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* HandwritingAsCharacterization: Lana misspells many words because she is only six years old.
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'''[[TheDitz Leni]]:''' You mean our sister, or Dad?\\
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'''[[TheDitz Leni]]:''' You "You mean our sister, or Dad?\\Dad?"\\
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* SureLetsGoWithThat: Lori asks Leni to get Lynn (as in Lynn Jr.) to lift the couch. Leni, being Leni, is confused and thinks she means their sister or their dad, so Lori decides to say she meant either.
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* SureLetsGoWithThat: Lori asks Leni to get Lynn (as in Lynn Jr.) to lift the couch. Leni, being Leni, is confused and thinks she means their sister couch:
-->'''Lori:''' "Leni, could you go get Lynn?"\\
'''[[TheDitz Leni]]:''' You mean our sister, ortheir dad, so Lori decides to say she meant either.Dad?\\
'''Lori:''' "Either."
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'''[[TheDitz Leni]]:''' You mean our sister, or
'''Lori:''' "Either."
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* MayItNeverHappenAgain: Lana drinks a chemical she found in Lisa's laboratory, which causes her to become ripped and [[JerkassBall gives her a shocking change in personality]]. Later, she nearly dies from the contents of the formula, and she promises herself not to touch anything in Lisa's lab without permission again. Lisa also decides to keep anything particularly dangerous out of reach.
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* BathroomControl: When Lana becomes very mean as a result of drinking a serum her ChildProdigy sister Lisa made, one thing she does is block the doorway to the bathroom, making her other sister, Lucy, wet her pants.
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* BigWhat: When Lisa finds out what had happened to Lana, she exclaims, "She WHAT?!"
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* ShoutOut: Luna exclaims, "Good golly, Miss Molly!", which is a lyric from the song "Splish Splash, I Was Taking a Bath".
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* WaxingLyrical: Luna exclaims, "Good golly, Miss Molly!", which is a lyric from the song "Splish Splash, I Was Taking a Bath".
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It focuses on Lana finding a strength boosting formula in Lisa and Lily's room and drinking it while Lisa left for a week-long trip to Boston to give a lecture at MIT. She notices that it has a B labeled on it, thinking the B stands for big but it actually stands for beta. But it causes undesirable side effects and is unaware it is in the testing stages.
Not only does it make her strong, it makes her mean, aggro, and very muscular and she needs to eat a lot more. Meanwhile, Lisa is away studying the formula on a lab rat, who has similar symptoms.
Not only does it make her strong, it makes her mean, aggro, and very muscular and she needs to eat a lot more. Meanwhile, Lisa is away studying the formula on a lab rat, who has similar symptoms.
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Not only
Interspersed with the story is a series of journal entries written by Lisa
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As a side note, this fanfic was authored by [=MrTyeDye=], a prominent ''Loud House'' fanfiction writer who also wrote ''Fanfic/PeekingThroughTheFourthWall'', but he has [[https://www.deviantart.com/mrtyedye/journal/MrTyeDye-s-Second-QnA-200-Watcher-Special-832435052?comment=1%3A832435052%3A4833457395 confirmed]] that the two fanfics don't take place in the same universe, so you don't need to reimagine Lana when reading ''Peeking''.
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As a side note, this fanfic was authored by [=MrTyeDye=], a prominent ''Loud House'' fanfiction writer who also wrote ''Fanfic/PeekingThroughTheFourthWall'', but he has [[https://www.deviantart.com/mrtyedye/journal/MrTyeDye-s-Second-QnA-200-Watcher-Special-832435052?comment=1%3A832435052%3A4833457395 confirmed]] that the two fanfics don't take place in the same universe, so you don't need to reimagine meaning Lana when reading isn't huge and shredded during ''Peeking''.
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* ThenLetMeBeEvil: Downplayed. It is even lampshaded in this quote.
-->'''Lana: ''' “If everyone's gonna treat me like a bully, I'll start acting like one"
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* ThenLetMeBeEvil: Downplayed.Downplayed as she’s treated as a [[TheBully bully]], [[TookALevelInJerkass so she starts acting like one]]. It is even lampshaded in this quote.
-->'''Lana: ''' “If everyone's gonna treat me like a bully, I'll start acting likeone" one.”
-->'''Lana: ''' “If everyone's gonna treat me like a bully, I'll start acting like
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—> ‘’’Lana: “If everyone's gonna treat me like a bully, I'll start acting like one"
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* ThenLetMeBeEvil: Downplayed. It is even lampshaded in this quote. “If everyone's gonna treat me like a bully, I'll start acting like one"
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* ThenLetMeBeEvil: Downplayed. It is even lampshaded in this quote. quote.
