Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* InstantlyProvenWrong: When Lilith offers an apology gift for a recent offense, Luz declares that she's not the kind of girl who can be bribed like that. This resolution lasts all the way until Lilith dumps a scroll in her lap, and all anger is instantly forgotten as Luz squeals in joy.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 341 (click to see context) from:
* ShownTheirWork: In chapter 20, Luz makes la bandera dominicana, the real life national dish of the Dominican Republic, where her family is from, and she gives Lilith a short history lesson about how the dish is called that because ingredients share a colour with the dominican flag. She also throws in a BilingualBonus by calling it la bandera isla hriviendo, "the Boiling Isles flag."
to:
* ShownTheirWork: In chapter 20, Luz makes la bandera dominicana, the real life national dish of the Dominican Republic, where her family is from, and she gives Lilith a short history lesson about how the dish is called that because ingredients share a colour with the dominican flag. She also throws in a BilingualBonus by calling it la bandera isla hriviendo, hirviendo, "the Boiling Isles flag."
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Changed line(s) 84 (click to see context) from:
* BitchSlap: Amity gives Lilith a ''[[LaserGuidedKarma very]]'' [[LaserGuidedKarma deserving one]] [[spoiler:after hearing about how Lilith stranded Luz back in the Human Realm and stole the portal]].
to:
* BitchSlap: Amity gives Lilith a ''[[LaserGuidedKarma very]]'' [[LaserGuidedKarma ''very'' deserving one]] one [[spoiler:after hearing about how Lilith stranded Luz back in the Human Realm and stole the portal]].portal]].
* BlackComedy: Viney is fond of this kind of humor, making a few jokes about wanting to harvest Luz's organs. Luz laughs along with her but is a bit worried that she's not joking.
* BlackComedy: Viney is fond of this kind of humor, making a few jokes about wanting to harvest Luz's organs. Luz laughs along with her but is a bit worried that she's not joking.
Deleted line(s) 87 (click to see context) :
* BrickJoke: Midway through chapter 26, Boscha points out a sea serpent spawn native to the Bunion Bay stealing a bag from a tourist. At the end of the chapter, one steals Luz' shoes and knocks her over [[spoiler:just as she was about to ask Amity out]].
Changed line(s) 105 (click to see context) from:
* ConnectedAllAlong: Turns out that Lilith and Odalia were the ones who made Amity's hideout in the library when they were young.
to:
* ChekhovsGun: Midway through chapter 26, Boscha points out a sea serpent spawn native to the Bunion Bay stealing a bag from a tourist. At the end of the chapter, one steals Luz' shoes and knocks her over [[spoiler:just as she was about to ask Amity out]].
* ConnectedAllAlong: Turns out that Lilith and Odalia were the ones who made Amity's hideout in the library when they were young. She also helped Eda make the room of shortcuts, since the magic in question was a bit too complicated for her alone.
* ConnectedAllAlong: Turns out that Lilith and Odalia were the ones who made Amity's hideout in the library when they were young. She also helped Eda make the room of shortcuts, since the magic in question was a bit too complicated for her alone.
Added DiffLines:
* ShownTheirWork: In chapter 20, Luz makes la bandera dominicana, the real life national dish of the Dominican Republic, where her family is from, and she gives Lilith a short history lesson about how the dish is called that because ingredients share a colour with the dominican flag. She also throws in a BilingualBonus by calling it la bandera isla hriviendo, "the Boiling Isles flag."
Added DiffLines:
* SuspiciouslySpecificDenial: When Luz gets dragged into the secret shortcuts room, the narration insists that she didn't yelp in fear, nor did she curl up on the floor afterward.
Is there an issue? Send a MessageReason:
None
Added DiffLines:
* CentralTheme: Redemption, specifically LoveRedeems. Luz expresses a strong belief that everyone, no matter how awful, has the potential to become better and deserves the chance to try. Evident of this, Lilith starts out the fic as, to not put too fine a point on it, a horrible, arrogant, selfish person, but with time and love, especially the maternal love she has for Luz, develops into a caring and protective mother figure for the girl. Both her and Luz's stories also show them reaching a hand out to someone who was an antagonist in the original show, giving them the support and love to become better.
