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[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/363373/gems-the-sun-princess Gems: The Sun Princess]] is the first part of the Gems trilogy currently being written by Pen Dragon. The story follows Watcher, a student from the Order, after he gets punished for using a forbidden spell to fend off an attacker from trying to kill his best friend. Now, he's just a librarian, but one day he encounters a mare who may or may not be the long-forgotten princess of the sun.
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Two thousand years ago, Equestria was once a united nation where everypony lived together in harmony. But when Equestria's four rulers vanished off the face of the planet, a new government called the Order was formed, leading to Equestria splitting in two due to disagreements among each other, but when a pony claims to be one of the princesses, a unicorn named Watcher does everything he can to find the truth about this mysterious mare he met by fate.
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* YourTerroristsAreOurFreedomFighters: Equestria is currently divided into two territories, The Order and The Rebellion, naturally they oppose each other, the morality of the two groups remains unknown however. So far it's implied that the Order is the real BigBad.BigBad.
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[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/363373/gems-the-sun-princess Gems: The Sun Princess]] is the first part of the Gems trilogy currently being written by Pen Dragon. The story follows Watcher, a student from the Order, after he gets punished for using a forbinden forbidden spell to fence fend off an attacker from trying to kill his best friend. Now, he's just a librarian, but one day he encounter encounters a mare who may or may not be the long-forgotten princess of the sun.
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* AndManGrewProud: Two thoudsands years into the future and the legend of the four alicorns has faded into just a myth.
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* AndManGrewProud: Two thoudsands thousand years into the future and the legend of the four alicorns has faded into just a myth.
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* BenevolentBoss: Pen Dragon, he cares about the well-being of his staff, even putting himself in harm's way in order to protect them. Once it becomes clear that the secret weapon he's working on has been leaked, he doesn't attempt to deny it's existance.
* BrokenPedestal: [[spoiler:Watcher becomes disillusioned with the Order after he's punished for [[NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished trying to protect his friend]], but he lose all respect for them after he realizes that Princess Celestia is real and the Order has been keeping her existence a secret and now are trying to capture her.]]
* BrokenPedestal: [[spoiler:Watcher becomes disillusioned with the Order after he's punished for [[NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished trying to protect his friend]], but he lose all respect for them after he realizes that Princess Celestia is real and the Order has been keeping her existence a secret and now are trying to capture her.]]
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* BenevolentBoss: Pen Dragon, he cares about the well-being of his staff, even putting himself in harm's way in order to protect them. Once it becomes clear that the secret weapon he's working on has been leaked, he doesn't attempt to deny it's existance.
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* {{Magitek}}: Two thounsand thousand years after the disappear disappearance of the four princesses, Equestria saw a lot of tecnological technological advancement.
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* TheOrder: The Order is the government that controls the south region of Equestria. [[spoiler:Chapter 9 confirms that it's actually corrupted, evidence by liberal use of police brutality and a complete determination to capture Celestia. Its also implied that it's a false democracy as its leaders all share the same appearance and cutie marks since its creation two thousand years ago, in other words these are the same individuals and not their descendants.]]
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* TheOrder: The Order is the government that controls the south southern region of Equestria. [[spoiler:Chapter 9 confirms that it's actually corrupted, evidence evidenced by liberal use of police brutality and a complete determination to capture Celestia. Its It's also implied that it's a false democracy democracy, as its leaders all share the same appearance and cutie marks since its creation two thousand years ago, in other words these are the same individuals and not their descendants.]]
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* RealityEnsues: [[spoiler:The attack on the Dragon Corp. doesn't go without consequences, the ADS, the company that offer security guards to Pen Dragon, terminates it's contract with Pen and a lawsuit is filled by ADS and the families of the guards that where killed during the attack. To make matters worse, there's large stock drops as a result of half of the investors quitting, the authorities has divisive opinion about Pen Dragon killing the White Talons, and this strain Pen's friendship with Cobalt Banks.]]
* RipVanWinkle: Celestia is utterly surprised once she realice she's been gone missing for two thousand years, and gets sad because her ponies had forgotten all about her.
* RipVanWinkle: Celestia is utterly surprised once she realice she's been gone missing for two thousand years, and gets sad because her ponies had forgotten all about her.
