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* How many adventurers died in their quest to find the Phoenix Gem? [[spoiler:It was still at the fountain, so clearly no one had managed to obtain it in the last thousand years.]] If no one was successful, [[spoiler: was Corey knowingly sending these adventurers, as well as the brothers, on a suicide mission?]]
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* How many adventurers died in their quest to find the Phoenix Gem? [[spoiler:It was still at the fountain, so clearly no one had managed to obtain it in the last thousand years.]] If no one was successful, [[spoiler: was [[spoiler:was Corey knowingly sending these adventurers, as well as the brothers, on a suicide mission?]]
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*** Unlikely though, since [[spoiler: Corey and Laurel knew to fly back to town instead of heading towards Raven's Point]].
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*** Unlikely though, since [[spoiler: Corey [[spoiler:Corey and Laurel knew to fly back to town instead of heading towards Raven's Point]].
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** The shrinking is stated to be a side effect of the spell backfiring. The enlargements are permanent, [[spoiler: as seen with the splinter in the end.]]
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** The shrinking is stated to be a side effect of the spell backfiring. The enlargements are permanent, [[spoiler: as [[spoiler:as seen with the splinter in the end.]]
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** AWizardDidIt. Joke aside, it's entirely possible that the trap-filled dungeon was built by a wizard a thousand years ago, and also that Phoenix Gems were magical artifacts created by wizards.
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** Not to mention, Ian's implied to be a shy, scholarly, relatively sheltered kid who looks like he lives in a pretty good neighbourhood/area. His reaction feels like the natural equivalent of a sheltered middle-class suburban human teenager seeing a tough, scary-looking leather-wearing biker gang for the first time.
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** Not to mention, Ian's implied to be a shy, scholarly, relatively sheltered kid who looks like he lives in a pretty good neighbourhood/area. His reaction feels like the natural equivalent of a sheltered middle-class suburban human teenager seeing a tough, scary-looking leather-wearing biker gang for the first time. You'd be a little freaked out too.
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** Pixies may normally use pixie-sized vehicles; this particular biker gang may only use larger ones because big bikes look more impressive. The pixies' ''existence'' wasn't surprising, but their ''behavior'' was.
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** Pixies may normally use pixie-sized vehicles; this particular biker gang may only use larger ones because big bikes look more impressive. The pixies' ''existence'' wasn't surprising, but their ''behavior'' was.was.
** Not to mention, Ian's implied to be a shy, scholarly, relatively sheltered kid who looks like he lives in a pretty good neighbourhood/area. His reaction feels like the natural equivalent of a sheltered middle-class suburban human teenager seeing a tough, scary-looking leather-wearing biker gang for the first time.
** Not to mention, Ian's implied to be a shy, scholarly, relatively sheltered kid who looks like he lives in a pretty good neighbourhood/area. His reaction feels like the natural equivalent of a sheltered middle-class suburban human teenager seeing a tough, scary-looking leather-wearing biker gang for the first time.
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** TheLawOfConservationOfDetail. Basically they have 1 hour and 42 minutes to build a world and tell a story. If they spend too much time on the world building they loose time for the story.
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** TheLawOfConservationOfDetail. Basically they have 1 hour and 42 minutes to build The other species don't play a world and tell a story. If they spend too much time on role in the world building they loose time for the story.story, so we don't get to see them.
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** The spell's own wording specifies that it can only be used on a given person on ''one'' occasion. The occasion in question being the day of the original casting.
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** Possibly it was originally intended to be an ''anonymity'' spell rather than a disguise spell: something to allow the caster to pass inconspicuously through an area where they might otherwise draw unwanted attention. Not so much to trick people as just to avoid confrontations, whether with pesky fans, creditors, or folks who keep bugging the caster to perform magical favors.
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** That probably WOULD be common and normal if you lived in the bad side of town, apparently.
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** That probably WOULD be common and normal if you lived in the bad side of town, apparently.apparently.
** Pixies may normally use pixie-sized vehicles; this particular biker gang may only use larger ones because big bikes look more impressive. The pixies' ''existence'' wasn't surprising, but their ''behavior'' was.
** Pixies may normally use pixie-sized vehicles; this particular biker gang may only use larger ones because big bikes look more impressive. The pixies' ''existence'' wasn't surprising, but their ''behavior'' was.
