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Two children were born into the same family; each one with a [[TheProphecy prophecy]] of what they would become. The first's heart quickly grew black with hate while the second was a gentler soul. With a throne on the line, a tablet empowered by [[{{Lunacy}} Khonsu]], and one [[AmbitionIsEvil ambitious to rule]] regardless of the obstacles, it could only end in suffering.
Before the museum, there was simply Ahkmenrah and Kahmunrah: sons of the pharaoh and brothers.
Before the museum, there was simply Ahkmenrah and Kahmunrah: sons of the pharaoh and brothers.
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* AncientEgypt: The setting.
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* BrotherSisterIncest: It was historically accurate for the royal family in Ancient Egypt.
* CainAndAbel: Kahmunrah and Ahkmenrah, respectively.
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* CoolSword: The Khopesh
* DeathByChildbirth: Inhapi, Kahmunrah's mother and one of Merenkahre's wives. Shepsheret views him as her son anyway.
* Myth/EgyptianMythology: Comes up rather often with both commonly and lesser known gods.
* GreenEyedMonster: Kahmunrah
* HistoricalDomainCharacter: Hatshepsut
* DeathByChildbirth: Inhapi, Kahmunrah's mother and one of Merenkahre's wives. Shepsheret views him as her son anyway.
* Myth/EgyptianMythology: Comes up rather often with both commonly and lesser known gods.
* GreenEyedMonster: Kahmunrah
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* {{Prequel}}: To ''Film/NightAtTheMuseum''
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* SpareToTheThrone: Ahkmenrah, though Kahmunrah holds the belief that they didn't even ''need'' his younger brother.
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* AddedAlliterativeAppeal: Some of the chapter titles, such as "Fortunes Foretold," "Plans and Plotting," and "Searching Through Scrolls."
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* BrotherSisterIncest: It was historically accurate for the royal family in Ancient Egypt
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* BrotherSisterIncest: It was historically accurate for the royal family in Ancient EgyptEgypt.
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* WisePrince: Ahkmenrah
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Essentially, by working out the various clues and hints from the three movies (so spoilers if you haven't watched all of them), [[https://www.fanfiction.net/u/1910744/Bookworm-Gal Bookworm Gal]] tries to craft a {{Backstory}} for the ancient Egyptian characters, the magic tablet that causes the films in the first place, and even the gate to the underworld from the second film. And they do this while [[ShownTheirWork researching]] as much as possible to make everything sound believable.
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Essentially, by working out the various clues and hints from the three movies (so spoilers if you haven't watched all of them), [[https://www.fanfiction.net/u/1910744/Bookworm-Gal Bookworm Gal]] Creator/BookwormGal tries to craft a {{Backstory}} for the ancient Egyptian characters, the magic tablet that causes the films in the first place, and even the gate to the underworld from the second film. And they do this while [[ShownTheirWork researching]] as much as possible to make everything sound believable.
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* AnimalMotif: Kahmunrah is described vaguely like a snake a few times. He is compared to Apep (a snake-like entity in EgyptianMythology that tries to devour the sun each night) and prophecy foretells that "hubris, jealousy, and cruelty will drip from him like venom."
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* AnimalMotif: Kahmunrah is described vaguely like a snake a few times. He is compared to Apep (a snake-like entity in EgyptianMythology Myth/EgyptianMythology that tries to devour the sun each night) and prophecy foretells that "hubris, jealousy, and cruelty will drip from him like venom."
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* EgyptianMythology: Comes up rather often with both commonly and lesser known gods.
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* EgyptianMythology: Myth/EgyptianMythology: Comes up rather often with both commonly and lesser known gods.
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* UltimateBlacksmith: The craftsmen who serve [[EgyptianMythology Sokar]] would be considered this. They are the ones responsible for creating the tablet, along with several priests from that and other temples.
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* UltimateBlacksmith: The craftsmen who serve [[EgyptianMythology [[Myth/EgyptianMythology Sokar]] would be considered this. They are the ones responsible for creating the tablet, along with several priests from that and other temples.
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* ReptilesAreAbhorrent: Both played straight and averted in regards to how snakes were viewed in ancient Egypt. Some were useful for controlling mice and this was reflected with the goddess Wadjet, who was a protector of pharaohs. But many species could be deadly, which was reflected with the mythological entity Apep, who tried to plunge the world into eternal darkness by devouring the sun. Kahmunrah views snakes as mostly being dangerous to anyone who got in their way; it is a trait he [[AnimalMotif easily identifies with]].
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* UltimateBlacksmith: The craftsmen who serve [[EgyptianMythology Sokar]] would be considered this. They are the ones responsible for creating the tablet, along with several priests from that and other temples.
