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* TheIngenue: DownplayedTrope. April and Melanie (6th graders) view Elizabeth (a 4th grader) has a such--more innocent, more naive, than them.
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* TheIngenue: DownplayedTrope. April and Melanie (6th graders) view Elizabeth (a 4th grader) has a as such--more innocent, more naive, than them.
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* CelebrityResemblance: In profile, Elizabeth looks like the famous statue of Nefertiti.
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* CelebrityResemblance: In profile, Elizabeth looks like the famous statue of Nefertiti.Art/NefertitiBust.
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-->''With Melanie, April was herself, new and different from anyone, wild and daring and terribly brave. But with other people she was often quite different. With other kids she usually put on her Hollywood act, terribly grown-up and bored with everything. And with most grown-ups April’s eyes got narrow and you couldn’t believe a word she said.''
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-->''With Melanie, April was herself, new and different from anyone, wild and daring and terribly brave. But with other people she was often quite different. With other kids she usually put on her Hollywood act, terribly grown-up and bored with everything. And with most grown-ups April’s April's eyes got narrow and you couldn’t couldn't believe a word she said.''
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-->'''April:''' Yes, you see my mother is Dorothea Dawn-- ''[pause]'' Well, I guess you haven’t happened to hear of her way up here, but she’s a singer and in the movies, and stuff like that.
* RedOniBlueOni: The Red Oni to Melanie's Blue Oni.
* RedOniBlueOni: The Red Oni to Melanie's Blue Oni.
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-->'''April:''' Yes, you see my mother is Dorothea Dawn-- ''[pause]'' Well, I guess you haven’t haven't happened to hear of her way up here, but she’s she's a singer and in the movies, and stuff like that.
* RedOniBlueOni: The Red Oni to Melanie's Blue Oni. The first day they meet it seems like they have nothing in common, until they bond over Melanie's paper dolls. They both really love "imagining games" as they put it, or in other words, games that are less about ''doing'' and more about concocting an elaborate shared story.
* RedOniBlueOni: The Red Oni to Melanie's Blue Oni. The first day they meet it seems like they have nothing in common, until they bond over Melanie's paper dolls. They both really love "imagining games" as they put it, or in other words, games that are less about ''doing'' and more about concocting an elaborate shared story.
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* RedOniBlueOni: The Blue Oni to April's Red Oni.
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* RedOniBlueOni: The Blue Oni to April's Red Oni. The first day they meet it seems like they have nothing in common, until they bond over Melanie's paper dolls. They both really love "imagining games" as they put it, or in other words, games that are less about ''doing'' and more about concocting an elaborate shared story.
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-->''“Security’s an octopus,” Marshall said very clearly. He didn’t talk very much, but when he did he always said exactly what he wanted to without any trouble. He never had fooled around with baby talk''
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-->'''Melanie''': He's been awfully grown-up ever since--oh, since about the time he started walking. That is, about everything except Security. I guess he's not very grown-up about that. Dad says the reason Marshall needs Security is that he had such a hard time being a baby. Dad says being a baby offended Marshall’s dignity.
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-->'''Melanie''': He's been awfully grown-up ever since--oh, since about the time he started walking. That is, about everything except Security. I guess he's not very grown-up about that. Dad says the reason Marshall needs Security is that he had such a hard time being a baby. Dad says being a baby offended Marshall’s Marshall's dignity.
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-->''Of course, Toby had a special talent for getting people off the hook by making the teacher laugh. Just when Mrs. Granger was really building up a head of steam over something, Toby would make some little remark and Mrs. Granger would start choking and have to turn her back. Sometimes she’d try to pick things up where she left off, but all that lost momentum made a big difference''
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-->''Of course, Toby had a special talent for getting people off the hook by making the teacher laugh. Just when Mrs. Granger was really building up a head of steam over something, Toby would make some little remark and Mrs. Granger would start choking and have to turn her back. Sometimes she’d she'd try to pick things up where she left off, but all that lost momentum made a big difference''
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* NomDeMom: She likes to call herself "April Dawn." It's not clear if this is her mother's maiden name or StageName, but either way, mom's name.
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* NomDeMom: She likes to call herself "April Dawn." It's not clear if this is her mother's maiden name or StageName, but either way, mom's name.StageName.
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* AmbiguousDisorder: Taking all of his traits into account (see below), he's very likely to be on the autism spectrum, but this is never referenced in-story.
