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* Blackjack gets a first-hand view of how the Enclave [[MarkOfShame mark]] [[TheExile dashites]]. Their cutie marks are burnt away by chemicals strong enough to produce smoke, and the fresh wounds are then immediately branded. Worse, this happens to [[spoiler: Morning Glory, arguably the most moral character in the story]], who is completely loyal but being set up for political reasons.
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* Blackjack gets a first-hand view of how the Enclave [[MarkOfShame mark]] [[TheExile dashites]]. Their cutie marks are burnt away by chemicals strong enough to produce smoke, and the fresh wounds are then immediately branded. Worse, this happens to [[spoiler: Morning Glory, arguably the most moral character in the story]], story, who is completely loyal but being set up for political reasons.
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* Stable 90 was registered as complete and ready for habitation, despite having none of the essential fixtures or equipment installed. When the bombs fell, the residents were trapped inside, descending into barbarism and dying off completely in under a month. [[spoiler: The ponies of Stable 99 would have suffered the same fate if Blackjack hadn't gassed them all]].
* Chapter 22 is rife with nightmare fuel. The first thing Blackjack sees is [[spoiler: [[OffWithHisHead her mother's decapitated head]]]], [[TheVirus and]] [[EatenAlive it]] [[RapeAsDrama only]] [[WonTheWarLostThePeace gets]] [[MercyKill worse]] [[HeroicBSOD from]] [[DrivenToSuicide there]].
* Chapter 22 is rife with nightmare fuel. The first thing Blackjack sees is [[spoiler: [[OffWithHisHead her mother's decapitated head]]]], [[TheVirus and]] [[EatenAlive it]] [[RapeAsDrama only]] [[WonTheWarLostThePeace gets]] [[MercyKill worse]] [[HeroicBSOD from]] [[DrivenToSuicide there]].
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* Stable 90 was registered as complete and ready for habitation, despite having none of the essential fixtures or equipment installed. When the bombs fell, the residents were trapped inside, descending into barbarism and dying off completely in under a month. [[spoiler: The ponies of Stable 99 would have suffered the same fate if Blackjack hadn't gassed them all]].
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* Chapter 22 is rife with nightmare fuel. The first thing Blackjack sees is[[spoiler: [[OffWithHisHead her mother's decapitated head]]]], head]], [[TheVirus and]] [[EatenAlive it]] [[RapeAsDrama only]] [[WonTheWarLostThePeace gets]] [[MercyKill worse]] [[HeroicBSOD from]] [[DrivenToSuicide there]].
* Chapter 22 is rife with nightmare fuel. The first thing Blackjack sees is
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* All of final scene of Chapter 26, especially [[spoiler: Glory's wing falling off]], and [[spoiler: her]] reaction to it.
--> [[spoiler: She slowly picked it up and held it in her hooves. [[OhCrap “It fell off…”]] she said with a whimper, like a foal whose favorite toy had broken. [[HeroicBSOD She started to shake, at first with tears…]] [[LaughingMad but then she threw back her head, laughing hysterically.]] [[SanitySlippage “It fell off! It FELL the fuck off!”]] And with [[TearsOfBlood bloody tears]] she laughed and sobbed at the same time. [[BreakTheCutie “We’re going to die! We’re going to die!]] [[DespairEventHorizon Please let us fucking die!”]]]]
--> [[spoiler: She slowly picked it up and held it in her hooves. [[OhCrap “It fell off…”]] she said with a whimper, like a foal whose favorite toy had broken. [[HeroicBSOD She started to shake, at first with tears…]] [[LaughingMad but then she threw back her head, laughing hysterically.]] [[SanitySlippage “It fell off! It FELL the fuck off!”]] And with [[TearsOfBlood bloody tears]] she laughed and sobbed at the same time. [[BreakTheCutie “We’re going to die! We’re going to die!]] [[DespairEventHorizon Please let us fucking die!”]]]]
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* All of final scene of Chapter 26, especially [[spoiler: Glory's wing falling off]], off, and [[spoiler: her]] her reaction to it.
-->[[spoiler: She slowly picked it up and held it in her hooves. [[OhCrap “It fell off…”]] she said with a whimper, like a foal whose favorite toy had broken. [[HeroicBSOD She started to shake, at first with tears…]] [[LaughingMad but then she threw back her head, laughing hysterically.]] [[SanitySlippage “It fell off! It FELL the fuck off!”]] And with [[TearsOfBlood bloody tears]] she laughed and sobbed at the same time. [[BreakTheCutie “We’re going to die! We’re going to die!]] [[DespairEventHorizon Please let us fucking die!”]]]]die!”]]
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* Blackjack's [[NightmareSequence various nightmares]], particularly the one in Chapter 33. [[spoiler: Blackjack wakes up, apparently whole and healthy, in a BadFuture where Hoofington has become a monstrous world power. Blackjack's friends have all met awful fates - Rampage has [[SplitPersonalityTakeover lost her mind to the Angel of Death]], Scotch Tape is a [[SexSlave breeding slave]], Glory is an [[TragicMonster inequine]] [[BodyHorror mutant]], Lacunae and all of Unity have had their [[EmptyShell minds completely wiped out]], and P-21 is [[WoobieDestroyerOfWorlds behind it all.]]]]
* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves [[spoiler: Blackjack, who is blind and practically immobile, being mutilated[[note]] - her useless, mutated legs are nailed to the floor and her horn is smashed off -[[/note]] and gang-raped. The entire ordeal is narrated from BJ's [[NothingIsScarier sightless]] first-person perspective. There is no RapeDiscretionShot (though the hour-long ordeal is summarised in a couple of paragraphs). Scotch Tape, who is hiding in the hold below, overhears everything.]]
* [[spoiler:Priest]]'s death at Sanguine's hooves. It brings to mind [[http://www.thehypertexts.com/images/hiroshimaVictim30312219280994100.jpeg this]] (NSFW and graphic) picture of a Hiroshima survivor.
* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves [[spoiler: Blackjack, who is blind and practically immobile, being mutilated[[note]] - her useless, mutated legs are nailed to the floor and her horn is smashed off -[[/note]] and gang-raped. The entire ordeal is narrated from BJ's [[NothingIsScarier sightless]] first-person perspective. There is no RapeDiscretionShot (though the hour-long ordeal is summarised in a couple of paragraphs). Scotch Tape, who is hiding in the hold below, overhears everything.]]
* [[spoiler:Priest]]'s death at Sanguine's hooves. It brings to mind [[http://www.thehypertexts.com/images/hiroshimaVictim30312219280994100.jpeg this]] (NSFW and graphic) picture of a Hiroshima survivor.
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* Blackjack's [[NightmareSequence various nightmares]], particularly the one in Chapter 33. [[spoiler: Blackjack wakes up, apparently whole and healthy, in a BadFuture where Hoofington has become a monstrous world power. Blackjack's friends have all met awful fates - Rampage has [[SplitPersonalityTakeover lost her mind to the Angel of Death]], Scotch Tape is a [[SexSlave breeding slave]], Glory is an [[TragicMonster inequine]] [[BodyHorror mutant]], Lacunae and all of Unity have had their [[EmptyShell minds completely wiped out]], and P-21 is [[WoobieDestroyerOfWorlds behind it all.]]]]
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* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves[[spoiler: Blackjack, who is blind and practically immobile, being mutilated[[note]] - her useless, mutated legs are nailed to the floor and her horn is smashed off -[[/note]] and gang-raped. The entire ordeal is narrated from BJ's [[NothingIsScarier sightless]] first-person perspective. There is no RapeDiscretionShot (though the hour-long ordeal is summarised in a couple of paragraphs). Scotch Tape, who is hiding in the hold below, overhears everything.]]
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*[[spoiler:Priest]]'s Priest's death at Sanguine's hooves. It brings to mind [[http://www.thehypertexts.com/images/hiroshimaVictim30312219280994100.jpeg this]] (NSFW and graphic) picture of a Hiroshima survivor.
* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves
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* The visual representation of [[spoiler: Blackjack's traumatised, suicidal mind]].
--> '''[[AFormYouAreComfortableWith 'Glory']]:''' It doesn't have to be dark. [[spoiler: Your subconscious]] is... terrifying.
