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The volume was building up to the villains experiencing a big screw up that hands the heroes victory. It really wasn\'t as focussed on building up to a Cinder/Ruby climax as the original entry claims.
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The volume was building up to the villains experiencing a big screw up that hands the heroes victory. It really wasn\\\'t as focussed on building up to a Cinder/Ruby climax as the original entry claims. The original entry also ignores the context of the entire finale conflict to act like Cinder had no good reason to be ignoring Ruby which makes it a misleading entry anyway.
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The volume was building up to the villains experiencing a big screw up that hands the heroes victory. It really was focussed on building up to a Cinder/Ruby climax as the original entry claims.
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The volume was building up to the villains experiencing a big screw up that hands the heroes victory. It really wasn\\\'t as focussed on building up to a Cinder/Ruby climax as the original entry claims.
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The Volume was building up to the villains experience a big screw up that hands the heroes victory. It really was focussed on building up to a Cinder/Ruby climax as the original entry claims.
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The volume was building up to the villains experiencing a big screw up that hands the heroes victory. It really was focussed on building up to a Cinder/Ruby climax as the original entry claims.
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You cannot argue that I should only focus on Volume 5, and ignore the wider context, when you\'re trying to bring Volume 4 into your argument (which the original entry doesn\'t do). As soon as you involve Volume 4, you are dealing with the wider context. Cinder had nothing to do with Mistral in Volume 4. She was still in recovery. As soon as you bring in Volume 4\'s build up of Cinder\'s obsession with Ruby, you have to also include Volume 6.
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You cannot argue that I should only focus on Volume 5, and ignore the wider context, when you\\\'re trying to bring Volume 4 into your argument (which the original entry doesn\\\'t do). As soon as you involve Volume 4, you are dealing with the wider context. Cinder had nothing to do with Mistral in Volume 4. She was still in recovery. And nothing about her Volume 4 obsession with Ruby suggested that it would reach a climax in Volume 5. As soon as you bring in Volume 4\\\'s build up of Cinder\\\'s obsession with Ruby, you also have to include Volume 6.
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Now, as to Volume 5 in isolation (which is what the original entry is actually doing), the problem is the entry placing much more emphasis on the idea that Volume 5 was building towards an apparently guaranteed conflict between Cinder and Ruby than Volume 5 genuinely was. Volume 5 also included a build up towards a Cinder/Jaune confrontation. It also included build-up towards a Jaune Semblance reveal. And the specific (single) incident that introduced the possibility of a Cinder/Ruby climax also introduced the fact that Raven was setting them up and that Watts was completely certain that the only outcome from Cinder\'s change of plan would be disaster for the villains.
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Now, as to Volume 5 in isolation (which is what the original entry is actually doing), the problem is the entry placing much more emphasis on the idea that Volume 5 was building towards an apparently guaranteed conflict between Cinder and Ruby than Volume 5 genuinely was. Volume 5 also included a build up towards a Cinder/Jaune confrontation. It also included build-up towards a Jaune Semblance reveal. In the whole of Volume 5, there was only one, single incident prior to the finale that raised the Cinder/Ruby conflict, but that incident was focussed predominantly on setting up Raven\\\'s plan to screw over the villains and Watts\\\' strong prediction that all Cinder would achieve would be a disaster for the villains. And Watts was right -- so the predictor in that scene for the finale wasn\\\'t Cinder\\\'s feelings about Ruby, it was Watts\\\' feelings about Cinder.
