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* SirSwearsalot: Cherry Berry has an impressive grasp of invective in several languages (Equestrian, Griffon, Germane, Japonese, Minotaur[[spoiler:, and eventually English]]).
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* TrademarkFavoriteFood: Cherry Berry's extreme fondness for cherries.
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->''“It is a cheap, half-rusted LAWN CHAIR glued on top of a BOMB! WHAT were you THINKING? WERE you thinking??”''
-->-- Cherry Berry evaluating an early Changeling prototype rocket, ''Changeling Space Program''
->''Much becomes clear about my guests. Many of the questions I’ve been asking about them now have a simple, easy to understand, impossible to refute explanation.\\
-->-- Cherry Berry evaluating an early Changeling prototype rocket, ''Changeling Space Program''
->''Much becomes clear about my guests. Many of the questions I’ve been asking about them now have a simple, easy to understand, impossible to refute explanation.\\
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->''Much becomes clear about my guests. Many of the questions
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-->-- Mark Watney after learning the history of Equestrian spaceflight, ''The Maretian''
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-->-- Mark Watney after '''Mark Watney''' (after learning the history of Equestrian spaceflight, spaceflight), ''The Maretian''
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* HurlItIntoTheSun: This is the plan for the repulsor spell launch system Mars test payload. Doesn’t quite get there, but the final trajectory is close enough to vaporize the package.
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* ThoseMagnificentFlyingMachines:
** Cherry cobbled together a glider ("...essentially a wooden plank stuck on a crate at right angles.") to teach herself the rudiments of flight. During a break in training, she and Rainbow Dash, who was serving as her flight instructor, discuss the need for some form of roll stability, leading to Cherry's invention of ailerons.
** Cherry’s biplane is a wood-and-canvass affair powered by a magic engine (salvaged from a wagon contributed by Applejack originally built by the Flim-Flam brothers).
** Cherry cobbled together a glider ("...essentially a wooden plank stuck on a crate at right angles.") to teach herself the rudiments of flight. During a break in training, she and Rainbow Dash, who was serving as her flight instructor, discuss the need for some form of roll stability, leading to Cherry's invention of ailerons.
** Cherry’s biplane is a wood-and-canvass affair powered by a magic engine (salvaged from a wagon contributed by Applejack originally built by the Flim-Flam brothers).
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* PuppyDogEyes: Late in the story, Mark speculates that the ponies might have used a metaphorical version of this.
-->Did our universe, hostile as it is, feel a little sorry for them? Did they make puppy-dog eyes at reality, and have it work?
-->Did our universe, hostile as it is, feel a little sorry for them? Did they make puppy-dog eyes at reality, and have it work?
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*** Starlight has a bolt unfastening spell used during replacement of the ''Amicitas'' lead-acid battery.
----> The only problem was, we had to temporarily repressurize the pony bridge for the spell to work, because, according to Starlight, it wouldn’t be "[[Series/DoctorWho sonic enough]]" otherwise.
----> The only problem was, we had to temporarily repressurize the pony bridge for the spell to work, because, according to Starlight, it wouldn’t be "[[Series/DoctorWho sonic enough]]" otherwise.
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* ForeignCussWord: One Equestrian word that Mark has no difficulty pronouncing gets (re)translated as ''buck''. (As used in most MLP fanfic as a substitute for the f-word.)
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* ForeignCussWord: One Equestrian word that Mark has no difficulty pronouncing gets (re)translated as ''buck''. (As used in most many MLP fanfic fanfics as a substitute for the f-word.)
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* AcidRefluxNightmare: After eating Mark's leftover turkey, Fireball gets one based on the television the crew has been watching.
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* ForeignCussWord: One Equestrian word that Mark has no difficulty pronouncing gets (re)translated as ''buck''. (As used in most MLP fanfic as a substitute for the f-word.)
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* OOCIsSeriousBusiness: Dr. Shields cites Mark's lack of snark as one symptom of the crew's exhaustion following Dragonfly’s indisposition.
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* CerebusSyndrome: CSP is primarily a comedic space adventure with plenty of slapstick and ludicrous sitations to navigate. ''The Maretian'' is a survival adventure where the humor comes mostly through character interactions and Mark Watney's snarky log entries.
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* CerebusSyndrome: CSP is primarily a comedic space adventure with plenty of slapstick and ludicrous sitations situations to navigate. ''The Maretian'' is a survival adventure where the humor comes mostly through character interactions and Mark Watney's snarky log entries.
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* InflatingBodyGag: When Cherry Berry wakes up from a changeling-induced dream (about spaceflight and cherries), she notices the guard who had been feeding off her love as she slept, and how he's now "nearly spherical".