--> '''[[AFormYouAreComfortableWith 'Glory']]:''' It doesn't have to be dark. [[spoiler: Your subconscious]] is... terrifying.
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* The visual representation of [[spoiler: Blackjack's traumatised, suicidal mind]].
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--> '''[[AFormYouAreComfortableWith 'Glory']]:''' It doesn't have to be dark.[[spoiler: Your subconscious]] subconscious is... terrifying.
--> '''[[AFormYouAreComfortableWith 'Glory']]:''' It doesn't have to be dark.
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* In Chapter 62, Blackjack voluntarily - though not willingly - [[spoiler:enters Lighthooves' cyberpony enhancer and "upgrades" herself to a cybernetic alicorn. This despite her knowledge that CyberneticsEatYourSoul. ''She's fully conscious while the device implants wings into her back, strips the skin off her face and covers almost every inch of her with metal plating''.]] ''Yikes''.
* Also from 62, [[spoiler:the [[FantasticNuke implosion megaspell]] that Blackjack sets off. It creates a massive vortex that is enough to destroy practically all of Shadowbolt Tower - a monstrosity whose size can be measured in ''miles'' - and crushes it into a little sphere.]]
* Also from 62, [[spoiler:the [[FantasticNuke implosion megaspell]] that Blackjack sets off. It creates a massive vortex that is enough to destroy practically all of Shadowbolt Tower - a monstrosity whose size can be measured in ''miles'' - and crushes it into a little sphere.]]
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* In Chapter 62, Blackjack voluntarily - though not willingly - [[spoiler:enters enters Lighthooves' cyberpony enhancer and "upgrades" herself to into being a cybernetic alicorn. This despite her knowledge that CyberneticsEatYourSoul. ''She's fully conscious while the device implants wings into her back, strips the skin off her face and covers almost every inch of her with metal plating''.]] ''Yikes''.
* Also from 62,[[spoiler:the the [[FantasticNuke implosion megaspell]] that Blackjack sets off. It creates a massive vortex that is enough to destroy practically all of Shadowbolt Tower - a monstrosity whose size can be measured in ''miles'' - and crushes it into a little sphere.]]
* Also from 62,
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* In chapter 69, as Blackjack is trying to rally the denizens of the Hoofington wasteland, she proves who she is by consuming raw [[MutagenicGoo Flux/Taint]]. A skeptic insists it's a trick and, before she can stop him, he snatches the bottle from her and drains what's left. Initially, nothing happens... then [[BodyHorror the left side of his smiling mouth starts extending back down along his throat and over his ribcage, tentacles start curling out of the rift in his body, his stomach bulges and swells with worm-like masses rippling within, and his head starts to turn inside out]] as he flops over backwards and starts spasming. Then Doctor Triage [[MercyKill disintegrates him with her laser pistol]].
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* In chapter 69, as Blackjack is trying to rally the denizens of the Hoofington wasteland, she proves who she is by consuming raw [[MutagenicGoo Flux/Taint]]. A skeptic insists it's a trick and, before she can stop him, he snatches the bottle from her and drains what's left. Initially, nothing happens... then [[BodyHorror the left side of his smiling mouth starts extending back down along his throat and over his ribcage, tentacles start curling out of the rift in his body, his stomach bulges and swells with worm-like masses rippling within, and his head starts to turn inside out]] as he flops over backwards and starts spasming. Then Doctor Triage [[MercyKill disintegrates him with her laser pistol]].pistol]].
* In the epilogue, it's mentioned in passing that Dr. Morningstar's exposure to Poison Joke not only turned him from an old stallion into a young mare with a very healthy sexual appetite, further exposure to taint transformed him into a MotherOfAThousandYoung which had to be stopped by the Zodiac before it overran the Hoof with an army of monstrous offspring.
-->A grotesquely swollen Dr. Morningstar, fused with a golden tree, birthed a menagerie of fused creatures as she ranted and raved about her children. Candlewick, Dazzle, and Brutus faced her along with a half dozen others fighting to eliminate the horrific birthing monstrosity.
* In the epilogue, it's mentioned in passing that Dr. Morningstar's exposure to Poison Joke not only turned him from an old stallion into a young mare with a very healthy sexual appetite, further exposure to taint transformed him into a MotherOfAThousandYoung which had to be stopped by the Zodiac before it overran the Hoof with an army of monstrous offspring.
-->A grotesquely swollen Dr. Morningstar, fused with a golden tree, birthed a menagerie of fused creatures as she ranted and raved about her children. Candlewick, Dazzle, and Brutus faced her along with a half dozen others fighting to eliminate the horrific birthing monstrosity.
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* The fates of the members of Macintosh's Marauders are at first considered coincidental, but it turns out they were the downside of a DealWithTheDevil the platoon made with a zebra fortune teller to avoid a pitiful fate. The zebra used the Black Book (yes, ''that'' Black Book) to alter their fate but warned them if they [[BreakingTheFellowship broke their fellowship]], they would each suffer a FateWorseThanDeath while the culprit would die peacefully. Big Macintosh ultimately seals their doom by planning to retire and start a family, leading to nightmarish fates for his comrades when he performs HeroicSacrifice during the Battle of Shattered Ridge. Blackjack discovers what happened to each character during her journey - [[StrappedToAnOperatingTable Stonewing]], [[SanitySlippage Jetstream]], [[ImpaledWithExtremePrejudice Vanity]], [[CyberneticsEatYourSoul Doof]], [[SoulJar Twist]], [[OurZombiesAreDifferent Applesnack]], [[YouWillBeAssimilated Psalm]], and [[SoulJar Echo]].
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* The individual fates of the members of Macintosh's Marauders are at first considered coincidental, all horrible enough, but it turns out they were in the downside of a DealWithTheDevil ''Project: Horizons'' universe, it can always get worse. It's eventually revealed that, shortly after enlisting, the platoon made with spoke to a zebra fortune teller and learned that they were destined to avoid a pitiful fate. The zebra used die pointless, meaningless deaths shortly into the war. He then offered to ''[[WindsOfDestinyChange rewrite their fates]]'', an offer they accepted. He did this by using the [[TomeOfEldritchLore Black Book Book]] (yes, ''that'' ''[[Fanfic/FalloutEquestria that]]'' Black Book) to alter their fate but warned the collective fates. But there was a price: if any of them if they [[BreakingTheFellowship broke their fellowship]], they would each suffer a FateWorseThanDeath while FateWorseThanDeath, with only the culprit would die peacefully. receiving a peaceful death. So, of course, that's what happened: when Big Macintosh ultimately seals their doom by planning decided he was going to retire from the Marauders and start a family, leading to nightmarish fates for settle down with his comrades when marefriend Twilight Sparkle, that was the end of everything.
** As the one who broke the pact, Big Mac got the gentlest death; heperforms HeroicSacrifice was shot by teammate Psalm during the Battle of Shattered Ridge. Blackjack discovers what happened Ridge, but it was believed he made a HeroicSacrifice TakingTheBullet for Princess Celestia, resulting in his being honored as a martyr.
** Psalm herself went mad with guilt and allowed herself toeach character during her journey - be manipulated into enacting Operation Partypooper: a series of tactical assassinations on the day the megaspells hit Equestria that she believed were supposed to be preventing a coup against Princess Luna, but in fact was getting rid of anypony who could bring the Ministry to trial for their many war crimes. Then she was [[YouWillBeAssimilated assimilated into the Alicorn Unity]], where she became the dumping ground for the collective guilt and suffering of the HiveMind.
** Stonewing was officially killed in action in battle, but secretly was retrieved from the battlefield, alive but brain-damaged. [[StrappedToAnOperatingTableStonewing]], Then he was fused with a cockatrice as part of Project Chimera]], transforming him into a savage, near-bestial MixAndMatchCritters. He'd still be alive 200 years later, until Blackjack finally kills him by feeding him tail-first through a mining rockcrusher.
** Jetstream [[SanitySlippageJetstream]], [[ImpaledWithExtremePrejudice Vanity]], went mad with grief]] after Stonewing's apparent death, and was manipulated into kickstarting doomsday by being sent on what she was told was a rescue mission with a teleportation megaspell -- instead, she blew herself up detonating a [[FantasticNuke balefire megaspell]] in the Zebra capital of Roam, triggering the final apocalyptic exchange of megaspells that became The Last Day.
