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* AdultFear: Veera can cause quite a lot of these. In the beginning she is a starving orphan who has been outcast from the village.
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* RightHandAttackDog: Humanity is kind of this, the Ghalen are ObstructionistPacifist[=s=], and via treaties have leveraged humanity into a kind of SpacePolice, forcefully stopping the riots that arise in other alien species. Winters remarks that while their stopping the violence, they're not solving what caused it in the first place, meaning they're just moving the problem into the future.
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* RightHandAttackDog: Humanity is kind of this, the Ghalen are ObstructionistPacifist[=s=], and via treaties have leveraged humanity into a kind of SpacePolice, forcefully stopping the any riots or wars that arise in other alien species. Winters remarks that while their stopping the violence, they're not solving what caused it in the first place, meaning they're just moving the problem into the future.
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* RightHandAttackDog: Humanity is kind of this, the Ghalen are ObstructionistPacifist[=s=], and via treaties have leveraged humanity into a kind of SpacePolice, forcefully stopping the riots that arise in other alien species. Winters remarks that while their stopping the violence, their not solving what caused it in the first place, meaning they're just moving the problem into the future.
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* RightHandAttackDog: Humanity is kind of this, the Ghalen are ObstructionistPacifist[=s=], and via treaties have leveraged humanity into a kind of SpacePolice, forcefully stopping the riots that arise in other alien species. Winters remarks that while their stopping the violence, their they're not solving what caused it in the first place, meaning they're just moving the problem into the future.
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I don't think cauthan in this context is a proper noun/refferring to the species as a whole. it should probably be "Winters the Human and Veera the Cauthan" or both be lowercase.
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* [[spoiler:BoldlyComing: Winters the human and Veera the Cauthan eventually decide to join at the hip, in chapter 69 to boot.]]
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* [[spoiler:BoldlyComing: Winters the human and Veera the Cauthan cauthan eventually decide to join at the hip, in chapter 69 to boot.]]
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* RightHandAttackDog: Humanity is kind of this, the Ghalen are ObstructionistPacifist[=s=], and via treaties have leveraged humanity into a kind of SpacePolice, forcefully stopping the riots that arise in other alien species. Winters remarks that while their stopping the violence, their not solving what caused it in the first place, meaning they're just moving the problem into the future.
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!! HEL Jumper contains of:
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!! HEL Jumper contains examples of:
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* HumansAreTheRealMonsters: Sort of. The race that uplifted the humans, the Ghalen, never having fought a war.
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* HumansAreTheRealMonsters: Sort of. The race that uplifted the humans, the Ghalen, never having have fought a war.
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* LoserProtagonist: Veera definitely counts as this. She is very poor and lives in a run down home, she is malnourished, and a complete social outcast, all through no fault of her own.
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* TookALevelInBadass: Veera after recovering from her earlier starvation becomes a complete badass, [[spoiler: even joining the guard.]]
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[[https://redd.it/7oulr8 ''The HEL Jumper'']] is an online web serial novel written by Reddit user [[https://www.reddit.com/user/SabatonBabylon/overview /u/SabatonBabylon]]. It follows the adventures of [[SpaceMarine HEL Jumper]] 1st Lieutenant Russell Winters on [[AllPlanetsAreEarthLike planet Mara]]. After an accident destroys his ship, ''The Lancer,'' he is the only human alive within lightyears. After making planetfall, he meets a [[CatFolk native sapient lifeform named Veera]]. Marooned on an alien world, Winters must use everything at his disposal to improvise, adapt, overcome, and survive.
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* MatingDance: Female Cauthans will dance for their partners at the harvest festival. It can be formal or slightly more sensual.
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* MatingDance: Female Cauthans will dance for or with their partners at the harvest festival. It can be formal or slightly more sensual.
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* MatingDance: Female Cauthans will dance for their partners at the harvest festival. It can be formal or slightly more sensual.
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* FasterThanLightTravel: ''The Lancer'' is able to travel faster than light via using another dimension.
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* YouNeedToGetLaid: Ratha. That is all
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* YouNeedToGetLaid: Ratha. That is allall.
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* ActionGirl: Veera qualifies once she trains with the guards.
