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'''Deceit''' is the {{Sequel}} to ''Trauma'', taking place right after the final chapter but before the epilogue. It focuses on Zayla's village and Kenzi's often {{abusive|parents}} attempts to make her son Cujo the next Alpha, no matter how incompetent he is. Because of the need of ''Trauma'' spoilers to describe it fully, an article for it has been created [[Fanfic/{{Deceit}} here]].
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'''Deceit''' is an upcoming {{Sequel}} to ''Trauma'', which takes place in Zayla's jackal village and focuses on Kenzi's attempts to make her son Cujo the next Alpha.
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** After accepting to be his mate, Tempest drags Jay "behind some rocks".
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** After accepting to be his mate, Tempest drags Jay "behind some rocks".rocks", as seen by Bella.
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** [[spoiler:Maybree and Trojan's]] scene in the final chapter ends with "And they were going to show each other just how much."
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** [[spoiler:Maybree and Trojan's]] scene in the final chapter ends with "And "She loved him. And he loved her. And they were going to show each other just how much."
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* HotterAndSexier: There are more {{Sexy Discretion Shot}}s than in ''Suffer'', given we're dealing with more adults this time.
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* HotterAndSexier: There are ''way'' more {{Sexy Discretion Shot}}s than in ''Suffer'', given we're dealing with more adults this time.
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* SexyDiscretionShot: Whenever a couple is shown about to have sex in [[SexualEuphemism euphemistic words]], the story then cuts to the next scene.
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** [[spoiler:Maybree and Trojan's]] scene in the final chapter ends with "And they were going to show each other just how much."
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* MercyKill: [[spoiler:While wandering in the desert in exile, Finn is forced to kill Jay and Tempest's pup dying from starvation. [[TheseHandsHaveKilled He doesn't take it well.]]]]
* MyGodWhatHaveIDone: [[spoiler:Finn's reaction upon realizing he massacred Keelie's children and millions more as Infinite. He hits the DespairEventHorizon full notch.]]
* MyGodWhatHaveIDone: [[spoiler:Finn's reaction upon realizing he massacred Keelie's children and millions more as Infinite. He hits the DespairEventHorizon full notch.]]
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* MercyKill: [[spoiler:While wandering in the desert in exile, Finn is forced to kill Jay and Tempest's pup dying from starvation. [[TheseHandsHaveKilled [[MyGodWhatHaveIDone He doesn't take it well.]]]]
* MyGodWhatHaveIDone: [[spoiler:Finn eventually has to MercyKill Jay and Tempest's dying pup. Even though they agreed it was necessary to end the suffering, Finn cannot pass over the fact he killed an innocent child, and he still grieves about this in ''Trauma''.]]
** [[spoiler:Finn's reaction upon realizing he massacred Keelie's children and millions more as Infinite. He hits the DespairEventHorizon full notch.]]
* MyGodWhatHaveIDone: [[spoiler:Finn eventually has to MercyKill Jay and Tempest's dying pup. Even though they agreed it was necessary to end the suffering, Finn cannot pass over the fact he killed an innocent child, and he still grieves about this in ''Trauma''.]]
** [[spoiler:Finn's reaction upon realizing he massacred Keelie's children and millions more as Infinite. He hits the DespairEventHorizon full notch.]]
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* EarnYourHappyEnding: After much trauma been through, [[spoiler:everyone has an happy ending, getting the fates they wanted. Honorable mention goes to Infinite, who manages to redeem and believe himself as a good person once again, becoming the FamilyMan to his mate Gaia and his two daughters Katia and Talia.]]
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* HumanLikeAnimalAging: {{Subverted}}. Mobians age faster than humans, as their age corresponds with their animal species' biology and life span. This is clarified by the author to HandWave how Gadget and Keelie are able to be in a relationship despite the wide age gap.
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* HumanLikeAnimalAging: {{Subverted}}. Mobians age faster than humans, as their age corresponds with their animal species' biology and life span. This is clarified by the author to HandWave how Gadget and Keelie [[spoiler:Keelie]] are able to be in a relationship despite the wide age gap.
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* HumanLikeAnimalAging: {{Subverted}}. Mobians age faster than humans, as their age corresponds with their animal species' biology and life span. This is clarified by the author to HandWave how Gadget and Keelie are able to be in a relationship despite the wide age gap.
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* SpiritWorld: The Afterlife, where the dead go when the die.
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* SpiritWorld: The Afterlife, which consists of an endless of a desert and where the dead go when the die.die. A living being can visit and appear (but not move around) in the Afterlife during their dreams, usually to meet up with a dead loved one.
** The Afterlife is explained more in the sequel ''Trauma''. People there [[TheAgeless stay the same age when they died]], and can see what the living are doing through a special mirror. It is ambiguous on if there's OnlyOneAfterlife, as [[spoiler:Keelie argues why Lance is there after [[AttemptedRape attempting to rape]] Gaia while infected, while it is mentioned Keelie's abusive forced mate showed up in the Afterlife]].