** Doof was manipulated into raping his teammate Twist, and was sentenced to years in prison. He only got out by becoming a failed prototype for [[StrappedToAnOperatingTable Project Steelpony]], which turned him into a powerful cyborg [[CyberneticsEatYourSoulDoof]], [[SoulJar Twist]], in constant, all-consuming agony due to faulty nerve integrations]], which he endured for 200 years before being destroyed.
** Vanity was murdered by his brother Blueblood over the latter's jealousy at Vanity being Rarity's lover during the chaos of the Last Day, when the Blueblood estates were attacked by desperate commoners looking for access to a rumored hidden vault.
** Applesnack was exposed to the [[DeadlyGas Pink Cloud]] during the Last Day, which simultaneously turned him into a [[OurZombiesAreDifferentApplesnack]], [[YouWillBeAssimilated Psalm]], ghoul]] and [[ClingyCostume physically fused him into]] his suit of PoweredArmor.
** Twist was raped by her teammate Doof, saw her wife killed, and herself was fatally injured during the Last Day, dying when she gave up the magical talisman granting her [[HealingFactor regeneration]] to bestow it to her wounded daughter Peppermint... and then found her soul [[SoulJarEcho]].imprisoned inside of Peppermint's body]].
** As the one who broke the pact, Big Mac got the gentlest death; he
** Psalm herself went mad with guilt and allowed herself to
** Stonewing was officially killed in action in battle, but secretly was retrieved from the battlefield, alive but brain-damaged. [[StrappedToAnOperatingTable
** Jetstream [[SanitySlippage
** Doof was manipulated into raping his teammate Twist, and was sentenced to years in prison. He only got out by becoming a failed prototype for [[StrappedToAnOperatingTable Project Steelpony]], which turned him into a powerful cyborg [[CyberneticsEatYourSoul
** Vanity was murdered by his brother Blueblood over the latter's jealousy at Vanity being Rarity's lover during the chaos of the Last Day, when the Blueblood estates were attacked by desperate commoners looking for access to a rumored hidden vault.
** Applesnack was exposed to the [[DeadlyGas Pink Cloud]] during the Last Day, which simultaneously turned him into a [[OurZombiesAreDifferent
** Twist was raped by her teammate Doof, saw her wife killed, and herself was fatally injured during the Last Day, dying when she gave up the magical talisman granting her [[HealingFactor regeneration]] to bestow it to her wounded daughter Peppermint... and then found her soul [[SoulJar
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* The fate of Stable 99 was bad enough. Then you realize: if P-21 had a "full career" as a stud in the Stable, then why is Scotch Tape his only foal? Then he admits in passing that he saw his medical charts back in Stable 99; turns out he was the father of ''twenty nine foals'' (whether that's in addition to or counting Scotch Tape is unknown). And all of them died with Stable 99.
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* The fate of Stable 99 was bad enough. Then you realize: if P-21 had a "full career" as a stud in the Stable, then why is Scotch Tape his only foal? Then he admits in passing that he saw his medical charts back in Stable 99; turns out he was the father of ''twenty nine foals'' (whether that's in addition to or counting Scotch Tape is unknown). And all of them died with Stable 99.99.
* In chapter 69, as Blackjack is trying to rally the denizens of the Hoofington wasteland, she proves who she is by consuming raw [[MutagenicGoo Flux/Taint]]. A skeptic insists it's a trick and, before she can stop him, he snatches the bottle from her and drains what's left. Initially, nothing happens... then [[BodyHorror the left side of his smiling mouth starts extending back down along his throat and over his ribcage, tentacles start curling out of the rift in his body, his stomach bulges and swells with worm-like masses rippling within, and his head starts to turn inside out]] as he flops over backwards and starts spasming. Then Doctor Triage [[MercyKill disintegrates him with her laser pistol]].
* In chapter 69, as Blackjack is trying to rally the denizens of the Hoofington wasteland, she proves who she is by consuming raw [[MutagenicGoo Flux/Taint]]. A skeptic insists it's a trick and, before she can stop him, he snatches the bottle from her and drains what's left. Initially, nothing happens... then [[BodyHorror the left side of his smiling mouth starts extending back down along his throat and over his ribcage, tentacles start curling out of the rift in his body, his stomach bulges and swells with worm-like masses rippling within, and his head starts to turn inside out]] as he flops over backwards and starts spasming. Then Doctor Triage [[MercyKill disintegrates him with her laser pistol]].
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** [[ImmortalAssassin Rampage]] being chained down and EatenAlive. She's clearly traumatised, even though she [[ImmortalLifeIsCheap 'dies']] every other chapter.
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** [[ImmortalAssassin Rampage]] being chained down and EatenAlive. She's clearly traumatised, traumatized, even though she [[ImmortalLifeIsCheap 'dies']] every other chapter.
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* Also from 62, [[spoiler:the [[FantasticNuke implosion megaspell]] that Blackjack sets off. It creates a massive vortex that is enough to destroy practically all of Shadowbolt Tower - a monstronsity whose size can be measured in ''miles'' - and crushes it into a little sphere.]]
* The fates of the members of Macintosh's Marauders are at first considered coincidental, but it turns out they were the downside of a DealWithTheDevil the platoon made with a zebra fortune teller to avoid a pitiful fate. The zebra used the Black Book (yes, ''that'' Black Book) to alter their fate but warned them if they [[BreakingTheFellowship broke their fellowship]], they would each suffer a FateWorseThanDeath while the culprit would die peacefully. Big Macintosh ultimately seals their doom by planning to retire and start a family, leading to nightmarish fates for his comrades when he performs HeroicSacrifice during the Battle of Shattered Ridge. Blackjack discovers what happened to each character during her journey - [[StrappedToAnOperatingTable Stonewing]], [[SanitySlippage Jetstream]], [[ImpaledWithExtremePrejudice Vanity]], [[CyberneticsEatYourSoul Doof]], [[SoulJar Twist]], [[OurZombiesAreDifferent Applesnack]], [[YouWillBeAssimilated Psalm]], and [[SoulJar Echo]].
* The fates of the members of Macintosh's Marauders are at first considered coincidental, but it turns out they were the downside of a DealWithTheDevil the platoon made with a zebra fortune teller to avoid a pitiful fate. The zebra used the Black Book (yes, ''that'' Black Book) to alter their fate but warned them if they [[BreakingTheFellowship broke their fellowship]], they would each suffer a FateWorseThanDeath while the culprit would die peacefully. Big Macintosh ultimately seals their doom by planning to retire and start a family, leading to nightmarish fates for his comrades when he performs HeroicSacrifice during the Battle of Shattered Ridge. Blackjack discovers what happened to each character during her journey - [[StrappedToAnOperatingTable Stonewing]], [[SanitySlippage Jetstream]], [[ImpaledWithExtremePrejudice Vanity]], [[CyberneticsEatYourSoul Doof]], [[SoulJar Twist]], [[OurZombiesAreDifferent Applesnack]], [[YouWillBeAssimilated Psalm]], and [[SoulJar Echo]].
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* Also from 62, [[spoiler:the [[FantasticNuke implosion megaspell]] that Blackjack sets off. It creates a massive vortex that is enough to destroy practically all of Shadowbolt Tower - a monstronsity monstrosity whose size can be measured in ''miles'' - and crushes it into a little sphere.]]
* The fates of the members of Macintosh's Marauders are at first considered coincidental, but it turns out they were the downside of a DealWithTheDevil the platoon made with a zebra fortune teller to avoid a pitiful fate. The zebra used the Black Book (yes, ''that'' Black Book) to alter their fate but warned them if they [[BreakingTheFellowship broke their fellowship]], they would each suffer a FateWorseThanDeath while the culprit would die peacefully. Big Macintosh ultimately seals their doom by planning to retire and start a family, leading to nightmarish fates for his comrades when he performs HeroicSacrifice during the Battle of Shattered Ridge. Blackjack discovers what happened to each character during her journey - [[StrappedToAnOperatingTable Stonewing]], [[SanitySlippage Jetstream]], [[ImpaledWithExtremePrejudice Vanity]], [[CyberneticsEatYourSoul Doof]], [[SoulJar Twist]], [[OurZombiesAreDifferent Applesnack]], [[YouWillBeAssimilated Psalm]], and [[SoulJarEcho]].Echo]].
