmdr. Robinson looks at his daughter and smiled. "My how you're grown. [[YouTakeNoCandle Well who'll be it]], Steve? Mark?"
--> Jamie [[RougeAnlesOfSatin shied]] and remained silent.
--> Cmdr. Robinson released a great guffaw, "Don't tell me you're going tomboy?!"
--> Jamie's cheeks turned red, "Oh, Dad!"
--> "C'mon Jamie, I'm just kidding..."Commander Robinson replied.
--> Both of them took a seat near a mineral water dispenser.
--> "I hope you're mother can see us now..."
--> Jamie closed her eyes and tears formed, something she don't want her teammates to see.
*Even after they were thrown into the time warp and defeated, Team Voltron is still suicidally overconfident about defeating Voltes V, even as Koran is bleeding and almost dying.
--> "Yeah, nobody messed around with Voltron and go scott - free!!" Pidge replied.
*We get more gems of the author's using insults like [adjective] [noun].
--> Those unwholesome beings!
*The author suddenly remembering that the Boazanian conflict existed, and incorporating them through Mark having traumatic flashbacks to them, through a long ThatMakesMeFeelAngry segment
--> His arm lashes the whip with such professional strikes, whereas his mind wanders back to those grim days...Those days highlighted by the intrusion of the Boazanian invaders! He remembered how the human race was succumbed by the sheer might and power of the Boazanians : It was so overwhelming...these Boazanians ...and the Earth and its people were like a small kitten, pitted against a large concrete slab. He recalled those heartless alien beasts taking human prisoners and subjecting them in the most horrendous, roughshod conditions, perhaps no other race in the universe had been through...
*Even AFTER they've proven themselves to be unworthy of redemption on multiple occassions and reject reformation, Steve still tries to insist there is good in Team Voltron.
--> Little Jon felt an overwhelming surge of excitement. "I don't care, what counts is we can now polish off that no-good Voltron for keeps!"
--> "No Little Jon," Steve said as he shook his head from his little brother's reactions. "In that last fight with Voltron, I realized that the pilots are honorable. Voltron's no evil doer..."
--> Mark was startled by Steve's words and looked at him in disbelief. "Did I heard right?... Do you mean that invader's honorable?"
--> Steve slowly distanced himself from Dr. Hook and the Voltes Team.
*This awkwardly written line.
--> Coool!...Vavilos is awesome!" Little Jon made a comment.
!!Part 3
*The Voltes Team are shown footage of Voltron's villainy, alongside a documentary revealing their origins, and Steve wonders if what they were shown was propaganda. Mark asks if he's serious and Steve says that Team Voltron are group of planetary defenders just like them. Mark is so angry he punches Steve and makes his nose bleed, until Jamie stops the fight.
*While Garth's in space, the author suddenly references Music/TheBeatles.
--> Cmdr. Garth knows not all in outer space is black and star ridden; there are oasis of multi-colored spatial bodies and various nebulae clusters resulted from conglomerates of stars, space dusts, quasars, pulsars and super novas. But the current celestial display outside his ship changed into some strange, psychedelic patterns. As if like his whole fleet was thrown into the hip, magical world of "Yellow Submarine."
*Garth asks a question "smartly".
--> "Navigator..." he asked his underling smartly. "Full status report regarding our conditions..."
*The way Captain Froy's assault against Garth is described. They fully acknowledge it's stupid and useless, but still go through with it.
--> They decide to take on a new task...Suicide!
--> Cmdr. Froy took one last breath of air. "We've faced countless enemies...but this one easily took the ranks of our comrades without even a dink!" Gradually, his crew started to cry one by one they fell on their knees. "We will die in the glorious name of the Galaxy Alliance and Voltron, Defender of the Universe... Men, full speed ahead!"
*Again, the awkward [adjective] [noun] insults.
--> You armoured dog!
*At one point, the skies turn "angry red".
!!Part 2 and 3
*The author gushing over Jamie with this rather plain description.
--> The morning in Camp Big Falcon is quite calm and quiet. Jamie enters the training center; she wears a different out fit from her usual uniform. This time, she wears a skin tight, stylized spandex costume based on the black, Ninja drab. But like her yellow, mini-skirted spandex, the out fit is alluringly sexy.
*The fight scene that the fic opens up with, which definitely sounded a lot more cooler in the author's head.
--> Cmdr. Robinson turns around to throw shuriken blades at his daughter who immediately countered with a Japanese native bomb.
--> The bomb blew the oncoming ninja stars off course.
--> Cmdr. Robinson threw himself away from the ninja stars shrapnel, only to receivethe ball and chain wrapping around his legs.
--> Off balance, Jamie lands on his stomach and aimed a micro knife at his eye.
*The sudden scene transition from a fight scene to an emotional daddy-daughter bonding moment.
--> Ninja fighting was replaced by Kodak moments as father and daughter exchange hugs.