—> ‘’’Lana: “If everyone's gonna treat me like a bully, I'll start acting like one"
—> ‘’’Lana: “If everyone's gonna treat me like a bully, I'll start acting like one"
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* ThenLetMeBeEvil: Downplayed. It is even lampshaded in this quote. “If everyone's gonna treat me like a bully, I'll start acting like one"
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* FoulMedicine: When Lana drinks the potion, she notes to herself that it tastes bad but "medicine isn't supposed to taste good".
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* IfItTastesBadItMustBeGoodForYou: When Lana drinks the potion, she notes to herself that it tastes bad but "medicine isn't supposed to taste good".
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* SureLetsGoWithThat: Lori asks Leni to get Lynn (as in Lynn Jr.) to left the couch. Leni, being Leni, is confused and thinks she means their sister or their dad, so Lori decides to say she meant either.
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* SureLetsGoWithThat: Lori asks Leni to get Lynn (as in Lynn Jr.) to left lift the couch. Leni, being Leni, is confused and thinks she means their sister or their dad, so Lori decides to say she meant either.
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* SureLetsGoWithThat: Lori asks Leni to get Lynn (as in Lynn Jr.) to left the couch. Leni, being Leni, is confused and thinks she means their sister or their dad, so Lori decides to say she meant either.
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It focuses on Lana finding a strength boosting formula in Lisa and Lily's room and drinking it while Lisa left for a week-long trip to Boston to give a lecture at MIT. She notices that it has a B labeled on it. But it causes undesirable side effects and is unaware it is in the testing stages.
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It focuses on Lana finding a strength boosting formula in Lisa and Lily's room and drinking it while Lisa left for a week-long trip to Boston to give a lecture at MIT. She notices that it has a B labeled on it.it, thinking the B stands for big but it actually stands for beta. But it causes undesirable side effects and is unaware it is in the testing stages.
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It focuses on Lana finding a strength potion in Lisa and Lily's room and drinking it, but it causes undesirable side effects and is unaware it is in the testing stages.
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It focuses on Lana finding a strength potion boosting formula in Lisa and Lily's room and drinking it, but it while Lisa left for a week-long trip to Boston to give a lecture at MIT. She notices that it has a B labeled on it. But it causes undesirable side effects and is unaware it is in the testing stages.
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It focuses on Lana finding a strength potion in Lisa and Lily's room and drinking it, but it causes undesirable side effects.
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It focuses on Lana finding a strength potion in Lisa and Lily's room and drinking it, but it causes undesirable side effects.
effects and is unaware it is in the testing stages.
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* SureLetsGoWithThat: In Chapter 2, Lori is looking for something underneath the couch. She asks Leni to "get Lynn" for help, but Leni, being [[DumbBlonde Leni]], wonders if Lori means Lynn Jr. or Lynn Sr., and Lori rolls with it and decides she means both.
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* StylisticSuck: In contrast to Lisa's lab entries in the first four chapters, Lana's diary entry in Chapter 5 has several grammar and spelling errors... which is par for the course for a six-year-old.
* SuperStrength: The main affect of the potion Lana drinks is that it gives you superhuman strength. It starts out minor (she can lift up Luna's amplifier and it still takes a bit of effort), but then reaches the point where she can
* SuperStrength: The main affect of the potion Lana drinks is that it gives you superhuman strength. It starts out minor (she can lift up Luna's amplifier and it still takes a bit of effort), but then reaches the point where she can
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* StylisticSuck: In contrast to Lisa's lab entries in the first four chapters, Lana's diary entry in Chapter 5 has several grammar and spelling errors... which is par for the course for a six-year-old.
six-year-old with average intelligence as opposed to a four-year-old ChildProdigy.
* SuperStrength: The main affect of the potion Lana drinks is that it givesyou the user superhuman strength. It starts out minor (she can lift up Luna's amplifier strength, with the user's strength growing with time.
* SureLetsGoWithThat: In Chapter 2, Lori is looking for something underneath the couch. She asks Leni to "get Lynn" for help, but Leni, being [[DumbBlonde Leni]], wonders if Lori means Lynn Jr. or Lynn Sr., and Lori rolls with itstill takes a bit of effort), but then reaches the point where and decides she canmeans both.
* SuperStrength: The main affect of the potion Lana drinks is that it gives
* SureLetsGoWithThat: In Chapter 2, Lori is looking for something underneath the couch. She asks Leni to "get Lynn" for help, but Leni, being [[DumbBlonde Leni]], wonders if Lori means Lynn Jr. or Lynn Sr., and Lori rolls with it
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!! ''A Load of Bulk'' provides examples of
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'''''[[https://www.deviantart.com/mrtyedye/gallery/66222280/a-load-of-bulk A Load of Bulk]]''''' is a fanfiction of ''WesternAnimation/TheLoudHouse''.