* The fate of Stable 99 was bad enough. Then you realize: if P-21 had a "full career" as a stud in the Stable, then why is Scotch Tape his only foal? Then he admits in passing that he saw his medical charts back in Stable 99; turns out he was the father of ''twenty nine foals'' (whether that's in addition to or counting Scotch Tape is unknown). And all of them died with Stable 99.
* The fates of the members of Macintosh's Marauders are at first considered coincidental, but it turns out they were the downside of a DealWithTheDevil the platoon made with a zebra fortune teller to avoid a pitiful fate. The zebra used the Black Book (yes, ''that'' Black Book) to alter their fate but warned them if they [[BreakingTheFellowship broke their fellowship]], they would each suffer a FateWorseThanDeath while the culprit would die peacefully. Big Macintosh ultimately seals their doom by planning to retire and start a family, leading to nightmarish fates for his comrades when he performs HeroicSacrifice during the Battle of Shattered Ridge. Blackjack discovers what happened to each character during her journey - [[StrappedToAnOperatingTable Stonewing]], [[SanitySlippage Jetstream]], [[ImpaledWithExtremePrejudice Vanity]], [[CyberneticsEatYourSoul Doof]], [[SoulJar Twist]], [[OurZombiesAreDifferent Applesnack]], [[YouWillBeAssimilated Psalm]], and [[SoulJar
* The fate of Stable 99 was bad enough. Then you realize: if P-21 had a "full career" as a stud in the Stable, then why is Scotch Tape his only foal? Then he admits in passing that he saw his medical charts back in Stable 99; turns out he was the father of ''twenty nine foals'' (whether that's in addition to or counting Scotch Tape is unknown). And all of them died with Stable 99.
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** Enervation is practically alicorn kryptonite. They percieve it as a constant [[MindRape psychic screaming]] which breaks down their HiveMind. Only Lacunae is resistant (but not immune) to its effects,[[note]]Emphasis on "only"; the reason it causes so much damage is because if there's two or more Alicorns present, the screaming will echo between them until they shut down.[[/note]] and even [[HiveQueen the Goddess]] [[TooSpicyForYogSogoth is tormented by it]]. When Lacunae is briefly exposed to an Enervation source at close range, ''all of Unity'' is injured by it.
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** Enervation is practically alicorn kryptonite. They percieve it as a constant [[MindRape psychic screaming]] which breaks down their HiveMind. Only Lacunae is resistant (but not immune) to its effects,[[note]]Emphasis on "only"; the reason it causes so much damage is because if there's two or more Alicorns present, the screaming will echo between them until they shut down.[[/note]] and even [[HiveQueen the Goddess]] [[TooSpicyForYogSogoth [[TooSpicyForYogSothoth is tormented by it]]. When Lacunae is briefly exposed to an Enervation source at close range, ''all of Unity'' is injured by it.
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* Also from 62, [[spoiler:the [[FantasticNuke implosion megaspell]] that Blackjack sets off. It creates a massive vortex that is enough to destroy practically all of Shadowbolt Tower - a monstronsity whose size can be measured in ''miles'' - and crushes it into a little sphere.]]
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* Also from 62, [[spoiler:the [[FantasticNuke implosion megaspell]] that Blackjack sets off. It creates a massive vortex that is enough to destroy practically all of Shadowbolt Tower - a monstronsity whose size can be measured in ''miles'' - and crushes it into a little sphere.]]]]
* The fates of the members of Macintosh's Marauders are at first considered coincidental, but it turns out they were the downside of a DealWithTheDevil the platoon made with a zebra fortune teller to avoid a pitiful fate. The zebra used the Black Book (yes, ''that'' Black Book) to alter their fate but warned them if they [[BreakingTheFellowship broke their fellowship]], they would each suffer a FateWorseThanDeath while the culprit would die peacefully. Big Macintosh ultimately seals their doom by planning to retire and start a family, leading to nightmarish fates for his comrades when he performs HeroicSacrifice during the Battle of Shattered Ridge. Blackjack discovers what happened to each character during her journey - [[StrappedToAnOperatingTable Stonewing]], [[SanitySlippage Jetstream]], [[ImpaledWithExtremePrejudice Vanity]], [[CyberneticsEatYourSoul Doof]], [[SoulJar Twist]], [[OurZombiesAreDifferent Applesnack]], [[YouWillBeAssimilated Psalm]], and [[SoulJar Echo]].
* The fates of the members of Macintosh's Marauders are at first considered coincidental, but it turns out they were the downside of a DealWithTheDevil the platoon made with a zebra fortune teller to avoid a pitiful fate. The zebra used the Black Book (yes, ''that'' Black Book) to alter their fate but warned them if they [[BreakingTheFellowship broke their fellowship]], they would each suffer a FateWorseThanDeath while the culprit would die peacefully. Big Macintosh ultimately seals their doom by planning to retire and start a family, leading to nightmarish fates for his comrades when he performs HeroicSacrifice during the Battle of Shattered Ridge. Blackjack discovers what happened to each character during her journey - [[StrappedToAnOperatingTable Stonewing]], [[SanitySlippage Jetstream]], [[ImpaledWithExtremePrejudice Vanity]], [[CyberneticsEatYourSoul Doof]], [[SoulJar Twist]], [[OurZombiesAreDifferent Applesnack]], [[YouWillBeAssimilated Psalm]], and [[SoulJar Echo]].
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* The top floors of the Fluttershy Medical Center.
--> '''''[[MadnessMantra PLAY.]]'''''
* Blackjack gets a first-hand view of how the Enclave [[MarkOfShame mark]] [[TheExile dashites]]. Their cutie marks are burnt away by chemicals strong enough to produce smoke, and the fresh wounds are then immediately branded. Worse, this happens to [[spoiler: Morning Glory, arguably the most moral character in the story]], who is completely loyal but being set up for political reasons.
* Enervation. It's [[ParanoiaFuel completely undetectable]], except through its effects, and even minor exposure is enough to degrade healing supplies over time. More serious exposure results in [[TearsOfBlood internal]] [[BloodFromTheMouth bleeding]], and existing wounds worsen rapidly. At high concentrations, victims suffer from MindRape and ''[[ImMelting melt]]''.
** Enervation is practically alicorn kryptonite. They percieve it as a constant [[MindRape psychic screaming]] which breaks down their HiveMind. Only Lacunae is resistant (but not immune) to its effects,[[note]]Emphasis on "only"; the reason it causes so much damage is because if there's two or more Alicorns present, the screaming will echo between them until they shut down.[[/note]] and even [[HiveQueen the Goddess]] [[TooSpicyForYogSogoth is tormented by it]]. When Lacunae is briefly exposed to an Enervation source at close range, ''all of Unity'' is injured by it.
* Stable 90 was registered as complete and ready for habitation, despite having none of the essential fixtures or equipment installed. When the bombs fell, the residents were trapped inside, descending into barbarism and dying off completely in under a month. [[spoiler: The ponies of Stable 99 would have suffered the same fate if Blackjack hadn't gassed them all]].
* Chapter 22 is rife with nightmare fuel. The first thing Blackjack sees is [[spoiler: [[OffWithHisHead her mother's decapitated head]]]], [[TheVirus and]] [[EatenAlive it]] [[RapeAsDrama only]] [[WonTheWarLostThePeace gets]] [[MercyKill worse]] [[HeroicBSOD from]] [[DrivenToSuicide there]].
** [[ImmortalAssassin Rampage]] being chained down and EatenAlive. She's clearly traumatised, even though she [[ImmortalLifeIsCheap 'dies']] every other chapter.
--> '''Rampage:''' You want fear? Fear is being strapped to a table as a permanent lunch for a bunch of cannibals. Knowing they’re going to rip you apart and eat you over… and over… and over again. Fear is knowing you might spend years or centuries that way, [[FateWorseThanDeath your flesh fueling the nightmare and you helpless to stop it]].
* All of final scene of Chapter 26, especially [[spoiler: Glory's wing falling off]], and [[spoiler: her]] reaction to it.