--> "You're doing pretty well, Jamie. You have made our ancestors proud." Commander Robinson said with pride.
--> Jamie smiled yet she shook her head. "Yes, dad..."
--> Cmdr. Robinson looks at his daughter and smiled. "My how you're grown. [[YouTakeNoCandle Well who'll be it]], Steve? Mark?"
--> Jamie [[RougeAnlesOfSatin shied]] and remained silent.
--> Cmdr. Robinson released a great guffaw, "Don't tell me you're going tomboy?!"
--> Jamie's cheeks turned red, "Oh, Dad!"
--> "C'mon Jamie, I'm just kidding..."Commander Robinson replied.
--> Both of them took a seat near a mineral water dispenser.
--> "I hope you're mother can see us now..."
--> Jamie closed her eyes and tears formed, something she don't want her teammates to see.
*Even after they were thrown into the time warp and defeated, Team Voltron is still suicidally overconfident about defeating Voltes V, even as Koran is bleeding and almost dying.
--> "Yeah, nobody messed around with Voltron and go scott - free!!" Pidge replied.
*We get more gems of the author's using insults like [adjective] [noun].
--> Those unwholesome beings!
*The author suddenly remembering that the Boazanian conflict existed, and incorporating them through Mark having traumatic flashbacks to them, through a long ThatMakesMeFeelAngry segment
--> His arm lashes the whip with such professional strikes, whereas his mind wanders back to those grim days...Those days highlighted by the intrusion of the Boazanian invaders! He remembered how the human race was succumbed by the sheer might and power of the Boazanians : It was so overwhelming...these Boazanians ...and the Earth and its people were like a small kitten, pitted against a large concrete slab. He recalled those heartless alien beasts taking human prisoners and subjecting them in the most horrendous, roughshod conditions, perhaps no other race in the universe had been through...
*Even AFTER they've proven themselves to be unworthy of redemption on multiple occassions and reject reformation, Steve still tries to insist there is good in Team Voltron.
--> Little Jon felt an overwhelming surge of excitement. "I don't care, what counts is we can now polish off that no-good Voltron for keeps!"
--> "No Little Jon," Steve said as he shook his head from his little brother's reactions. "In that last fight with Voltron, I realized that the pilots are honorable. Voltron's no evil doer..."
--> Mark was startled by Steve's words and looked at him in disbelief. "Did I heard right?... Do you mean that invader's honorable?"
--> Steve slowly distanced himself from Dr. Hook and the Voltes Team.
*This awkwardly written line.
--> Coool!...Vavilos is awesome!" Little Jon made a comment.
!!Part 3
*The Voltes Team are shown footage of Voltron's villainy, alongside a documentary revealing their origins, and Steve wonders if what they were shown was propaganda. Mark asks if he's serious and Steve says that Team Voltron are group of planetary defenders just like them. Mark is so angry he punches Steve and makes his nose bleed, until Jamie stops the fight.
*While Garth's in space, the author suddenly references Music/TheBeatles.
--> Cmdr. Garth knows not all in outer space is black and star ridden; there are oasis of multi-colored spatial bodies and various nebulae clusters resulted from conglomerates of stars, space dusts, quasars, pulsars and super novas. But the current celestial display outside his ship changed into some strange, psychedelic patterns. As if like his whole fleet was thrown into the hip, magical world of "Yellow Submarine."
*Garth asks a question "smartly".
--> "Navigator..." he asked his underling smartly. "Full status report regarding our conditions..."
*The way Captain Froy's assault against Garth is described. They fully acknowledge it's stupid and useless, but still go through with it.
--> They decide to take on a new task...Suicide!
--> Cmdr. Froy took one last breath of air. "We've faced countless enemies...but this one easily took the ranks of our comrades without even a dink!" Gradually, his crew started to cry one by one they fell on their knees. "We will die in the glorious name of the Galaxy Alliance and Voltron, Defender of the Universe... Men, full speed ahead!"
*Again, the awkward [adjective] [noun] insults.
--> You armoured dog!
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* In Chapter 43, Edward says "[[CaptainObvious that "that enemy woman really is [[CaptainObvious bad news!]]".news]]!".
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* How Baron Hakone is killed. He hears the song "[[https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aGCdLKXNF3w Everybody Wants To Rule The World]]" playing (and this is portrayed as a deadly {{leitmotif}}), before Paul appears and pushes him to his death.
** Paul's love for Music/TearsForFears manifests the same way Enoby Darkness Dementia Raven Way loves Music/MyChemicalRomance; almost all his appearances have to have an excerpt dedicated to how much he loves their music.
* The author frequently referring to the Roland Orzabal/Curt Smith act as a "1980 defunct band called "Music/TearsForFears". Ignoring the fact that they're a ''1981'' band, does he really think the audience is too dumb to recognize a band as mainstream as ''Tears For Fears''?
