Fanfic McNapkins's review: This is bad. Very very bad.
I am amazed on how much this fic got wrong. The characterization is wrong, the writing is wrong, everything about is just wrong. The complete disregard for the final episodes is just mindbogglingly. Let's not forget Tom. Fucking. Dyron. What can we say about him that hasn't already been said? Let's go through the basics. He's a beer-guzzling kick-boxing champion, a trash-talking computer hacker, a roided-out airforce pilot, a suave culinary genius, a thrash metal musician with a heart of gold.... and he's gonna take a steaming shit on Neon Genesis Evangelion. In the first chapter of this self-insert fic, Tom Dyron (the author and the character) gets everything hilariously wrong, transforming the series' deconstructive, hyper-cryptic narrative into a substandard episode of WWE Monday Night Raw and its cast of neurotic manic-depressives into smack-talking badasses (nowhere else could we see Misato belt out a triumphant "hell yeah!" after a battle). And then things get really stupid. No, really. Just wait. I haven't even mentioned our antagonists: an incompetent, glass-jawed race of mix-and-match critters called (hilariously enough) "the Invadors" Protracted, borderline incoherent fight scenes (with fight choreography that's lame even by the lax standards of professional wrestling) are crudely stapled to treacly teen melodrama, as the Evangelion universe is reduced to little more than a backdrop for Tom Dyron to demonstrate his awesomeness. I wouldn't recommend any drinking games where you take a shot after every dubious retcon or instance of irreparable canon defilement.
Tsuneo in the Rebuild of D.E.L.T.A said it best, "A mountain of glurge...And really ham-fisted, awkward, badly-written glure at that."
Fanfic The Best Worst fic ever
As someone who has extensive experience with this fic, I can say now that I love it for so many reasons. Tom is so stupidly over-powered, the characters are OOC to the point of camp, the Invadors are doofy mix-and-match critters and John Barren is Special. It's a true gift, a fic that is so bat that it's good, and manages to out-do and out-dumb itself with each passing chapter, getting stupider and goofier as it goes along. And for all this, I love it. It's my favourite bad Fanfic, and that's from someone who's read a lot of bad fanfic. If you like laughing at badness, then this the badfic for you. That there's no known "raw" versions is just a bonus.
Fanfic Tacitus' review
To paraphrase a famous golden robot, this fic has everything, all wrong. Atrocious writing, inane dialogue, formulaic and repetitive scripts, pointless scenes that exist solely to boost the author's ego, stupid monsters, plot holes, abuses of scale both physical and temporal...and to cap it off, one of the worst author avatars/Marty Stus in history. Its mere existence improves the quality of every other fanfic, and will make you appreciate more refined Sues and Stus from 'fics you previously sneered at. Fortunately, Elmer Studios' treatment turns this paragon of suck into something entertaining. Chapter One's in the link on the rec page, and you can either navigate the Elmer Studios site to find the other installments in this 13-part series, or change the number before the ".txt." in the page's url. Or, if you want a quick sample, just hit the Random DELTA Invasion Episode Generator for an uncannily close approximation of an average chapter.
Fanfic It's Not "Evangelion Done Right".
Ah, one of the most controversial pieces of fanfiction in the Evangelion community. Is it "Eva done right", like so many say?
The writing, on paper, is not terrible. However, the excessive technobabble, pointless pages on meaningless topics (such as video games, unpacking, and various other lengthy and unnecessary scenes), and the completely unlikable main character seal the fate of this fan fiction.
DJ Croft is somehow liked by everyone and can break any rules he wants. The only people who don't like him are the villains. His "development" doesn't change him in any major way.
What can I say about the rest of the cast? They're either DJ worshipers, will soon become a DJ worshiper, or are villains. A fair chunk of the cast isn't even there, though. It takes most of the fic until Shinji arrives, Fuyutsuki is completely replaced, and 2/3ds of the bridge staff is replaced by a author avatar.
The way canon is handled is atrocious. (Spoilers ahead, by the way.) The Angels from the original series have a clear motivation. They're born from Adam and want to return to him in order to cause Third Impact and destroy all humans.
In this piece of fanfiction, the Angels are literal Angels who are seeking to redeem Lucifer, who is Eva-01.
I can excuse some mangling of canon. Until the "Classified Information" was released detailing much of the universe's background, nobody knew what was up. But mangling canon this badly cannot be excused.
I would talk about the crossover elements, but the author has admitted that they were mainly there to differentiate the fanfiction from the original and that many elements were thrown in on a whim. The author also admitted that they were clunkily inserted, which I do agree with.
I would say that the author needed an editor, however, from the start, it was a collaboration between two people. In the second arc, they added two more to the writing staff. How did they get away with the pointless, lengthy scenes discussing arcade games, or long info dumps on various topics throughout the work? Inexcusable.
I'll give them this - It has good grammar and spelling. You could tell that it had been proofread, which is something many fanfiction authors fail at doing.
My overall opinion - negative. It may not be a complete piece of trash, but it certainly fails at doing Evangelion "right" as promised.