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As far as I recall, Harry was only warned of the possibility that Voldemort could use the mental connection to see through his eyes, rather than anything specifically involving visions and/or traps; the latter is only discussed shortly after Harry has the vision of Sirius, and it's bought up by Hermione. And he does try and talk to McGonagall; unfortunately she got transferred to St. Mungo's. As for owls and broomsticks, those would presumably take several hours to get to their destinations, judging by how the Hogwarts Express leaves King's Cross at 11AM and arrives at the school in the evening.
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* Harry sees a vision of Sirius being tortured at the Department of Mysteries.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to play it cool and consider that such a convenient vision might be a trap, specifically the exact kind of trap he has been warned about for ''months'', knowing that he shares a mind-link with Voldemort which the latter has learned about and might be try to use it to his advantage. With the safety that it is improbable the vision might be real, he can try to reach out to any available member of the Order, like [=McGonagall=] or Snape, send owls to any other member (even though he doesn't know exactly where Dumbledore is, an owl might be able to find him), or go to Grimmauld Place on a broomstick.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to play it cool and consider that such a convenient vision might be a trap, specifically the exact kind of trap he has been warned about for ''months'', knowing that he shares a mind-link with Voldemort which the latter has learned about and might be try to use it to his advantage. With the safety that it is improbable the vision might be real, he can try to reach out to any available member of the Order, like [=McGonagall=] or Snape, send owls to any other member (even though he doesn't know exactly where Dumbledore is, an owl might be able to find him), or go to Grimmauld Place on a broomstick.\\
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* Harry sees a vision of Sirius being tortured by Voldemort at the Department of Mysteries.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to play it cool and consider that such a convenient vision might be a trap,specifically the exact kind of trap he has been warned about for ''months'', knowing that he shares a mind-link with Voldemort which the latter has learned about and might be try to use it to his advantage. With Indeed, Hermione brings up the safety that it is improbable the vision might be real, he can try to reach out to any available member possibility of the Order, like [=McGonagall=] or Snape, send owls to any other member (even though he doesn't know exactly where Dumbledore is, an owl might be able to find him), or go to Grimmauld Place on a broomstick.this when informed about what's happening.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to play it cool and consider that such a convenient vision might be a trap,
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I'll concede that a few seconds spent checking the Marauders' Map might've been a worthwhile risk, but there's still the matter of whether or not the sign-up sheet retrieved by Parkinson was the original, and while some of them may have been identified in the chaos, we can't say for sure if any other students were caught.
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'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to grab the Marauder's Map and find out the positions of Umbridge, Filch and any name suspicious of being an ally of hers (especially Slytherins), at the very least to make sure the enemy is not yet literally behind the door or in their way out. He should order the group to keep calm, exit the room and scatter divided in small groups to avoid ambushes and not to raise suspicions.\\
'''Instead:''' Harry basically screams "every man for himself", and not content with that, he runs away completely alone and without any care.\\
'''As a Result:''' Harry falls in a rather flimsy one-man ambush by Draco, who was hiding nearby. This leaves him to be arrested by Umbridge. Other students are implied to be captured the same ways by the Slytherin students who would become the Inquisitorial Squad.\\
'''Even Worse:''' They leave in the room the sign-up sheet with the names of the entire group, which compromises them all. The sheet is later found by Pansy Parkinson and used by Umbridge as a proof.
'''Instead:''' Harry basically screams "every man for himself", and not content with that, he runs away completely alone and without any care.\\
'''As a Result:''' Harry falls in a rather flimsy one-man ambush by Draco, who was hiding nearby. This leaves him to be arrested by Umbridge. Other students are implied to be captured the same ways by the Slytherin students who would become the Inquisitorial Squad.\\
'''Even Worse:''' They leave in the room the sign-up sheet with the names of the entire group, which compromises them all. The sheet is later found by Pansy Parkinson and used by Umbridge as a proof.
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'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to grab the Marauder's Marauders' Map - assuming he has it on him - and find out the positions of Umbridge, Filch Umbridge and any name suspicious of being Filch, and perhaps look for anyone likely to be an ally of hers theirs (especially Slytherins), at Slytherins). At the very least to make sure least, a quick confirmation that the enemy is not isn't yet literally behind the door or in blocking their way out. He should order the group to keep calm, exit the room and scatter divided in small groups to avoid ambushes and not to raise suspicions.out would allow for a more informed escape plan.\\
'''Instead:''' Harrybasically screams "every man for himself", just yells at the other members to get out, and not content with that, he runs away completely alone and without any care.the rest of the DA flee in a mass rush.\\
'''As a Result:''' While it's not indicated whether or not any other members were grabbed, Harryfalls himself is taken out in a rather flimsy one-man ambush by Draco, who was hiding nearby. This leaves him to be arrested by Umbridge. Other students are implied to be captured the same ways by the Slytherin students who would become the Inquisitorial Squad.\\\n'''Even Worse:''' They leave in the room the sign-up sheet with the names of the entire group, which compromises them all. The sheet is later found by Pansy Parkinson and used by Umbridge as a proof.
'''Instead:''' Harry
'''As a Result:''' While it's not indicated whether or not any other members were grabbed, Harry
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Good points. Let's rewrite it a bit.