** Paul's love for Music/TearsForFears manifests the same way Enoby Darkness Dementia Raven Way loves Music/MyChemicalRomance; almost all his appearances have to have an excerpt dedicated to how much he loves their music.
* The author frequently referring to the Roland Orzabal/Curt Smith act as a "1980 defunct band called "Music/TearsForFears". Ignoring the fact that they're a ''1981'' band, does he really think the audience is too dumb to recognize a band as mainstream as ''Tears For Fears''?
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* How Before Baron Hakone is killed. He killed, he hears the song "[[https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aGCdLKXNF3w Everybody Wants To Rule The World]]" playing (and this playing. This is portrayed as a deadly {{leitmotif}}), before as Paul appears and pushes him to his death.
** Paul's love for Music/TearsForFears manifests the same way Enoby Darkness Dementia Raven Way loves Music/MyChemicalRomance; almost all his appearances have to have an excerpt dedicated to howmuch he loves their music.
he's such a huge fan of them.
* The author frequently referring to the Roland Orzabal/Curt Smith act as a "1980 defunct band called "Music/TearsForFears". Ignoring the fact that they're a''1981'' '''1981''' band, does he really think the audience is too dumb to recognize a band as mainstream as ''Tears Tears For Fears''?Fears?
** Paul's love for Music/TearsForFears manifests the same way Enoby Darkness Dementia Raven Way loves Music/MyChemicalRomance; almost all his appearances have to have an excerpt dedicated to how
* The author frequently referring to the Roland Orzabal/Curt Smith act as a "1980 defunct band called "Music/TearsForFears". Ignoring the fact that they're a
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* One of the reasons Chapter 69 is considered the funniest chapter in the series is that Keith Kogane repeats Prince Heinel's lines from ''Anime/VoltesV'' Episode 31:
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* One of the reasons Chapter 69 is considered the funniest chapter in the series is that - Keith Kogane repeats Prince Heinel's lines from ''Anime/VoltesV'' Episode 31:
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--> "This planet is just a small speck among so many others, you're fighting against Voltron: Defender of the Universe!"
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--> "This planet "[[InsignificantBluePlanet This planet]] is just a small speck among so many others, you're fighting against Voltron: Defender of the Universe!"
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* Every time Voltes V commences their TransformationSequence, the author copy-pastes the theme song lyrics (in both Japanese and English). Way to pad out the fic...
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* Every time Voltes V commences their TransformationSequence, the author copy-pastes the Voltes V theme song lyrics (in both Japanese and English). Way to pad out the fic...{{Padding}} much?
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--> [[ArsonMurderAndJaywalking Music]] coming from a 1980 defunct band called "Tears for Fears".
* In Chapter 34:
--> "That beaming multi-colored clown's been dodging our attack, guys!" Lance told the rest of the Voltron Force on the radio. "If I could get him I'll rip 'em apart!"
-->"Stay close Lance," Keith cautioned Lance, "We don't even know what that thing's made of!"
* In Chapter 34:
--> "That beaming multi-colored clown's been dodging our attack, guys!" Lance told the rest of the Voltron Force on the radio. "If I could get him I'll rip 'em apart!"
-->"Stay close Lance," Keith cautioned Lance, "We don't even know what that thing's made of!"
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--> [[ArsonMurderAndJaywalking Music]] coming from a 1980 defunct band called "Tears for Fears".
* In Chapter 34:
--> "That beaming multi-colored clown's been dodging our attack, guys!" Lance told the rest of the Voltron Force on the radio. "If I could get him I'll rip 'em apart!"
-->"Stay close Lance," Keith cautioned Lance, "We don't even know what that thing's made of!""Music/TearsForFears".
* In Chapter 34:
--> "That beaming multi-colored clown's been dodging our attack, guys!" Lance told the rest of the Voltron Force on the radio. "If I could get him I'll rip 'em apart!"
-->"Stay close Lance," Keith cautioned Lance, "We don't even know what that thing's made of!"
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*How Baron Hakone is killed. He hears the song "[[https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aGCdLKXNF3w Everybody Wants To Rule The World]]" playing (and this is portrayed as a deadly {{leitmotif}}), before Paul appears and pushes him to his death.
**Paul's love for Music/TearsForFears manifests the same way Enoby Darkness Dementia Raven Way loves Music/MyChemicalRomance; almost all his appearances have to have an excerpt dedicated to how much he loves their music.
*The author frequently referring to the Roland Orzabal/Curt Smith act as a "1980 defunct band called "Music/TearsForFears". Ignoring the fact that they're a ''1981'' band, does he really think the audience is too dumb to recognize a band as mainstream as ''Tears For Fears''?
**CreatorsCultureCarryover, maybe? His blog did say he's from the Phillippines and perhaps the band isn't as well known there.
**Paul's love for Music/TearsForFears manifests the same way Enoby Darkness Dementia Raven Way loves Music/MyChemicalRomance; almost all his appearances have to have an excerpt dedicated to how much he loves their music.
