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* MemeticMutation: It's becoming very popular on [[Website/WarriorsWish a certain fansite]] to quote and/or reference the fic.
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* MemeticMutation: It's becoming very popular on [[Website/WarriorsWish a certain fansite]] the fansite Warriors Wish to quote and/or reference the fic.
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Not this if the target audience disagrees/does not accept this.
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* AcceptableTargets: "Homosezzuals," [[ValuesDissonance apparently]].
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IP is now Flame Bait. DILP and MF are fans of the work not author doing such. No slang tropes.
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* AssPull: ''Everything.''
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** The author believes that [=StarClan=] can solve all problems and that nothing will go wrong if the Clans follow their path. She doesn't realise that, although [=StarClan=] is worshipped like God, their power is actually limited, they choose to play TheWatcher instead of God, and are, if anything, used to ''criticise'' fanatical religious bigots like her.
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* DesignatedHero: [=StarGleam=].
* DracoInLeatherPants:
** Hawkfrost was chosen to undergo a HeelFaceTurn so that he could fall in love with [=StarGleam=], presumably just because of his status as EvilIsSexy.
** Oddly enough, Ashfur falls for [=GleamStar's=] charms too, but doesn't undergo this treatment, despite him being an incredibly popular DracoInLeatherPants among the rest of the fanbase.
* EnsembleDarkhorse: [=FluffyKit=].
* DracoInLeatherPants:
** Hawkfrost was chosen to undergo a HeelFaceTurn so that he could fall in love with [=StarGleam=], presumably just because of his status as EvilIsSexy.
** Oddly enough, Ashfur falls for [=GleamStar's=] charms too, but doesn't undergo this treatment, despite him being an incredibly popular DracoInLeatherPants among the rest of the fanbase.
* EnsembleDarkhorse: [=FluffyKit=].
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** Hawkfrost was chosen to undergo a HeelFaceTurn so that he could fall in love with [=StarGleam=], presumably just because of his status as EvilIsSexy.
** Oddly enough, Ashfur falls for [=GleamStar's=] charms too, but doesn't undergo this treatment, despite him being an incredibly popular DracoInLeatherPants among the rest of the fanbase.
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* IdiotPlot
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* MisaimedFandom: The author believes that [=StarClan=] can solve all problems and that nothing will go wrong if the Clans follow their path. She doesn't realise that, although [=StarClan=] is worshipped like God, their power is actually limited, they choose to play TheWatcher instead of God, and are, if anything, used to ''criticise'' fanatical religious bigots like her.
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* OneSceneWonder / HeroicSacrifice: [=BubbleFur=] (or "Bublesfor").
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* OneSceneWonder / HeroicSacrifice: OneSceneWonder: [=BubbleFur=] (or "Bublesfor").
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* SoBadItsGood
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* FandomSpecificPlot: A new kit is born into [=ThunderClan=], there's a prophecy by [=StarClan=] proclaiming she will save the forest, and she becomes leader. What makes this one special is its hilariously bad execution and extreme WriterOnBoard tendencies.
* FoeYay: In the middle of a fight, [=HawkFrost=] and [=AshKit=] suddenly start to [[RougeAnglesOfSatin "mack our"]].
* SugarWiki/FunnyMoments: [[Funny/StarkitsProphecy Here]].
* FoeYay: In the middle of a fight, [=HawkFrost=] and [=AshKit=] suddenly start to [[RougeAnglesOfSatin "mack our"]].
* SugarWiki/FunnyMoments: [[Funny/StarkitsProphecy Here]].
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* [[SoBadItsGood So Bad It's Good]]
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* [[SoBadItsGood So Bad It's Good]]SoBadItsGood
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* RootingForTheEmpire: Basically, everyone reading the fic agrees that RedPaw and LakePool are the ''real'' heroes of the story. It's not [=RedPaw=] and [=LakePool=] being heroes so much as their persecution by [[DesignatedHero StarGleam]] being the thing that makes her so unlikable.