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* Voldemort is trying to lure Harry to the Ministry of Magic in order to retrieve a Prophecy about the two of them. His strategy is to use Legilimency to make Harry dream about the place, and want to explore it in person. Dumbledore realises this, and also figures out that Harry and Voldemort have a mental connection that Voldemort could use to spy on Dumbledore through Harry. In response to all of this, Dumbledore arranges to have Harry learn Occlumency, so that he can stop having these dreams.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Given that Dumbledore had decided at the end of [[Literature/HarryPotterAndTheGobletOfFire book four]] that the time was right to tell Harry about the prophecy, Dumbledore to just tell Harry about the mental connection, the prophecy and Voldemort's plans for retrieving it, and explain that this is why he has to learn Occlumency. That way, Harry might be more motivated to do so. Even if he's really unwilling to tell Harry about the prophecy, he only needs to tell him a Cliff Notes version of the story: "Harry, the Department of Mysteries houses a weapon Voldemort is seeking but cannot have by himself, so he might try to get you to travel there and get it for him." After all, Harry has already worked to impede Voldemort from stealing the Philosopher's/Sorcerer's Stone, and it would be easy for him to understand.\\
'''Instead:''' No-one tells Harry anything other than "you MUST learn Occlumency because we say it", "Voldemort and you might be able to read each other's mind, but you must NOT do it even though it has proved really useful" and "There is NOTHING in the Department of Mysteries that concerns you".\\
'''As A Result:''' Harry doesn't take the lessons as seriously as the Order would like him to, remains curious about the Department of Mysteries related dreams he keeps having, and is surprised when the Order consider it a big deal that Snape's no longer teaching him.\\
'''You'd Also Expect:''' Since Dumbledore was the person the prophecy was made to and can therefore recall it word for word whenever he wants through the Pensieve, he would have the copy at the Department of Mysteries destroyed since it's worthless to him but extremely valuable to Voldemort. A simple Reductor Curse is shown to be enough to destroy any prophecy and unlike physically removing it, this doesn't have to be done by a subject of the prophecy so Dumbledore could send any Order member to do it.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Given that Dumbledore had decided at the end of [[Literature/HarryPotterAndTheGobletOfFire book four]] that the time was right to tell Harry about the prophecy, Dumbledore to just tell Harry about the mental connection, the prophecy and Voldemort's plans for retrieving it, and explain that this is why he has to learn Occlumency. That way, Harry might be more motivated to do so. Even if he's really unwilling to tell Harry about the prophecy, he only needs to tell him a Cliff Notes version of the story: "Harry, the Department of Mysteries houses a weapon Voldemort is seeking but cannot have by himself, so he might try to get you to travel there and get it for him." After all, Harry has already worked to impede Voldemort from stealing the Philosopher's/Sorcerer's Stone, and it would be easy for him to understand.\\
'''Instead:''' No-one tells Harry anything other than "you MUST learn Occlumency because we say it", "Voldemort and you might be able to read each other's mind, but you must NOT do it even though it has proved really useful" and "There is NOTHING in the Department of Mysteries that concerns you".\\
'''As A Result:''' Harry doesn't take the lessons as seriously as the Order would like him to, remains curious about the Department of Mysteries related dreams he keeps having, and is surprised when the Order consider it a big deal that Snape's no longer teaching him.\\
'''You'd Also Expect:''' Since Dumbledore was the person the prophecy was made to and can therefore recall it word for word whenever he wants through the Pensieve, he would have the copy at the Department of Mysteries destroyed since it's worthless to him but extremely valuable to Voldemort. A simple Reductor Curse is shown to be enough to destroy any prophecy and unlike physically removing it, this doesn't have to be done by a subject of the prophecy so Dumbledore could send any Order member to do it.\\
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* Voldemort is trying to lure Harry to the The Ministry of Magic in order to retrieve a Prophecy about the two of them. His strategy is to use Legilimency to make Harry dream about the place, and want to explore it in person. believes that Dumbledore realises this, and also figures out that Harry and Voldemort have are involved in a mental connection that Voldemort could use common conspiracy to spy on Dumbledore through Harry. In response to all overthrow the government, faking Voldemort's return as part of this, Dumbledore arranges to have Harry learn Occlumency, so that he can stop having these dreams.their scheme.\\
'''You'd Expect:'''Given that The Ministry would try to make Dumbledore had decided at responsible of everything and paint Harry as a victim of his manipulations. In the end Muggle world, when an adult and a child are engaged in a common act of [[Literature/HarryPotterAndTheGobletOfFire book four]] misbehaviour, particularly when the adult is an authority figure, it is generally accepted that the time was right to tell Harry about adult bears the prophecy, brunt of the blame, and in this case the whole affair already has undertones of a professor being supposedly grooming a protegee for obscure purposes. While Dumbledore to just tell Harry about is popular in the mental connection, Wizarding World, he is also a controversial figure and not few suspect of his ambitions, while Harry, the prophecy and Voldemort's plans for retrieving it, and explain that this is why he has to learn Occlumency. That way, Harry might be Boy who Lived, probably comes across as much more motivated to do so. Even if he's really unwilling to tell Harry about the prophecy, he only needs to tell him a Cliff Notes version of the story: "Harry, the Department of Mysteries houses a weapon Voldemort is seeking but cannot have by himself, so he might try to get you to travel there sympathetic and get it for him." After all, Harry has already worked to impede Voldemort from stealing the Philosopher's/Sorcerer's Stone, and innocent, therefore it would be easy for way easier to turn people's opinion against Dumbledore, especially by slandering him to understand.as an exploiter of Harry, than against Dumbledore ''and'' Harry.\\
'''Instead:''' No-one tells '''You'd Also Expect:''' The Ministry would also try to drive a wedge between Harry anything other than "you MUST learn Occlumency because we say it", "Voldemort and you might be Dumbledore. Granted, Harry is telling the truth about Voldemort's resurrection and nothing would fully set him against the only wizard able to read each other's mind, but you must NOT do it stop him, even though it although Dumbledore has proved really useful" voluntarily distanced himself from Harry and "There is NOTHING in the Department latter is resentful of Mysteries that concerns you".him, but Fudge doesn't know that.\\
'''As A Result:''' '''Instead:''' The Ministry blames Harry doesn't take and Dumbledore equally, and Umbridge in particular goes out of her way to antagonize Harry with sadistic detentions and an obviously personal vendetta. This only galvanizes the lessons as seriously as the Order would like him to, remains curious about the support of many people to both Dumbledore and Harry, and naturally ensures Harry's continued support of Dumbledore.
