Oh boy. I go to school in Oakland, so this was initially got a huge "WHAT" from me. And then I got your concept and was very intrigued.
Generally, my advice is to turn this all Up To Eleven so that his purpose as comic-relief is very, very clear.
Dr. Dickstab would thus change to something hilariously obscene. Or you could actually make it LESS vulgar, so that it underlines that he's not a real threat.
Maybe take some cues from Wesley Snipe's character in Demolition Man? An intelligent criminal who winds up in the future with access to some of the advanced technology and the know-how. Comes off very funny, very cruel, very threatening, while still being thuggish and Genre Savvy.
Akira Toriyama (April 5 1955 - March 1, 2024).What about giving him a less stereotypical Servile Snarker underling or Morality Pet, to make it clear he's meant to be over-the-top In-Universe?
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But yeah, Westley Snipes on Demolition man is more ore less what you are looking for.
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Okay, so I'm trying to create a recurring Ineffectual Sympathetic Villain for a superhero story about Cape Busters, a gangbanger turned supergenius who calls himself "Dr. Dickstab". The idea behind the character is a comic relief figure who mixes Sophisticated as Hell with Tim Taylor Technology and the stereotypical behaviors of a ghetto gangbanger (for an idea of what I'm talking about, imagine someone who uses words like "metric fuckton" as scientific units of measurement and who runs all of his technobabble through Gizoogle). I feel like such a character who's Playing Against Type as a mad scientist rather than a thickheaded street thug could be a legitimately funny concept.
What I want to know is if there's any way I can make this character not seem racially insensitive, considering his origins (before anyone jumps to conclusions, yes, I'm well aware that living in the ghetto has nothing to do with race and that there are plenty of white gangbangers). I don't want people to think he's some offensive caricature of any race, culture or minority, but rather just a caricature of stereotypical gangbanger lifestyle (pimps 'n hos etc.), and I want to do this without making him into some white kid acting like a total poser because he's trying to be "gangsta". I want the audience to think he 's funny, not a total tool.
Any ideas?
edited 4th Mar '14 3:45:26 PM by KSPAM
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