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* SwitchingPOV: Narrative viewpoint rotates between the six castaways in limited third person (or first person in the case of Mark’s journal entries) with occasional shifts to the crew of the ''Hermes'', NASA personnel on Earth, or even back to Equestria. Every now and then, there are passages in omniscient third person. These tend to be harbingers of misfortune.
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* SwitchingPOV: Narrative viewpoint rotates between the six castaways in limited third person (or first person in the case of Mark’s journal entries) with occasional shifts to the crew of the ''Hermes'', NASA personnel on Earth, or even back to Equestria. Every now and then, there are passages in omniscient third person. These True to the source material, these tend to be harbingers of misfortune.
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-->"[[TemptintFate It worked perfectly]]," Venkat said. "It worked absolutely perfectly."\\
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* NightmareFuel: [[invoked]] Following the successful test of the repulsor spell launch technique on Mars...
-->"[[TemptintFate It worked perfectly]]," Venkat said. "It worked absolutely perfectly."\\
"I wish you hadn't said that," Mitch muttered.\\
"Why's that?"\\
"Usually the first time you try to launch anything, it blows up on the pad," Mitch said. "Or there's some other in-flight glitch. But everything went right in the test. So what's going to happen next time, when they do it for real?"\\
Venkat sighed. "Thanks a lot, Mitch," he said. "I was just running short of nightmare fuel. Thanks very much for topping me off."
-->"[[TemptintFate It worked perfectly]]," Venkat said. "It worked absolutely perfectly."\\
"I wish you hadn't said that," Mitch muttered.\\
"Why's that?"\\
"Usually the first time you try to launch anything, it blows up on the pad," Mitch said. "Or there's some other in-flight glitch. But everything went right in the test. So what's going to happen next time, when they do it for real?"\\
Venkat sighed. "Thanks a lot, Mitch," he said. "I was just running short of nightmare fuel. Thanks very much for topping me off."
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* ExactWords: After Rainbow Dash’s Almost Bad Day, Pinkie withdraws from active work with the Equestrian Space Agency, limiting herself to preparing food and declaring that she couldn’t set hoof at Cape Friendship again. However, that doesn’t mean she can’t show up at Horseton Space Center to help out with robotic control systems.
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* ExactWords: After Rainbow Dash’s Almost Bad Day, Pinkie withdraws from active work with the Equestrian Space Agency, limiting herself to preparing food and declaring that she couldn’t set hoof at Cape Friendship again.again and limiting herself to preparing food. However, that doesn’t mean she can’t show up at Horseton Space Center to help out with robotic control systems.
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* EveryoneKnowsMorse: Well, at least Dragonfly, Twilight, and Drying Paint (the duty watchmare at Cape Friendship) know the pony equivalent. Mark initially needs a cheat sheet for his Morse messages.
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* EverythingsBetterWithPlushies: Mark fancifully wishes for plushies of all of his companions. Hasbro, along with a plethora of not-necessarily-authorized independent fan-creators have them for sale by the time the castaways are ready to leave Mars.
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* HigherTechSpecies: Both sides initially believe this of the other, and neither are necessarily wrong. (Earth computers/electronics/rockets are about half a century ahead of Equestria's, and the Equestrians have the benefit of SufficientlyAnalyzedMagic.)
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* SubspaceAnsible: The telepresence spell used to monitor Equestrian spaceflight appears to be instantaneous and has the additional benefit of being immune to the re-entry blackout experienced by conventional radio.
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* InSpaceEveryoneCanSeeYourFace: Averted with the first "Group Photo" sent to Earth after radio contact is reestablished. (Everyone had their polarized helmet visors down, and Starlight wasn’t going to risk a lapse in concentration while maintaining an air bubble spell.)
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* BrainDrain: Never a hotbed of intellectual prowess, Chrysalis' hive finds itself with three competing centers for drones (theoretically) capable of unsupervised work: Horseton Space Center, Cherry's Rocket Parts and Odd Jobs in Appleoosa, and the hive itself[[note]]Given Chrysalis' current priorities, the Hive gets the short end of the competition[[/note]]. As changelings are gradually accepted into greater Equestrian society, a small number of freelancers also contribute to the drain.
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*** The Equestrian language being described as “horse-welsh” is a nod to Literature/GulliversTravels.
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* TheRadioDiesFirst: During the second phase of CSP mission 21 (Orbital rendezvous and rescue), the telepresence spell crystal on Dragonfly’s ship is damaged as result of a glancing impact with the Griffon capsule, cutting off communication with Horseton. This forces Dragonfly to compute her orbital adjustments on her own.
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* SpontaneousChoreography: The spontaneous singing[[note]]Including background music from out of nowhere[[/note]] part happens a couple of times, to the bewilderment of human observers and participants alike.
-->Don’t ask us why we sing\\
It’s just a pony thing\\
-- Dragonfly during the adaptation of Music/SpaceOddity.