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* RealityEnsues: [[spoiler:The attack on the Dragon Corp. doesn't go without consequences, the ADS, the company that offer security guards to Pen Dragon, terminates it's contract with Pen and a lawsuit is filled by ADS and the families of the guards that where killed during the attack. To make matters worse, there's large stock drops as a result of half of the investors quitting, the authorities has divisive opinion about Pen Dragon killing the White Talons, and this strain strains Pen's friendship with Cobalt Banks.]]
* RipVanWinkle: Celestia is utterly surprised once sherealice realizes she's been gone missing for two thousand years, and gets sad because her ponies had forgotten all about her.
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* UnfinishedUntestedUsedAnyway: Pen Dragon is forced to use the prototype aircraft he's working on to fends off the griffons, justified because he knows they're going after the prototype and he's not going to let them steal it. It's also a notable example because not only it's a FlawedPrototype, but it was also used while it was being repair from a previous failed test.
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* UnfinishedUntestedUsedAnyway: Pen Dragon is forced to use the prototype aircraft he's working on to fends fend off the griffons, justified because he knows they're going after the prototype and he's not going to let them steal it. It's also a notable example because not only it's a FlawedPrototype, but it was also used while it was being repair repaired from a previous failed test.
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* AncientConspiracy: The story implied that the Order is trying to keep the existence of the four alicorn princess a secret, so far their true purpose is unknown. [[spoiler: Chapter 9 has them trying to capture Celestia at all cost.]]
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* AncientConspiracy: The story implied that the Order is trying to keep the existence of the four alicorn princess princesses a secret, so far their true purpose is unknown. [[spoiler: Chapter 9 has them trying to capture Celestia at all cost.costs.]]
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[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/363373/gems-the-sun-princess Gems: The Sun Princess]] is the first part of the Gems trilogy currently being written by [[https://www.fimfiction.net/user/Pen+The+Fallen+Prime Pen Dragon]]. The story follows Watcher, a student from the Order, after he gets punished for using a forbinden spell to fence off an attacker from trying to kill his best friend. Now, he's just a librarian, but one day he encounter a mare who may or may not be the long-forgotten princess of the sun.
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[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/363373/gems-the-sun-princess Gems: The Sun Princess]] is the first part of the Gems trilogy currently being written by [[https://www.fimfiction.net/user/Pen+The+Fallen+Prime Pen Dragon]].Dragon. The story follows Watcher, a student from the Order, after he gets punished for using a forbinden spell to fence off an attacker from trying to kill his best friend. Now, he's just a librarian, but one day he encounter a mare who may or may not be the long-forgotten princess of the sun.
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* BadassInCharge: On chapter six, the Dragon Corporation gets attack by a group of mercenaries griffons, Pen Dragon takes the prototype weapon he's working on and use it to counter the attack.
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* BadassInCharge: On In chapter six, the Dragon Corporation gets attack attacked by a group of mercenaries mercenary griffons, Pen Dragon takes the prototype weapon he's working on and use uses it to counter the attack.
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* TheOrder: The Order is the goverment that control the south region of Equestria. [[spoiler:Chapter 9 confirmes that its actually corrupted, evidence by liberal use of police brutality and a complete determination to capture Celestia. Its also implied that it's an false democracy as its leaders all share the same appereance and cutie marks since its creation two thounsands years ago, in other words their are the same individuals and not their descendants.]]
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* TheOrder: The Order is the goverment government that control controls the south region of Equestria. [[spoiler:Chapter 9 confirmes confirms that its it's actually corrupted, evidence by liberal use of police brutality and a complete determination to capture Celestia. Its also implied that it's an a false democracy as its leaders all share the same appereance appearance and cutie marks since its creation two thounsands thousand years ago, in other words their these are the same individuals and not their descendants.]]
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* ProfessionalKillers: The White Talons is a group of griffons mercenaries, they're known for dressing in white, use of antique firearms and have a very murderous reputation. They were suppouse to have disbanded 2 decades ago, but have return with unknown intentions.