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* NaiveNewcomer: She is viewed as such within the group, perhaps more so than she actually is. When Elizabeth suggests they write something in their own blood, April and Melanie are both surprised and impressed.
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* NaiveNewcomer: She is viewed as such within the group, perhaps more so than she actually is. When Elizabeth suggests they write something in their own blood, April and Melanie are both surprised and impressed. Elizabeth actually lifted the idea from ''Literature/TheAdventuresOfTomSawyer'', but she doesn't tell them this.
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*AmbiguousDisorder: Taking all of his traits into account (see below), he's very likely to be on the autism spectrum, but this is never referenced in-story.
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* DefrostingIceQueen: She defrosts as soon as she gets bored with her JerkassFacade.
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* DefrostingIceQueen: She defrosts as soon as she gets bored with her JerkassFacade.'jerkass act'.
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-->''With Melanie, April was herself, new and different from anyone, wild and daring and terribly brave. But with other people she was often quite different. With other kids she usually put on her Hollywood act, terribly grown-up and bored with everything. And with most grown-ups April’s eyes got narrow and you couldn’t believe a word she said.''
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-->''Meeting people had always been easy for Melanie. Most people she liked right away, and they usually seemed to feel the same way about her.''
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* NomDeMom: She likes to call herself "April Dawn." It's not clear if this is her mother's maiden name or StageName, but the ''mom's name'' part stands.
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* NomDeMom: She likes to call herself "April Dawn." It's not clear if this is her mother's maiden name or StageName, but the ''mom's name'' part stands.either way, mom's name.
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* CheerfulChild: Cheerful, responsible, and adjusted, as a counterpoint to more damaged and volatile April.
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* CheerfulChild: Cheerful, responsible, and adjusted, as a counterpoint to the more damaged and volatile April.April.
-->''Meeting people had always been easy for Melanie. Most people she liked right away, and they usually seemed to feel the same way about her.''
-->''Meeting people had always been easy for Melanie. Most people she liked right away, and they usually seemed to feel the same way about her.''
* TheQuietOne:
-->''“Security’s an octopus,” Marshall said very clearly. He didn’t talk very much, but when he did he always said exactly what he wanted to without any trouble. He never had fooled around with baby talk''
-->''“Security’s an octopus,” Marshall said very clearly. He didn’t talk very much, but when he did he always said exactly what he wanted to without any trouble. He never had fooled around with baby talk''
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-->'''Melanie''': That’s Security. Marshall takes him everywhere. So my dad named him Security. You know. Like some little kids have a blanket.
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-->'''Melanie''': That’s That's Security. Marshall takes him everywhere. So my dad named him Security. You know. Like some little kids have a blanket.
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-->'''Melanie''': He’s been awfully grown-up ever since--oh, since about the time he started walking. That is, about everything except Security. I guess he’s not very grown-up about that. Dad says the reason Marshall needs Security is that he had such a hard time being a baby. Dad says being a baby offended Marshall’s dignity.
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-->'''Melanie''': He’s He's been awfully grown-up ever since--oh, since about the time he started walking. That is, about everything except Security. I guess he’s he's not very grown-up about that. Dad says the reason Marshall needs Security is that he had such a hard time being a baby. Dad says being a baby offended Marshall’s dignity.
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* AsianAirhead: Elizabeth might count, although her naïveté is attributed to her being a fourth grader, two grades below April, Melanie, Toby, and Ken.
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* TheIngenue: DownplayedTrope. April and Melanie (6th graders) view Elizabeth (a 4th grader) has a such--more innocent, more naive, than them.
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* ParentalAbandonment: Her father is dead, and her mother leaves her with her grandmother. Also a FreudianExcuse.
* TheFashionista: She plays at it, wearing false eyelashes on a regular basis, despite being all of 11. It's painfully obvious she's trying to coverup or compensate fo something.
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* ParentalAbandonment: ParentalAbandonment[=/=]FreudianExcuse: Her father is dead, died when April was too young to remember him, and her mother leaves her with her grandmother. Also a FreudianExcuse.
grandmother.
* RaisedByGrandparents: Her mother basically abandons her to be raised by her grandmother, Caroline.
* TheFashionista: She plays at it, wearing false eyelashes on a regular basis, despite being all of 11. It's painfully obvious she's trying tocoverup cover up or compensate fo something.for something.
* NomDeMom: She likes to call herself "April Dawn." It's not clear if this is her mother's maiden name or StageName, but the ''mom's name'' part stands.
-->'''April:''' Yes, you see my mother is Dorothea Dawn-- ''[pause]'' Well, I guess you haven’t happened to hear of her way up here, but she’s a singer and in the movies, and stuff like that.
* RaisedByGrandparents: Her mother basically abandons her to be raised by her grandmother, Caroline.
* TheFashionista: She plays at it, wearing false eyelashes on a regular basis, despite being all of 11. It's painfully obvious she's trying to
* NomDeMom: She likes to call herself "April Dawn." It's not clear if this is her mother's maiden name or StageName, but the ''mom's name'' part stands.
-->'''April:''' Yes, you see my mother is Dorothea Dawn-- ''[pause]'' Well, I guess you haven’t happened to hear of her way up here, but she’s a singer and in the movies, and stuff like that.
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! The Egypt Gang
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Melanie's preschool-aged brother.
* TagalongKid: He's 4 years old, and often Melanie's job to babysit. But he makes such a good boy pharaoh they don't mind.
* InnocentProdigy
* CompanionCube: His stuffed octopus.
* TagalongKid: He's 4 years old, and often Melanie's job to babysit. But he makes such a good boy pharaoh they don't mind.
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* CompanionCube: His stuffed octopus.
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* WiseBeyondTheirYears: InnocentProdigy[=/=]WiseBeyondTheirYears: A very stoic and solemn child.
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* ClassClown:
-->''Of course, Toby had a special talent for getting people off the hook by making the teacher laugh. Just when Mrs. Granger was really building up a head of steam over something, Toby would make some little remark and Mrs. Granger would start choking and have to turn her back. Sometimes she’d try to pick things up where she left off, but all that lost momentum made a big difference''
-->''Of course, Toby had a special talent for getting people off the hook by making the teacher laugh. Just when Mrs. Granger was really building up a head of steam over something, Toby would make some little remark and Mrs. Granger would start choking and have to turn her back. Sometimes she’d try to pick things up where she left off, but all that lost momentum made a big difference''
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* CatchPhrase: [[GoshDangItToHeck "Sheesh!"]]
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* CatchPhrase: [[GoshDangItToHeck "Sheesh!"]]"Sheesh!"]]
* OnlySaneMan: Ken sees himself this way. When the rest of the group acts as if they believe in their invented rituals, he says they're "cracking up".
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!! The Professor
* ConvictedByPublicOpinion: The Professor for the child murders.
* MisunderstoodLonerWithAHeartOfGold
* EveryoneCallsHimBarkeep: [[spoiler:At the end, it's revealed that his real name is Dr. Julian Huddleston,]] although he still prefers to be known as "the Professor".
* TeacherStudentRomance: The Professor had one when he was young, with a woman who enrolled in a class he was teaching about ancient peoples.
* * DarkAndTroubledPast: [[spoiler:His wife was killed while traveling.]]
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* OnlySaneMan: Ken sees himself this way. When the rest of the group acts as if they believe in their invented rituals, he says they're "cracking up".
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!! The Professor
* ConvictedByPublicOpinion: The Professor for the child murders.
* MisunderstoodLonerWithAHeartOfGold
* EveryoneCallsHimBarkeep: [[spoiler:At the end, it's revealed that his real name is Dr. Julian Huddleston,]] although he still prefers to be known as "the Professor".
* TeacherStudentRomance: The Professor had one when he was young, with a woman who enrolled in a class he was teaching about ancient peoples.
* * DarkAndTroubledPast: [[spoiler:His wife was killed while traveling.]]
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!! April Hall
* DefrostingIceQueen: She defrosts as soon as she gets bored with her JerkassFacade.
* ParentalAbandonment: Her father is dead, and her mother leaves her with her grandmother. Also a FreudianExcuse.
* TheFashionista: She plays at it, wearing false eyelashes on a regular basis, despite being all of 11. It's painfully obvious she's trying to coverup or compensate fo something.
* OddFriendship: Melanie and April
* RedOniBlueOni: The Red Oni to Melanie's Blue Oni.
!! Melanie Ross
* CheerfulChild
* TeamMom: Among other things, she rethinks the idea of sneaking off during trick-or-treating because it might be dangerous, and talks April down when they find out Ken and Toby have been spying on them because punching them won't solve anything.
* OddFriendship: Melanie and April
* RedOniBlueOni: The Blue Oni to April's Red Oni.
!! Marshall Ross
Melanie's preschool-aged brother.
* TagalongKid: He's 4 years old, and often Melanie's job to babysit. But he makes such a good boy pharaoh they don't mind.
* InnocentProdigy
* CompanionCube: His stuffed octopus.
-->'''Melanie''': That’s Security. Marshall takes him everywhere. So my dad named him Security. You know. Like some little kids have a blanket.
* WiseBeyondTheirYears: A very stoic and solemn child.
-->'''Melanie''': He’s been awfully grown-up ever since--oh, since about the time he started walking. That is, about everything except Security. I guess he’s not very grown-up about that. Dad says the reason Marshall needs Security is that he had such a hard time being a baby. Dad says being a baby offended Marshall’s dignity.
!! Elizabeth Chung
* AsianAirhead: Elizabeth might count, although her naïveté is attributed to her being a fourth grader, two grades below April, Melanie, Toby, and Ken.
* CelebrityResemblance: In profile, Elizabeth looks like the famous statue of Nefertiti.
* NaiveNewcomer
* ThePollyanna
!! Toby Alvillar
* ThoseTwoGuys: Toby and Ken. They're best friends; Ken is more reserved and is solidly built and clean-cut, while Toby is talkative and creative and is skinny with shaggy hair. They become more developed individually once they join the group.
* JerkWithAHeartOfGold: Initially a JerkJock
* MissingMom: Toby's mother.
!! Ken Kamata
* ThoseTwoGuys: Toby and Ken. They're best friends; Ken is more reserved and is solidly built and clean-cut, while Toby is talkative and creative and is skinny with shaggy hair. They become more developed individually once they join the group.
* CatchPhrase: [[GoshDangItToHeck "Sheesh!"]]
* DefrostingIceQueen: She defrosts as soon as she gets bored with her JerkassFacade.
* ParentalAbandonment: Her father is dead, and her mother leaves her with her grandmother. Also a FreudianExcuse.
* TheFashionista: She plays at it, wearing false eyelashes on a regular basis, despite being all of 11. It's painfully obvious she's trying to coverup or compensate fo something.
* OddFriendship: Melanie and April
* RedOniBlueOni: The Red Oni to Melanie's Blue Oni.
!! Melanie Ross
* CheerfulChild
* TeamMom: Among other things, she rethinks the idea of sneaking off during trick-or-treating because it might be dangerous, and talks April down when they find out Ken and Toby have been spying on them because punching them won't solve anything.
* OddFriendship: Melanie and April
* RedOniBlueOni: The Blue Oni to April's Red Oni.
!! Marshall Ross
Melanie's preschool-aged brother.
* TagalongKid: He's 4 years old, and often Melanie's job to babysit. But he makes such a good boy pharaoh they don't mind.
* InnocentProdigy
* CompanionCube: His stuffed octopus.
-->'''Melanie''': That’s Security. Marshall takes him everywhere. So my dad named him Security. You know. Like some little kids have a blanket.
* WiseBeyondTheirYears: A very stoic and solemn child.
-->'''Melanie''': He’s been awfully grown-up ever since--oh, since about the time he started walking. That is, about everything except Security. I guess he’s not very grown-up about that. Dad says the reason Marshall needs Security is that he had such a hard time being a baby. Dad says being a baby offended Marshall’s dignity.
!! Elizabeth Chung
* AsianAirhead: Elizabeth might count, although her naïveté is attributed to her being a fourth grader, two grades below April, Melanie, Toby, and Ken.
* CelebrityResemblance: In profile, Elizabeth looks like the famous statue of Nefertiti.
* NaiveNewcomer
* ThePollyanna
!! Toby Alvillar
* ThoseTwoGuys: Toby and Ken. They're best friends; Ken is more reserved and is solidly built and clean-cut, while Toby is talkative and creative and is skinny with shaggy hair. They become more developed individually once they join the group.
* JerkWithAHeartOfGold: Initially a JerkJock
* MissingMom: Toby's mother.
!! Ken Kamata
* ThoseTwoGuys: Toby and Ken. They're best friends; Ken is more reserved and is solidly built and clean-cut, while Toby is talkative and creative and is skinny with shaggy hair. They become more developed individually once they join the group.
* CatchPhrase: [[GoshDangItToHeck "Sheesh!"]]