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* UltimateBlacksmith: The craftsmen who serve [[EgyptianMythology Sokar]] would be considered this. They are the ones responsible for creating the tablet, along with several priests from that and other temples.
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Two children were born into the same family; each one with a [[TheProphecy prophecy]] of what they would become. The first's heart quickly grew black with hate while the second was a gentler soul. With a throne on the line, a tablet empowered by Khonsu, and one [[AmbitionIsEvil ambitious to rule]] regardless of the obstacles, it could only end in suffering.
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Two children were born into the same family; each one with a [[TheProphecy prophecy]] of what they would become. The first's heart quickly grew black with hate while the second was a gentler soul. With a throne on the line, a tablet empowered by Khonsu, [[{{Lunacy}} Khonsu]], and one [[AmbitionIsEvil ambitious to rule]] regardless of the obstacles, it could only end in suffering.
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* WisePrince: Ahkmenrah
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* AnimalMotif: Kahmunrah is described vaguely like a snake a few times. He is compared to Apep (a snake-like entity in EgyptianMythology that tries to devour the sun each night) and prophecy foretells that "hubris, jealousy, and cruelty will drip from him like venom."
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* BerserkButton: Kahmunrah does not react well to anything that suggests he is not far greater and more important than Ahkmenrah.
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* BerserkButton: Kahmunrah does not react well to anything that suggests he thinks is the slightest threat to his future as pharaoh. And he definitely doesn't react well to suggestions that he is not far greater and more important than Ahkmenrah.
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This story began long ago. Thousands of years before the museum, before the city of New York, and before ships carried Europeans across the ocean to a new continent, there were the pharaohs of Egypt.
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This story began [[{{Prequel}} long ago.ago]]. Thousands of years before the museum, before the city of New York, and before ships carried Europeans across the ocean to a new continent, there were the pharaohs of Egypt.
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* SpareToTheThrone: Ahkmenrah, though Kahmunrah held the belief that they didn't even ''need'' his younger brother.
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* SpareToTheThrone: Ahkmenrah, though Kahmunrah held holds the belief that they didn't even ''need'' his younger brother.
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* TroublingUnchildlikeBehavior: Kahmunrah beats his childhood companion for making the mistake of saying that Ahkmenrah wasn't that bad.
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* TroublingUnchildlikeBehavior: Kahmunrah beats his childhood companion bloody for making the mistake of saying that Ahkmenrah wasn't that bad.
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* UltimateBlacksmith: The craftsmen who serve Sokar would be considered this. They are the ones responsible for creating the tablet, along with several priests from that and other temples.
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* UltimateBlacksmith: The craftsmen who serve Sokar [[EgyptianMythology Sokar]] would be considered this. They are the ones responsible for creating the tablet, along with several priests from that and other temples.
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* {{Prequel}}: To Film/NightAtTheMuseum
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* {{Prequel}}: To Film/NightAtTheMuseum''Film/NightAtTheMuseum''
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* {{Backstory}}: The origin of the tablet, the gate to the underworld from the [[Film/NightAtTheMuseum second film]], and the lives of Ahkmenrah and Kahmunrah.
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* {{Backstory}}: The origin of the tablet, the gate to the underworld from the [[Film/NightAtTheMuseum second film]], and the lives of Ahkmenrah and Kahmunrah.Kahmunrah are all explored.
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* TheChosenOne: Ahkmenrah is said to be "favored by [[{{Lunacy}} Khonsu]]"
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* SiblingYinYang: Kahmunrah and Ahkmenrah. One is ruthless, ambitions, and favors combat lessons. The other is thoughtful, friendly, and favors his more intellectual studies.
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* SiblingYinYang: Kahmunrah and Ahkmenrah. One is ruthless, ambitions, and favors combat lessons. The other is thoughtful, friendly, and favors his more intellectual studies. Even the times of their births were drastically different, with Kahmunrah being born just before sunset during a new moon and Ahkmenrah at midnight during a full moon.
* SpareToTheThrone: Ahkmenrah, though Kahmunrah held the belief that they didn't even ''need'' his younger brother.
* SpareToTheThrone: Ahkmenrah, though Kahmunrah held the belief that they didn't even ''need'' his younger brother.
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* WarriorPrince: Kahmunrah
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* ReligionIsMagic: Anything that is considered magic, from protective amulets to [[Film/NightAtTheMuseum the tablet]], involve invoking one of the gods or goddesses.
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* SiblingYinYang: Kahmunrah and Ahkmenrah. One is ruthless, ambitions, and favors combat lessons. The other is thoughtful, friendly, and favors his more intellectual studies.
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Two children were born into the same family; each one with a prophecy of what they would become. The first's heart quickly grew black with hate while the second was a gentler soul. With a throne on the line, a tablet empowered by Khonsu, and one ambitious to rule regardless of the obstacles, it could only end in suffering.