* The Department of Mysteriesrelated dreams he keeps having, houses a recording of Harry's and is surprised when the Order consider it a big deal that Snape's no longer teaching him.Voldemort's Prophecy.\\
'''You'dAlso Expect:''' Since Dumbledore was the person the prophecy was made to and can therefore recall it word for word whenever he wants through (through the Pensieve, Pensieve if necessary), he would have the copy at the Department of Mysteries destroyed since it's worthless to him but extremely valuable to Voldemort. A simple Reductor Curse is shown to be enough to destroy any prophecy prophecy, and unlike physically removing it, this doesn't have to be done by a subject of the prophecy so Dumbledore could send any Order member to do it.\\
'''You'd Expect:'''
* The Department of Mysteries
'''You'd
* Voldemort is trying to lure Harry to the Ministry of Magic in order to retrieve the Prophecy. His strategy is to use Legilimency to make Harry dream about the place, and want to explore it in person. Dumbledore realises this, and also figures out that Harry and Voldemort have a mental connection that Voldemort could use to spy on Dumbledore through Harry. In response to all of this, Dumbledore arranges to have Harry learn Occlumency, so that he can stop having these dreams.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Given that Dumbledore had decided at the end of [[Literature/HarryPotterAndTheGobletOfFire book four]] that the time was right to tell Harry about the prophecy, Dumbledore to just tell Harry about the mental connection, the prophecy and Voldemort's plans for retrieving it, and explain that this is why he has to learn Occlumency. That way, Harry might be more motivated to do so. Even if he's really unwilling to tell Harry about the prophecy, he only needs to tell him a Cliff Notes version of the story: "Harry, the Department of Mysteries houses a weapon Voldemort is seeking but cannot have by himself, so he might try to get you to travel there and get it for him." Given that Harry has already worked to impede Voldemort from stealing the Philosopher's/Sorcerer's Stone through very similar methods, it would be easy for him to believe and understand.\\
'''You'd Also Expect:''' Harry to take it seriously for his own reasons, as he knows how devious and cunning Voldemort can be, and there's no reason why a powerful wizard like him cannot weaponize their connection in a variety of ways. He shouldn't even be surprised (only worried, understandably) at hearing Moody speculate that Voldemort might be possessing him, and this should only make him even more motivated to impede it. After all, Voldemor already possessed Quirrell.\\
'''Instead:''' No-one tells Harry anything other than "you MUST learn Occlumency because we say it", "Voldemort and you might be able to read each other's mind, but you must NOT do it even though it has proved really useful" and "There is NOTHING in the Department of Mysteries that concerns you". Harry himself doesn't give it any importance, and as one of his visions fortuitously resulted in saving Arthur Weasley's life, he ends up convinced that any possible benefit of the visions effectively outweigh its risks.\\
'''As A Result:''' Harry doesn't take the lessons as seriously as the Order would like him to, remains curious about the Department of Mysteries related dreams he keeps having, and is surprised when the Order consider it a big deal that Snape's no longer teaching him.
'''You'd Expect:''' Given that Dumbledore had decided at the end of [[Literature/HarryPotterAndTheGobletOfFire book four]] that the time was right to tell Harry about the prophecy, Dumbledore to just tell Harry about the mental connection, the prophecy and Voldemort's plans for retrieving it, and explain that this is why he has to learn Occlumency. That way, Harry might be more motivated to do so. Even if he's really unwilling to tell Harry about the prophecy, he only needs to tell him a Cliff Notes version of the story: "Harry, the Department of Mysteries houses a weapon Voldemort is seeking but cannot have by himself, so he might try to get you to travel there and get it for him." Given that Harry has already worked to impede Voldemort from stealing the Philosopher's/Sorcerer's Stone through very similar methods, it would be easy for him to believe and understand.\\
'''You'd Also Expect:''' Harry to take it seriously for his own reasons, as he knows how devious and cunning Voldemort can be, and there's no reason why a powerful wizard like him cannot weaponize their connection in a variety of ways. He shouldn't even be surprised (only worried, understandably) at hearing Moody speculate that Voldemort might be possessing him, and this should only make him even more motivated to impede it. After all, Voldemor already possessed Quirrell.\\
'''Instead:''' No-one tells Harry anything other than "you MUST learn Occlumency because we say it", "Voldemort and you might be able to read each other's mind, but you must NOT do it even though it has proved really useful" and "There is NOTHING in the Department of Mysteries that concerns you". Harry himself doesn't give it any importance, and as one of his visions fortuitously resulted in saving Arthur Weasley's life, he ends up convinced that any possible benefit of the visions effectively outweigh its risks.\\
'''As A Result:''' Harry doesn't take the lessons as seriously as the Order would like him to, remains curious about the Department of Mysteries related dreams he keeps having, and is surprised when the Order consider it a big deal that Snape's no longer teaching him.
* At the start of each Occlumency lesson, Snape places certain memories in a Pensieve, so that if Harry attempts to defend himself against Snape's Legilimency (or if Voldemort picks that moment to enter Harry's mind and use Legilimency on Snape), those memories won't be available. Harry knows Snape is spying on Voldemort for Dumbledore, and at this point in the series seems to agree with Dumbledore's trust of Snape.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to not look in the Pensieve. It's an easily-avoidable breach of privacy in itself, but the idiocy comes in when you realise a) Harry knows Snape is spying on Voldemort; b) Voldemort is a powerful Legilimens; c) the whole point of these lessons is that he needs to stop Voldemort entering his mind; and d) he hasn't been practicing like Snape told him, because he really wants to know the secret Voldemort is telepathically dangling in front of him. All this means that anything Harry sees, Voldemort might see, and Harry even considers that Snape might be hiding important secrets of the Order of the Phoenix in the Pensieve. Even without entering strategic ground, Harry should also consider that Snape might realize (either by catching Harry using the Pensieve or by reading those memories on Harry's head) and could become ''seriously angry'' at him for peeking at memories Snape specifically wanted Harry not to see. Again, ethics and practicality are at one in this: ''Harry should not look in the Pensieve.''\\
'''Instead:''' [[ForegoneConclusion Harry looks in the Pensieve.]] Specifically hoping he'll find information on the thing the Order is trying to keep safe from Voldemort. Fortunately, Voldemort isn't looking through Harry's eyes at the time, and Harry randomly gets a memory of one of the things Snape regrets the most.\\
'''As A Result:''' When Snape comes back from dealing with a student-related emergency and finds Harry with his face in such a personal memory, he's understandably furious, throws Harry out, and ends the lessons.\\
'''You Also Expect:''' Snape, knowing that Harry's not engaging in Occlumency lessons, and that he has a history for being nosy and being overly curious, would not ostentatiously pour his memories in the Pensieve in front of Harry (showing him that he's hiding something), or alternatively put the memories in a phial like how Dumbledore collects memories and keep it under his bed or in a pocket inside his cloak. This is in keeping with both his opinion of Harry's character and likewise representative of his own position as a spy and Potions expert, and his secretive nature.\\
'''Instead:''' He pours memories in the Pensieve in front of Harry, leaves the room with the Pensieve container open with all his memories still floating inside. This after taunting Harry by lording over his knowledge and position in the Order, interspersed with insults to him and his family, which naturally is only going to make Harry respect him and his privacy and position even less than before.
