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* BlackAndGreyMorality: Most of the petitioners' motives are either very self-centered or downright evil. Melody even points this out.
-->"This ****ed up story has no heroes."
-->"This ****ed up story has no heroes."
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* [[ShowdownAtHighNoon Showdown At A Quarter To Noon]]: Between Semblance and Melody.
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* [[ShowdownAtHighNoon Showdown At A Quarter To Noon]]: 9:00 AM]]: Between Semblance and Melody.
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* [[ShowdownAtHighNoon Showdown At A Quarter To Noon]]: Between Semblance and Melody.
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* ExactlyWhatItSaysOnTheTin: The Underworld city of Avalon actually burns up when the Nine reaches it. Hence, Burning Avalon.
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* EvenEvilHasStandards: Even demons dislike Dretos' methods of MindRape.
** {{Satan}} himself says that the Ninth Symphony is ''worse then Hell itself''.
** {{Satan}} himself says that the Ninth Symphony is ''worse then Hell itself''.
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* OffWithHisHead: Huitzi cuts off Ragdoll's head.
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* OffWithHisHead: Huitzi cuts off Ragdoll's head.
* PowerGivesYouWings: In the finale, Melody's amp arms turn into wings as she channels her ancestor's power.
* PowerGivesYouWings: In the finale, Melody's amp arms turn into wings as she channels her ancestor's power.
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* DealWithTheDevil: The tournament itself.
** Lucifer did this literally after he got badly injured in one arm and was about to die.
** Lucifer did this literally after he got badly injured in one arm and was about to die.
* KnifeNut: Lucifer, Ragdoll and Lil' Jack.
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* MeaningfulName: Melody Fasola comes from a family of MagicMusic users.
** Lucifer has the power of Satan in his right arm.
* TheMagicVersusTechnologyWar: Melody (a cyborg) fights against Lucifer (a guywho has the with {{Satan}}'s power of {{Satan}} in one arm) and Lil' Jack (a ChildMage). She beats both of them.
** Lucifer has the power of Satan in his right arm.
* TheMagicVersusTechnologyWar: Melody (a cyborg) fights against Lucifer (a guy
* RedRightHand: Evan and Lucifer.
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* TranslatorMicrobes: Huitzilin, the spirit parrot.
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* TranslatorMicrobes: Huitzilin, the spirit parrot.parrot.
* UseYourHead: Huitzi's headbutt attack on Clay.
* UseYourHead: Huitzi's headbutt attack on Clay.
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* TheGoodGuysAlwaysWin: A quote used by Lil' Jack. Twice. The second time, Melody tells him that this story [[BlackAndGreyMorality has no heroes]].
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* TheMagicVersusTechnologyWar: Melody (a cyborg) fights against Lucifer (a guy who has the power of {{Satan}} in one arm) and Lil' Jack (a ChildMage). She beats both of them.
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* BackFromTheDead: The person who acquires the soul coins can resurrect a person for themselves. However, some of the competitors have more sinister purposes...
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* HumanSacrifice: Huitzi reluctantly performs a [[BeatStillMyHeart heart sacrifice]] on Clay after the latter refused to give up fighting him.
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* ThePowerOfRock: Melody uses this at the end to destroy all of the Nine's minions. But this was not enough to beat Nine.
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* RockBeatsLaser: Huitzi (an Aztec warrior armed with nothing but a spear) actually manages to beat Melody (a cyborg girl with four sonic-blasting backpack speaker arms) in their first encounter, but this is stopped short by a horde of angry souls.
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* ActionGirl: Melody.
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* ColourCodedForYourConvenience: Ragdoll's scarf changes colour depending on his opponent's ([[TheEmpath and subsequently his own]]) emotions.
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* DarkIsNotEvil: Ragdoll.
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* TheEmpath: Ragdoll, who can only feel the emotions of those around him.
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* MacGuffin: The 16 soul coins. The person who acquires all can use them to revive one person.
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* OffWithHisHead: Huitzi cuts off Ragdoll's head.
* {{Resurrection}}: The person who acquires the soul coins can resurrect a person for themselves. However, some of the competitors have more sinister purposes...
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* ThereCanOnlyBeOne: Only one petitioner can use the 16 soul coins to revive a person of their choice. [[spoiler: Subverted when Melody refuses to use them.]]
* TheGoodGuysAlwaysWin: A quote used by Lil' Jack. Twice. The second time, Melody tells him that this story [[BlackAndGreyMorality has no heroes]].