* RealityEnsues: [[spoiler:The attack on the Dragon Corp. doesn't go without consequences, the ADS, the company that offer security guards to Pen Dragon, terminates it's contract with Pen and a lawsuit is filled by ADS and the families of the guards that where killed during the attack. To make matters worse, there's large stock drops as a result of half of the investor quitting, the authorities has divisive opinion about Pen Dragon killing the White Talons, and this strain Pen's friendship with Cobalt Banks.]]
* RealityEnsues: [[spoiler:The attack on the Dragon Corp. doesn't go without consequences, the ADS, the company that offer security guards to Pen Dragon, terminates it's contract with Pen and a lawsuit is filled by ADS and the families of the guards that where killed during the attack. To make matters worse, there's large stock drops as a result of half of the investor quitting, the authorities has divisive opinion about Pen Dragon killing the White Talons, and this strain Pen's friendship with Cobalt Banks.]]
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* ProfessionalKillers: The White Talons is a group of griffons griffon mercenaries, they're known for dressing in white, use of antique firearms and have a very murderous reputation. They were suppouse supposed to have disbanded 2 two decades ago, but have return with unknown intentions.
* RealityEnsues: [[spoiler:The attack on the Dragon Corp. doesn't go without consequences, the ADS, the company that offer security guards to Pen Dragon, terminates it's contract with Pen and a lawsuit is filled by ADS and the families of the guards that where killed during the attack. To make matters worse, there's large stock drops as a result of half of theinvestor investors quitting, the authorities has divisive opinion about Pen Dragon killing the White Talons, and this strain Pen's friendship with Cobalt Banks.]]
* RealityEnsues: [[spoiler:The attack on the Dragon Corp. doesn't go without consequences, the ADS, the company that offer security guards to Pen Dragon, terminates it's contract with Pen and a lawsuit is filled by ADS and the families of the guards that where killed during the attack. To make matters worse, there's large stock drops as a result of half of the
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Two thousand years ago, Equestria was once a united nation where everypony lived together in harmony. But when Equestria's four rulers vanished off the face of the planet, a new government called the Order was formed, leading to Equestria splitting in two due to disagreements among each other, but when a pony claims to be one of the princesses princesses, a unicorn named Watcher does everything he can to find the truth about this mysterious mare he met by fate.
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* AncientConspiracy: The story implied that the Order is trying to keep the existance of the four alicorn princess a secret, so far their true purpouse is unknown. [[spoiler: Chapter 9 has them trying to capture Celestia at all cost.]]
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* AncientConspiracy: The story implied that the Order is trying to keep the existance existence of the four alicorn princess a secret, so far their true purpouse purpose is unknown. [[spoiler: Chapter 9 has them trying to capture Celestia at all cost.]]
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* BrokenPedestal: [[spoiler:Watcher becomes disillusioned with the Order after he's punished for [[NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished trying to protect his friend]], but he lose all respect for them after he realize that Princess Celestia is real and the Order has been keeping her existance a secret and now are trying to capture her.]]
* CassandraTruth: Many ponies believe that the legend of the four alicorn isn't real, apparently it's also geneticaly impossible for a pony to produce an alicorn. Midnight insist that the princesses are real, Celestia claims to be Princess Celestia; unfortunately she in a unicorn body. [[spoiler:Celestia managed to convince Watcher after she move the sun by herself with no help.]]
* ChivalrousPervert: Watcher, much to Celestia dismay.
* CassandraTruth: Many ponies believe that the legend of the four alicorn isn't real, apparently it's also geneticaly impossible for a pony to produce an alicorn. Midnight insist that the princesses are real, Celestia claims to be Princess Celestia; unfortunately she in a unicorn body. [[spoiler:Celestia managed to convince Watcher after she move the sun by herself with no help.]]
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* BrokenPedestal: [[spoiler:Watcher becomes disillusioned with the Order after he's punished for [[NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished trying to protect his friend]], but he lose all respect for them after he realize realizes that Princess Celestia is real and the Order has been keeping her existance existence a secret and now are trying to capture her.]]
* CassandraTruth: Many ponies believe that the legend of the fouralicorn alicorns isn't real, apparently it's also geneticaly genetically impossible for a pony to produce an alicorn. Midnight insist insists that the princesses are real, Celestia claims to be Princess Celestia; unfortunately she she's in a unicorn body. [[spoiler:Celestia managed to convince Watcher after she move moved the sun by herself with no help.]]