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to not look in the Pensieve. It's an easily-avoidable breach of privacy in itself, but the idiocy comes in when you realise a) Harry knows Snape is spying on Voldemort; b) Voldemort is a powerful Legilimens; c) the whole point of these lessons is that he needs to stop Voldemort entering his mind; and d) he hasn't been practicing like Snape told him, because he really wants to know the secret Voldemort is telepathically dangling in front of him. All this means that anything Harry sees, Voldemort might see, and Harry even considers that Snape might be hiding important secrets of the Order of the Phoenix in the Pensieve. Even without entering strategic ground, Harry should also consider that Snape might realize (either by catching Harry using the Pensieve or by reading those memories on Harry's head) and could become ''seriously angry'' at him for peeking at memories Snape specifically wanted Harry not to see. Again, ethics and practicality are at one in this: ''Harry should not look in the Pensieve.''\\
'''Instead:''' [[ForegoneConclusion Harry looks in the Pensieve.]] Specifically hoping he'll find information on the thing the Order is trying to keep safe from Voldemort. Fortunately, Voldemort isn't looking through Harry's eyes at the time, and Harry randomly gets a memory of one of the things Snape regrets the most.\\
'''As A Result:''' When Snape comes back from dealing with a student-related emergency and finds Harry with his face in such a personal memory, he's understandably furious, throws Harry out, and ends the lessons.\\
'''You Also Expect:''' Snape, knowing that Harry's not engaging in Occlumency lessons, and that he has a history for being nosy and being overly curious, would not ostentatiously pour his memories in the Pensieve in front of Harry (showing him that he's hiding something), or alternatively put the memories in a phial like how Dumbledore collects memories and keep it under his bed or in a pocket inside his cloak. This is in keeping with both his opinion of Harry's character and likewise representative of his own position as a spy and Potions expert, and his secretive nature.\\
'''Instead:''' He pours memories in the Pensieve in front of Harry, leaves the room with the Pensieve container open with all his memories still floating inside. This after taunting Harry by lording over his knowledge and position in the Order, interspersed with insults to him and his family, which naturally is only going to make Harry respect him and his privacy and position even less than before.
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* Cho Chang decides to join the illegal defence group Harry had set up. She also has a friend, Marietta Edgecombe, whose mother works at the Ministry of Magic, and would therefore be likely to lose her job if her daughter got on the wrong side of Umbridge.\\
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* Harry, Hermione and company decide to set up an illegal group to replace the lessons in Defense against the Dark Arts they are not receiving. Their first suggestion for its name, courtesy of Cho Chang, is Defense Association, but Ginny then proposes to go all out and name it Dumbledore's Army.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Anybody to point out why this idea is precisely horrible: that in case of this name being discovered or leaked out, they would be accidentally making it look like Dumbledore is setting up a paramilitary ChildSoldier squad, not very far from what the increasingly paranoiac Minister of Magic's believes Dumbledore might be trying to do. This would not only compromise Dumbledore and the entire Hogwarts, but might also bring fatal consequences on themselves, judging by how the Wizarding World is not even shy about making minors responsible of questionably attributed crimes.\\
'''You'd Also Expect:''' Hermione and/or Harry to try to keep a second layer of secrecy, or at least come up with a perfunctory excuse not to ruin their entire cause in the case the secret is compromised at some point. There's a plethora of illegal activities the DA members could claim to have been doing if caught: they could pretend to be an illegal drinking club, or part of Fred' and George's schemes, or a new incarnation of S.P.E.W., or even a FightClubbing group not tied to any particular political stance (after all, there ''was'' a real Duelling Club in Hogwarts which was desbanded). It might not be particularly credible, but anything would be better than the truth.\\
'''Instead:''' They like Ginny's idea and proclaim themselves Dumbledore's Army, to a point even slightly considering themselves to be ExactlyWhatItSaysOnTheTin, and lay no B-plan in the case they might be discovered. They ''do'' get eventually discovered, and Dumbledore is forced to take the blame for it to protect all the students involved. Incidentally, being on the run turns out to be somewhat opportune for Dumbledore, but it also allows the Ministry and Umbridge to fully take over Hogwarts.