*The author frequently referring to the Roland Orzabal/Curt Smith act as a "1980 defunct band called "Music/TearsForFears". Ignoring the fact that they're a ''1981'' band, does he really think the audience is too dumb to recognize a band as mainstream as ''Tears For Fears''?
**CreatorsCultureCarryover, maybe? His blog did say he's from the Phillippines and perhaps the band isn't as well known there.
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*The author has a habit of using insults like [adjective] [noun], even when the adjectives ''don't make sense''. Key offenders include:
--> "You aristocratic murderers!" (Chapter 69)
--> "You gleaming clowns!" (Chapter 33)
--> "You aristocratic murderers!" (Chapter 69)
--> "You gleaming clowns!" (Chapter 33)
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--> Bragak!! (Chapter 66)
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* Keith insulting Richard Hartford (Kazuya Ryuzaki) for being a karate-ka. In the original [[Anime/GoLion anime series]], Akira Kogane (Keith) was also a karate-ka.
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* Keith insulting Keith's excessive hypocrisy. He insults Richard Hartford (Kazuya Ryuzaki) for being a karate-ka. In karate user (when in the original [[Anime/GoLion anime series]], Akira Kogane (Keith) was also a karate-ka.karate-ka) and calls Earth "a small speck amongst others" even though ''he's'' an Earthling.
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--> "Why...this Voltes Team is just kids..."Princess Allura voiced her observations.
--> "And these children need spanking!" Hunk flexes his knuckles as he stared at Big Bert. "...And I'm itching to give it to 'em!"
--> "And these children need spanking!" Hunk flexes his knuckles as he stared at Big Bert. "...And I'm itching to give it to 'em!"
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--> "Why...this Voltes Team is just kids..."Princess Allura voiced her observations. \n --> "And these children need spanking!" spanking!"
--> Hunk flexes his knuckles as he stared at Big Bert. "...And I'm itching to give it to 'em!"
--> Hunk flexes his knuckles as he stared at Big Bert. "...And I'm itching to give it to 'em!"
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* Jeff is a complete asshole who treats Shaider badly for being Asian. In the end Shaider throws him into a space time warp. Serves the bastard right, it does. --> Suddenly, one of his monitors displayed the image of Cric, leader of the Voltron Sea Team.
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* Jeff is a complete asshole who treats Shaider badly for being Asian. In the end Shaider throws him into a space time warp. Serves the bastard right, it does. --> Suddenly, one of his monitors displayed the image of Cric, leader of the Voltron Sea Team.
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* Every time Voltes V commences their TransformationSequence, the author copy-pastes the theme song lyrics (in both Japanese and English) to let us imagine it playing, like in the show.
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* Every time Voltes V commences their TransformationSequence, the author copy-pastes the theme song lyrics (in both Japanese and English) English). Way to let us imagine it playing, like in pad out the show.fic...
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--> "That beaming multi-colored clown's been dodging our attack, guys!" Lance told the rest of the Voltron Force on the radio. "If I could get him I'll rip 'em apart!" -->"Stay close Lance," Keith cautioned Lance, "We don't even know what that thing's made of!"
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--> "That beaming multi-colored clown's been dodging our attack, guys!" Lance told the rest of the Voltron Force on the radio. "If I could get him I'll rip 'em apart!" apart!"
-->"Stay close Lance," Keith cautioned Lance, "We don't even know what that thing's made of!"
-->"Stay close Lance," Keith cautioned Lance, "We don't even know what that thing's made of!"
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*Romelle figuring out that Imjad is evil.
--> "There's something very odd about this Imjad that I can't lay my finger on... His way of persuading and influencing the Voltron Force seemed so uncanny and his war factories reminded me of the ones King Zarkon erected in the wars that Voltron fought out..."
**Mind you, Romelle has just admitted she's seen him create ''war factories'' and STILL not realized that he's a villain.
--> "There's something very odd about this Imjad that I can't lay my finger on... His way of persuading and influencing the Voltron Force seemed so uncanny and his war factories reminded me of the ones King Zarkon erected in the wars that Voltron fought out..."
**Mind you, Romelle has just admitted she's seen him create ''war factories'' and STILL not realized that he's a villain.
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* If you've seen ''WesternAnimation/VoltronLegendaryDefender'', then Romelle being RightAllAlong about the heroes' BigBadFriend is even funnier, because that's exactly what happens in Season 6.[[labelnote:Context (spoilers)]]Romelle finds out that Lotor is harvesting Alteans despite claming to be reformed. She tells Keith and Allura, and they're both enraged at him.[[/labelnote]]
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* If you've seen ''WesternAnimation/VoltronLegendaryDefender'', then Romelle being RightAllAlong right all along about the heroes' BigBadFriend is even funnier, because that's exactly what happens in Season 6.[[labelnote:Context (spoilers)]]Romelle finds out that Lotor is harvesting Alteans despite claming to be reformed. She tells Keith and Allura, and they're both enraged at him.[[/labelnote]]
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* Jeff is a complete asshole who treats Shaider badly for being Asian. In the end Shaider throws him into a space time warp. Serves the bastard right, it does.[[labelnote:Context (disturbing)]]
--> Suddenly, one of his monitors displayed the image of Cric, leader of the Voltron Sea Team.