* ChivalrousPervert: Watcher, much toCelestia Celestia's dismay.
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[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/363373/gems-the-sun-princess Gems: The Sun Princess]] is the first part of the Gems trilogy currently being written by [[https://www.fimfiction.net/user/Pen+Dragon net/user/Pen+The+Fallen+Prime Pen Dragon]]. The story follows Watcher, a student from the Order, after he gets punished for using a forbinden spell to fence off an attacker from trying to kill his best friend. Now, he's just a librarian, but one day he encounter a mare who may or may not be the long-forgotten princess of the sun.
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* ChilvariousPervert: Watcher, much to Celestia dismay.
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* BrokenPedestial: BrokenPedestal: [[spoiler:Watcher becomes disillusioned with the Order after he's punished for [[NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished trying to protect his friend]], but he lose all respect for them after he realize that Princess Celestia is real and the Order has been keeping her existance a secret and now are trying to capture her.]]
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* AncientConspiracy: The story implied that the Order is trying to keep the existance of the four alicorn princess a secret, so far their true purpouse is unknown.
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* AncientConspiracy: The story implied that the Order is trying to keep the existance of the four alicorn princess a secret, so far their true purpouse is unknown. [[spoiler: Chapter 9 has them trying to capture Celestia at all cost.]]
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* CassandraTruth: Many ponies believe that the legend of the four alicorn isn't real, apparently it's also geneticaly impossible for a pony to produce an alicorn. Midnight insist that the princesses are real, Celestia claims to be Princess Celestia; unfortunately she in a unicorn body.
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* BrokenPedestial: [[spoiler:Watcher becomes disillusioned with the Order after he's punished for [[NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished trying to protect his friend]], but he lose all respect for them after he realize that Princess Celestia is real and the Order has been keeping her existance a secret and now are trying to capture her.]]
* CassandraTruth: Many ponies believe that the legend of the four alicorn isn't real, apparently it's also geneticaly impossible for a pony to produce an alicorn. Midnight insist that the princesses are real, Celestia claims to be Princess Celestia; unfortunately she in a unicorn body. [[spoiler:Celestia managed to convince Watcher after she move the sun by herself with no help.]]
* CassandraTruth: Many ponies believe that the legend of the four alicorn isn't real, apparently it's also geneticaly impossible for a pony to produce an alicorn. Midnight insist that the princesses are real, Celestia claims to be Princess Celestia; unfortunately she in a unicorn body. [[spoiler:Celestia managed to convince Watcher after she move the sun by herself with no help.]]
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* EvilChancellor: The currently unnamed chancellor that appears at the end of chapter six, it's implied that he possess the power of the sun princess since not only is he ImmuneToBullets, he then kill his attackers effordlessly and shrug it off like nothing happen.
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* EvilChancellor: The currently unnamed chancellor that appears at the end of chapter six, it's implied that he possess the power of the sun princess since not only is he ImmuneToBullets, he then kill his attackers effordlessly and shrug it off like nothing happen. [[spoiler: Its implied that all chancellors that ruled the Order for two thousands years are actually the same individuals, a false democracy.]]
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* MegaCorp: The Dragon Corporation is wealthy weapon manufacture company, lead by Pen Dragon.
* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Watcher tries to save his friend Midnight by using dark magic against the attacker, this result with he gets punished by not allowing him to go to Alpha classes. Downplayed since he did nearly kill the attacker by using a forbidden spell.
* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Watcher tries to save his friend Midnight by using dark magic against the attacker, this result with he gets punished by not allowing him to go to Alpha classes. Downplayed since he did nearly kill the attacker by using a forbidden spell.
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* MegaCorp: The Dragon Corporation is a wealthy weapon manufacture company, lead by Pen Dragon.
* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Watcher tries to save his friend Midnight by using dark magic against the attacker, this result with he gets punished by not allowing him to go to Alpha classes. Downplayed since he did nearly kill the attacker by using a forbidden spell. [[spoiler:Subverted since the Order is actually corrupted.]]
* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Watcher tries to save his friend Midnight by using dark magic against the attacker, this result with he gets punished by not allowing him to go to Alpha classes. Downplayed since he did nearly kill the attacker by using a forbidden spell. [[spoiler:Subverted since the Order is actually corrupted.]]