* Cho Chang decides to join theillegal defence group Harry had set up.DA. She also has a friend, Marietta Edgecombe, whose mother works at the Ministry of Magic, and would therefore be likely to lose her job if her daughter got on the wrong side of Umbridge.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Anybody to point out why this idea is precisely horrible: that in case of this name being discovered or leaked out, they would be accidentally making it look like Dumbledore is setting up a paramilitary ChildSoldier squad, not very far from what the increasingly paranoiac Minister of Magic's believes Dumbledore might be trying to do. This would not only compromise Dumbledore and the entire Hogwarts, but might also bring fatal consequences on themselves, judging by how the Wizarding World is not even shy about making minors responsible of questionably attributed crimes.\\
'''You'd Also Expect:''' Hermione and/or Harry to try to keep a second layer of secrecy, or at least come up with a perfunctory excuse not to ruin their entire cause in the case the secret is compromised at some point. There's a plethora of illegal activities the DA members could claim to have been doing if caught: they could pretend to be an illegal drinking club, or part of Fred' and George's schemes, or a new incarnation of S.P.E.W., or even a FightClubbing group not tied to any particular political stance (after all, there ''was'' a real Duelling Club in Hogwarts which was desbanded). It might not be particularly credible, but anything would be better than the truth.\\
'''Instead:''' They like Ginny's idea and proclaim themselves Dumbledore's Army, to a point even slightly considering themselves to be ExactlyWhatItSaysOnTheTin, and lay no B-plan in the case they might be discovered. They ''do'' get eventually discovered, and Dumbledore is forced to take the blame for it to protect all the students involved. Incidentally, being on the run turns out to be somewhat opportune for Dumbledore, but it also allows the Ministry and Umbridge to fully take over Hogwarts.
* Cho Chang decides to join the
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'''Instead:''' She makes Marietta come to the meeting with her (her words), effectively lumping her with the group whether she likes it or not.\\
'''As A Result:''' Things are all well and dandy for about six months, but then Marietta reports the group to Umbridge, and Dumbledore is forced to take the blame for it to protect all the students involved. Marietta, meanwhile, is left disfigured and viewed as a traitor as a result of her "betrayal", whereas Cho -- who was technically responsible for all of this -- [[KarmaHoudini faces absolutely no consequences as a result of her actions]].
* Marietta, having been forced to join the DA, thinks twice and decides to act in order not to endanger her mother's job in the Ministry.\\
'''As A Result:''' Things are all well and dandy for about six months, but then Marietta reports the group to Umbridge, and Dumbledore is forced to take the blame for it to protect all the students involved. Marietta, meanwhile, is left disfigured and viewed as a traitor as a result of her "betrayal", whereas Cho -- who was technically responsible for all of this -- [[KarmaHoudini faces absolutely no consequences as a result of her actions]].
* Marietta, having been forced to join the DA, thinks twice and decides to act in order not to endanger her mother's job in the Ministry.\\
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'''Instead:''' Cho makes Marietta come to the meeting with her (her words), effectively lumping her with the group whether she likes it or not. Hermione seemingly never realized there was at least one reluctant member.\\
'''As A Result:''' Things are all well and dandy for about six months, but then Marietta reports the group to
* Marietta, having been forced to join the DA, spends some months with them, but thinks twice and decides to act in order not to endanger her mother's job in the Ministry.\\
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'''Instead:''' She betrays the entire group to Umbridge, seemingly of her own volition. By doing this, she doesn't only sell out a good portion of the student body, but [[WithFriendsLikeThese also her very best friend]], just to "save her mother's job." Harry even lampshades this when confronting Cho about it, how it's a lousy excuse because for nearly seven months, they had been successfully doing the classes with no outsiders the wiser.
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'''Instead:''' She betrays the entire group to Umbridge, and seemingly of her own volition. By doing this, she doesn't only sell out a good portion of the student body, but [[WithFriendsLikeThese also her very best friend]], just to "save her mother's job." Harry even lampshades this when confronting Cho about it, how it's a lousy excuse because for nearly seven months, they had been successfully doing the classes with no outsiders the wiser.
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'''Instead:''' Marietta rats out everyone in the DA, including her best friend. Again, Harry later directly lampshades to Cho that Marietta threw her under the bus and didn't show remorse for that.\\
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'''Instead:''' Marietta rats out everyone in the DA, including her best friend. Again, Harry later directly lampshades to Cho that Marietta threw her under the bus and didn't even show remorse for that.\\
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'''You'd Expect:''' The spell in question would have a practical effect. For example, if any one person breaks their vow, all the others would be immediately warned by some kind of alarm. Alternatively, have it inflict a Tongue-Tying Curse or Silencio or something similar to shut people up before they can say too much.\\
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'''You'd Expect:''' The spell in question would have a practical effect. For example, if any one person breaks their vow, all the others would be immediately warned by some kind of alarm. Alternatively, have it inflict a Tongue-Tying Curse or Silencio or something similar to shut people up before they can say too much. Both options at the same time would be ideal.\\
* After Marietta's betrayal, Dobby appears in DA headquarters to warn them that the group's secrecy has been compromised and Umbridge is coming.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to grab the Marauder's Map and find out the positions of Umbridge, Filch and any name suspicious of being an ally of hers (especially Slytherins), at the very least to make sure the enemy is not yet literally behind the door or in their way out. He should order the group to keep calm, exit the room and scatter divided in small groups to avoid ambushes and not to raise suspicions.\\
'''Instead:''' Harry basically screams "every man for himself", and not content with that, he runs away completely alone and without any care.\\
'''As a Result:''' Harry falls in a rather flimsy one-man ambush by Draco, who was hiding nearby. This leaves him to be arrested by Umbridge. Other students are implied to be captured the same ways by the Slytherin students who would become the Inquisitorial Squad.\\
'''Even Worse:''' They leave in the room the sign-up sheet with the names of the entire group, which compromises them all. The sheet is later found by Pansy Parkinson and used by Umbridge as a proof.
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to grab the Marauder's Map and find out the positions of Umbridge, Filch and any name suspicious of being an ally of hers (especially Slytherins), at the very least to make sure the enemy is not yet literally behind the door or in their way out. He should order the group to keep calm, exit the room and scatter divided in small groups to avoid ambushes and not to raise suspicions.\\
'''Instead:''' Harry basically screams "every man for himself", and not content with that, he runs away completely alone and without any care.\\
'''As a Result:''' Harry falls in a rather flimsy one-man ambush by Draco, who was hiding nearby. This leaves him to be arrested by Umbridge. Other students are implied to be captured the same ways by the Slytherin students who would become the Inquisitorial Squad.\\
'''Even Worse:''' They leave in the room the sign-up sheet with the names of the entire group, which compromises them all. The sheet is later found by Pansy Parkinson and used by Umbridge as a proof.