--> "I advise extreme caution, Jeff..." He warned the Voltron Leader, "The alien star ship is full of surprises, even I could not easily comprehend..."
--> "Cric's rigthy...: Cliff, leader of the Voltron Land Team buts in.
--> "Let's wait for the alliance to scan that mighty bugger; mate... b'fore we deal with it!"
-->Jeff closed his eyes and shook his head in frustration. "B-but we're so close...so close to swat that murdering Jap!" His hands gripped hard at the firing lever.
--> "Team, if we let him slip, we may never have another chance to destroy him and give justice to Commander Garth."
--> Before any of the Voltron Armored Squadron could react to Jeff's words, Jeff activated his com-link and screamed hard at Shaider and the Vavilos. "I don't give a damn about those Japs who died fighting against the Voltron Lion Force...they deserve to die...those ugly, filthy yellow bellied Japs... What's important, are those men who died serving the Galaxy Alliance, Planet Arus and Planet Pollux, they're the true heroes not you, not your Voltes Gooks. None of you yellow faced monkeys could trample the cause of the Galaxy Alliance!"
-->In his cockpit, Shaider was shocked by the barefaced insults he received from the Voltron leader. He now realized that Voltron and the Galaxy Alliance only meant to wage war and possibly destroy Planet Earth. "You blithering bastard, you have no rights to insult those who died for the cause of justice and freedom..." --> In his cockpit, Jeff snarled back at the unseen speaker; "Damn your cause, I challenge you to a fight, armored ugly ape of a Jap!" After that, Jeff turns to his Voltron Team. "I'm not gonna sit here and watch how he take off, Voltron Force..."[[/labelnote]]
--> Suddenly, one of his monitors displayed the image of Cric, leader of the Voltron Sea Team.
--> "I advise extreme caution, Jeff..." He warned the Voltron Leader, "The alien star ship is full of surprises, even I could not easily comprehend..."
--> "Cric's rigthy...: Cliff, leader of the Voltron Land Team buts in.
--> "Let's wait for the alliance to scan that mighty bugger; mate... b'fore we deal with it!"
-->Jeff closed his eyes and shook his head in frustration. "B-but we're so close...so close to swat that murdering Jap!" His hands gripped hard at the firing lever.
--> "Team, if we let him slip, we may never have another chance to destroy him and give justice to Commander Garth."
--> Before any of the Voltron Armored Squadron could react to Jeff's words, Jeff activated his com-link and screamed hard at Shaider and the Vavilos. "I don't give a damn about those Japs who died fighting against the Voltron Lion Force...they deserve to die...those ugly, filthy yellow bellied Japs... What's important, are those men who died serving the Galaxy Alliance, Planet Arus and Planet Pollux, they're the true heroes not you, not your Voltes Gooks. None of you yellow faced monkeys could trample the cause of the Galaxy Alliance!"
-->In his cockpit, Shaider was shocked by the barefaced insults he received from the Voltron leader. He now realized that Voltron and the Galaxy Alliance only meant to wage war and possibly destroy Planet Earth. "You blithering bastard, you have no rights to insult those who died for the cause of justice and freedom..." --> In his cockpit, Jeff snarled back at the unseen speaker; "Damn your cause, I challenge you to a fight, armored ugly ape of a Jap!" After that, Jeff turns to his Voltron Team. "I'm not gonna sit here and watch how he take off, Voltron Force..."[[/labelnote]]
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* Jeff is a complete asshole who treats Shaider badly for being Asian. In the end Shaider throws him into a space time warp. Serves the bastard right, it does.[[labelnote:Context (disturbing)]]
--> Suddenly, one of his monitors displayed the image of Cric, leader of the Voltron Sea Team.
--> "I advise extreme caution, Jeff..." He warned the Voltron Leader, "The alien star ship is full of surprises, even I could not easily comprehend..."
--> "Cric's rigthy...: Cliff, leader of the Voltron Land Team buts in.
--> "Let's wait for the alliance to scan that mighty bugger; mate... b'fore we deal with it!"
-->Jeff closed his eyes and shook his head in frustration. "B-but we're so close...so close to swat that murdering Jap!" His hands gripped hard at the firing lever.
--> "Team, if we let him slip, we may never have another chance to destroy him and give justice to Commander Garth."