* TheGoodGuysAlwaysWin: A quote used by Lil' Jack. Twice. The second time, Melody tells him that this story [[BlackAndGreyMorality has no heroes]].
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* ClimacticBattleResurrection: [[spoiler: Partial example. The Soul fragments inside the Soul Coins take the forms of ''all'' the petitioners, and they defeat Nine by ripping him apart and sealing him within the Soul Coins.]]
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* BittersweetEnding: [[spoiler: The Ninth Symphony is defeated, and the soul coins were not sacrificed to Murdoc, therefore the petitioners that were still alive in the tournament can technically go free. However, much of the underworld was ravaged by the Nine, and those who died in the tournament stay dead]].
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* BittersweetEnding: For a dark premise, the ending is surprisingly hopeful. [[spoiler: The Ninth Symphony is defeated, and the soul coins were not sacrificed to Murdoc, therefore the petitioners that were still alive in the tournament can technically go free. However, much of the underworld was ravaged by the Nine, and those who died in the tournament stay dead]].
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* DeusExMachina: The 16 soul coins [[spoiler: trap the Nine inside them]].
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* EnsembleDarkhorse: Ragdoll. Anxiety gets some of this too.
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* EnsembleDarkhorse: Ragdoll. Ragdoll, Anxiety gets some of this too.and Huitzi.
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** Played straight earlier when [[spoiler: Akeyra uses Huitzi's spear to destroy the soul-hungry god Loas.]]
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* BigBad: There isn't really one at first, until the [[EldritchAbomination Ninth Symphony]] appears.
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* BeatStillMyHeart: Huitzi performs this as per Aztec tradition after knocking Clay out a second time.
* BigBad: There isn't really one at first, until the [[EldritchAbomination Ninth Symphony]]appears.enters the underworld.
* BigBad: There isn't really one at first, until the [[EldritchAbomination Ninth Symphony]]
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* LetsFightLikeGentlemen: Semblance refuses to fight Melody when she was falling-down drunk, telling her to sleep and sober up for the following day's fight.
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The winner was [[http://beanjamish.deviantart.com/gallery/23795020 Beanjamish]] with Melody (story starts [[http://beanjamish.deviantart.com/art/BA-Noise-Pollution-01-145737238 here]]), second place going to [[http://unknown-person.deviantart.com/ Unknown-Person]] and [[tickity-tock.deviantart.com/gallery/ Tickity-Tock]] with Huitzi and Akeyra (starts [[http://tickity-tock.deviantart.com/art/Burning-Avalon-Audition-Page-1-155823607 here]]) however, to get the whole picture, reading the other entries is recommended.
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The winner was [[http://beanjamish.deviantart.com/gallery/23795020 Beanjamish]] with Melody (story starts [[http://beanjamish.deviantart.com/art/BA-Noise-Pollution-01-145737238 here]]), second place going to [[http://unknown-person.deviantart.com/ Unknown-Person]] and [[tickity-tock.[[http://tickity-tock.deviantart.com/gallery/ Tickity-Tock]] with Huitzi and Akeyra (starts [[http://tickity-tock.deviantart.com/art/Burning-Avalon-Audition-Page-1-155823607 here]]) however, to get the whole picture, reading the other entries is recommended.
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The winner was [[http://beanjamish.deviantart.com/gallery/23795020 Beanjamish]] with Melody (story starts [[http://beanjamish.deviantart.com/art/BA-Noise-Pollution-01-145737238 here]]), second place going to [[http://unknown-person.deviantart.com/ Unknown-Person]] and [[tickity-tock.deviantart.com/gallery/ Tickity-Tock]] with Huitzi and Akeyra (starts [[http://tickity-tock.deviantart.com/art/Burning-Avalon-Audition-Page-1-155823607 here]]) however, to get the whole picture, reading the other entries is recommended.
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* BittersweetEnding: [[spoiler: The Ninth Symphony is defeated, and the soul coins were not sacrificed to Murdoc, therefore the petitioners that were still alive in the tournament can technically go free. However, those who died in the tournament stay dead]].
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* BittersweetEnding: [[spoiler: The Ninth Symphony is defeated, and the soul coins were not sacrificed to Murdoc. However, Akeyra is unable to resurrect herself and has to stay in the underworld with Huitzi]].
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* BittersweetEnding: [[spoiler: The Ninth Symphony is defeated, and the soul coins were not sacrificed to Murdoc. Murdoc, therefore the petitioners that were still alive in the tournament can technically go free. However, Akeyra is unable to resurrect herself and has to stay those who died in the underworld with Huitzi]].tournament stay dead]].