--> [[spoiler: She slowly picked it up and held it in her hooves. [[OhCrap “It fell off…”]] she said with a whimper, like a foal whose favorite toy had broken. [[HeroicBSOD She started to shake, at first with tears…]] [[LaughingMad but then she threw back her head, laughing hysterically.]] [[SanitySlippage “It fell off! It FELL the fuck off!”]] And with [[TearsOfBlood bloody tears]] she laughed and sobbed at the same time. [[BreakTheCutie “We’re going to die! We’re going to die!]] [[DespairEventHorizon Please let us fucking die!”]]]]
* Chapter 30, where the taint building up in Blackjack's body causes a tumor to grow ''in her eye socket'', forcing Glory to perform emergency surgery and get it out.
* Horizon Labs' cryo room, where a number of ponies have been melted and fused with the walls and equipment, screaming. The room is practically soaked with taint, and tries to [[YouWillBeAssimilated absorb]] Blackjack, almost succeeding. Now [[http://mistermech.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d5gt3jf illustrated]].
* Blackjack's [[NightmareSequence various nightmares]], particularly the one in Chapter 33. [[spoiler: Blackjack wakes up, apparently whole and healthy, in a BadFuture where Hoofington has become a monstrous world power. Blackjack's friends have all met awful fates - Rampage has [[SplitPersonalityTakeover lost her mind to the Angel of Death]], Scotch Tape is a [[SexSlave breeding slave]], Glory is an [[TragicMonster inequine]] [[BodyHorror mutant]], Lacunae and all of Unity have had their [[EmptyShell minds completely wiped out]], and P-21 is [[WoobieDestroyerOfWorlds behind it all.]]]]
* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves [[spoiler: Blackjack, who is blind and practically immobile, being mutilated[[note]] - her useless, mutated legs are nailed to the floor and her horn is smashed off -[[/note]] and gang-raped. The entire ordeal is narrated from BJ's [[NothingIsScarier sightless]] first-person perspective. There is no RapeDiscretionShot (though the hour-long ordeal is summarised in a couple of paragraphs). Scotch Tape, who is hiding in the hold below, overhears everything.]]
* [[spoiler:Priest]]'s death at Sanguine's hooves. It brings to mind [[http://www.thehypertexts.com/images/hiroshimaVictim30312219280994100.jpeg this]] (NSFW and graphic) picture of a Hiroshima survivor.
* Blackjack's encounter with pink cloud results in a fair degree of FacialHorror, including a self-inflicted GlasgowGrin after her mouth is fused shut. Illustrated [[http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/078/a/2/security_by_fore_trekker-d4tb2bw.png here]]. (NSFW, bloody)
* The visual representation of [[spoiler: Blackjack's traumatised, suicidal mind]].
--> '''[[AFormYouAreComfortableWith 'Glory']]:''' It doesn't have to be dark. [[spoiler: Your subconscious]] is... terrifying.
* Hightower. A fortified prison filled with thousands of ghouls, most of them trapped in their cells. [[FateWorseThanDeath Not all of them are feral]]. The building's also bathed in powerful enervation fields and radiation, not to mention the sentient acidic ooze living in the plumbing and the malfunctioning balefire bomb in the central chamber. It's also on fire.
* In Chapter 62, Blackjack voluntarily - though not willingly - [[spoiler:enters Lighthooves' cyberpony enhancer and "upgrades" herself to a cybernetic alicorn. This despite her knowledge that CyberneticsEatYourSoul. ''She's fully conscious while the device implants wings into her back, strips the skin off her face and covers almost every inch of her with metal plating''.]] ''Yikes''.
* Also from 62, [[spoiler:the [[FantasticNuke implosion megaspell]] that Blackjack sets off. It creates a massive vortex that is enough to destroy practically all of Shadowbolt Tower - a monstronsity whose size can be measured in ''miles'' - and crushes it into a little sphere.]]
--> '''''[[MadnessMantra PLAY.]]'''''
* Blackjack gets a first-hand view of how the Enclave [[MarkOfShame mark]] [[TheExile dashites]]. Their cutie marks are burnt away by chemicals strong enough to produce smoke, and the fresh wounds are then immediately branded. Worse, this happens to [[spoiler: Morning Glory, arguably the most moral character in the story]], who is completely loyal but being set up for political reasons.
* Enervation. It's [[ParanoiaFuel completely undetectable]], except through its effects, and even minor exposure is enough to degrade healing supplies over time. More serious exposure results in [[TearsOfBlood internal]] [[BloodFromTheMouth bleeding]], and existing wounds worsen rapidly. At high concentrations, victims suffer from MindRape and ''[[ImMelting melt]]''.
** Enervation is practically alicorn kryptonite. They percieve it as a constant [[MindRape psychic screaming]] which breaks down their HiveMind. Only Lacunae is resistant (but not immune) to its effects,[[note]]Emphasis on "only"; the reason it causes so much damage is because if there's two or more Alicorns present, the screaming will echo between them until they shut down.[[/note]] and even [[HiveQueen the Goddess]] [[TooSpicyForYogSogoth is tormented by it]]. When Lacunae is briefly exposed to an Enervation source at close range, ''all of Unity'' is injured by it.
* Stable 90 was registered as complete and ready for habitation, despite having none of the essential fixtures or equipment installed. When the bombs fell, the residents were trapped inside, descending into barbarism and dying off completely in under a month. [[spoiler: The ponies of Stable 99 would have suffered the same fate if Blackjack hadn't gassed them all]].
* Chapter 22 is rife with nightmare fuel. The first thing Blackjack sees is [[spoiler: [[OffWithHisHead her mother's decapitated head]]]], [[TheVirus and]] [[EatenAlive it]] [[RapeAsDrama only]] [[WonTheWarLostThePeace gets]] [[MercyKill worse]] [[HeroicBSOD from]] [[DrivenToSuicide there]].
** [[ImmortalAssassin Rampage]] being chained down and EatenAlive. She's clearly traumatised, even though she [[ImmortalLifeIsCheap 'dies']] every other chapter.
--> '''Rampage:''' You want fear? Fear is being strapped to a table as a permanent lunch for a bunch of cannibals. Knowing they’re going to rip you apart and eat you over… and over… and over again. Fear is knowing you might spend years or centuries that way, [[FateWorseThanDeath your flesh fueling the nightmare and you helpless to stop it]].
* All of final scene of Chapter 26, especially [[spoiler: Glory's wing falling off]], and [[spoiler: her]] reaction to it.
--> [[spoiler: She slowly picked it up and held it in her hooves. [[OhCrap “It fell off…”]] she said with a whimper, like a foal whose favorite toy had broken. [[HeroicBSOD She started to shake, at first with tears…]] [[LaughingMad but then she threw back her head, laughing hysterically.]] [[SanitySlippage “It fell off! It FELL the fuck off!”]] And with [[TearsOfBlood bloody tears]] she laughed and sobbed at the same time. [[BreakTheCutie “We’re going to die! We’re going to die!]] [[DespairEventHorizon Please let us fucking die!”]]]]
* Chapter 30, where the taint building up in Blackjack's body causes a tumor to grow ''in her eye socket'', forcing Glory to perform emergency surgery and get it out.
* Horizon Labs' cryo room, where a number of ponies have been melted and fused with the walls and equipment, screaming. The room is practically soaked with taint, and tries to [[YouWillBeAssimilated absorb]] Blackjack, almost succeeding. Now [[http://mistermech.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d5gt3jf illustrated]].
* Blackjack's [[NightmareSequence various nightmares]], particularly the one in Chapter 33. [[spoiler: Blackjack wakes up, apparently whole and healthy, in a BadFuture where Hoofington has become a monstrous world power. Blackjack's friends have all met awful fates - Rampage has [[SplitPersonalityTakeover lost her mind to the Angel of Death]], Scotch Tape is a [[SexSlave breeding slave]], Glory is an [[TragicMonster inequine]] [[BodyHorror mutant]], Lacunae and all of Unity have had their [[EmptyShell minds completely wiped out]], and P-21 is [[WoobieDestroyerOfWorlds behind it all.]]]]
* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves [[spoiler: Blackjack, who is blind and practically immobile, being mutilated[[note]] - her useless, mutated legs are nailed to the floor and her horn is smashed off -[[/note]] and gang-raped. The entire ordeal is narrated from BJ's [[NothingIsScarier sightless]] first-person perspective. There is no RapeDiscretionShot (though the hour-long ordeal is summarised in a couple of paragraphs). Scotch Tape, who is hiding in the hold below, overhears everything.]]
