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** Ben cracks a joke over [[Film/StarWars Mos Isis' name]], which Elastamun doesn't get.
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** Ben cracks a joke over [[Film/StarWars [[Franchise/StarWars Mos Isis' name]], which Elastamun doesn't get.
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** The four Golden Guard leaders are direct send-ups of Rapses' guardians from ''WesternAnimation/MummiesAlive''
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** The four Golden Guard leaders are direct send-ups of Rapses' guardians from ''WesternAnimation/MummiesAlive''''WesternAnimation/MummiesAlive'', with their personal flagship speeder, ''Hot-Ra'', being derived from the titular car.
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* FlyingCar: [[Franchise/StarWars Star Wars-esque]] landspeeders are a common mode of transportation, being the quickest way across the planet's radioactive desert terrain. Many of them come equipped with plasma guns and missiles, with a dedicated gunner's seat.
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* BoomStick: Minutes after Elastamun brings the Tennysons to his world, two guards show up carrying laser staffs tipped with ankhs. Max gets to steal one from them and fire back for a short moment.
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* BoomStick: Minutes after Elastamun brings the Tennysons to his world, two guards show up carrying laser staffs tipped with ankhs. Max gets to steal one from them and fire shoot back for a short brief moment.
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* BigNo: [[spoiler: When Set is about to brainwash Ahmed with another mask, Elastamun says this while trying to [[GoThroughMe protect Ahmed with his own body]]. It doesn't work.]]
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* BadassBiker: Elastamun travels between Giza and his home pyramid using a motorcycle.
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* PlanetOfHats: Anur Khufos' hat is Ancient Egypt, though by the time the story takes place, the culture is weakly known.
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* ElectricTorture: When Ilais gets discovered, Undyyne orders Nimdok to zap her with his electricity, in order to make her reveal her undercover mission.
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* BoomStick: Minutes after Elastamun brings the Tennysons to his world, two guards show up carrying laser staffs tipped with ankhs. Max gets to steal one from them and fire back for a short moment.
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* InstantRunes: Worlock casts spells that appear as glowing hieroglyphs. Raht does this too when praying to the gods.
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* ThatWasNotADream: In the epilogue, [[spoiler: Ahmed thinks his brief lapse of consciousness while held hostage by Rehk'Set was a dream, due to being [[LaserGuidedAmnesia mindwiped by Isis]]. Elias Amsude partially tells him that it actually happened, though he frames the event as Ahmed being wounded by a terrorist on Earth, since he knew the truth would be too crazy to believe.]].]]
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* ThatWasNotADream: In the epilogue, [[spoiler: Ahmed thinks his brief lapse of consciousness while held hostage by Rehk'Set was a dream, due to being [[LaserGuidedAmnesia mindwiped by Isis]]. Elias Amsude partially tells him that it actually happened, though he frames the event as Ahmed being wounded by a terrorist on Earth, since he knew the truth would be too crazy to believe.]].]]
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* ThatWasNotADream: In the epilogue, [[spoiler: Ahmed thinks his brief lapse of consciousness while held hostage by Rehk'Set was a dream, due to being [[LaserGuidedAmnesia mindwiped by Isis]]. Elias Amsude partially tells him that it actually happened, though he frames the event as Ahmed being wounded by a terrorist on Earth, since he knew the truth would be too crazy to believe.]].]]
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* CallForward: At the end, where Max's experience on Anur Khufos inspires him to go to St. Louis when returning to Earth. Ja'Kaal also warns Ben to protect the Omnitrix with his life, which plays into Ben's first reaction to Xylene in the main series.
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* FixFic: To explain what happened after the Tennysons landed in Egypt, and before visiting St. Louis. [[spoiler: It also fills in a plot hole as to why Ghostfreak was interested in the Omnitrix.]]
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* BeastWithAHumanFace: An alien variant. The Golden Guard's lair is hidden under a sphinx in the middle of Mos Isis, with the body of a Wildmutt alien and a ''Thep Khufan face''.
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* ColorCodedForYourConvenience: Thep Khufans' eyes and bandages glow in varying colors. Elastamun and Ja'Kaal glow blue, Raht and Benmummy appear green, and [[RedEyesTakeWarning Rehk'Set and his minions glow red]].
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* RedEyesTakeWarning: Rehk'Set has this, as do his brainwashed slaves. [[spoiler: His human self even has glowing eyes.]] Other Thep Khufans glow in different colors, though.
