Pony Fanfiction Thread

Yeah, it's not 2nd person alone that bugs me, it's the fact that virtually all of them seem to be blatantly done as Wish-Fulfillment.

edited 1st Feb '16 5:28:59 AM by SantosLHalper

Pretty much this. There's one which sounds halfway interesting, but maybe that's just an effect of having a wiki page. That, and the protagonist having a pretty specific backstory (...Or So I Heard) in contrast to the usual Featureless Protagonist nature of this sort of thing. And involving best pony of course. But then again, it's clop, so whatever.

On another note, what's the most genuinely evil fic villain you've seen, and/or where do you see the line between a bona fide monster and someone so over the top it's impossible to take seriously?

The most genuinely evil villain I've seen is the Tyrant in The Heart Thief. The thing that separates her from an over-the-top villain is how personal she makes it.

edited 1st Feb '16 6:51:17 AM by CDRW

If brining in villains from other media into a crossover counts.. Niccodemus

Though if not that, and yeah even worse then him in some ways. Salrath from Days of Wasp and Spider.

edited 1st Feb '16 7:20:53 AM by Seraphem

@Yami: One of the villains I have in the works is one that is... monstrously petty and also just monstrous. Sort of, like, what CDRW is talking about, she tries to make it personal.

Strife, Spirit Of Evil, an expy of the Ebon Dragon

Yeah, Salrath's a nasty piece of work, though proto-Discord(?) messing with her head doesn't help.

I didn't read the spoiler, but that kind of sounds like the one I was thinking of, Sol Seraph from Starlit Knights. She jumped out at me as an obvious Complete Monster candidate even with how tightly that's controlled now (and the admittedly really high heinous standard of this fic series), but ironically the forum might now consider her too over the top insofar as this is not the kind of character who would ever fit into the show. (This is after they already cut reimagined "canon" characters like Twilight from Pages Of Harmony, which I can understand more.)

edited 1st Feb '16 8:08:01 AM by YamiVizziniX

Chaos didn't really do much in that regards, he is limited in how much he can do, just gave her a little nudge in the right direction that one time. Everything else has been pure 100% her.

Also Chaos isn't 'proto discord' he's something much much larger and more powerful. Now the theory that fits and kind of been hinted at but not confirmed by the author is the 'Discord' as we know him, is actually the decoy Chaos had created back in the first chapter to distract the Guardians for a bit then forgot about.

So in my CB/40k crossover, there's supposed to be a series of underground bunkers on the world it takes place in meant to shelter the population in the event of a planetary cataclysm. At the end of the story, one of the viewpoint characters manages to lead an underground community of runaway newfoals into them after discovering their existence. How exactly can I justify their lack of discovery by the Imperial Guard? Much of the conflict centres around siege warfare, tunnelling and sapping.

edited 1st Feb '16 9:03:01 AM by SantosLHalper

Yeah, but that's because it's, y'know, Deviant Art...

As if FiMFic is any better.

edited 1st Feb '16 10:04:07 AM by KuroiTsubasaTenshi

Anyone?

It stands to reason that a last-ditch security Bunker would have some way to avoid detection. Is it possible the Humans aren't good at/don't have the technology to track magic? The Bunkers could be cloaked in some way taking advantage of that. Or some kind of charms that make it so, if they are found, people might see it as something innocuous?

I've come with a description for a dark fusion of all the Rated-R Alt!Celestias

Twisted Tyrannical Trollop

Amazing

I posted this plot bunny before, but I'm not sure if it got any reactions.

Rainbow Dash wakes up one morning and sees everypony putting up rainbow flags◊ everywhere. She of course asks why they're all setting up these awesome flag, and she finds out that it's for the rainbow pride parade. Rainbow Dash being Rainbow Dash, she thinks it's done to celebrate rainbows and being awesome, much to the confusion and many failed attempts to tell her the real meaning. Finally, the parade begins, and Rainbow Dash is shocked to see what the parade is really for, while Twilight laughs and explains that she was trying to tell her all day that the parade was for Ponyville's llama community, not her.

edited 2nd Feb '16 12:27:28 PM by SantosLHalper

Equestria is on the continent of Eurpona.

I got nothin'.

Well, I'm 4 out of 10 stories through the Blooming Moon Chronicles (though not quite 20% by word count). And next...
...uh...
...eh, time I went back and caught up with how Harmony is doing. That should be cheerful.

In a good way or a bad way?

It sounds funny enough.

It would certainly be an interesting twist on what the reader would inevitably be expecting.

On a more serious note, I have another question for the CB/40k fic. The one surviving character (whose name is Celestina BTW) is branded a heretic by the Xenolestia cultists for focusing too much on "friendship and harmony" and not enough on "Obey Celestia! Suffer not the human to live!" She escapes, but since newfoals effectively have their souls bound to Xenolestia, resisting the urge to turn herself in and be executed is a Herculean task. Despite this, she's able to discover the underground bunkers (which have special shields that prevents Chaos incursions) and even leads a community of like-minded newfoals to its safety. How do I get from point A to Point B, especially since newfoals are effectively a Hive Mind that would probably know where she is at any moment?

edited 3rd Feb '16 6:32:15 PM by SantosLHalper

Oh hey, look, I did another thing.

I've been playing with some ideas for the Changelings as a 'species'; traits that I can drop here and there in the story I'm planning. Partly to emphasize that they're the results of a poison and their current forms are kind of Body Horror, and partly to make the scene where they find the Changeling child more impactful(As the child is completely and utterly healthy, devoid of any of the disabilities normal Changeling's have). Of note:

• They can't dream, but they experience vivid memories in place of dreams.
• They have little to know feeling in their extremities; hooves are totally numb, ankles can feel large impacts, legs have a muted but relatively normal sense of feeling
• They can only taste very intense flavours, and even then only a hint of it. Changelings will suck on pure peppermint just to remember tasting things, and most of them will use it as a trigger for a taste they prefer.
• when they do eat normally, their digestive system is extremely slow at breaking down the food, and they're almost incapable of drawing nutrition from it. It's necessary for Changeling's to transform themselves stronger bones every so often, for example.
• They all have heavy cataracts, causing the blue look to their eyes; they've developed magical sight to replace their 'real' sight(Which is part of why a Changeling can always spot a Changeling through a disguise.

Essentially, their bodies have long since died, and they're being held together by magic and spite.

I'm aiming to have all of these things be A) Easy to drop in a normal conversation or scene, and B) Easily defied in a short summary (For example, the Changeling Mother describe her son as, "Strong and healthy. He cried when he stubbed his toe last night. He loves the taste of chocolate). Does anyone have ideas for additional stuff I can add to the list? Or, would you figure that's probably enough to get the idea across?

Still reading it, but "now the heat hung in the air like a surreptitious fart"?

edited 4th Feb '16 5:07:38 AM by Rosvo1

All you're missing is stunted smell.

You never realize how important smell is until you don't have it.

Anyone?

Presumably, something pretty traumatic happened to (physically) separate her from and turn her against the newfoal "hivemind", which she keeps focused on to keep her from slipping back in.

But I don't know, you know this stuff better than I do.