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* PhysicalGoddess: The four princess of Equestria. [[spoiler:The Order either doesn't believe it or doesn't want the population to find out.]]
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* CassandraTruth: Many ponies believe that the legend of the four alicorn isn't real, apparently it's also geneticaly impossible for a pony to produce an alicorn. Midnight insist that the princesses are real, Celestia claims to be Princess Celestia; unfortunately for her, she's stuck in an unicorn body without her magic.
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* CassandraTruth: Many ponies believe that the legend of the four alicorn isn't real, apparently it's also geneticaly impossible for a pony to produce an alicorn. Midnight insist that the princesses are real, Celestia claims to be Princess Celestia; unfortunately for her, she's stuck she in an a unicorn body without her magic.body.
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* BenevolentBoss: Pen Dragon, he cares about the well-being of his staff, even putting himself in harm's way in order to protect them. Once it becomes clear that the secret weapon he's working on has been leaked, he doesn't attempt to deny it's existance.
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* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Watcher tries to save his friend Midnight by using dark magic against the attacker, this result with he gets punished by making him a librarian and not allowing him to go to Alpha classes. Downplayed since he did nearly kill the attacker by using a forbidden spell.
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* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Watcher tries to save his friend Midnight by using dark magic against the attacker, this result with he gets punished bymaking him a librarian and not allowing him to go to Alpha classes. Downplayed since he did nearly kill the attacker by using a forbidden spell.spell.
** Pen Dragon suffer from this in the aftermath of the attack, justified in the form of RealityEnsues.
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* RealityEnsues: [[spoiler:The attack on the Dragon Corp. doesn't go without consequences, the ADS, the company that offer security guards to Pen Dragon, terminates it's contract with Pen and a lawsuit is filled by ADS and the families of the guards that where killed during the attack. To make matters worse, there's large stock drops as a result of half of the investor quitting, the authorities has divisive opinion about Pen Dragon killing the White Talons, and this strain Pen's friendship with Cobalt Banks.]]
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* UnfinishedUntestedUsedAnyway: Pen Dragon is forced to use the prototype aircraft he's working on to fends off the griffons, justified because he knows they're going after the prototype and he's not going to let them steal it. It's also a notable example because not only it's a FlawedPrototype, but it was also used while it was being repair.
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* UnfinishedUntestedUsedAnyway: Pen Dragon is forced to use the prototype aircraft he's working on to fends off the griffons, justified because he knows they're going after the prototype and he's not going to let them steal it. It's also a notable example because not only it's a FlawedPrototype, but it was also used while it was being repair.repair from a previous failed test.
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* AuthorAvatar: Pen Dragon himself appears in the story as the CEO of the Dragon Corporation. Despite his name he's a pony, not a dragon.
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* SelfInsertFic: Pen Dragon himself appears in the story as the CEO of the Dragon Corporation. Despite his name, he's a pony, not a dragon.
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* YourTerroristsAreOurFreedomFighters: Equestria is currently divided in two territories, The Order and The Rebellion, naturaly they oppose to each other, the morality of the two groups remains unknown however.
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* UnfinishedUntestedUsedAnyway: Pen Dragon is forced to use the prototype aircraft he's working on to fends off the griffons, justified because he knows they're going after the prototype and he's not going to let them steal it. It's also a notable example because not only it's a FlawedPrototype, but it was also used while it was being repair.
* YourTerroristsAreOurFreedomFighters: Equestria is currently divided in two territories, The Order and The Rebellion, naturaly they oppose to each other, the morality of the two groups remains unknown however. So far it's implied that the Order is the real BigBad.
* YourTerroristsAreOurFreedomFighters: Equestria is currently divided in two territories, The Order and The Rebellion, naturaly they oppose to each other, the morality of the two groups remains unknown however. So far it's implied that the Order is the real BigBad.
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* HonestCorporateExecutive: Pen Dragon, he cares about the well-being of his staff, even putting himself in harm's way in order to protect them. Once it becomes that the secret weapon he's working on has been leaked, he doesn't attempt to deny it's existance.
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* HonestCorporateExecutive: Pen Dragon, he cares about the well-being of his staff, even putting himself in harm's way in order to protect them. Once it becomes clear that the secret weapon he's working on has been leaked, he doesn't attempt to deny it's existance.