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* Harry sees a vision of Sirius being tortured at the Department of Mysteries. Instead of wondering how either Voldemort or Sirius, the two biggest fugitives in the ''country,'' got into the middle of the government building, and ''knowing'' that he shares a mind-link with Voldemort, who himself has learned this and could use it to his advantage, Harry doesn't even consider that it might be a trap. Even worse, he plans to personally rush off to fight Voldemort one-on-one, even though the blood protection doesn't even work anymore and he doesn't know if their wands connection will save him again as in the previous book (which, if Voldemort is not alone or arranging a duel again, will likely not).\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to play it cool and consider that such a convenient vision might be a trap, specifically the exact kind of trap he has been warned about for ''months''. With the safety that it is improbable the vision is real, he can try to reach out to any available member of the Order, like [=McGonagall=] or Snape, send owls to any other member (even though he doesn't know exactly where Dumbledore is, an owl might be able to find him), or go to Grimmauld Place on a broomstick.\\
'''Instead:''' Although he does check Grimmauld Place at Hermione's urging, and receives a (nebulous and not quite reliable) testimony by Kreacher that Sirius has gone to the Department, he ''still'' doesn't consider that it might be a trap, and flies straight into the Ministry believing that surely, there's [[SarcasmMode no way Voldemort himself could possibly be a threat]].
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to play it cool and consider that such a convenient vision might be a trap, specifically the exact kind of trap he has been warned about for ''months''. With the safety that it is improbable the vision is real, he can try to reach out to any available member of the Order, like [=McGonagall=] or Snape, send owls to any other member (even though he doesn't know exactly where Dumbledore is, an owl might be able to find him), or go to Grimmauld Place on a broomstick.\\
'''Instead:''' Although he does check Grimmauld Place at Hermione's urging, and receives a (nebulous and not quite reliable) testimony by Kreacher that Sirius has gone to the Department, he ''still'' doesn't consider that it might be a trap, and flies straight into the Ministry believing that surely, there's [[SarcasmMode no way Voldemort himself could possibly be a threat]].
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* Harry sees a vision of Sirius being tortured at the Department of Mysteries. Instead of wondering how either Voldemort or Sirius, the two biggest fugitives in the ''country,'' got into the middle of the government building, and ''knowing'' that he shares a mind-link with Voldemort, who himself has learned this and could use it to his advantage, Harry doesn't even consider that it might be a trap. Even worse, he plans to personally rush off to fight Voldemort one-on-one, even though the blood protection doesn't even work anymore and he doesn't know if their wands connection will save him again as in the previous book (which, if Voldemort is not alone or arranging a duel again, will likely not).\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to play it cool and consider that such a convenient vision might be a trap, specifically the exact kind of trap he has been warned about for''months''. ''months'', knowing that he shares a mind-link with Voldemort which the latter has learned about and might be try to use it to his advantage. With the safety that it is improbable the vision is might be real, he can try to reach out to any available member of the Order, like [=McGonagall=] or Snape, send owls to any other member (even though he doesn't know exactly where Dumbledore is, an owl might be able to find him), or go to Grimmauld Place on a broomstick.\\
'''Instead:''' Never wondering how either Voldemort or Sirius, the two biggest fugitives in the country, got into the middle of the government building, Harry doesn't even consider that it might be a trap. Although he does check Grimmauld Place at Hermione's urging, and receives a (nebulous and not quite reliable) testimony by Kreacher that Sirius has gone to the Department, he ''still'' doesn't consider that it might be a trap, and flies straight into theMinistry believing that surely, there's [[SarcasmMode no way Ministry. This obviously entails the possibility of personally fighting Voldemort, even though the blood protection doesn't even work anymore and he doesn't know if their wands connection will save him again as in the previous book (which, if Voldemort himself could possibly be is not alone or arranging a threat]]. duel again, will likely not).
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to play it cool and consider that such a convenient vision might be a trap, specifically the exact kind of trap he has been warned about for
'''Instead:''' Never wondering how either Voldemort or Sirius, the two biggest fugitives in the country, got into the middle of the government building, Harry doesn't even consider that it might be a trap. Although he does check Grimmauld Place at Hermione's urging, and receives a (nebulous and not quite reliable) testimony by Kreacher that Sirius has gone to the Department, he ''still'' doesn't consider that it might be a trap, and flies straight into the
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'''Bonus:''' There's a point in which Umbridge trips on a root and falls to the ground behind them, and all their reaction is merely not to help her up. The thought of pouncing on her at once and capitalize on the moment to wrestle her wand away, especially given that they are two on one and much younger than her, doesn't even cross their heads.
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'''Bonus:''' There's a point in which Umbridge trips on a root and falls to the ground behind them, and all their reaction is merely not to help her up. The thought of pouncing on her at once and capitalize on the moment to wrestle wrest her wand away, especially given that they are two on one and much younger than her, doesn't even cross their heads.
