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* ShoutOut: A subtle one: as Bobbie's SanitySlippage increases, the number of exclamation marks in her notes gradually goes up, topping out at [[{{Discworld/Maskerade}} five]].
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* ShoutOut: A subtle one: as Bobbie's SanitySlippage increases, the number of exclamation marks in her notes gradually goes up, topping out at [[{{Discworld/Maskerade}} [[{{Literature/Maskerade}} five]].
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* FootnoteFever: The story contains an abundance of footnotes later added by Bobbie, mostly commenting on the "evil" of the Crusaders and lamenting her original ignorance. They're distinguished from the original text through red ink.
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* FootnoteFever: The story contains an abundance of footnotes later added by Bobbie, mostly commenting on the "evil" of the Crusaders and lamenting her original ignorance. They're initially distinguished from the original text through red ink.ink. Later on, that color is used to note particularly large drops in stability.
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* FreakOut: An epic one of these is what gets Bobbie "retired" from her job and sent away from Ponyville.
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* FreakOut: An epic one of these is what gets Bobbie "retired" from her job and sent away from Ponyville.put into therapy.
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* ScrapbookStory: The entire story is framed as Bobbie's journal over her experiences with the Crusaders.
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* ScrapbookStory: The entire story is framed as Bobbie's journal over told through Ponyville police department Juvenile Affairs incident reports written by Bobbie. Initially, these simply detail her experiences interactions with the Crusaders.Crusaders as minor laws are broken during their efforts. Later on, convinced that nopony else is actually ''reading'' the forms, she starts using them to record her suspicions, turning them into a cross between personal diary and low-level ApocalypticLog.
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* BookEnds: The story begins with an incident report from a noise pollution complaint, triggered by the Crusaders getting ready for the school talent show. It ends with a second report filed with the Manehattan police department, also composed by Bobbie, for the same infraction -- only this time, the pony being written up is ''[[HereWeGoAgain Babs Seed]]''.
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* BookEnds: The story begins with an incident report from a noise pollution complaint, triggered by the Crusaders getting ready for the school talent show. It ends with a second report filed with the Manehattan police department, also composed by Bobbie, for the same infraction -- only this time, the pony being written up is ''[[HereWeGoAgain Babs Seed]]''.
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* FootnoteFever: The story contains an abundance of footnotes later added by Bobbie, mostly commenting on the "evil" of the Crusaders and lamenting her original ignorance.
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* FootnoteFever: The story contains an abundance of footnotes later added by Bobbie, mostly commenting on the "evil" of the Crusaders and lamenting her original ignorance. They're distinguished from the original text through red ink.
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* MaybeMagicMaybeMundane: Even after being restored to sanity, Bobbie is insistent that ''something'' is going on with the Crusaders to make them such a focus of and magnet for chaos, and it's what leads to her leaving Ponyville.
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* ShellShockedVeteran: While being the Juvenile Affairs officer who deals with the Crusaders is certainly stressful, those incidents aren't what truly send Bobbie over the edge: Discord's temporary escape leaves her with PTSD, and learning that the trio was [[UnwittingInstigatorOfDoom fighting near the statue]] channels it towards them.
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* ShoutOut: A subtle one: as Bobbie's SanitySlippage increases, the number of exclamation marks in her notes gradually goes up, topping out at [[Discworld/Maskerade five]].
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* ShoutOut: A subtle one: as Bobbie's SanitySlippage increases, the number of exclamation marks in her notes gradually goes up, topping out at [[Discworld/Maskerade [[{{Discworld/Maskerade}} five]].
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* BookEnds: The story begins with an incident report from a noise pollution complaint, triggered by the Crusaders getting ready for the school talent show. It ends with a second report filed with the Manehattan police department, also composed by Bobbie, for the same infraction -- only this time, the pony being written up is ''[[HereWeGoAgain Babs Seed]]''.
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* ShoutOut: A subtle one: as Bobbie's SanitySlippage increases, the number of exclamation marks in her notes gradually goes up, topping out at [[Discworld/Maskerade five]].
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* SanitySlippage: Bobbie goes from a sweet, kindly mare who dismisses the Crusaders with a "kids being kids" attitude to a crazed, paranoid, anti-Crusader wreck who vehemently argues for their forcible dispersal at the very least.
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* FreakOut: An epic one of these is what gets Bobbie "retired" from her job and sent away from Ponyville.
* SanitySlippage: Bobbie goes from a sweet, kindly mare who dismisses the Crusaders with a "kids being kids" attitude to a crazed, paranoid, anti-Crusader wreck who vehemently argues for their forcible dispersal at the veryleast.least.
* ScrapbookStory: The entire story is framed as Bobbie's journal over her experiences with the Crusaders.
* WorldBuilding: This story, more than any other, establishes the rationale for why the Continuum's Crusaders are perceived InUniverse as [[HateSink a disaster waiting to happen]].
* SanitySlippage: Bobbie goes from a sweet, kindly mare who dismisses the Crusaders with a "kids being kids" attitude to a crazed, paranoid, anti-Crusader wreck who vehemently argues for their forcible dispersal at the very
* ScrapbookStory: The entire story is framed as Bobbie's journal over her experiences with the Crusaders.
* WorldBuilding: This story, more than any other, establishes the rationale for why the Continuum's Crusaders are perceived InUniverse as [[HateSink a disaster waiting to happen]].
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* SanitySlippage: Bobbie goes from a sweet, kindly mare who dismisses the Crusaders with a "kids being kids" attitude to a crazed, paranoid, anti-Crusader wreck who vehemently argues for their forcible dispersal at the very least.
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An examination of the notes of Bobbie Brassie, a town guard in Ponyville, as she slowly descends into madness in response to the ever-increasing delinquent anarchy of the Cutie Mark Crusaders.
Read it [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/173790/permanent-record here]].
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Read it [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/173790/permanent-record here]].
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!!Tropes found in this story include:
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