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* SchizoTech: In chapter six, we have ponies armed with crossbows, the griffons that attacked the Dragon Corp. were armed with firearms, Pen Dragon's aircraft prototype can fire electromagnetic shots, and unicorns can use magic spells. Celestia is also seen using a computer.
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* SchizoTech: In chapter six, we have ponies armed with crossbows, the griffons that attacked the Dragon Corp. were armed with firearms, Pen Dragon's aircraft prototype weapon is a high-tech hovercraft that can fire electromagnetic shots, shots and unicorns can use magic spells. Celestia is also seen using a computer.
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* SchizoTech: In chapter six, we have ponies armed with crossbows, the griffons that attacked the Dragon Corp. were armed with firearms, Pen Dragon's aircraft prototype can fire electromagnetic shots, and unicorns can use magic spells. Celestia is also seen using a computer.
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* AncientConspiracy: The story implied that the Order is trying to keep the existance of the four alicorn princess a secret, so far their purpouse is unknown.
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* AncientConspiracy: The story implied that the Order is trying to keep the existance of the four alicorn princess a secret, so far their true purpouse is unknown.unknown.
* BadassInCharge: On chapter six, the Dragon Corporation gets attack by a group of mercenaries griffons, Pen Dragon takes the prototype weapon he's working on and use it to counter the attack.
* BadassInCharge: On chapter six, the Dragon Corporation gets attack by a group of mercenaries griffons, Pen Dragon takes the prototype weapon he's working on and use it to counter the attack.
* EvilChancellor: The currently unnamed chancellor that appears at the end of chapter six, it's implied that he possess the power of the sun princess since not only is he ImmuneToBullets, he then kill his attackers effordlessly and shrug it off like nothing happen.
* HonestCorporateExecutive: Pen Dragon, he cares about the well-being of his staff, even putting himself in harm's way in order to protect them. Once it becomes that the secret weapon he's working on has been leaked, he doesn't attempt to deny it's existance.
* MegaCorp: The Dragon Corporation is a weapon manufacture company, lead by Pen Dragon.
* NoJustNoReaction: When Watcher is trying to console a sad Celestia, Midnight and Stardust suddenly appear and think they're dating, Watcher and Celestia reacts with disgust.
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* SelfInsertFic: Pen Dragon himself appears in the story as the CEO of the Dragon Corporation.
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* SelfInsertFic: Pen Dragon himself appears in the story as the CEO of the Dragon Corporation. Despite his name, he's a pony, not a dragon.
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* AncientConspiracy: The story implied that the Order is trying to keep the existance of the four alicorn princess a secret, so far their purpouse is unknown.
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* {{Magitek}}: Two thounsand years after the disappear of the four princess, Equestria saw a lot of tecnological advancement.
* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Watcher tries to save his friend Midnight by using dark magic against the attacker, the result? he gets punished by making him a librarian and not allowing him to go to Alpha classes. Downplayed since he nearly killed the attacker by using a forbidden spell.
* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Watcher tries to save his friend Midnight by using dark magic against the attacker, the result? he gets punished by making him a librarian and not allowing him to go to Alpha classes. Downplayed since he nearly killed the attacker by using a forbidden spell.
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* {{Magitek}}: Two thounsand years after the disappear of the four princess, princesses, Equestria saw a lot of tecnological advancement.
* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Watcher tries to save his friend Midnight by using dark magic against the attacker,the result? this result with he gets punished by making him a librarian and not allowing him to go to Alpha classes. Downplayed since he did nearly killed kill the attacker by using a forbidden spell.
* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Watcher tries to save his friend Midnight by using dark magic against the attacker,
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* Magitek: Two thounsand years after the disappear of the four princess, Equestria saw a lot of tecnological advancement.
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* Magitek: {{Magitek}}: Two thounsand years after the disappear of the four princess, Equestria saw a lot of tecnological advancement.
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Has a story group in Fimfiction, [[https://www.fimfiction.net/group/211804/gem-verse the Gem-Verse]], it also has a one-shot prequel [[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/362876/tales-of-the-sun Tales of the Sun]], and a non-canon spin-off [[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/365137/gem Gem]].