* [[spoiler:Priest]]'s death at Sanguine's hooves. It brings to mind [[http://www.thehypertexts.com/images/hiroshimaVictim30312219280994100.jpeg this]] (NSFW and graphic) picture of a Hiroshima survivor.
* Blackjack's encounter with pink cloud results in a fair degree of FacialHorror, including a self-inflicted GlasgowGrin after her mouth is fused shut. Illustrated [[http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/078/a/2/security_by_fore_trekker-d4tb2bw.png here]]. (NSFW, bloody)
* The visual representation of [[spoiler: Blackjack's traumatised, suicidal mind]].
--> '''[[AFormYouAreComfortableWith 'Glory']]:''' It doesn't have to be dark. [[spoiler: Your subconscious]] is... terrifying.
* Hightower. A fortified prison filled with thousands of ghouls, most of them trapped in their cells. [[FateWorseThanDeath Not all of them are feral]]. The building's also bathed in powerful enervation fields and radiation, not to mention the sentient acidic ooze living in the plumbing and the malfunctioning balefire bomb in the central chamber. It's also on fire.
* In Chapter 62, Blackjack voluntarily - though not willingly - [[spoiler:enters Lighthooves' cyberpony enhancer and "upgrades" herself to a cybernetic alicorn. This despite her knowledge that CyberneticsEatYourSoul. ''She's fully conscious while the device implants wings into her back, strips the skin off her face and covers almost every inch of her with metal plating''.]] ''Yikes''.
* Also from 62, [[spoiler:the [[FantasticNuke implosion megaspell]] that Blackjack sets off. It creates a massive vortex that is enough to destroy practically all of Shadowbolt Tower - a monstronsity whose size can be measured in ''miles'' - and crushes it into a little sphere.]]
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* Hightower. A fortified prison filled with thousands of ghouls, most of them trapped in their cells. [[FateWorseThanDeath Not all of them are feral]]. The building's also bathed in powerful enervation fields and radiation, not to mention the sentient acidic ooze living in the plumbing and the malfunctioning balefire bomb in the central chamber. It's also on fire.fire.
* In Chapter 62, Blackjack voluntarily - though not willingly - [[spoiler:enters Lighthooves' cyberpony enhancer and "upgrades" herself to a cybernetic alicorn. This despite her knowledge that CyberneticsEatYourSoul. ''She's fully conscious while the device implants wings into her back, strips the skin off her face and covers almost every inch of her with metal plating''.]] ''Yikes''.
* Also from 62, [[spoiler:the [[FantasticNuke implosion megaspell]] that Blackjack sets off. It creates a massive vortex that is enough to destroy practically all of Shadowbolt Tower - a monstronsity whose size can be measured in ''miles'' - and crushes it into a little sphere.]]
* In Chapter 62, Blackjack voluntarily - though not willingly - [[spoiler:enters Lighthooves' cyberpony enhancer and "upgrades" herself to a cybernetic alicorn. This despite her knowledge that CyberneticsEatYourSoul. ''She's fully conscious while the device implants wings into her back, strips the skin off her face and covers almost every inch of her with metal plating''.]] ''Yikes''.
* Also from 62, [[spoiler:the [[FantasticNuke implosion megaspell]] that Blackjack sets off. It creates a massive vortex that is enough to destroy practically all of Shadowbolt Tower - a monstronsity whose size can be measured in ''miles'' - and crushes it into a little sphere.]]
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** Enervation is practically alicorn kryptonite. They percieve it as a constant [[MindRape psychic screaming]] which breaks down their HiveMind. Only Lacunae is resistant (but not immune) to its effects,[[hottip:*:Emphasis on "only"; the reason it causes so much damage is because if there's two or more Alicorns present, the screaming will echo between them until they shut down.]] and even [[HiveQueen the Goddess]] [[TooSpicyForYogSogoth is tormented by it]]. When Lacunae is briefly exposed to an Enervation source at close range, ''all of Unity'' is injured by it.
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** Enervation is practically alicorn kryptonite. They percieve it as a constant [[MindRape psychic screaming]] which breaks down their HiveMind. Only Lacunae is resistant (but not immune) to its effects,[[hottip:*:Emphasis effects,[[note]]Emphasis on "only"; the reason it causes so much damage is because if there's two or more Alicorns present, the screaming will echo between them until they shut down.]] [[/note]] and even [[HiveQueen the Goddess]] [[TooSpicyForYogSogoth is tormented by it]]. When Lacunae is briefly exposed to an Enervation source at close range, ''all of Unity'' is injured by it.
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* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves [[spoiler: Blackjack, who is blind and practically immobile, being mutilated[[hottip:*: - her useless, mutated legs are nailed to the floor and her horn is smashed off -]] and gang-raped. The entire ordeal is narrated from BJ's [[NothingIsScarier sightless]] first-person perspective. There is no RapeDiscretionShot (though the hour-long ordeal is summarised in a couple of paragraphs). Scotch Tape, who is hiding in the hold below, overhears everything.]]
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* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves [[spoiler: Blackjack, who is blind and practically immobile, being mutilated[[hottip:*: mutilated[[note]] - her useless, mutated legs are nailed to the floor and her horn is smashed off -]] -[[/note]] and gang-raped. The entire ordeal is narrated from BJ's [[NothingIsScarier sightless]] first-person perspective. There is no RapeDiscretionShot (though the hour-long ordeal is summarised in a couple of paragraphs). Scotch Tape, who is hiding in the hold below, overhears everything.]]
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* Blackjack's [[NightmareSequence various nightmares]], particularly the one in Chapter 33. [[spoiler: Blackjack wakes up, apparently whole and healthy, in a BadFuture where Hoofington has become a monstrous world power. Blackjack's friends have all met awful fates - Rampage has [[SplitPersonalityTakeover lost her mind to the Angel of Death]], Scotch Tape is a [[SexSlave breeding slave]], Glory is an [[TragicMonster inequine]], [[BodyHorror mutant]], Lacunae and all of Unity have had their [[EmptyShell minds completely wiped out]], and P-21 is [[WoobieDestroyerOfWorlds behind it all.]]]]
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* Blackjack's [[NightmareSequence various nightmares]], particularly the one in Chapter 33. [[spoiler: Blackjack wakes up, apparently whole and healthy, in a BadFuture where Hoofington has become a monstrous world power. Blackjack's friends have all met awful fates - Rampage has [[SplitPersonalityTakeover lost her mind to the Angel of Death]], Scotch Tape is a [[SexSlave breeding slave]], Glory is an [[TragicMonster inequine]], inequine]] [[BodyHorror mutant]], Lacunae and all of Unity have had their [[EmptyShell minds completely wiped out]], and P-21 is [[WoobieDestroyerOfWorlds behind it all.]]]]
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* Horizon Labs' cryo room, where a number of ponies have been melted and fused with the walls and equipment, screaming. The room is practically soaked with taint, and tries to [[YouWillBeAssimilated absorb]] Blackjack, almost succeeeding. Now [[http://mistermech.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d5gt3jf illustrated]].
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* Horizon Labs' cryo room, where a number of ponies have been melted and fused with the walls and equipment, screaming. The room is practically soaked with taint, and tries to [[YouWillBeAssimilated absorb]] Blackjack, almost succeeeding.succeeding. Now [[http://mistermech.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d5gt3jf illustrated]].
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* Horizon Labs' cryo room, where a number of ponies have been melted and fused with the walls and equipment, screaming. The room is practically soaked with taint, and tries to [[YouWillBeAssimilated]] absorb [[YouWillBeAssimilated absorb]] Blackjack, almost succeeeding. Now [[http://mistermech.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d5gt3jf illustrated]].
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* Horizon Labs' cryo room, where a number of ponies have been melted and fused with the walls and equipment, screaming. On some level, [[WhatHaveIBecome they're conscious of what they used The room is practically soaked with taint, and tries to be]].[[YouWillBeAssimilated]] absorb Blackjack, almost succeeeding. Now [[http://mistermech.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d5gt3jf illustrated]].
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* Stable 90 was registered as complete and ready for habitation, despite having none of the essential fixtures or equipment installed. When the bombs fell, the residents were trapped inside, descending into barbarism and dying off completely in under a month. [[spoiler: The ponies of Stable 99 would have suffered the same fate if Blackjack hadn't gassed them all]].
