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* Fortress and Sure Hoof's hours of torment. They waited for as long as ''weeks'' without food and limited water for their companions to return and for re-enforcements to arrive. So much that Sure Hoof had to ''kill'' himself! Time went on, and [[NauseaFuel Fortress had to]] [[NauseaFuel ''eat'']] [[NauseaFuel the meat from Sure Hoof's corpse to survive]]!
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* Fortress and Sure Hoof's hours of torment. They waited for as long as ''weeks'' without food and limited water for their companions to return and for re-enforcements to arrive. So much that Sure Hoof had to ''kill'' himself! Time went on, and [[NauseaFuel Fortress had to]] [[NauseaFuel ''eat'']] ''[[NauseaFuel eat]]'' [[NauseaFuel the meat from Sure Hoof's corpse to survive]]!
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* Fortress and Sure Hoof's hours of torment. They waited for as long as ''weeks'' without food and limited water for their companions to return and for re-enforcements to arrive. So much that Sure Hoof had to ''kill'' himself! Time went on, and [[NauseaFuel Fortress had to ''eat'' the meat from Sure Hoof's corpse to survive]]!
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* Fortress and Sure Hoof's hours of torment. They waited for as long as ''weeks'' without food and limited water for their companions to return and for re-enforcements to arrive. So much that Sure Hoof had to ''kill'' himself! Time went on, and [[NauseaFuel Fortress had to ''eat'' to]] [[NauseaFuel ''eat'']] [[NauseaFuel the meat from Sure Hoof's corpse to survive]]!
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* The giant 'worm' thing made out of the remains of skeletons chasing Celestia, Twin Blades, Path Finder and
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* The giant 'worm' thing made out of the remains of skeletons chasing Celestia, Twin Blades, Path Finder andand Night Glaze.
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* The thought that both Luna and Twilight are lost in that death trap of a catacomb.
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* The thought that both Luna and Twilight are lost in that death trap of a catacomb.catacomb.
* The giant 'worm' thing made out of the remains of skeletons chasing Celestia, Twin Blades, Path Finder and
* The giant 'worm' thing made out of the remains of skeletons chasing Celestia, Twin Blades, Path Finder and
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* Fortress and Sure Hoof's hours of torment. They waited for as long as ''weeks'' without food and limited water for their companions to return and for re-enforcements to arrive. So much that Sure Hoof had to ''kill'' himself!
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* Fortress and Sure Hoof's hours of torment. They waited for as long as ''weeks'' without food and limited water for their companions to return and for re-enforcements to arrive. So much that Sure Hoof had to ''kill'' himself!himself! Time went on, and [[NauseaFuel Fortress had to ''eat'' the meat from Sure Hoof's corpse to survive]]!
** That part was possibly the creepiest part of the whole story!
* The thought that both Luna and Twilight are lost in that death trap of a catacomb.
** That part was possibly the creepiest part of the whole story!
* The thought that both Luna and Twilight are lost in that death trap of a catacomb.
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* The darkness. Oh God, [[LivingShadow the darkness]].
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* The darkness. Oh God, [[LivingShadow the darkness]].darkness]]!
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Seeing as this fic and its sequel are horrors, expect a lot of NightmareFuel. I hope you will sleep well tonight.
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* The descriptions of the atmosphere in the story gives off a very tense feeling. It might also gives some ParanoiaFuel.
* The darkness. Oh God, [[LivingShadow the darkness]].
* Fortress and Sure Hoof's hours of torment. They waited for as long as ''weeks'' without food and limited water for their companions to return and for re-enforcements to arrive. So much that Sure Hoof had to ''kill'' himself!
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* The descriptions of the atmosphere in the story gives off a very tense feeling. It might also gives some ParanoiaFuel.
* The darkness. Oh God, [[LivingShadow the darkness]].
* Fortress and Sure Hoof's hours of torment. They waited for as long as ''weeks'' without food and limited water for their companions to return and for re-enforcements to arrive. So much that Sure Hoof had to ''kill'' himself!