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* RedEyesTakeWarning: Rehk'Set has this, as do his brainwashed slaves. [[spoiler: His human self even has glowing eyes.]] Other Thep Khufans glow in different colors, though.]]
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* DeadPersonConversation: [[spoiler: After Osiris allows Valensen's spirit into the afterlife, the latter turns around and asks Gwen to tell Elastamun that Valensen's death was not in vain, and that the scribe's knowledge of humanity will go to a greater cause.]]
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* TheGodsMustBeLazy: [[spoiler: The Egyptian Gods had been hiding in the Underworld since driving off the Ectonurites 30 years ago, on the decision to let Anur Khufos recover on its own. Isis regrets this decision at the end, feeling guilt for letting Set cause all the trouble during the recovery period.]]
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* TheGodsMustBeLazy: [[spoiler: The Egyptian Gods had been hiding in the Underworld since driving off the Ectonurites 30 years ago, on the decision to let Anur Khufos recover on its own. Isis regrets this decision at the end, feeling guilt for letting Set cause all the trouble during the recovery period.period, and [[GodsNeedPrayerBadly leaving the religion in shambles]].]]
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* AncientTomb: Elastamun's hideout under the satellite pyramid of Khafre averts this, designed more like an underground Egypt-themed apartment. He tears it down in the epilogue, and visits [[spoiler: Rehnenset's tomb to drop off his body.]]
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* TheGodsMustBeLazy: [[spoiler: The Egyptian Gods had been hiding in the Underworld since driving off the Ectonurites 30 years ago, on the decision to let Anur Khufos recover on its own. Isis regrets this decision at the end, feeling guilt for letting Set cause all the trouble during the recovery period.]]
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* CitadelCity: Mos Isis, where the resistance is headquartered. Ilais' description subverts this, as the city's walled more to keep the elements and corrodium radiation out, rather
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* AppliedPhlebotinum: Corrodium, a highly radioactive mineral native to Anur Khufos. [[spoiler: The pharaoh had it mined to use as an energy source for his EvilPlan.]]
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* {{Foreshadowing}}: Elastamun buys a pair of papyrus scrolls from Ahmed at the beginning and notices they were written as a journal by an unnamed source, describing Thep Khufans in Egypt at some point. [[spoiler: Rehk'Set's confession at the climax reveals that he wrote them while as a scribe to Ahmenhotep I, and [[StartOfDarkness sought his rise to power from there]].]]
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* {{Foreshadowing}}: Elastamun Elias Amsude buys a pair of papyrus scrolls from Ahmed at the beginning and notices they were written as a journal by an unnamed source, describing Thep Khufans in Egypt at some point. [[spoiler: Rehk'Set's confession at the climax reveals that he wrote them while as a scribe to Ahmenhotep I, and [[StartOfDarkness sought his rise to power from there]].]]
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* EnemyScan: Undyyne's bionic eye can do this, which she uses on Ben the first time she sees him. It also helps her aim better in combat.
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It can be read [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/13357182/chapters/30585495 here]]
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It can be read [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/13357182/chapters/30585495 here]] and [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13037172/1/Egypt-on-Anur-Khufos here]]
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* PosthumousCharacter: Pharaoh Rho'Tep, who mysteriously died to be replaced with his nephew Rehk'Set. [[spoiler: Revealed later on that Set worked Rehnenset into his family as an adopted nephew called Rehk'Set, who eventually killed Rho'Tep to [[TyrantTakesTheHelm steal the throne for himself]].]]
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* PosthumousCharacter: Pharaoh Rho'Tep, who mysteriously died to be replaced with his nephew Rehk'Set. [[spoiler: Revealed later on that Set worked Rehnenset into his family as an his adopted nephew called Rehk'Set, nephew, who eventually killed Rho'Tep to [[TyrantTakesTheHelm steal the throne for himself]].]]
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* OOCIsSeriousBusiness: Normally Ben acts like his usual DeadpanSnarker self throughout the story, but in one scene, he breaks down ''crying'' to Grandpa Max and Raht when explaining his nightmare, [[spoiler: and very reasonable fear of becoming Ghostfreak again]].
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* ComputerVoice: The palace and resistance base have PA systems that use computerized voices for announcements.
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* DoIReallySoundLikeThat: When a Tetramand guard loudly orders Ben (in disguise) to fetch the pharaoh's new cloak, Ben wonders if his Fourarms self sounds just as harsh.
