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* HeroesWantRedheads: The redheaded Pyrrha is a world-renowned star athlete and fighter who struggles to form meaningful releationships as a result of the pedestal people have placed her on. This changes when she meets Jaune, whose non-Hunter background left him ignorant of her fame but who needs her guidance due to his desire to become a protector of the people. He treats her like a real person, has helped her form true and lasting friendships, and she\'s fallen hard for him as a result.
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* HeroesWantRedheads: The redheaded Pyrrha is a world-renowned athlete and fighter who struggles to form meaningful releationships as a result of the pedestal people have placed her on. This changes when she meets Jaune, whose non-Hunter background left him ignorant of her fame but who needs her guidance due to his desire to become a protector of the people. He treats her like a real person, has helped her form true and lasting friendships, and she\\\'s fallen hard for him as a result.
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* HeroesWantRedheads: The redheaded Pyrrha is a world-renowned star athlete and fighter who struggles to form meaningful releationships as a result of the pedestal people have placed her on. This changes when she meets Jaune, whose non-Hunter background left him ignorant of her fame. He treats her like a real person, has helped her form true and lasting friendships, and she\'s fallen hard for him as a result.
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* HeroesWantRedheads: The redheaded Pyrrha is a world-renowned star athlete and fighter who struggles to form meaningful releationships as a result of the pedestal people have placed her on. This changes when she meets Jaune, whose non-Hunter background left him ignorant of her fame but who needs her guidance due to his desire to become a protector of the people. He treats her like a real person, has helped her form true and lasting friendships, and she\\\'s fallen hard for him as a result.
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Still, examples shouldn\'t be restored to a page while they\'re still under discussion. Dan, I think your rewrite is still pretty generic and zero context.
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Still, examples shouldn\\\'t be restored to a page while they\\\'re still under discussion. Dan, I think your rewrite is still pretty generic and zero context. Based on what Laughing Fist says, I\\\'d probably suggest something like this (although it\\\'s got too much word-cruft as written):
* HeroesWantRedheads: The redheaded Pyrrha is a world-renowned star athlete and fighter who struggles to form meaningful releationships as a result of the pedestal people have placed her on. This changes when she meets Jaune, whose non-Hunter background left him ignorant of her fame. He treats her like a real person, has helped her form true and lasting friendships, and she\\\'s fallen hard for him as a result.
* HeroesWantRedheads: The redheaded Pyrrha is a world-renowned star athlete and fighter who struggles to form meaningful releationships as a result of the pedestal people have placed her on. This changes when she meets Jaune, whose non-Hunter background left him ignorant of her fame. He treats her like a real person, has helped her form true and lasting friendships, and she\\\'s fallen hard for him as a result.