--> Before any of the Voltron Armored Squadron could react to Jeff's words, Jeff activated his com-link and screamed hard at Shaider and the Vavilos. "I don't give a damn about those Japs who died fighting against the Voltron Lion Force...they deserve to die...those ugly, filthy yellow bellied Japs... What's important, are those men who died serving the Galaxy Alliance, Planet Arus and Planet Pollux, they're the true heroes not you, not your Voltes Gooks. None of you yellow faced monkeys could trample the cause of the Galaxy Alliance!"
-->In his cockpit, Shaider was shocked by the barefaced insults he received from the Voltron leader. He now realized that Voltron and the Galaxy Alliance only meant to wage war and possibly destroy Planet Earth. "You blithering bastard, you have no rights to insult those who died for the cause of justice and freedom..." --> In his cockpit, Jeff snarled back at the unseen speaker; "Damn your cause, I challenge you to a fight, armored ugly ape of a Jap!" After that, Jeff turns to his Voltron Team. "I'm not gonna sit here and watch how he take off, Voltron Force..."[[/labelnote]]Team.
--> "I advise extreme caution, Jeff..." He warned the Voltron Leader, "The alien star ship is full of surprises, even I could not easily comprehend..."
--> "Cric's rigthy...: Cliff, leader of the Voltron Land Team buts in.
--> "Let's wait for the alliance to scan that mighty bugger; mate... b'fore we deal with it!"
-->Jeff closed his eyes and shook his head in frustration. "B-but we're so close...so close to swat that murdering Jap!" His hands gripped hard at the firing lever.
--> "Team, if we let him slip, we may never have another chance to destroy him and give justice to Commander Garth."
--> Before any of the Voltron Armored Squadron could react to Jeff's words, Jeff activated his com-link and screamed hard at Shaider and the Vavilos. "I don't give a damn about those Japs who died fighting against the Voltron Lion Force...they deserve to die...those ugly, filthy yellow bellied Japs... What's important, are those men who died serving the Galaxy Alliance, Planet Arus and Planet Pollux, they're the true heroes not you, not your Voltes Gooks. None of you yellow faced monkeys could trample the cause of the Galaxy Alliance!"
-->In his cockpit, Shaider was shocked by the barefaced insults he received from the Voltron leader. He now realized that Voltron and the Galaxy Alliance only meant to wage war and possibly destroy Planet Earth. "You blithering bastard, you have no rights to insult those who died for the cause of justice and freedom..." --> In his cockpit, Jeff snarled back at the unseen speaker; "Damn your cause, I challenge you to a fight, armored ugly ape of a Jap!" After that, Jeff turns to his Voltron Team. "I'm not gonna sit here and watch how he take off, Voltron Force..."[[/labelnote]]
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--> "For that brief moment, Commander Robinson switched from an Earth Defense Official, into a Ninja Master and moves in terrifying swiftness like a Benihaha chef."
--> "For that brief moment, Commander Robinson switched from an Earth Defense Official, into a Ninja Master and moves in terrifying swiftness like a Benihaha chef."
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--> "For that brief moment, Commander
--> Barrra-rrra-Booooommmm!!!! (Chapter 9)
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* Jeff is a complete asshole who treats Shaider badly for being Asian. In the end Shaider throws him into a space time warp. Serves the bastard right, it does.[[labelnote:Context (disturbing)]] --> Suddenly, one of his monitors displayed the image of Cric, leader of the Voltron Sea Team.
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* Jeff is a complete asshole who treats Shaider badly for being Asian. In the end Shaider throws him into a space time warp. Serves the bastard right, it does.[[labelnote:Context (disturbing)]] (disturbing)]]
--> Suddenly, one of his monitors displayed the image of Cric, leader of the Voltron Sea Team.
--> Suddenly, one of his monitors displayed the image of Cric, leader of the Voltron Sea Team.
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*Chapter 2:
--> "For that brief moment, Commander Robinson switched from an Earth Defense Official, into a Ninja Master and moves in terrifying swiftness like a Benihaha chef."
--> "For that brief moment, Commander Robinson switched from an Earth Defense Official, into a Ninja Master and moves in terrifying swiftness like a Benihaha chef."
*In Chapter 34:
--> "That beaming multi-colored clown's been dodging our attack, guys!" Lance told the rest of the Voltron Force on the radio. "If I could get him I'll rip 'em apart!" -->"Stay close Lance," Keith cautioned Lance, "We don't even know what that thing's made of!"
--> "That beaming multi-colored clown's been dodging our attack, guys!" Lance told the rest of the Voltron Force on the radio. "If I could get him I'll rip 'em apart!" -->"Stay close Lance," Keith cautioned Lance, "We don't even know what that thing's made of!"
*In Chapter 43, Edward says "[[CaptainObvious that enemy woman really is bad news!]]".
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* In Chapter 82, Chain Knuckles is written as "CHAIN KNUCLES".
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* In Chapter 82, Chain Knuckles is written as "CHAIN KNUCLES".KNUCLES".