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'''''[[https://www.deviantart.com/mrtyedye/gallery/66222280/a-load-of-bulk A Load of Bulk]]''''' is a fanfiction of ''WesternAnimation/TheLoudHouse''.
The fanfiction was written because the author wanted to write a multi-chapter story, felt that Lana didn't have enough fanfiction about her, and felt it would be cool to write a story where Lana needs to learn a lesson.
It focuses on Lana finding a strength potion in Lisa and Lily's room and drinking it, but it causes undesirable side effects.
Not only does it make her strong, it makes her mean, aggro, and very muscular and she needs to eat a lot more. Meanwhile, Lisa is away studying the formula on a lab rat, who has similar symptoms.
As a side note, this fanfic was authored by [=MrTyeDye=], a prominent ''Loud House'' fanfiction writer who also wrote ''Fanfic/PeekingThroughTheFourthWall'', but he has [[https://www.deviantart.com/mrtyedye/journal/MrTyeDye-s-Second-QnA-200-Watcher-Special-832435052?comment=1%3A832435052%3A4833457395 confirmed]] that the two fanfics don't take place in the same universe, so you don't need to reimagine Lana when reading ''Peeking''.
!! ''A Load of Bulk'' provides examples of
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* AfraidOfNeedles: Apparently, Lana is nervous about getting shots, which is part of why she doesn't trust doctors.
* AgonyOfTheFeet: Discussed when Lynn says that there's no way the beefy Lana could hurt herself with the weight set unless she dropped it on her foot.
* AngerBornOfWorry: When Lana finds Hops, she's irritated at his habit of wandering away because she gets scared whenever she can't find him.
* AstonishinglyAppropriateInterruption: Lana thinks, "I'm huge! I'm ripped! I'm--" only to have Lola shout her name. Granted, she probably wasn't going to think, "I'm Lana", but the two sentences still make sense when pieced together.
* BigEater: One of the side affects of the potion is it causes Lana to become extra hungry, eating about 50% more than she usually does.
* BrattyHalfPint: The potion makes Lana mean, insulting her siblings, glaring at them, and demanding she armwrestle with Lincoln (leading to him being injured).
* DeathGlare:
** Lana gives Lynn an intimidating glare when the latter suggests the former go to the doctor.
** Lana glares at all her siblings when they look at her in fear/disgust/shock at the dinner table.
** When Lana dislocates Lincoln's arm, her sisters (except Luna and Lynn who are busy carrying him) and Lynn Sr. all glare at her.
* EveryoneHasStandards: Although Lisa experimented on a rat, she stopped her experiment when the rat was in pain.
* FightForTheLastBite: Played for drama. There's one slice of pizza left, and everyone is hesitant. Eventually, Lincoln suggests having it, but Lana decides to armwrestle for it, which ends up injuring him.
* HealingPotion: The potion Lana drinks was initially created to heal broken muscle.
* IfItTastesBadItMustBeGoodForYou: When Lana drinks the potion, she notes to herself that it tastes bad but "medicine isn't supposed to taste good".
* InjuredLimbEpisode: When Lana armwrestles with Lincoln, he ends up dislocating his arm.
* JerkJock: The potion makes Lana mean (insulting her siblings, not letting Lucy go to the bathroom, and armwrestling with Lincoln despite her new muscle) and also makes her inclined to do exercises.
* LamePunReaction: When Luan makes a joke about it being break''fast'', Lana rolls her eyes.
* LiteralAssKicking: Lana painfully slaps Lucy on the butt when teasing her for wetting her pants.
* LittleMissSnarker: While Lana is big while under the affects of the potion, she's still a six-year-old girl, and the potion gives her a snide mouth and makes her say things like "What are you looking at?!" to Lola and "Get used to it, scrawny!" to Lynn.
* NakedPeopleAreFunny: When Lana starts to grow too buff for her clothes, she wonders if her parents will let her walk around naked and giggles as, being a six-year-old, she finds nudity hilarious.
* NotAMorningPerson: Leni is described as having "tired eyes" in the morning.
* PottyDance: When Lucy needs to pee, she has her legs clenched together.
* PottyFailure: Lucy wets her pants when Lana doesn't let her go into the bathroom.
* {{Pun}}: When Luan sees Lana eating her breakfast quickly, she quips, "I know it's called break''fast'', but still!".
* PunctuatedForEmphasis: When Lana lifts weights for the second time, she says, "They're... too... LIGHT!".
* ShoutOut: Luna exclaims, "Good golly, Miss Molly!", which is a lyric from the song "Splish Splash, I Was Taking a Bath".