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* At the start of each Occlumency lesson, Snape places certain memories in a Pensieve, so that if Harry attempts to defend himself against Snape's Legilimency (or if Voldemort picks that moment to enter Harry's mind and use Legilimency on Snape), those memories won't be available. Harry knows Snape is spying on Voldemort for Dumbledore, and at this point in the series seems to agree with Dumbledore's trust of Snape.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to not look in the Pensieve. It's an easily-avoidable breach of privacy in itself, but the idiocy comes in when you realise a) Harry knows Snape is spying on Voldemort; b) Voldemort is a powerful Legilimens; c) the whole point of these lessons is that he needs to stop Voldemort entering his mind; and d) he hasn't been practicing like Snape told him, because he really wants to know the secret Voldemort is telepathically dangling in front of him. All this means that anything Harry sees, Voldemort might see, and Harry even considers that Snape might be hiding important secrets of the Order of the Phoenix in the Pensieve. Even without entering strategic ground, Harry should also consider that Snape might realize (either by catching Harry using the Pensieve or by reading those memories on Harry's head) and could become ''seriously angry'' at him for peeking at memories Snape specifically wanted Harry not to see. Again, ethics and practicality are at one in this: ''Harry should not look in the Pensieve.''\\
'''Instead:''' [[ForegoneConclusion Harry looks in the Pensieve.]] Specifically hoping he'll find information on the thing the Order is trying to keep safe from Voldemort. Fortunately, Voldemort isn't looking through Harry's eyes at the time, and Harry randomly gets a memory of one of the things Snape regrets the most.\\
'''As A Result:''' When Snape comes back from dealing with a student-related emergency and finds Harry with his face in such a personal memory, he's understandably furious, throws Harry out, and ends the lessons.\\
'''You Also Expect:''' Snape, knowing that Harry's not engaging in Occlumency lessons, and that he has a history for being nosy and being overly curious, would not ostentatiously pour his memories in the Pensieve in front of Harry (showing him that he's hiding something), or alternatively put the memories in a phial like how Dumbledore collects memories and keep it under his bed or in a pocket inside his cloak. This is in keeping with both his opinion of Harry's character and likewise representative of his own position as a spy and Potions expert, and his secretive nature.\\
'''Instead:''' He pours memories in the Pensieve in front of Harry, leaves the room with the Pensieve container open with all his memories still floating inside. This after taunting Harry by lording over his knowledge and position in the Order, interspersed with insults to him and his family, which naturally is only going to make Harry respect him and his privacy and position even less than before.
'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to not look in the Pensieve. It's an easily-avoidable breach of privacy in itself, but the idiocy comes in when you realise a) Harry knows Snape is spying on Voldemort; b) Voldemort is a powerful Legilimens; c) the whole point of these lessons is that he needs to stop Voldemort entering his mind; and d) he hasn't been practicing like Snape told him, because he really wants to know the secret Voldemort is telepathically dangling in front of him. All this means that anything Harry sees, Voldemort might see, and Harry even considers that Snape might be hiding important secrets of the Order of the Phoenix in the Pensieve. Even without entering strategic ground, Harry should also consider that Snape might realize (either by catching Harry using the Pensieve or by reading those memories on Harry's head) and could become ''seriously angry'' at him for peeking at memories Snape specifically wanted Harry not to see. Again, ethics and practicality are at one in this: ''Harry should not look in the Pensieve.''\\
'''Instead:''' [[ForegoneConclusion Harry looks in the Pensieve.]] Specifically hoping he'll find information on the thing the Order is trying to keep safe from Voldemort. Fortunately, Voldemort isn't looking through Harry's eyes at the time, and Harry randomly gets a memory of one of the things Snape regrets the most.\\
'''As A Result:''' When Snape comes back from dealing with a student-related emergency and finds Harry with his face in such a personal memory, he's understandably furious, throws Harry out, and ends the lessons.\\
'''You Also Expect:''' Snape, knowing that Harry's not engaging in Occlumency lessons, and that he has a history for being nosy and being overly curious, would not ostentatiously pour his memories in the Pensieve in front of Harry (showing him that he's hiding something), or alternatively put the memories in a phial like how Dumbledore collects memories and keep it under his bed or in a pocket inside his cloak. This is in keeping with both his opinion of Harry's character and likewise representative of his own position as a spy and Potions expert, and his secretive nature.\\
'''Instead:''' He pours memories in the Pensieve in front of Harry, leaves the room with the Pensieve container open with all his memories still floating inside. This after taunting Harry by lording over his knowledge and position in the Order, interspersed with insults to him and his family, which naturally is only going to make Harry respect him and his privacy and position even less than before.
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'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to realize the incredibly obvious fact that Snape can't speak clearly in front of Umbridge (something Dumbledore points out later), and to check in with him once he's gotten rid of Umbridge.\\
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'''You'd Expect:''' Harry to realize the incredibly obvious fact that Snape can't speak clearly in front of Umbridge (something Dumbledore points out later), especially because ''this is the reason he's giving Snape a coded message in the first place'', and to check in with him once he's gotten rid of Umbridge.\\
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'''You'd Expect:''' Given that Dumbledore had decided at the end of [[Literature/HarryPotterAndTheGobletOfFire book four]] that the time was right to tell Harry about the Prophecy, Dumbledore to just tell Harry about the mental connection, the prophecy and Voldemort's plans for retrieving it, and explain that this is why he has to learn Occlumency. That way, Harry might be more motivated to do so. Even if he's really unwilling to tell Harry about the prophecy, he only needs to tell him a Cliff Notes version of the story: "Harry, the Department of Mysteries houses a weapon Voldemort is seeking but cannot have by himself, so he might try to get you to travel there and get it for him." After all, Harry has already worked to impede Voldemort from stealing the Philosopher's/Sorcerer's Stone, and it would be easy for him to understand.\\
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'''You'd Expect:''' Given that Dumbledore had decided at the end of [[Literature/HarryPotterAndTheGobletOfFire book four]] that the time was right to tell Harry about the Prophecy, prophecy, Dumbledore to just tell Harry about the mental connection, the prophecy and Voldemort's plans for retrieving it, and explain that this is why he has to learn Occlumency. That way, Harry might be more motivated to do so. Even if he's really unwilling to tell Harry about the prophecy, he only needs to tell him a Cliff Notes version of the story: "Harry, the Department of Mysteries houses a weapon Voldemort is seeking but cannot have by himself, so he might try to get you to travel there and get it for him." After all, Harry has already worked to impede Voldemort from stealing the Philosopher's/Sorcerer's Stone, and it would be easy for him to understand.\\
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'''As A Result:''' Harry doesn't take the lessons as seriously as the Order would like him to, remains curious about the Department of Mysteries related dreams he keeps having, and is surprised when the Order consider it a big deal that Snape's no longer teaching him.