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* Horizon Labs' cryo room, where a number of ponies have been melted and fused with the walls and equipment, screaming. On some level, [[WhatHaveIBecome they're conscious of what they used to be]].
* Blackjack's [[NightmareSequence various nightmares]], particularly the one in Chapter 33. [[spoiler: Blackjack wakes up, apparently whole and healthy, in a BadFuture where Hoofington has become a monstrous world power. Blackjack's friends have all met awful fates - Rampage has [[SplitPersonalityTakeover lost her mind to the Angel of Death]], Scotch Tape is a [[SexSlave breeding slave]], Glory is a [[TragicMonster pitiful]], [[BodyHorror mutated abomination]], Lacunae and all of Unity have had their [[EmptyShell minds completely wiped out]], and P-21 is [[WoobieDestroyerOfWorlds behind it all.]]]]
* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves [[spoiler: Blackjack, who is blind and practically immobile, being mutilated[[hottip:*: - her useless, mutated legs are nailed to the floor and her horn is smashed off -]] and gang-raped. The entire ordeal is narrated from BJ's [[NothingIsScarier sightless]] first-person perspective. There is no RapeDiscretionShot. Scotch Tape, who is hiding in the hold below, overhears everything.]]
* [[spoiler:Priest's death at Sanguine's hooves. It brings to mind [[http://www.thehypertexts.com/images/hiroshimaVictim30312219280994100.jpeg this]] (NSFW and graphic) picture of a Hiroshima survivor.]]
* Blackjack's [[NightmareSequence various nightmares]], particularly the one in Chapter 33. [[spoiler: Blackjack wakes up, apparently whole and healthy, in a BadFuture where Hoofington has become a monstrous world power. Blackjack's friends have all met awful fates - Rampage has [[SplitPersonalityTakeover lost her mind to the Angel of Death]], Scotch Tape is a [[SexSlave breeding slave]], Glory is a [[TragicMonster pitiful]], [[BodyHorror mutated abomination]], Lacunae and all of Unity have had their [[EmptyShell minds completely wiped out]], and P-21 is [[WoobieDestroyerOfWorlds behind it all.]]]]
* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves [[spoiler: Blackjack, who is blind and practically immobile, being mutilated[[hottip:*: - her useless, mutated legs are nailed to the floor and her horn is smashed off -]] and gang-raped. The entire ordeal is narrated from BJ's [[NothingIsScarier sightless]] first-person perspective. There is no RapeDiscretionShot. Scotch Tape, who is hiding in the hold below, overhears everything.]]
* [[spoiler:Priest's death at Sanguine's hooves. It brings to mind [[http://www.thehypertexts.com/images/hiroshimaVictim30312219280994100.jpeg this]] (NSFW and graphic) picture of a Hiroshima survivor.]]
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* Horizon Labs' cryo room, where a number of ponies have been melted and fused with the walls and equipment, screaming. On some level, [[WhatHaveIBecome they're conscious of what they used to be]].
be]]. Now [[http://mistermech.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d5gt3jf illustrated]].
* Blackjack's [[NightmareSequence various nightmares]], particularly the one in Chapter 33. [[spoiler: Blackjack wakes up, apparently whole and healthy, in a BadFuture where Hoofington has become a monstrous world power. Blackjack's friends have all met awful fates - Rampage has [[SplitPersonalityTakeover lost her mind to the Angel of Death]], Scotch Tape is a [[SexSlave breeding slave]], Glory isa an [[TragicMonster pitiful]], inequine]], [[BodyHorror mutated abomination]], mutant]], Lacunae and all of Unity have had their [[EmptyShell minds completely wiped out]], and P-21 is [[WoobieDestroyerOfWorlds behind it all.]]]]
* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves [[spoiler: Blackjack, who is blind and practically immobile, being mutilated[[hottip:*: - her useless, mutated legs are nailed to the floor and her horn is smashed off -]] and gang-raped. The entire ordeal is narrated from BJ's [[NothingIsScarier sightless]] first-person perspective. There is noRapeDiscretionShot.RapeDiscretionShot (though the hour-long ordeal is summarised in a couple of paragraphs). Scotch Tape, who is hiding in the hold below, overhears everything.]]
*[[spoiler:Priest's [[spoiler:Priest]]'s death at Sanguine's hooves. It brings to mind [[http://www.thehypertexts.com/images/hiroshimaVictim30312219280994100.jpeg this]] (NSFW and graphic) picture of a Hiroshima survivor.]]
* Blackjack's [[NightmareSequence various nightmares]], particularly the one in Chapter 33. [[spoiler: Blackjack wakes up, apparently whole and healthy, in a BadFuture where Hoofington has become a monstrous world power. Blackjack's friends have all met awful fates - Rampage has [[SplitPersonalityTakeover lost her mind to the Angel of Death]], Scotch Tape is a [[SexSlave breeding slave]], Glory is
* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves [[spoiler: Blackjack, who is blind and practically immobile, being mutilated[[hottip:*: - her useless, mutated legs are nailed to the floor and her horn is smashed off -]] and gang-raped. The entire ordeal is narrated from BJ's [[NothingIsScarier sightless]] first-person perspective. There is no
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--> '''[[AFormYouAreComfortableWith 'Glory']]:''' It doesn't have to be dark. [[spoiler: Your subconscious]] is... terrifying.terrifying.
* Hightower. A fortified prison filled with thousands of ghouls, most of them trapped in their cells. [[FateWorseThanDeath Not all of them are feral]]. The building's also bathed in powerful enervation fields and radiation, not to mention the sentient acidic ooze living in the plumbing and the malfunctioning balefire bomb in the central chamber. It's also on fire.
* Hightower. A fortified prison filled with thousands of ghouls, most of them trapped in their cells. [[FateWorseThanDeath Not all of them are feral]]. The building's also bathed in powerful enervation fields and radiation, not to mention the sentient acidic ooze living in the plumbing and the malfunctioning balefire bomb in the central chamber. It's also on fire.
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* The top floors of the Fluttershy Medical Center.
--> '''''[[MadnessMantra PLAY.]]'''''
* Blackjack gets a first-hand view of how the Enclave [[MarkOfShame mark]] [[TheExile dashites]]. Their cutie marks are burnt away by chemicals strong enough to produce smoke, and the fresh wounds are then immediately branded. Worse, this happens to [[spoiler: Morning Glory, arguably the most moral character in the story]], who is completely loyal but being set up for political reasons.
* Enervation. It's [[ParanoiaFuel completely undetectable]], except through its effects, and even minor exposure is enough to degrade healing supplies over time. More serious exposure results in [[TearsOfBlood internal]] [[BloodFromTheMouth bleeding]], and existing wounds worsen rapidly. At high concentrations, victims suffer from MindRape and ''[[ImMelting melt]]''.
** Enervation is practically alicorn kryptonite. They percieve it as a constant [[MindRape psychic screaming]] which breaks down their HiveMind. Only Lacunae is resistant (but not immune) to its effects,[[hottip:*:Emphasis on "only"; the reason it causes so much damage is because if there's two or more Alicorns present, the screaming will echo between them until they shut down.]] and even [[HiveQueen the Goddess]] [[TooSpicyForYogSogoth is tormented by it]]. When Lacunae is briefly exposed to an Enervation source at close range, ''all of Unity'' is injured by it.
* Stable 90 was registered as complete and ready for habitation, despite having none of the essential fixtures or equipment installed. When the bombs fell, the residents were trapped inside, descending into barbarism and dying off completely in under a month.
* Chapter 22 is rife with nightmare fuel. The first thing Blackjack sees is [[spoiler: [[OffWithHisHead her mother's decapitated head]]]], [[TheVirus and]] [[EatenAlive it]] [[RapeAsDrama only]] [[WonTheWarLostThePeace gets]] [[MercyKill worse]] [[HeroicBSOD from]] [[DrivenToSuicide there]].
** [[ImmortalAssassin Rampage]] being chained down and EatenAlive. She's clearly traumatised, even though she [[ImmortalLifeIsCheap 'dies']] every other chapter.