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* ActionGirl: Veera qualifies once she [[spoiler: explode's a raider's torso with a gun]] and trains with the guards.
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* ScifiWritersHaveNoSenseOfScale: Both played straight and averted. The reason ''The Lancer'' is destroyed is that it came in too close to the sun. Winters then gets in a fairly small drop pod and lands on a planet about 1 AU from this sun. Either ''The Lancer'' never could get close to a sun or the drop pod travels unreasonably far. However this is also averted in that it will take at least a year for Earth to know that ''The Lancer'' is missing.
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* ScifiWritersHaveNoSenseOfScale: Both played straight and averted. The reason ''The Lancer'' is destroyed is that it came in too close to the sun. Winters then gets in a fairly small drop pod and lands on a planet about 1 AU from this sun. Either ''The Lancer'' never could get close to a sun sun, or the drop pod travels unreasonably far. However this is also averted in that it will take at least a year for Earth to know that ''The Lancer'' is missing.
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* ScifiWritersHaveNoSenseOfScale: Both played straight and averted. The reason ''The Lancer'' is destroyed is that it came in too close to the sun. Winters then gets in a fairly small drop pod and lands on a planet about 1 AU from this sun. Either ''The Lancer'' never could get close to a sun or the drop pod travels unreasonably far. However this is also averted in that it will take at least a year for Earth to know that ''The Lancer'' is missing.
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* StandardHumanSpaceship: ''The Lancer'' is shaped like a spear tip.
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* FirstContactFauxPas: Winters almost immediately breaks the established first contact protocol by revealing himself to the village. The Ghalen also make first contact by hovering over the UN building in [[IndependenceDay a very familiar fashion.]]
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* FirstContactFauxPas: Winters almost immediately breaks the established first contact protocol by revealing himself to the village. The Ghalen also make first contact by hovering over the UN building in [[IndependenceDay [[Film/IndependenceDay a very familiar fashion.]]
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* HumanityIsAdvanced: Humans have basic FTL travel, drop pods, and have met an advanced alien species.
* HumansAreTheRealMonsters: Sort of. The race that uplifted the humans, the Ghalen, never having fought a war.
* HumansAreTheRealMonsters: Sort of. The race that uplifted the humans, the Ghalen, never having fought a war.
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* [[spoiler:DidYouJustHaveSex: Antoth walks in on Winters and Veera just after they finish in chapter 70.]]
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* [[spoiler:DidYouJustHaveSex: Antoth walks in on Winters and Veera just after they finish in chapter 70. Averted when Veera walks in on a non-sexual intimate moment between Antoth and Ratha.]]
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* TheHero: Winters both sees himself as this and is this.
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* SupportingLeader: Antoth is the captain of the guard and often helps Russell with protection of the village.
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* PraetorianGuard: Vash, the sun priest, has two elite guards. They still don't pose a threat to a trained human fighter, though.
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* AdultFear: Veera can cause quite a lot of these. In the beginning she is a starving orphan.
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* AdultFear: Veera can cause quite a lot of these. In the beginning she is a starving orphan.orphan who has been outcast from the village.
* AKA47: Winters' guns have been the subject of much debate, as they are not fully described in the story proper. This does not stop readers from debating which space version of a modern gun he uses.
* AKA47: Winters' guns have been the subject of much debate, as they are not fully described in the story proper. This does not stop readers from debating which space version of a modern gun he uses.
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[[https://redd.it/7oulr8 ''The HEL Jumper'']] is an online web serial novel written by Reddit user [[https://www.reddit.com/user/SabatonBabylon/overview /u/SabatonBabylon]]. It follows the adventures of [[SpaceMarine HEL Jumper]] 1st Lieutenant Russell Winters on [[AllPlanetsAreEarthLike planet Mara]]. After an accident destroys his ship, ''The Lancer,'' he is the only human alive within lightyears. After making planetfall, he meets a [[CatGirl native sapient lifeform named Veera]]. Marooned on an alien world, Winters must use everything at his disposal to improvise, adapt, overcome, and survive.
