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My issue with the entry is that it is logically flawed. \
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My issue with the entry is that it is logically flawed. \\\"X should have used Y in Z manner\\\" is flawed when X \\\'\\\'is never shown to even have Y on hand in the first place.\\\'\\\'
It might be better if the entry was rewritten to reflect that the transports are out of place instead of the Rebels not using something they don\\\'t have. Like:
\\\'\\\'\\\'You\\\'d Expect\\\'\\\'\\\': The Rebels would bring reinforcements on the transports to help Han and Leia\\\'s team on the ground.\\\\\\\\
\\\'\\\'\\\'Instead\\\'\\\'\\\': The transports don\\\'t actually bring any troops and instead simply hang around during the battle, making them Star Destroyer and Death Star II bait.
This version would keep the point (that the Rebels didn\\\'t use their troops) while actually making sense (the Rebels not bringing troops as opposed to them not using troops that they never brought).
It might be better if the entry was rewritten to reflect that the transports are out of place instead of the Rebels not using something they don\\\'t have. Like:
\\\'\\\'\\\'You\\\'d Expect\\\'\\\'\\\': The Rebels would bring reinforcements on the transports to help Han and Leia\\\'s team on the ground.\\\\\\\\
\\\'\\\'\\\'Instead\\\'\\\'\\\': The transports don\\\'t actually bring any troops and instead simply hang around during the battle, making them Star Destroyer and Death Star II bait.
This version would keep the point (that the Rebels didn\\\'t use their troops) while actually making sense (the Rebels not bringing troops as opposed to them not using troops that they never brought).
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My issue with the entry is that it is logically flawed. \
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My issue with the entry is that it is logically flawed. \\\"X should have used Y in Z manner\\\" is flawed when X \\\'\\\'is never shown to even have Y on hand in the first place.\\\'\\\'
It might be better if the entry was rewritten to reflect that the transports are out of place instead of the Rebels not using something they don\\\'t have. Like:
\\\'\\\'\\\'You\\\'d Expect\\\'\\\'\\\': The Rebels would bring reinforcements on the transports to help Han and Leia\\\'s team on the ground.\\\\\\\\
\\\'\\\'\\\'Instead\\\'\\\'\\\': The transports don\\\'t actually bring any troops and instead simply hang around during the battle, making them Star Destroyer and Death Star II bait.
It would make more sense to point out that they didn\\\'t bring troops at all instead of pointing out how they could have used troops they didn\\\'t have to begin with.
It might be better if the entry was rewritten to reflect that the transports are out of place instead of the Rebels not using something they don\\\'t have. Like:
\\\'\\\'\\\'You\\\'d Expect\\\'\\\'\\\': The Rebels would bring reinforcements on the transports to help Han and Leia\\\'s team on the ground.\\\\\\\\
\\\'\\\'\\\'Instead\\\'\\\'\\\': The transports don\\\'t actually bring any troops and instead simply hang around during the battle, making them Star Destroyer and Death Star II bait.
It would make more sense to point out that they didn\\\'t bring troops at all instead of pointing out how they could have used troops they didn\\\'t have to begin with.
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My issue with the entry is that it is logically flawed. \
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My issue with the entry is that it is logically flawed. \\\"X should have used Y in Z manner\\\" is flawed when X \\\'\\\'is never shown to even have Y on hand in the first place.\\\'\\\' \\\"A should have shot B with a gun\\\" is silly when A is never shown to have a gun on hand, whether or not A has a holster to carry it.
It might be better if the entry was rewritten to reflect that the transports are out of place instead of the Rebels not using something they don\\\'t have. Like:
\\\'\\\'\\\'You\\\'d Expect\\\'\\\'\\\': The Rebels would bring reinforcements on the transports to help Han and Leia\\\'s team on the ground.\\\\\\\\
\\\'\\\'\\\'Instead\\\'\\\'\\\': The transports don\\\'t actually bring any troops and instead simply hang around during the battle, making them Star Destroyer and Death Star II bait.
It would make more sense to point out that they didn\\\'t bring troops at all instead of pointing out how they could have used troops they didn\\\'t have to begin with.
It might be better if the entry was rewritten to reflect that the transports are out of place instead of the Rebels not using something they don\\\'t have. Like:
\\\'\\\'\\\'You\\\'d Expect\\\'\\\'\\\': The Rebels would bring reinforcements on the transports to help Han and Leia\\\'s team on the ground.\\\\\\\\
\\\'\\\'\\\'Instead\\\'\\\'\\\': The transports don\\\'t actually bring any troops and instead simply hang around during the battle, making them Star Destroyer and Death Star II bait.
It would make more sense to point out that they didn\\\'t bring troops at all instead of pointing out how they could have used troops they didn\\\'t have to begin with.
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As the entry stands, it implies that they should be using something that there\'s no indication they actually have in the first place - ground combat elements. It might be better if the entry was rewritten to reflect that the transports are out of place instead of them not using something they don\'t have. Like:
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My issue with the entry is that it is logically flawed. \\\"X should have used Y in Z manner\\\" is flawed when X \\\'\\\'is never shown to even have Y on hand in the first place.\\\'\\\'
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It might be better if the entry was rewritten to reflect that the transports are out of place instead of the Rebels not using something they don\\\'t have. Like:
