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This story now has a sequel which is in progress named Cape and Cowl II: Puppetmaster. Several months after the events of the first story, Frost Storm as Mare Do Well must take down Red Hoof's criminal empire piece by piece. WIth dark plans being in store for Mare Do Well, Frost Storm must be able to deal with some of her new allies, or lose everything she holds dear.
The story in question can be found [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/220721/cape-and-cowl-ii-puppetmaster here]].
The story in question can be found [[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/220721/cape-and-cowl-ii-puppetmaster here]].
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* VigilanteMan: Or rather, Mare.
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* VigilanteMan: Or rather, Mare.Mare.
*WhamLine: ->[[spoiler:'''Snow''']]: "Frosty."
*WhamLine: ->[[spoiler:'''Snow''']]: "Frosty."
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* NamesToRunAwayFromReallyFast: Red Hoof, Rough Houser, and Bloodshot.
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* NamesToRunAwayFromReallyFast: Red Hoof, Rough Houser, and Bloodshot. Bloodshot is ''in an asylum'' until chapter five.
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* NamesToRunAwayFromReallyFast: Red Hoof, Rough Houser, and Bloodshot.
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* HappilyAdopted: Snow Storm is, and even calls Mr. ORANGE "Dad."
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* HappilyAdopted: Snow Storm is, and even calls Mr. ORANGE Orange "Dad."
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* TheCommissionerGordon: Pelleas and Captain Leaf both try to invoke this trope for different reasons (it succeeds, although to what degree is yet to be shown).
* FantasticRacism: Against the Fulake (bat ponies)
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* HappilyAdopted: Snow Storm appears to be.is, and even calls Mr. ORANGE "Dad."
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* PuppetKing: The mayor, who is controlled by the Red Hoof.
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** Flyntt is more 'LawfulNeutral.' Chapter Three's Murdoc is more [[GoodCopBadCop Bad Cop]], being close to 'ChaoticGood'.
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** Flyntt is more 'LawfulNeutral.' Chapter Three's Murdoc is more [[GoodCopBadCop Bad Cop]], being close to 'ChaoticGood'.'LawfulEvil'.
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* [[TheStoolPigeon The Stool Pigeon - Betrayer Barry:]] Bolt Buck tells Snow Storm who her brother's other murderers are and where they are after he's put into the hospital [[spoiler: by her attacking him the night before.]]
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* [[TheStoolPigeon The Stool Pigeon - Betrayer Barry:]] Bolt Buck tells Snow Storm who her brother's other murderers are and where they are after he's put into the hospital [[spoiler: by her attacking him the night before.]]
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* NeverHurtAnInnocent: Snow Storm, as Mare Do Well, doesn't meant to hurt Mort; she genuinely thought he was Facade.
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* SignificantName: The Rind Family and the Oranges both sell oranges.
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* SignificantName: The Rind Family and the Oranges both sell oranges.
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* [[TheStoolPigeon The Stool Pigeon - Betrayer Barry:]] Bolt Buck tells Snow Storm who her brother's other murderers are and where they are after he's put into the hospital [[spoiler: by her attacking him the night before.]]
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* [[TheStoolPigeon The Stool Pigeon - Betrayer Barry:]] Bolt Buck tells Snow Storm who her brother's other murderers are and where they are after he's put into the hospital [[spoiler: by her attacking him the night before.]]]]
* VigilanteMan: Or rather, Mare.
* VigilanteMan: Or rather, Mare.
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* TheSpeechless: Snow Storm; presumably, the murder of her brother traumatized her to the point that she can't speak.
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* [[TheStoolPigeon The Stool Pigeon - Betrayer Barry:]] Bolt Buck tells Snow Storm who her brother's other murderers are and where they are after he's put into the hospital [[spoiler: by her attacking him the night before.]]
* [[TheStoolPigeon The Stool Pigeon - Betrayer Barry:]] Bolt Buck tells Snow Storm who her brother's other murderers are and where they are after he's put into the hospital [[spoiler: by her attacking him the night before.]]
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* IWorkAlone: Snow Storm tells this to Pelaus %%???%%
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* IWorkAlone: Snow Storm tells this to Pelaus %%???%%Pelleas when he offers to help her with information.
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* OriginalCharacter: Most of the cast, with the exception of Aunt and Uncle Orange.
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* IWorkAlone: Snow Storm tells this to Pelaus %%???%%
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** Flyntt is more 'LawfulNeutral.' Chapter Three's Murdoc is more [[GoodCopBadCop Bad Cop]], being close to 'LawfulEvil'.
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* GoodCopBadCop: Flyntt is usually the bad cop; when he tries to talk to Bolt Buck, the narrative comments that he was "never particularly good at playing the 'good guard'.[sic]"
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* GoodCopBadCop: Flyntt is is, evidently, usually the bad cop; when he tries to talk to Bolt Buck, the narrative comments that he was "never particularly good at playing the 'good guard'.[sic]"
** Flyntt is more'Lawful Neutral'. 'LawfulNeutral.' Chapter Three's Murdoc is more BadCop, [[GoodCopBadCop Bad Cop]], being close to 'Lawful Evil'.'LawfulEvil'.
** Flyntt is more
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* TheCavalryArrivesLate: The Night Guard arrives at Bolt Buck's house after Mare Do Well/Snow Storm give gives him some bruises, twists his pastern, and breaks his jaw.
* FantasticDrug: DiamondEyesEyes.
* FantasticDrug: Diamond
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* TheReveal: Bolt Buck is [[spoiler:Primrose's coltfriend and one of Thunder Frost Storm's murderers.]]
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** In-universe, when Snow Storm reveals herself to Bolt Buck as Mare Do Well.
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* TheReveal: Bolt Buck is [[spoiler:Primrose's coltfriend and one of Thunder Storm's murderers.]]
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* TheCavalryArrivesLate: The Night Guard arrives at Bolt Buck's house after Mare Do Well/Snow Storm give him some bruises, twists his pastern, and breaks his jaw.
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*SignificantName: The Rind Family and the Oranges both sell oranges.
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* HappilyAdopted: Snow Storm appears to be.
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* TheSpeechless: Snow Storm; presumably, the murder of her brother traumatized her to the point that she can't speak.
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[[Roleplay/CapeAndCowl Not to be confused with the roleplay of the same name.]]
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[[Roleplay/CapeAndCowl Not to be confused with the roleplay of the same name.]]]]
!!This work contains examples of the following tropes:
* OriginalCharacter: Snow Storm
!!This work contains examples of the following tropes:
* OriginalCharacter: Snow Storm
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It's been five long years since Snow Storm lost her brother, Frost Storm, to a street gang. Five years since she packed up and left Manehatten, searching for meaning or possible closure.
And now, she's back.
Thanks to an idea from Applejack, and years of rigorous training, she's returned to Manehatten as the Mare do Well. Now she'll have to draw the line between revenge and justice.
Not to be confused with Roleplay/CapeAndCowl.
And now, she's back.
Thanks to an idea from Applejack, and years of rigorous training, she's returned to Manehatten as the Mare do Well. Now she'll have to draw the line between revenge and justice.
Not to be confused with Roleplay/CapeAndCowl.