* SuperStrength: The main affect of the potion Lana drinks is that it gives you superhuman strength. It starts out minor (she can lift up Luna's amplifier and it still takes a bit of effort), but then reaches the point where she can
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The fanfiction was written because the author wanted to write a multi-chapter story, felt that Lana didn't have enough fanfiction about her, and felt it would be cool to write a story where Lana needs to learn a lesson.
It focuses on Lana finding a strength potion in Lisa and Lily's room and drinking it, but it causes undesirable side effects.
Not only does it make her strong, it makes her mean, aggro, and very muscular and she needs to eat a lot more. Meanwhile, Lisa is away studying the formula on a lab rat, who has similar symptoms.
As a side note, this fanfic was authored by [=MrTyeDye=], a prominent ''Loud House'' fanfiction writer who also wrote ''Fanfic/PeekingThroughTheFourthWall'', but he has [[https://www.deviantart.com/mrtyedye/journal/MrTyeDye-s-Second-QnA-200-Watcher-Special-832435052?comment=1%3A832435052%3A4833457395 confirmed]] that the two fanfics don't take place in the same universe, so you don't need to reimagine Lana when reading ''Peeking''.
!! ''A Load of Bulk'' provides examples of
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* AfraidOfNeedles: Apparently, Lana is nervous about getting shots, which is part of why she doesn't trust doctors.
* AgonyOfTheFeet: Discussed when Lynn says that there's no way the beefy Lana could hurt herself with the weight set unless she dropped it on her foot.
* AngerBornOfWorry: When Lana finds Hops, she's irritated at his habit of wandering away because she gets scared whenever she can't find him.
* AstonishinglyAppropriateInterruption: Lana thinks, "I'm huge! I'm ripped! I'm--" only to have Lola shout her name. Granted, she probably wasn't going to think, "I'm Lana", but the two sentences still make sense when pieced together.
* BigEater: One of the side affects of the potion is it causes Lana to become extra hungry, eating about 50% more than she usually does.
* BrattyHalfPint: The potion makes Lana mean, insulting her siblings, glaring at them, and demanding she armwrestle with Lincoln (leading to him being injured).
* DeathGlare:
** Lana gives Lynn an intimidating glare when the latter suggests the former go to the doctor.
** Lana glares at all her siblings when they look at her in fear/disgust/shock at the dinner table.
** When Lana dislocates Lincoln's arm, her sisters (except Luna and Lynn who are busy carrying him) and Lynn Sr. all glare at her.
* EveryoneHasStandards: Although Lisa experimented on a rat, she stopped her experiment when the rat was in pain.
* FightForTheLastBite: Played for drama. There's one slice of pizza left, and everyone is hesitant. Eventually, Lincoln suggests having it, but Lana decides to armwrestle for it, which ends up injuring him.
* HealingPotion: The potion Lana drinks was initially created to heal broken muscle.
* IfItTastesBadItMustBeGoodForYou: When Lana drinks the potion, she notes to herself that it tastes bad but "medicine isn't supposed to taste good".
* InjuredLimbEpisode: When Lana armwrestles with Lincoln, he ends up dislocating his arm.
* JerkJock: The potion makes Lana mean (insulting her siblings, not letting Lucy go to the bathroom, and armwrestling with Lincoln despite her new muscle) and also makes her inclined to do exercises.
* LamePunReaction: When Luan makes a joke about it being break''fast'', Lana rolls her eyes.
* LiteralAssKicking: Lana painfully slaps Lucy on the butt when teasing her for wetting her pants.
* LittleMissSnarker: While Lana is big while under the affects of the potion, she's still a six-year-old girl, and the potion gives her a snide mouth and makes her say things like "What are you looking at?!" to Lola and "Get used to it, scrawny!" to Lynn.
* NakedPeopleAreFunny: When Lana starts to grow too buff for her clothes, she wonders if her parents will let her walk around naked and giggles as, being a six-year-old, she finds nudity hilarious.
* NotAMorningPerson: Leni is described as having "tired eyes" in the morning.
* PottyDance: When Lucy needs to pee, she has her legs clenched together.
* PottyFailure: Lucy wets her pants when Lana doesn't let her go into the bathroom.
* {{Pun}}: When Luan sees Lana eating her breakfast quickly, she quips, "I know it's called break''fast'', but still!".
* PunctuatedForEmphasis: When Lana lifts weights for the second time, she says, "They're... too... LIGHT!".
* ShoutOut: Luna exclaims, "Good golly, Miss Molly!", which is a lyric from the song "Splish Splash, I Was Taking a Bath".
* SuperStrength: The main affect of the potion Lana drinks is that it gives you superhuman strength. It starts out minor (she can lift up Luna's amplifier and it still takes a bit of effort), but then reaches the point where she can
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