-->Don’t ask us why we sing\\
It’s just a pony thing\\
-- Dragonfly during the adaptation of Music/SpaceOddity.
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* SwitchingPOV: Narrative viewpoint rotates between the five six castaways in limited third person (or first person in the case of Mark’s journal entries) with occasional shifts to the crew of the ''Hermes'', NASA personnel on Earth, or even back to Equestria. Every now and then, there are passages in omniscient third person. These tend to be harbingers of misfortune.
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* ''[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/396744/the-maretian The Maretian]]'': The race to the moon is over, and the Changeling Space Program and the Equestrian Space Agency are now working on a joint project to reach Bucephalous, the next planet out from their sun. A mishap during testing of Twilight Sparkle's experimental rapid-teleport interplanetary drive system strands three ponies, a changeling, and a dragon in a different universe on a hostile planet with a wrecked spaceship, very little magic, and a rather surprised human named Mark Watney. (Crossover with Literature/TheMartian. Was updated daily. Complete.[[note]]Completed on 2018-10-19, got an epilogue on 2019-04-01.[[/note]])
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* ''[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/396744/the-maretian The Maretian]]'': The race to the moon is over, and the Changeling Space Program and the Equestrian Space Agency are now working on a joint project to reach Bucephalous, the next planet out from their sun. A mishap during testing of Twilight Sparkle's experimental rapid-teleport interplanetary drive system strands three ponies, a changeling, and a dragon in a different universe on a hostile planet with a wrecked spaceship, very little magic, and a rather surprised human named Mark Watney. (Crossover with Literature/TheMartian. Was updated daily. Complete.[[note]]Completed on [[note]]Ran daily from 2018-01-02 to 2018-10-19, then got an epilogue on 2019-04-01.[[/note]])
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* ''[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/396744/the-maretian The Maretian]]'': The race to the moon is over, and the Changeling Space Program and the Equestrian Space Agency are now working on a joint project to reach Bucephalous, the next planet out from their sun. A mishap during testing of Twilight Sparkle's experimental rapid-teleport interplanetary drive system strands three ponies, a changeling, and a dragon in a different universe on a hostile planet with a wrecked spaceship, very little magic, and a rather surprised human named Mark Watney. (Crossover with Literature/TheMartian. Was updated daily. Complete.)
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* ''[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/396744/the-maretian The Maretian]]'': The race to the moon is over, and the Changeling Space Program and the Equestrian Space Agency are now working on a joint project to reach Bucephalous, the next planet out from their sun. A mishap during testing of Twilight Sparkle's experimental rapid-teleport interplanetary drive system strands three ponies, a changeling, and a dragon in a different universe on a hostile planet with a wrecked spaceship, very little magic, and a rather surprised human named Mark Watney. (Crossover with Literature/TheMartian. Was updated daily. Complete.)
[[note]]Completed on 2018-10-19, got an epilogue on 2019-04-01.[[/note]])
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* ''[[https://www.fimfiction.net/story/396744/the-maretian The Maretian]]'': The race to the moon is over, and the Changeling Space Program and the Equestrian Space Agency are now working on a joint project to reach Bucephalous, the next planet out from their sun. A mishap during testing of Twilight Sparkle's experimental rapid-teleport interplanetary drive system strands three ponies, a changeling, and a dragon in a different universe on a hostile planet with a wrecked spaceship, very little magic, and a rather surprised human named Mark Watney. (Crossover with Literature/TheMartian. Was updated daily. Complete.)
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* CelebrityParadox: In Mark's universe, the ''Franchise/MyLittlePony'' franchise does not exist, so the sight of brightly colored ponies instead reminds him of ''Franchise/CareBears''.
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* TrainingMontage: As part of the build-up to CSP missions 13 and 14, we get glimpses of the prospective space tourists' training (both physical and academic) regimen.
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* TooGoodToBeTrue: The first half of CSP mission 11 (first planetary orbit) proceed much too smoothly for Cherry Berry’s comfort, due to a particularly grueling set of simulator runs during preparation.
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* NumberOneDime: Occupant’s E-Z-Scry-Me Ball; the first object he purchased via mail-order.
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*** The final part of the first chapter [[TheLastManHeardAKnock nods to]] ''Knock''.
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*** Chrysalis apparantly has recurring dreams about "[[Blog/AskFlufflePuff the pink fluffy thing]]".
---->Of course, she told absolutely no one about those dreams. Let her changelings have their Fun Machine; she was keeping the Fun Cave in her dreams entirely to herself.
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* NotTheFallThatKillsYou: Discussed as Hobble Jimenez imparts this nugget of wisdom to Jet Set and Upper Crust during their free fall training in the vertical wind tunnel.