** The Afterlife is explained more in the sequel ''Trauma''. People there [[TheAgeless stay the same age when they died]], and can see what the living are doing through a special mirror. It is ambiguous on if there's OnlyOneAfterlife, as [[spoiler:Keelie argues why Lance is there after [[AttemptedRape attempting to rape]] Gaia while infected, while it is mentioned Keelie's abusive forced mate showed up in the Afterlife]].
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* SpiritWorld: The Afterlife, where the dead go when the die.
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* InterruptedIntimacy: Keri and Fortune walk onto Keri's favorite river and find Zayla [[spoiler:and Pierce]] in ani intimate moment. They leave immediately.
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* InterruptedIntimacy: When Keri and Fortune walk onto go to Keri's favorite river river, Keri senses someone is there and find goes to investigate, fing Zayla [[spoiler:and Pierce]] in ani a very intimate moment. They leave immediately.Keri leaves immediately and is shocked.
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* InterruptedIntimacy: Keri and Fortune walk onto Keri's favorite river and find Zayla [[spoiler:and Pierce]] in ani intimate moment. They leave immediately.
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'''Deceit''' is an upcoming {{Sequel}} to ''Trauma'', which takes place in Zayla's jackal village and focuses on Kenzi's attempts to make her son the next Alpha.
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'''Deceit''' is an upcoming {{Sequel}} to ''Trauma'', which takes place in Zayla's jackal village and focuses on Kenzi's attempts to make her son Cujo the next Alpha.
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* MyBelovedSmother: Kenzi is very controlling of her son Cujo, while neglecting her daughters, just because she wants him to be the next Alpha. For example, forcing him to drink more of her milk even though he's full, and defending this when Zayla points this out, saying "You're not a mother like me."
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* MyBelovedSmother: Kenzi is very controlling of her son Cujo, while neglecting her daughters, just because she wants him to be the next Alpha. For example, forcing him to drink more of her milk even though he's full, and defending this when Zayla points this out, saying [[LetsSeeYouDoBetter "You're not a mother like me.""]]
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* MyBelovedSmother: Kenzi is very controlling of her son Cujo, while neglecting her daughters, just because she wants him to be the next Alpha. For example, forcing him to drink more of her milk even though he's full, and defending this when Zayla points this out, saying "You're not a mother like me."
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* ShamelessFanserviceGirl: Keri doesn't care if she's SkinnyDipping. She just wants Fortune to swim with him.
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* DistractedByTheSexy: Fortune pauses when he turns around and sees a naked Keri.
--> He swallowed, unable to tear his gaze away from her curves. He was still a male jackal after all.
--> He swallowed, unable to tear his gaze away from her curves. He was still a male jackal after all.
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* CuteMute: Fortune is unable to speak, yet has a nice demeaning manner, attracting the talkative Keri.
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'''Deceit''' is an upcoming {{Sequel}} to ''Trauma'', which takes place in Zayla's jackal village.village and focuses on Kenzi's attempts to make her son the next Alpha.
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After the War to Take Back the Planet is over with, not only Infinite has to recover from the trauma accumulated over his life, his family and their friends have to heal from the trauma from the War and related events also. The fanfic focuses on different stories of different characters and their lives and usually depressing experiences, mostly Keelie's sons and their ComingOfAge experiences.
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The story not only
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* AndIMustScream: [[spoiler:According to Lance's experiences in the afterlife, those who are infected with the Illness are completely unaware of what they're doing.]]
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--> For the first time in his life. He believed he could recover. He could be Finn again. Despite all the trauma.
--> For the first time in his life. He believed he could recover. He could be Finn again. Despite all the trauma.
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* BerserkButton: [[spoiler:Do not insult Pierce's preference for the alpha female, or else he'll probably sterilize you. Especially about pups.]]
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* BerserkButton: [[spoiler:Do not insult Pierce's preference for the alpha female, or else he'll probably sterilize you.]]
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** [[spoiler:Kinnley and Britney have sex immediately after their wedding.]]
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* InterspeciesRomance: Kinnely the jackal falls in love with Britany the chipmunk and they [[HappilyMarried marry]].
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** [[spoiler:Kinnley and Britney have sex immediately after their wedding.]]
** An interesting twist. [[spoiler:When Lily tells Ace she would wait to get married to "be touched by a man", Ace gives her the idea to get married now without a wedding. You know what happens next.]]
* InterspeciesRomance:Kinnely Kinnley the jackal falls in love with Britany the chipmunk and they [[HappilyMarried marry]].
** [[spoiler:Kinnley and Britney have sex immediately after their wedding.]]
** An interesting twist. [[spoiler:When Lily tells Ace she would wait to get married to "be touched by a man", Ace gives her the idea to get married now without a wedding. You know what happens next.]]
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* LieBackAndThinkOfEngland: [[spoiler:Finn, having been raised in a culture which values procreation and pups, is upset when he hears his mate Gaia was taking birth control pills to enjoy sex while refusing to conceive a baby.]]
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* LieBackAndThinkOfEngland: {{Invoked}}. [[spoiler:Finn, having been raised in a culture which values procreation and pups, is upset when he hears his mate Gaia was taking birth control pills to enjoy sex while refusing to conceive a baby.]]
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* TragicStillbirth: [[spoiler:Zayla's 7 pups end up dying in her womb early from being conceived while Pierce was infected with the Illness.]]