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'''As A Result:''' Harry doesn't take the lessons as seriously as the Order would like him to, remains curious about the Department of Mysteries related dreams he keeps having, and is surprised when the Order consider it a big deal that Snape's no longer teaching him.\\
'''You'd Also Expect:''' Since Dumbledore was the person the prophecy was made to and can therefore recall it word for word whenever he wants through the Pensieve, he would have the copy at the Department of Mysteries destroyed since it's worthless to him but extremely valuable to Voldemort. A simple Reductor Curse is shown to be enough to destroy any prophecy and unlike physically removing it, this doesn't have to be done by a subject of the prophecy so Dumbledore could send any Order member to do it.\\
'''Instead:''' Dumbledore has the Order guard the prophecy from Voldemort's attempts to steal it.\\
'''The Result:''' Arthur Weasley is almost killed on guard duty, Voldemort nearly succeeds in stealing the prophecy, the prophecy gets destroyed anyway, Sirius is killed, and Dumbledore finally shares the version of the prophecy in his head with Harry, making the whole exercise AllForNothing.
'''You'd Also Expect:''' Since Dumbledore was the person the prophecy was made to and can therefore recall it word for word whenever he wants through the Pensieve, he would have the copy at the Department of Mysteries destroyed since it's worthless to him but extremely valuable to Voldemort. A simple Reductor Curse is shown to be enough to destroy any prophecy and unlike physically removing it, this doesn't have to be done by a subject of the prophecy so Dumbledore could send any Order member to do it.\\
'''Instead:''' Dumbledore has the Order guard the prophecy from Voldemort's attempts to steal it.\\
'''The Result:''' Arthur Weasley is almost killed on guard duty, Voldemort nearly succeeds in stealing the prophecy, the prophecy gets destroyed anyway, Sirius is killed, and Dumbledore finally shares the version of the prophecy in his head with Harry, making the whole exercise AllForNothing.
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There are no "manipulations" of Dumbledore's that Fudge can counter here: Harry saw Voldemort return and that's just too inconvenient for Fudge, simple as that. And just what kind of deal is he supposed to make with Harry, when the main thing the kid wants is for the Ministry to acknowledge that Voldemort's back? Not saying this isn't a valid tactic for Fudge to try - especially seeing as he doesn't have the knowledge Harry and the readers do - just that it likely wouldn't work, and thus it's hardly "something else that is better".
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* The Ministry believes that Dumbledore and Harry are involved in a common conspiracy to overthrow the government, faking Voldemort's return as part of their scheme.\\
'''You'd Expect:''' The Ministry would try to drive a wedge between Harry and Dumbledore, attempting to make a deal with Harry or otherwise counter Dumbledore's manipulations. In the Muggle world, when an adult and a child are engaged in a common act of misbehaviour, particularly when the adult is an authority figure, it is generally accepted that the adult bears the brunt of the blame. This would be surprisingly easy for the Ministry to do given that Dumbledore has voluntarily distanced himself from Harry and the latter is resentful of him.\\
'''Instead:''' The Ministry blames Harry and Dumbledore equally. Umbridge in particular goes out of her way to antagonize Harry with sadistic detentions and an obviously personal vendetta, ensuring Harry's continued support of Dumbledore.
'''You'd Expect:''' The Ministry would try to drive a wedge between Harry and Dumbledore, attempting to make a deal with Harry or otherwise counter Dumbledore's manipulations. In the Muggle world, when an adult and a child are engaged in a common act of misbehaviour, particularly when the adult is an authority figure, it is generally accepted that the adult bears the brunt of the blame. This would be surprisingly easy for the Ministry to do given that Dumbledore has voluntarily distanced himself from Harry and the latter is resentful of him.\\
'''Instead:''' The Ministry blames Harry and Dumbledore equally. Umbridge in particular goes out of her way to antagonize Harry with sadistic detentions and an obviously personal vendetta, ensuring Harry's continued support of Dumbledore.
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Voldemort using the link himself is discussed by Harry and Snape in their first lesson, with Snape pointing out that the physical distance and defensive enchantments on Hogwarts make this a very remote possibility. So while Harry's at Hogwarts, Voldemort isn't at all likely to learn anything about the lessons.
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'''Even worse:''' Even if they didn't hate each other, Snape was a double agent. His role demanded that he tells Voldemort about their lessons, because if Voldemort learned of them himself (say, through the link which they certainly couldn't hope to block overnight even in the best scenario), then Snape's cover was busted. Regardless, once Voldemort learns about their lessons, he would certainly order Snape to sabotage them, and that'd be an order that's very hard to weasel out of, seeing how Voldemort can personally monitor Harry's performance.\\
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By "can and has sent visions into his mind", are we referring to the things Harry saw happening in Little Hangleton back in Book 4? Because they're the only visions I can recall besides the dreams about the Department of Mysteries entrance - which had no logical connection to Voldemort as far as Harry knew - and they were very much not deliberate on Voldemort's part. As far as I remember, there's no reason for Harry to believe that Voldemort can do more than just peer into his mind.
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'''You'd Also Expect:''' Harry to take it seriously for his own reasons, given that he knows Voldemort can and has send visions into his mind, and there's no reason why a powerful wizard like him cannot weaponize it in a variety of ways. He shouldn't even be surprised (only worried, understandably) at hearing Moody speculate that Voldemort might be possessing him.\\
'''Instead:''' No-one tells Harry anything other than "you MUST learn Occlumency because we say it", "Voldemort and you might be able to read each other's mind, but you must NOT do it even though it has proved really useful" and "There is NOTHING in the Department of Mysteries that concerns you". Harry himself doesn't give it any importance, being convinced that any possible benefit of the visions effectively outweigh its risks.\\
'''Instead:''' No-one tells Harry anything other than "you MUST learn Occlumency because we say it", "Voldemort and you might be able to read each other's mind, but you must NOT do it even though it has proved really useful" and "There is NOTHING in the Department of Mysteries that concerns you". Harry himself doesn't give it any importance, being convinced that any possible benefit of the visions effectively outweigh its risks.\\
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