*Jeff is a complete asshole who treats Shaider badly for being Asian. In the end Shaider throws him into a space time warp. Serves the bastard right, it does.[[labelnote:Context (disturbing)]] --> Suddenly, one of his monitors displayed the image of Cric, leader of the Voltron Sea Team.
--> "I advise extreme caution, Jeff..." He warned the Voltron Leader, "The alien star ship is full of surprises, even I could not easily comprehend..."
--> "Cric's rigthy...: Cliff, leader of the Voltron Land Team buts in.
--> "Let's wait for the alliance to scan that mighty bugger; mate... b'fore we deal with it!"
-->Jeff closed his eyes and shook his head in frustration. "B-but we're so close...so close to swat that murdering Jap!" His hands gripped hard at the firing lever.
--> "Team, if we let him slip, we may never have another chance to destroy him and give justice to Commander Garth."
--> Before any of the Voltron Armored Squadron could react to Jeff's words, Jeff activated his com-link and screamed hard at Shaider and the Vavilos. "I don't give a damn about those Japs who died fighting against the Voltron Lion Force...they deserve to die...those ugly, filthy yellow bellied Japs... What's important, are those men who died serving the Galaxy Alliance, Planet Arus and Planet Pollux, they're the true heroes not you, not your Voltes Gooks. None of you yellow faced monkeys could trample the cause of the Galaxy Alliance!"
-->In his cockpit, Shaider was shocked by the barefaced insults he received from the Voltron leader. He now realized that Voltron and the Galaxy Alliance only meant to wage war and possibly destroy Planet Earth. "You blithering bastard, you have no rights to insult those who died for the cause of justice and freedom..." --> In his cockpit, Jeff snarled back at the unseen speaker; "Damn your cause, I challenge you to a fight, armored ugly ape of a Jap!" After that, Jeff turns to his Voltron Team. "I'm not gonna sit here and watch how he take off, Voltron Force..."[[/labelnote]]
*Jeff is a complete asshole who treats Shaider badly for being Asian. In the end Shaider throws him into a space time warp. Serves the bastard right, it does.[[labelnote:Context (disturbing)]] --> Suddenly, one of his monitors displayed the image of Cric, leader of the Voltron Sea Team.
--> "I advise extreme caution, Jeff..." He warned the Voltron Leader, "The alien star ship is full of surprises, even I could not easily comprehend..."
--> "Cric's rigthy...: Cliff, leader of the Voltron Land Team buts in.
--> "Let's wait for the alliance to scan that mighty bugger; mate... b'fore we deal with it!"
-->Jeff closed his eyes and shook his head in frustration. "B-but we're so close...so close to swat that murdering Jap!" His hands gripped hard at the firing lever.
--> "Team, if we let him slip, we may never have another chance to destroy him and give justice to Commander Garth."
--> Before any of the Voltron Armored Squadron could react to Jeff's words, Jeff activated his com-link and screamed hard at Shaider and the Vavilos. "I don't give a damn about those Japs who died fighting against the Voltron Lion Force...they deserve to die...those ugly, filthy yellow bellied Japs... What's important, are those men who died serving the Galaxy Alliance, Planet Arus and Planet Pollux, they're the true heroes not you, not your Voltes Gooks. None of you yellow faced monkeys could trample the cause of the Galaxy Alliance!"
-->In his cockpit, Shaider was shocked by the barefaced insults he received from the Voltron leader. He now realized that Voltron and the Galaxy Alliance only meant to wage war and possibly destroy Planet Earth. "You blithering bastard, you have no rights to insult those who died for the cause of justice and freedom..." --> In his cockpit, Jeff snarled back at the unseen speaker; "Damn your cause, I challenge you to a fight, armored ugly ape of a Jap!" After that, Jeff turns to his Voltron Team. "I'm not gonna sit here and watch how he take off, Voltron Force..."[[/labelnote]]
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* Keith ends almost every chapter with
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* Keith ends almost every chapter with something like "We'll, show you the power of Voltron: Defender of the Universe!" or "Don't mess with Voltron: Defender of the Universe!", even when he loses.
*In Chapter 41, Pidge says that Keith is "a sight for [[KnightInSourArmor sour]] eyes".
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*In Chapter 82, Chain Knuckles is written as "CHAIN KNUCLES".
*In Chapter 82, Chain Knuckles is written as "CHAIN KNUCLES".
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*Every time Voltes V commences their TransformationSequence, the author copy-pastes the theme song lyrics (in both Japanese and English) to let us imagine it playing, like in the show.