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[[https://redd.it/7oulr8 ''The HEL Jumper'']] is an online web serial novel written by Reddit user [[https://www.reddit.com/user/SabatonBabylon/overview /u/SabatonBabylon]]. It follows the adventures of [[SpaceMarine HEL Jumper]] 1st Lieutenant Russell Winters on [[AllPlanetsAreEarthLike planet Mara]]. After an accident destroys his ship, ''The Lancer,'' he is the only human alive within lightyears. After making planetfall, he meets a [[CatGirl [[CatFolk native sapient lifeform named Veera]]. Marooned on an alien world, Winters must use everything at his disposal to improvise, adapt, overcome, and survive.
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* CatGirl: Cauthans are feline-like humanoids with feathers on their heads, like hair. The male's have scales on their forearms, where the females have feathers on them.
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* CatGirl: CatFolk: Cauthans are feline-like humanoids with feathers on their heads, like hair. The male's have scales on their forearms, where the females have feathers on them.
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* [[spoiler:BoldlyComing: Winters the human and Veera the cauthan eventually decide to join at the hip, in chapter 69 to boot.]]
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* [[spoiler:BoldlyComing: Winters the human and Veera the cauthan Cauthan eventually decide to join at the hip, in chapter 69 to boot.]]]]
* CatGirl: Cauthans are feline-like humanoids with feathers on their heads, like hair. The male's have scales on their forearms, where the females have feathers on them.
* CatGirl: Cauthans are feline-like humanoids with feathers on their heads, like hair. The male's have scales on their forearms, where the females have feathers on them.
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* SpaceMarine: That is a very apt job description of a HEL Jumper's job.
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[[https://redd.it/7oulr8 The ''The HEL Jumper]] Jumper'']] is an online web serial novel written by Reddit user [[https://www.reddit.com/user/SabatonBabylon/overview /u/SabatonBabylon]]. It follows the adventures of [[SpaceMarine HEL Jumper]] 1st Lieutenant Russell Winters on [[AllPlanetsAreEarthLike planet Mara]]. After an accident destroys his ship, ''The Lancer,'' he is the only human alive within lightyears. After making planetfall, he meets a [[CatGirl native sapient lifeform named Veera]]. Marooned on an alien world, Winters must use everything at his disposal to improvise, adapt, overcome, and survive.
* [[spoiler:DidYouJustHaveSex: Antoth walks in on Winters and Veera just after they finish in chapter 70.]]
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FirstContact: Winters is the first human to make contact with the people of Mara.
* FirstContactFauxPas: Winters almost immediately breaks the established first contact protocol by revealing himself to the village.
* FirstContactFauxPas: Winters almost immediately breaks the established first contact protocol by revealing himself to the village.
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* YouNeedToGetLaid: I.E. Ratha.Ratha. That is all
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* RomanceArc: Basically the entire story. [[spoiler:It's not just Winters and Veera though, Zolta and Asha pair up, as do Antoth and Ratha]]
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* RomanceArc: Basically the entire story. [[spoiler:It's not just Winters and Veera though, Zolta and Asha pair up, as do Antoth and Ratha]]Ratha.]]
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* AdultFear: Veera has can cause quite a lot of these.these. In the beginning she is a starving orphan.
* AllPlanetsAreEarthLike: Averted, as ''The Lancer'' was looking for planets that harbored Earth-like life.
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* HeartWarmingOrphan: Veera. Both her parents are long gone and she will melt your heart.
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* InstantAIJustAddWater:InstantAIJustAddWater: Due to some illegal modifications to Io by ''The Lancer's'' mechanic, Shifty, she goes from non-sapient VI to full fledged sapient AI.
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NatureIsNotNice: The fauna of planet Mara range from something akin to dumb tigers, to ''a giant space bear!''
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* RomanceArc: Basically the entire story. [[spoiler:It's not just Winters and Veera though, Zolta and Asha pair up, as do Antoth and Ratha]]
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* RomanceArc: Basically the entire story. [[spoiler:It's not just Winters and Veera though, Zolta and Asha pair up, as do Antoth and Ratha]]
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* HalfBreedDiscrimination: Veera's father was a respected member of the village, her mother was a part of a nomadic tribe. (It doesn't help that Veera gets most of her looks from her [[GenderEqualsBreed mother]].)