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* ImpaledWithExtremePrejudice: Semblance gets killed by a falling clock hand. A gigantic one, no less.
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* DidYouJustFlipOffCthulhu: [[spoiler: After Melody gets attacked and curbstomped by the Ninth Symphony, it gives a speech on how everything is going to die. Mel's response?]]
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* DidYouJustFlipOffCthulhu: [[spoiler: After Melody gets attacked and curbstomped by the Ninth Symphony, it gives a speech on how everything is going to die. Mel's response?]]response?
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* AnimalisticAbomination: Anxiety. Good god, Anxiety. It looks like a giant worm with a human torso and a wolf's skull for its head.
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* EnsembleDarkhorse: Ragdoll. Anxiety gets some of this too.
* HumanoidAbomination: Ragdoll, a being made up of fragments of souls.
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!!This OCT contains examples of the following tropes:
* BigBad: There isn't really one at first, until the [[EldritchAbomination Ninth Symphony]] appears.
* BittersweetEnding: [[spoiler: The Ninth Symphony is defeated, and the soul coins were not sacrificed to Murdoc. However, Akeyra is unable to resurrect herself and has to stay in the underworld with Huitzi]].
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-->*{{flipping the bird}}* "Eat a dick."
* DidYouJustPunchOutCthulhu: [[spoiler: The souls from the 16 soul coins tear up The Ninth Symphony and seal it inside the coins]].
* {{Mayincatec}}: Huitzi, a resurrected Aztec warrior.
* TakeAThirdOption: [[spoiler: Melody doesn't use the soul coins to resurrect anyone and decides to face off against the Ninth Symphony without needing to resurrect her ancestor.]]
* TranslatorMicrobes: Huitzilin, the spirit parrot.
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->"Burning Avalon has been in place for longer than I have held this office; it's a tradition that stretches back centuries, if not longer. Personally I find the whole thing a little barbaric, and it tends to incite unwelcome amounts of discord among my wards, but the tournament is a mandate set forward by an authority higher than myself. As I understand it, Burning Avalon is a compromise of sorts. History is rife with examples of brave heroes rampaging around in the underworld to bring back the soul of some passing fling or another, or some necrotic sorcerer seeking to escape from its eternal fate by disrupting the natural order of things. Burning Avalon provides a means for everyone to get a chance at this madness, while being organized enough for me to continue running an effective afterlife for those who have the presence to work within the system.
->The rules are simple. Wager your soul (or closest approximation thereof in relation to your own existence), cruise around the underworld collecting the souls of your competition (in handy pocket friendly form), and then trade those souls to me for the life of one mortal. Easy.
->Of course, every system has it's malcontents and trouble makers."
Burning Avalon is a completed OriginalCharacterTournament hosted on deviantART [[http://burningavalon.deviantart.com/ here]].
In the Burning Avalon Tournament characters will hunt to underworld for the soul coins of their competition; hoping to trade the collected sum to Murdoc, God of the Dead, for one mortal life. Some participate in this adventure to escape from the afterlife, some seek to return the life of a lost loved one, and some seek more alien purposes. However, there is a price- those who lose their soul coins forfeit their soul to the underworld.
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* CrossoverCosmology: The land of the dead contains underworlds from different religions and mythologies. We have places like [[{{Zoroastrianism}} The Chinvat Bridge]], the [[ChineseMythology Sanzu River]], [[GreekMythology Tartarus]], The WorldTree, etc.
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->The rules are simple. Wager your soul (or closest approximation thereof in relation to your own existence), cruise around the underworld collecting the souls of your competition (in handy pocket friendly form), and then trade those souls to me for the life of one mortal. Easy.
->Of course, every system has it's malcontents and trouble makers."
Burning Avalon is a completed OriginalCharacterTournament hosted on deviantART [[http://burningavalon.deviantart.com/ here]].
In the Burning Avalon Tournament characters will hunt to underworld for the soul coins of their competition; hoping to trade the collected sum to Murdoc, God of the Dead, for one mortal life. Some participate in this adventure to escape from the afterlife, some seek to return the life of a lost loved one, and some seek more alien purposes. However, there is a price- those who lose their soul coins forfeit their soul to the underworld.
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* CrossoverCosmology: The land of the dead contains underworlds from different religions and mythologies. We have places like [[{{Zoroastrianism}} The Chinvat Bridge]], the [[ChineseMythology Sanzu River]], [[GreekMythology Tartarus]], The WorldTree, etc.
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