--> '''Rampage:''' You want fear? Fear is being strapped to a table as a permanent lunch for a bunch of cannibals. Knowing they’re going to rip you apart and eat you over… and over… and over again. Fear is knowing you might spend years or centuries that way, [[FateWorseThanDeath your flesh fueling the nightmare and you helpless to stop it]].
* All of final scene of Chapter 26, especially [[spoiler: Glory's wing falling off]], and [[spoiler: her]] reaction to it.
--> [[spoiler: She slowly picked it up and held it in her hooves. [[OhCrap “It fell off…”]] she said with a whimper, like a foal whose favorite toy had broken. [[HeroicBSOD She started to shake, at first with tears…]] [[LaughingMad but then she threw back her head, laughing hysterically.]] [[SanitySlippage “It fell off! It FELL the fuck off!”]] And with [[TearsOfBlood bloody tears]] she laughed and sobbed at the same time. [[BreakTheCutie “We’re going to die! We’re going to die!]] [[DespairEventHorizon Please let us fucking die!”]]]]
* Chapter 30, where the taint building up in Blackjack's body causes a tumor to grow ''in her eye socket'', forcing Glory to perform emergency surgery and get it out.
* Horizon Labs' cryo room, where a number of ponies have been melted and fused with the walls and equipment, screaming. On some level, [[WhatHaveIBecome they're conscious of what they used to be]].
* Blackjack's [[NightmareSequence various nightmares]], particularly the one in Chapter 33. [[spoiler: Blackjack wakes up, apparently whole and healthy, in a BadFuture where Hoofington has become a monstrous world power. Blackjack's friends have all met awful fates - Rampage has [[SplitPersonalityTakeover lost her mind to the Angel of Death]], Scotch Tape is a [[SexSlave breeding slave]], Glory is a [[TragicMonster pitiful]], [[BodyHorror mutated abomination]], Lacunae and all of Unity have had their [[EmptyShell minds completely wiped out]], and P-21 is [[WoobieDestroyerOfWorlds behind it all.]]]]
* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves [[spoiler: Blackjack, who is blind and practically immobile, being mutilated[[hottip:*: - her useless, mutated legs are nailed to the floor and her horn is smashed off -]] and gang-raped. The entire ordeal is narrated from BJ's [[NothingIsScarier sightless]] first-person perspective. There is no RapeDiscretionShot. Scotch Tape, who is hiding in the hold below, overhears everything.]]
* [[spoiler:Priest's death at Sanguine's hooves. It brings to mind [[http://www.thehypertexts.com/images/hiroshimaVictim30312219280994100.jpeg this]] (NSFW and graphic) picture of a Hiroshima survivor.]]
* Blackjack's encounter with pink cloud results in a fair degree of FacialHorror, including a self-inflicted GlasgowGrin after her mouth is fused shut. Illustrated [[http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/078/a/2/security_by_fore_trekker-d4tb2bw.png here]]. (NSFW, bloody)
* The visual representation of [[spoiler: Blackjack's traumatised, suicidal mind]].
--> '''[[AFormYouAreComfortableWith 'Glory']]:''' It doesn't have to be dark. [[spoiler: Your subconscious]] is... terrifying.
--> '''''[[MadnessMantra PLAY.]]'''''
* Blackjack gets a first-hand view of how the Enclave [[MarkOfShame mark]] [[TheExile dashites]]. Their cutie marks are burnt away by chemicals strong enough to produce smoke, and the fresh wounds are then immediately branded. Worse, this happens to [[spoiler: Morning Glory, arguably the most moral character in the story]], who is completely loyal but being set up for political reasons.
* Enervation. It's [[ParanoiaFuel completely undetectable]], except through its effects, and even minor exposure is enough to degrade healing supplies over time. More serious exposure results in [[TearsOfBlood internal]] [[BloodFromTheMouth bleeding]], and existing wounds worsen rapidly. At high concentrations, victims suffer from MindRape and ''[[ImMelting melt]]''.
** Enervation is practically alicorn kryptonite. They percieve it as a constant [[MindRape psychic screaming]] which breaks down their HiveMind. Only Lacunae is resistant (but not immune) to its effects,[[hottip:*:Emphasis on "only"; the reason it causes so much damage is because if there's two or more Alicorns present, the screaming will echo between them until they shut down.]] and even [[HiveQueen the Goddess]] [[TooSpicyForYogSogoth is tormented by it]]. When Lacunae is briefly exposed to an Enervation source at close range, ''all of Unity'' is injured by it.
* Stable 90 was registered as complete and ready for habitation, despite having none of the essential fixtures or equipment installed. When the bombs fell, the residents were trapped inside, descending into barbarism and dying off completely in under a month.
* Chapter 22 is rife with nightmare fuel. The first thing Blackjack sees is [[spoiler: [[OffWithHisHead her mother's decapitated head]]]], [[TheVirus and]] [[EatenAlive it]] [[RapeAsDrama only]] [[WonTheWarLostThePeace gets]] [[MercyKill worse]] [[HeroicBSOD from]] [[DrivenToSuicide there]].
** [[ImmortalAssassin Rampage]] being chained down and EatenAlive. She's clearly traumatised, even though she [[ImmortalLifeIsCheap 'dies']] every other chapter.
--> '''Rampage:''' You want fear? Fear is being strapped to a table as a permanent lunch for a bunch of cannibals. Knowing they’re going to rip you apart and eat you over… and over… and over again. Fear is knowing you might spend years or centuries that way, [[FateWorseThanDeath your flesh fueling the nightmare and you helpless to stop it]].
* All of final scene of Chapter 26, especially [[spoiler: Glory's wing falling off]], and [[spoiler: her]] reaction to it.
--> [[spoiler: She slowly picked it up and held it in her hooves. [[OhCrap “It fell off…”]] she said with a whimper, like a foal whose favorite toy had broken. [[HeroicBSOD She started to shake, at first with tears…]] [[LaughingMad but then she threw back her head, laughing hysterically.]] [[SanitySlippage “It fell off! It FELL the fuck off!”]] And with [[TearsOfBlood bloody tears]] she laughed and sobbed at the same time. [[BreakTheCutie “We’re going to die! We’re going to die!]] [[DespairEventHorizon Please let us fucking die!”]]]]
* Chapter 30, where the taint building up in Blackjack's body causes a tumor to grow ''in her eye socket'', forcing Glory to perform emergency surgery and get it out.
* Horizon Labs' cryo room, where a number of ponies have been melted and fused with the walls and equipment, screaming. On some level, [[WhatHaveIBecome they're conscious of what they used to be]].
* Blackjack's [[NightmareSequence various nightmares]], particularly the one in Chapter 33. [[spoiler: Blackjack wakes up, apparently whole and healthy, in a BadFuture where Hoofington has become a monstrous world power. Blackjack's friends have all met awful fates - Rampage has [[SplitPersonalityTakeover lost her mind to the Angel of Death]], Scotch Tape is a [[SexSlave breeding slave]], Glory is a [[TragicMonster pitiful]], [[BodyHorror mutated abomination]], Lacunae and all of Unity have had their [[EmptyShell minds completely wiped out]], and P-21 is [[WoobieDestroyerOfWorlds behind it all.]]]]
* Chapter 33 begins with a disclaimer warning readers of a particularly brutal scene. Said scene involves [[spoiler: Blackjack, who is blind and practically immobile, being mutilated[[hottip:*: - her useless, mutated legs are nailed to the floor and her horn is smashed off -]] and gang-raped. The entire ordeal is narrated from BJ's [[NothingIsScarier sightless]] first-person perspective. There is no RapeDiscretionShot. Scotch Tape, who is hiding in the hold below, overhears everything.]]
* [[spoiler:Priest's death at Sanguine's hooves. It brings to mind [[http://www.thehypertexts.com/images/hiroshimaVictim30312219280994100.jpeg this]] (NSFW and graphic) picture of a Hiroshima survivor.]]
* Blackjack's encounter with pink cloud results in a fair degree of FacialHorror, including a self-inflicted GlasgowGrin after her mouth is fused shut. Illustrated [[http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/078/a/2/security_by_fore_trekker-d4tb2bw.png here]]. (NSFW, bloody)
* The visual representation of [[spoiler: Blackjack's traumatised, suicidal mind]].
--> '''[[AFormYouAreComfortableWith 'Glory']]:''' It doesn't have to be dark. [[spoiler: Your subconscious]] is... terrifying.