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Two children were born into the same family; each one with a prophecy [[TheProphecy prophecy]] of what they would become. The first's heart quickly grew black with hate while the second was a gentler soul. With a throne on the line, a tablet empowered by Khonsu, and one [[AmbitionIsEvil ambitious to rule rule]] regardless of the obstacles, it could only end in suffering.
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* CoolSword: The Khopesh
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* RoyalInbreeding: Marrying siblings, half-siblings, and cousins are all mentioned or shown, which is historically accurate.
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* DeathInChildbirth: Inhapi, Kahmunrah's mother and one of Merenkahre's wives. Shepsheret views him as her son anyway.
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* HistoricalDomainCharacter: Hatshepsut
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* BerserkButton: Kahmunrah does not react well to anything that suggests he is not far greater and more important than Ahkmenrah.
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[[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10936444/1/Child-of-Moonlight This is not]] [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/3175308/chapters/6897122 that story]].
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Essentially, by working out the various clues and hints from the three movies (so spoilers if you haven't watched all of them), [[https://www.fanfiction.net/u/1910744/Bookworm-Gal Bookworm Gal]] tries to craft a {{Backstory}} for the ancient Egyptian characters, the magic tablet that causes the films in the first place, and even the gate to the underworld from the second film. And they do this while [[ShownTheirWork researching]] as much as possible to make everything sound believable.
Links are [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10936444/1/Child-of-Moonlight here]] and [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/3175308/chapters/6897122 here]]
Links are [[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10936444/1/Child-of-Moonlight here]] and [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/3175308/chapters/6897122 here]]
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[[Film/NightAtTheMuseum Every night at the Museum of Natural History, all the exhibits come to life. And the only one to witness this amazing event is the night guard who watches over them]].
[[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10936444/1/Child-of-Moonlight This is not]] [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/3175308/chapters/6897122 that story]].
This story began long ago. Thousands of years before the museum, before the city of New York, and before ships carried Europeans across the ocean to a new continent, there were the pharaohs of Egypt.
Two children were born into the same family; each one with a prophecy of what they would become. The first's heart quickly grew black with hate while the second was a gentler soul. With a throne on the line, a tablet empowered by Khonsu, and one ambitious to rule regardless of the obstacles, it could only end in suffering.
Before the museum, there was simply Ahkmenrah and Kahmunrah: sons of the pharaoh and brothers.
[[WMG: Tropes found in ''Child of Moonlight'' include:]]
* AncientEgypt: The setting.
* AncientEgyptianMythology: Comes up rather often.
* {{Backstory}}: The origin of the tablet, the gate to the underworld from the [[Film/NightAtTheMuseum second film]], and the lives of Ahkmenrah and Kahmunrah.
* BrotherSisterIncest: It was historically accurate for the royal family in Ancient Egypt
* CainAndAbel: Kahmunrah and Ahkmenrah, respectively.
* GreenEyedMonster: Kahmunrah
* {{Lunacy}}: Khonsu is the god of the moon and is very important in the story [[spoiler:due to his connection to the tablet]].
* ShownTheirWork: Lots of research was done into the various gods and goddesses, a timeline of when the characters would have ruled, different aspects of daily life, and other interesting aspects that are either revealed in the text or the Author's Notes.
[[https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10936444/1/Child-of-Moonlight This is not]] [[http://archiveofourown.org/works/3175308/chapters/6897122 that story]].
This story began long ago. Thousands of years before the museum, before the city of New York, and before ships carried Europeans across the ocean to a new continent, there were the pharaohs of Egypt.
Two children were born into the same family; each one with a prophecy of what they would become. The first's heart quickly grew black with hate while the second was a gentler soul. With a throne on the line, a tablet empowered by Khonsu, and one ambitious to rule regardless of the obstacles, it could only end in suffering.
Before the museum, there was simply Ahkmenrah and Kahmunrah: sons of the pharaoh and brothers.
[[WMG: Tropes found in ''Child of Moonlight'' include:]]
* AncientEgypt: The setting.
* AncientEgyptianMythology: Comes up rather often.
* {{Backstory}}: The origin of the tablet, the gate to the underworld from the [[Film/NightAtTheMuseum second film]], and the lives of Ahkmenrah and Kahmunrah.
* BrotherSisterIncest: It was historically accurate for the royal family in Ancient Egypt
* CainAndAbel: Kahmunrah and Ahkmenrah, respectively.
* GreenEyedMonster: Kahmunrah
* {{Lunacy}}: Khonsu is the god of the moon and is very important in the story [[spoiler:due to his connection to the tablet]].
* ShownTheirWork: Lots of research was done into the various gods and goddesses, a timeline of when the characters would have ruled, different aspects of daily life, and other interesting aspects that are either revealed in the text or the Author's Notes.
