LovelyCherryBlossom
Since: Dec, 1969
11/13/2011 00:00:00
Funny, when I read it, it said "she had long purple hair that that was mostly worn down"
Kingofsouls
Since: Jun, 2010
07/27/2013 00:00:00
Amen brother. A-men. I think a crew of editors are needed.
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"...she had LONG purple hair that was LONG but had a twin buns in it..."
Redundancy is the least-evil of the crimes committed against literary language here. The author needs to work a lot more on basic grammatical structure and storytelling elements before this fic can be legitimately recommended.
Let me emphasize: A LOT more.