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* RootingForTheEmpire: Basically, everyone reading the fic agrees that RedPaw [=RedPaw=] and LakePool [=Lakepool=] are the ''real'' heroes of the story. It's not [=RedPaw=] and [=LakePool=] being heroes so much as their persecution by [[DesignatedHero StarGleam]] being the thing that makes her so unlikable.
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* FandomSpecificPlot: A new kit is born into [=ThunderClan=], there's a prophecy by [=StarClan=] proclaiming she will save the forest, and she becomes leader. What makes this one special is its hilariously bad execution and extreme WriterOnBoard tendencies.
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TRS has decided that Schoolgirl Lesbians is no longer a valid trope. Removing all links to the page and changing them to more appropriate pages if one can be found
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* RootingForTheEmpire: Basically everyone reading the fic agrees that [[SchoolgirlLesbians RedPaw and LakePool]] are the ''real'' heroes of the story. It's not [=RedPaw=] and [=LakePool=] being heroes so much as their persecution by [[DesignatedHero StarGleam]] being the thing that makes her so unlikable.
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* RootingForTheEmpire: Basically Basically, everyone reading the fic agrees that [[SchoolgirlLesbians RedPaw and LakePool]] LakePool are the ''real'' heroes of the story. It's not [=RedPaw=] and [=LakePool=] being heroes so much as their persecution by [[DesignatedHero StarGleam]] being the thing that makes her so unlikable.
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* HilariousInHindsight: In Chaptr Three The Training Under The Star, it's mentioned that [=StarKit=] loved [=JazzPaw=] (not in that way you sicko!). Now, [[spoiler: they're mates.]]
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* HilariousInHindsight: In Chaptr Three The Training Under The Star, it's mentioned that [=StarKit=] [=StarPaw=] loved [=JazzPaw=] (not in that way you sicko!). Now, [[spoiler: they're mates.]]
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* GrewTheBeard: The general opinion seems to be that it became more than your average bad fanfic somewhere between chapters ten and twelve.
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* GrewTheBeard: GrowingTheBeard: The general opinion seems to be that it became more than your average bad fanfic somewhere between chapters ten and twelve.
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* AccidentalInnuendo: After it is remarked that it is [=StarGleam's=] second time out hunting, we get this gem: "she'd had her first time when she was a littlekit and she and [=FireStar=] had snuck out together that's why he chose her as his apprentice_." {{Squick}}.
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* AccidentalInnuendo: AccidentalInnuendo:
** After it is remarked that it is [=StarGleam's=] second time out hunting, we get this gem: "she'd had her first time when she was a littlekit and she and [=FireStar=] had snuck out together that's why he chose her as his apprentice_." {{Squick}}.
** After it is remarked that it is [=StarGleam's=] second time out hunting, we get this gem: "she'd had her first time when she was a littlekit and she and [=FireStar=] had snuck out together that's why he chose her as his apprentice_." {{Squick}}.
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* BigLippedAlligatorMoment: You could make YourHeadAsplode [[MindScrew trying to figure]] out the significance of the newt in Chatter !1.
** ...Or what's happening in most of the chapters.
** ...Or what's happening in most of the chapters.
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* BigLippedAlligatorMoment: BigLippedAlligatorMoment:
** You could make YourHeadAsplode [[MindScrew trying to figure]] out the significance of the newt in Chatter!1.
** ...Or what's happening in most of the chapters.!1.
** You could make YourHeadAsplode [[MindScrew trying to figure]] out the significance of the newt in Chatter
** ...Or what's happening in most of the chapters.
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* DracoInLeatherPants: Hawkfrost was chosen to undergo a HeelFaceTurn so that he could fall in love with [=StarGleam=], presumably just because of his status as EvilIsSexy.
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* DracoInLeatherPants: DracoInLeatherPants:
** Hawkfrost was chosen to undergo a HeelFaceTurn so that he could fall in love with [=StarGleam=], presumably just because of his status as EvilIsSexy.
