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* {{Expy}}: The Nameless Four are expies of the Franchise/FantasticFour. Garreth is 50% expy of Eragon and 50% TheAce archetype.
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* {{Expy}}: The Nameless Four are expies of the Franchise/FantasticFour.ComicBook/FantasticFour. Garreth is 50% expy of Eragon and 50% TheAce archetype.
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* KarmaHoudini: [[spoiler: Garreth.]]
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* MoralDissonance: Garreth has no problem with killing enemy non-combatants if he's in a bad mood. He's also toyed around with a giant robot in crowded streets. Sinclair has engaged in some subtly questionable behavior as well.
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* {{Deconstruction}}: Garreth deconstructs Mary Sues to an extent - not that it's very hard. His super-power is literally being extremely good at everything. He has an immensely unsympathetic personality and often acts in morally ambiguous ways - but people react to it not with admiration, but with realistic exasperation. He's only barely tolerated by the people he respects most, and the girl he's in love with hates him. Despite being the protagonist and dominating the plot, he's only a hanger-on and ultimately irrelevant to everything.
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* {{Deconstruction}}: Garreth deconstructs Mary Sues to an extent - TheAce, not that it's very hard. His super-power is literally being extremely good at everything. He has an immensely unsympathetic personality and often acts in morally ambiguous ways - but people react to it not with admiration, but with realistic exasperation. He's only barely tolerated by the people he respects most, and the girl he's in love with hates him. Despite being the protagonist and dominating the plot, he's only a hanger-on and ultimately irrelevant to everything.
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* {{Expy}}: The Nameless Four are expies of the Franchise/FantasticFour. Garreth is 50% expy of Eragon and 50% MarySue TheAce archetype.
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* MarySue: The entire point of Garreth. His superpower is that he can instantly become an expert at anything. He combines the following Sue types:
** JerkSue.
** MartyStu / TheAce - but NOT GodModeSue. He gets kicked around and bloodied far too much for that.
** ParodySue. Actually more of a Slightly Satiric Pastiche Sue.
** [[spoiler:VillainSue]].
** JerkSue.
** MartyStu / TheAce - but NOT GodModeSue. He gets kicked around and bloodied far too much for that.
** ParodySue. Actually more of a Slightly Satiric Pastiche Sue.
** [[spoiler:VillainSue]].
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* TheKingdom: Invoked. King Stephen's nation is officially named "The Kingdoms" since it unites a large number of formerly independent countries, most of them monarchies. It could also be called [[spoiler:[[TheEmpire an Empire]]]].
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* {{Expy}}: The Nameless Four are expies of the FantasticFour.Franchise/FantasticFour. Garreth is 50% expy of Eragon and 50% MarySue archetype.
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''{{Eragon}}'' sucks, right?
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It was a pretty stupid request, and probably something I shouldn't have wasted my time on. But once I actually thought up an idea, the whole thing ballooned enormously. What started as a simple short story eventually evolved into my first novel and became a deeply personal quest to discover my literary limits. The connection to ''Eragon'' doesn't go beyond a few general plot elements and occasional TakeThats. However, one of my big goals for the writing process was to show that a writer could be influenced by other works without being outright derivative.
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It was a pretty stupid request, and probably something I shouldn't have wasted my time on. But once I actually thought up an idea, the whole thing ballooned enormously. What started as a simple short story eventually evolved into my first novel and became a deeply personal quest to discover my literary limits. The connection to ''Eragon'' doesn't go beyond a few general plot elements and occasional TakeThats.{{Take That}}s. However, one of my big goals for the writing process was to show that a writer could be influenced by other works without being outright derivative.
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* {{Vibroweapon}}: Garreth gets one from Sinclair.
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* BookEnds: The story begins and ends with [[spoiler:Garreth getting superpowers]].
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* CursedWithAwesome: Garreth mostly just bitches and whines about his ability to master any skill almost instantly.
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* IdiotBall: Garreth's favorite toy.
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* InfoDump: They're prevalent. In fact, it's probably one of the story's bigger problems.
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* KarmaHoudini: [[spoiler: Garreth.]]
* RedEyesTakeWarning: Sinclair's robots.
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* YouAreNumberSix: 88 of the Royal Guard.
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* WackyWaysideTribe: White Bastion certainly seems a lot like this trope.