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* IComeInPeace: When Elastamun first meets the Tennysons in the desert, they at first think he's there to attack them like Ghostfreak's Thep Khufan mook did. They stop when noticing he can speak English.
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* AGodAmI: The resistance group immediately bows and grovels to Ben when they see his Omnitrix, thinking TheProphecy has come true. Ben would've exploited this if his family members hadn't stopped him from going too far.
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* AGodAmI: The resistance group immediately bows and grovels to Ben when they see his Omnitrix, thinking TheProphecy has come true. Ben would've exploited this if his family members hadn't stopped him from going too far. Earlier on, Elastamun wonders why one would deify a person that [[LeeroyJenkins barrels into combat without thinking]], as Ben quickly does soon after arriving on Anur Khufos.
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* WeaksauceWeakness: Thep Khufans are highly vulnerable to fire. The pharaoh has a [[PlayingWithFire Pyronite mook]] in the dungeon for incinerating dissidents, Ja'Kaal's soldiers have to put themselves out with an extinguisher when a cobra spits fireballs at them, and [[spoiler: Ben weaponizes this when turning into Heatblast to fight Set at the end.]]
* WhereAreTheyNowEpilogue: The epilogue shows Elastamun and his new girlfriend Neferti tying up loose ends on Earth and spending a week-long vacation in Egypt, before returning to Anur Khufos for a new life together. The Tennysons' adventure is also recorded in statues and murals.
* WhereAreTheyNowEpilogue: The epilogue shows Elastamun and his new girlfriend Neferti tying up loose ends on Earth and spending a week-long vacation in Egypt, before returning to Anur Khufos for a new life together. The Tennysons' adventure is also recorded in statues and murals.
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* YouHaveOutlivedYourUsefulness: Anyone who disobeys the pharaoh or his guards is [[DisproportionateRetribution immediately executed]]. [[spoiler: Comes back to bite him when [[KarmicDeath Set kills his host]] upon separating from his body.]]
* WhereAreTheyNowEpilogue: The epilogue shows Elastamun and his new girlfriend Neferti tying up loose ends on Earth and spending a week-long vacation in Egypt, before returning to Anur Khufos for a new life together. The Tennysons' adventure is also recorded in statues and murals.
* WhereAreTheyNowEpilogue: The epilogue shows Elastamun and his new girlfriend Neferti tying up loose ends on Earth and spending a week-long vacation in Egypt, before returning to Anur Khufos for a new life together. The Tennysons' adventure is also recorded in statues and murals.
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* YouHaveOutlivedYourUsefulness: Anyone who disobeys the pharaoh or his guards is [[DisproportionateRetribution immediately executed]]. [[spoiler: Comes back to bite him when [[KarmicDeath Set kills his host]] upon separating from his body.]]
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* WhereAreTheyNowEpilogue: The epilogue shows Elastamun and his new girlfriend Neferti tying up loose ends on Earth and spending a week-long vacation in Egypt, before returning to Anur Khufos for a new life together. The Tennysons' adventure is also recorded in statues and murals.
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* WouldntHurtAChild: Undyyne has to compensate for this trope while training Ben in combat, and acts like a drill instructor during the session.
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* Foreshadowing: Elastamun buys a pair of papyrus scrolls from Ahmed at the beginning and notices they were written as a journal by an unnamed source, describing Thep Khufans in Egypt at some point. [[spoiler: Rehk'Set's confession at the climax reveals that he wrote them while as a scribe to Ahmenhotep I, and [[StartOfDarkness sought his rise to power from there]].]]
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* Foreshadowing: {{Foreshadowing}}: Elastamun buys a pair of papyrus scrolls from Ahmed at the beginning and notices they were written as a journal by an unnamed source, describing Thep Khufans in Egypt at some point. [[spoiler: Rehk'Set's confession at the climax reveals that he wrote them while as a scribe to Ahmenhotep I, and [[StartOfDarkness sought his rise to power from there]].]]
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* CallBack: Elastamun buys a pair of papyrus scrolls from Ahmed at the beginning and notices they were written as a journal by an unnamed source, describing Thep Khufans in Egypt at some point. [[spoiler: Rehk'Set's confession at the climax reveals that he wrote them while as a scribe to Ahmenhotep I, and [[StartOfDarkness sought his rise to power from there]].]]
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