** Hawkfrost was chosen to undergo a HeelFaceTurn so that he could fall in love with [=StarGleam=], presumably just because of his status as EvilIsSexy.
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* {{Narm}}: '''All of it.'''
** There's even a ''literal'' Narm in one chapter. "Then by the powers of Starclan, I gave you this narme."
** There's even a ''literal'' Narm in one chapter. "Then by the powers of Starclan, I gave you this narme."
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* {{Narm}}: '''All of it.'''
**''' There's even a ''literal'' Narm in one chapter. chapter: "Then by the powers of Starclan, I gave you this narme."
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* RootingForTheEmpire: Basically everyone reading the fic agrees that [[SchoolgirlLesbians RedPaw and LakePool]] are the ''real'' heroes of the story.
** It's not [=RedPaw=] and [=LakePool=] being heroes so much as their persecution by [[DesignatedHero StarGleam]] being the thing that makes her so unlikable.
** It's not [=RedPaw=] and [=LakePool=] being heroes so much as their persecution by [[DesignatedHero StarGleam]] being the thing that makes her so unlikable.
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* RootingForTheEmpire: Basically everyone reading the fic agrees that [[SchoolgirlLesbians RedPaw and LakePool]] are the ''real'' heroes of the story.
**story. It's not [=RedPaw=] and [=LakePool=] being heroes so much as their persecution by [[DesignatedHero StarGleam]] being the thing that makes her so unlikable.
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* {{Wangst}}: [=StarGleam=]'s angst over her Clan "bevoming quare."
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* {{Wangst}}: {{Wangst}}:
** [=StarGleam=]'s angst over her Clan "bevoming quare."
** [=StarGleam=]'s angst over her Clan "bevoming quare."
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This is Flame Bait now.
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* SnarkBait
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* RomanticPlotTumor: For a few chapters early on, the main focus of the "story" was on the LoveDodecahedron between [=StarGleam=] and... everyone else.
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* DracoInLeatherPants: Hawkfrost was chosen to undergo a HeelFaceTurn so that he could fall in love with StarGleam, presumably just because of his status as EvilIsSexy.
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* DracoInLeatherPants: Hawkfrost was chosen to undergo a HeelFaceTurn so that he could fall in love with StarGleam, [=StarGleam=], presumably just because of his status as EvilIsSexy.
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* CrowningMomentOfFunny: [[Funny/StarkitsProphecy Here]].
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* MemeticMutation: It's becoming very popular on [[WarriorsWish a certain fansite]] to quote and/or reference the fic.
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* MemeticMutation: It's becoming very popular on [[WarriorsWish [[Website/WarriorsWish a certain fansite]] to quote and/or reference the fic.
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** It's not [=RedPaw=] and [=LakePool=] being heroes so much as their persecution by StarGleam being the thing that makes her so unlikable.
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** It's not [=RedPaw=] and [=LakePool=] being heroes so much as their persecution by StarGleam [[DesignatedHero StarGleam]] being the thing that makes her so unlikable.
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* DracoInLeatherPants: Hawkfrost was chosen to undergo a HeelFaceTurn so that he could [[RelationshipSue fall in love with StarGleam]], presumably just because of his status as EvilIsSexy.
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* DracoInLeatherPants: Hawkfrost was chosen to undergo a HeelFaceTurn so that he could [[RelationshipSue fall in love with StarGleam]], StarGleam, presumably just because of his status as EvilIsSexy.
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* MarySue: [=StarGleam=]... just, [=StarGleam=]...
** BlackHoleSue: The entire fic is pretty much about how she is the most important cat in the forest. At one point, cats from the other Clans even refer to her as their leader.
** GodModeSue: She [[CurbStompBattle oneshots]] Tigerstar. Freaking TIGERSTAR!
*** "[[ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill StarPaw beat FireStar 8/10 times once she let him win to make him fel bettar and b y the last one she was alittle tired."]] Good lord.