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* Chapter 69 just might be the contender for the funniest chapter in the entire fic, and it doesn't even have anything to do with SixtyNineLol
** Big Bert (Daijiro Go) screams "You aristocratic murderers!" at Team Voltron.
** Allura's reaction to seeing the Voltes Team in the flesh.
** Big Bert (Daijiro Go) screams "You aristocratic murderers!" at Team Voltron.
** Allura's reaction to seeing the Voltes Team in the flesh.
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* In Chapter 69 just might be the contender for the funniest chapter in the entire fic, and it doesn't even have anything to do with SixtyNineLol
**69, Big Bert (Daijiro Go) screams "You aristocratic murderers!" at Team Voltron.
** * Also in Chapter 69, Allura's reaction to seeing the Voltes Team in the flesh.
**
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** Keith Kogane repeats Prince Heinel's lines from ''Anime/VoltesV'' Episode 31:
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*In Chapter 69, Steve says that they won't be reduced to savages like Keith. Then, in Chapter 71:
--> Steve smiled and exhaled. "Voltron..." Steve said in his thought. "...rest assured the Godaikins of Planet Earth will hunt you down like the animal you are..."
--> Steve smiled and exhaled. "Voltron..." Steve said in his thought. "...rest assured the Godaikins of Planet Earth will hunt you down like the animal you are..."
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*Keith ends almost every chapter with
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* In Chapter 69, Big Bert (Daijiro Go) screams "You aristocratic murderers!" at Team Voltron.
* Also in Chapter 69, Keith Kogane repeats Prince Heinel's lines from ''Anime/VoltesV'' Episode 31:
* Also in Chapter 69, Keith Kogane repeats Prince Heinel's lines from ''Anime/VoltesV'' Episode 31:
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*Chapter 69 just might be the contender for the funniest chapter in the entire fic, and it doesn't even have anything to do with SixtyNineLol
** Big Bert (Daijiro Go) screams "You aristocratic murderers!" at Team Voltron.
--> "Why...this Voltes Team is just kids..."Princess Allura voiced her observations.
--> "And these children need spanking!" Hunk flexes his knuckles as he stared at Big Bert. "...And I'm itching to give it to 'em!"
**Keith Kogane repeats Prince Heinel's lines from ''Anime/VoltesV'' Episode 31:
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*Keith insulting Richard Hartford (Kazuya Ryuzaki) for being a karate-ka. In the original [[Anime/GoLion anime series]], Akira Kogane (Keith) was also a karate-ka.
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*The description of Imjad's room.
--> The Imjad's meditation chamber was darkly lit.
--> He sits, thinking of another way to make the Godaikins battle each other.
--> It's just a matter of time before he could commence his plans of conquering and enslaving the universe.
--> There's soft, yet unruly music circling around the chamber's atmosphere.
--> Music coming from a 1980 defunct band called "Tears for Fears".
--> The Imjad's meditation chamber was darkly lit.
--> He sits, thinking of another way to make the Godaikins battle each other.
--> It's just a matter of time before he could commence his plans of conquering and enslaving the universe.
--> There's soft, yet unruly music circling around the chamber's atmosphere.
--> Music coming from a 1980 defunct band called "Tears for Fears".
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--> Steve ignored Keith's irritating reply. "Voltes V and the Voltes team are defenders too...We are honorable fighters and before reducing ourselves to "savages" I suggest you and your Voltron Force better leave us in peace!"
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Being an unintentional SoBadItsGood fic, ''Fanfic/VoltesVVersusVoltronTheGodaikinWars'' is full of Funny Moments.
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*The Big Falcon commander is described as "looking like an Amish priest in laboratory uniform".
*In Chapter 69, Big Bert (Daijiro Go) screams "You aristocratic murderers!" at Team Voltron.
*Also in Chapter 69, Keith Kogane repeats Prince Heinel's lines from ''Anime/VoltesV'' Episode 31:
--> "No Big Bert..." He explained. "We are the Voltes Team and we have to show these invaders that we are but noble warriors protecting the Earth!". Steve looks at Keith and raised his fist.
--> "Keith," he begins.
--> "Did you see the ten billion people and my father on my shoulders?...It is their strength you are fighting!"
--> Keith shook his head in disgust and stared back at Steve.
--> "This planet is just a small speck among so many others, you're fighting against Voltron: Defender of the Universe!"
*The sound effects used to describe the combat in the fic.
-->
--> Pling-Plang-B-Zing-Bzang! (Chapter 78)
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*The Big Falcon commander is described as "looking like an Amish priest in laboratory uniform".
*In Chapter 69, Big Bert (Daijiro Go) screams "You aristocratic murderers!" at Team Voltron.
*Also in Chapter 69, Keith Kogane repeats Prince Heinel's lines from ''Anime/VoltesV'' Episode 31:
--> "No Big Bert..." He explained. "We are the Voltes Team and we have to show these invaders that we are but noble warriors protecting the Earth!". Steve looks at Keith and raised his fist.
--> "Keith," he begins.
--> "Did you see the ten billion people and my father on my shoulders?...It is their strength you are fighting!"
--> Keith shook his head in disgust and stared back at Steve.
--> "This planet is just a small speck among so many others, you're fighting against Voltron: Defender of the Universe!"
*The sound effects used to describe the combat in the fic.
-->
--> Pling-Plang-B-Zing-Bzang! (Chapter 78)