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* {{Deconstruction}}: Garreth deconstructs Mary Sues to an extent. His super-power is literally being extremely good at everything. He has an immensely unsympathetic personality and often acts in morally ambiguous ways - but people react to it not with admiration, but with realistic exasperation. He's only barely tolerated by the people he respects most, and the girl he's in love with hates him. Despite being the protagonist and dominating the plot, he's only a hanger-on and ultimately irrelevant to everything.
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* {{Deconstruction}}: Garreth deconstructs Mary Sues to an extent.extent - not that it's very hard. His super-power is literally being extremely good at everything. He has an immensely unsympathetic personality and often acts in morally ambiguous ways - but people react to it not with admiration, but with realistic exasperation. He's only barely tolerated by the people he respects most, and the girl he's in love with hates him. Despite being the protagonist and dominating the plot, he's only a hanger-on and ultimately irrelevant to everything.
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In the present day, all this has changed. Against all odds, a coup takes place. Two of the four are captured when their unquestionably loyal forces turn against them. Sinclair and Goodman find themselves on the run, hunted by an army of millions and 88 super-powered agents. Even worse - they find themselves stuck with Garreth, a dim-witted, annoying, horrible young trainee of the Royal Guard who might just be their only chance to beat the odds.
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In the present day, all this has changed. Against all odds, a coup takes place. Two of the four are captured when their unquestionably loyal forces turn against them. Sinclair and Goodman find themselves on the run, hunted by an army of millions and 88 super-powered agents. Even worse - they find themselves they're stuck with Garreth, a dim-witted, annoying, horrible young trainee of the Royal Guard who might just be their only chance to beat the odds.
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* RequiredSecondaryPowers: Common. Refa in particular has a degree of invulnerability to survive his SuperSpeed. Diemenner's brain can process information faster, since he has to coordinate up to hundreds of copies of himself.
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** There's some hints that [[spoiler: Jackson is under the enemy's influence]], but they're so subtle that the reader probably wouldn't notice.
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The story takes place in a former StandardFantasySetting called the World. About twenty years earlier, four mysterious super-powered beings appeared to protect people from a sudden outbreak of monster attacks, natural catastrophes and other problems. They consisted of a master scientist, his telekinetic wife, a militaristic mastermind with ice powers and a monstrous, dragon-like warrior. After a complicated chain of events, the foursome ended up as benevolent dictators in control of most of the planet. Their leader, Stephen Sinclair, was crowned King and led the World through enormous technological advancement, massive social reform and an order of philanthropy. He also created the Royal Guard, essentially a group of superheroes led by his best friend Jackson Goodman, to fight off radical new menaces. Sinclair's ascent kicked off a golden age of unparalleled improvement.
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The story takes place in a former StandardFantasySetting called the World. About twenty years earlier, four mysterious super-powered beings appeared to protect people from a sudden outbreak of monster attacks, natural catastrophes and other problems. They consisted of a master scientist, his telekinetic wife, a militaristic mastermind with ice powers and a monstrous, dragon-like warrior. After a complicated chain of events, the foursome ended up as benevolent dictators in control of most of the planet. Their leader, Stephen Sinclair, was crowned King and led the World through enormous technological advancement, massive social reform and an order of philanthropy. He also created the Royal Guard, essentially a group of superheroes led by his best friend Jackson Goodman, to fight off radical new menaces. Sinclair's ascent kicked off a golden age of an unparalleled improvement.
golden age.
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The story takes place in a former StandardFantasySetting called the World. About twenty years earlier, four mysterious super-powered beings appeared to protect people from a sudden outbreak of monster attacks, natural catastrophes and other problems. They consisted of a master scientist, his telekinetic wife, a militaristic mastermind with ice powers and a monstrous, dragon-like warrior. After a complicated chain of events, the foursome ended up as benevolent dictators in control of most of the planet. Their leader, Stephen Sinclair, was crowned King and led the World through enormous technological advancement, massive social reform and an order of philanthropy. He also created the Royal Guard, essentially a group of superheroes led by his best friend Jackson Goodman, to fight off radical new menaces. Sinclair's ascent kicked off a golden age of unparalleled satisfaction.
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* ChekhovsGun: Applied liberally, such as with the doomsday device in part I.