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Has a story group in Fimfiction, [[https://www.fimfiction.net/group/211804/gem-verse the Gem-Verse]], it also has a one-shot prequel [[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/362876/tales-of-the-sun Tales of the Sun]], and a non-canon spin-off [[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/365137/gem Gem]].Gem]].
!!This fanfic contains examples of:
* DidNotGetTheGirl: Watcher clearly has a crush on Stardust, however after the incident, she start dating Midnight instead.
* FishOutOfTemporalWater: Celestia has been gone for two thousand years, so naturaly she has no idea how the modern world works, much to Watcher's dismany.
* Magitek: Two thounsand years after the disappear of the four princess, Equestria saw a lot of tecnological advancement.
* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Watcher tries to save his friend Midnight by using dark magic against the attacker, the result? he gets punished by making him a librarian and not allowing him to go to Alpha classes. Downplayed since he nearly killed the attacker by using a forbidden spell.
* RipVanWinkle: Celestia is utterly surprised once she realice she's been gone missing for two thousand years, and gets sad because her ponies had forgotten all about her.
* SelfInsertFic: Pen Dragon himself appears in the story as the CEO of the Dragon Corporation.
* YourTerroristsAreOurFreedomFighters: Equestria is currently divided in two territories, The Order and The Rebellion, naturaly they oppose to each other, the morality of the two groups remains unknown however.
!!This fanfic contains examples of:
* DidNotGetTheGirl: Watcher clearly has a crush on Stardust, however after the incident, she start dating Midnight instead.
* FishOutOfTemporalWater: Celestia has been gone for two thousand years, so naturaly she has no idea how the modern world works, much to Watcher's dismany.
* Magitek: Two thounsand years after the disappear of the four princess, Equestria saw a lot of tecnological advancement.
* NoGoodDeedGoesUnpunished: Watcher tries to save his friend Midnight by using dark magic against the attacker, the result? he gets punished by making him a librarian and not allowing him to go to Alpha classes. Downplayed since he nearly killed the attacker by using a forbidden spell.
* RipVanWinkle: Celestia is utterly surprised once she realice she's been gone missing for two thousand years, and gets sad because her ponies had forgotten all about her.
* SelfInsertFic: Pen Dragon himself appears in the story as the CEO of the Dragon Corporation.
* YourTerroristsAreOurFreedomFighters: Equestria is currently divided in two territories, The Order and The Rebellion, naturaly they oppose to each other, the morality of the two groups remains unknown however.
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Two thousand years ago, Equestria was once a united nation where everypony lived together in harmony. But when Equestria's four rulers vanished off the face of the planet, a new government called the Order was formed, leading to Equestria splitting in two due to disagreements among each other, but when a pony claims to be one of the princesses a unicorn named Watcher does everything he can to find the truth about this mysterious mare he met by fate.
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[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/363373/gems-the-sun-princess Gems: The Sun Princess]] is the first part of the Gems trilogy currently being written by [[https://www.fimfiction.net/user/Pen+Dragon Pen Dragon]]. The story follows Watcher, a student from the Order, after he gets punished for using a forbinden spell to fence off an attacker from trying to kill his best friend. Now, he's just a librarian, but one day he encounter a mare who may or may not be the long-forgotten princess of the sun.
Has a story group in Fimfiction, [[https://www.fimfiction.net/group/211804/gem-verse the Gem-Verse]], it also has a one-shot prequel [[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/362876/tales-of-the-sun Tales of the Sun]], and a non-canon spin-off [[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/365137/gem Gem]].
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[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/363373/gems-the-sun-princess Gems: The Sun Princess]] is the first part of the Gems trilogy currently being written by [[https://www.fimfiction.net/user/Pen+Dragon Pen Dragon]]. The story follows Watcher, a student from the Order, after he gets punished for using a forbinden spell to fence off an attacker from trying to kill his best friend. Now, he's just a librarian, but one day he encounter a mare who may or may not be the long-forgotten princess of the sun.
Has a story group in Fimfiction, [[https://www.fimfiction.net/group/211804/gem-verse the Gem-Verse]], it also has a one-shot prequel [[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/362876/tales-of-the-sun Tales of the Sun]], and a non-canon spin-off [[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/365137/gem Gem]].