** JerkAssSue: A large chunk of the story consists almost entirely of [=StarGleam=] running around [[AuthorTract yelling at gay couples about how wrong it is to be gay]].
** ParodySue: [[PoesLaw Or so one can hope]].
** PossessionSue: Hawkfrost, who becomes a DracoInLeatherPants to match [=StarGleam=]'s RelationshipSue.
** PuritySue: {{Jesus}}--er, [=GleamStar=], of course, who gave the caln the Ten Comondants and helped them find Ljess in order to protect them from becoming sinners.
** RelationshipSue: [=StarGleam=] has Firestar, Graystripe, Blackstar, Hawkfrost, and Ashfur padding after her for no particular reason. She eventually hooks up with [=JazzSong=], however.
** SympatheticSue: We're supposed to feel sorry for her because of the above situation.
** [[spoiler:VillainSue]]: For about ten seconds, when she [[spoiler:undergoes a FaceHeelTurn]].
** BlackHoleSue: The entire fic is pretty much about how she is the most important cat in the forest. At one point, cats from the other Clans even refer to her as their leader.
** GodModeSue: She [[CurbStompBattle oneshots]] Tigerstar. Freaking TIGERSTAR!
*** "[[ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill StarPaw beat FireStar 8/10 times once she let him win to make him fel bettar and b y the last one she was alittle tired."]] Good lord.
** JerkAssSue: A large chunk of the story consists almost entirely of [=StarGleam=] running around [[AuthorTract yelling at gay couples about how wrong it is to be gay]].
** ParodySue: [[PoesLaw Or so one can hope]].
** PossessionSue: Hawkfrost, who becomes a DracoInLeatherPants to match [=StarGleam=]'s RelationshipSue.
** PuritySue: {{Jesus}}--er, [=GleamStar=], of course, who gave the caln the Ten Comondants and helped them find Ljess in order to protect them from becoming sinners.
** RelationshipSue: [=StarGleam=] has Firestar, Graystripe, Blackstar, Hawkfrost, and Ashfur padding after her for no particular reason. She eventually hooks up with [=JazzSong=], however.
** SympatheticSue: We're supposed to feel sorry for her because of the above situation.
** [[spoiler:VillainSue]]: For about ten seconds, when she [[spoiler:undergoes a FaceHeelTurn]].
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** It's not [=RedPaw=] and [=LakePool=] being heroes so much as their persecution by [[JerkAssSue StarGleam]] being the thing that makes her so unlikable.
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** It's not [=RedPaw=] and [=LakePool=] being heroes so much as their persecution by [[JerkAssSue StarGleam]] StarGleam being the thing that makes her so unlikable.
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Memetic Sex God has been cut per TRS. All wicks will be deleted.
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* DracoInLeatherPants: Hawkfrost was chosen to undergo a HeelFaceTurn so that he could [[RelationshipSue fall in love with StarGleam]], presumably just because of his status as a MemeticSexGod and prime example of EvilIsSexy.
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* DracoInLeatherPants: Hawkfrost was chosen to undergo a HeelFaceTurn so that he could [[RelationshipSue fall in love with StarGleam]], presumably just because of his status as a MemeticSexGod and prime example of EvilIsSexy.
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* GrewTheBeard ''and'' JumpedTheShark: The general opinion seems to be that it became more than your average bad fanfic somewhere between chapters ten and twelve.
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* GrewTheBeard ''and'' JumpedTheShark: GrewTheBeard: The general opinion seems to be that it became more than your average bad fanfic somewhere between chapters ten and twelve.
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These aren\'t YMMV. Moving.
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* YouFailBiologyForever: [[spoiler:[=GleamStar=]]]'s kits come out through her stomach.
* YouFailLogicForever: The author admits to herself that she is a lesbian after she discovers slash. How reading stories about two men makes someone realise that they like women is a mystery.
** Process of elimination.
* YouFailReligiousStudiesForever: The Clans have never heard of God, nor do they practice any human religions. Yet they still say "Oh my god!" (or rather "OMG!" or "MOGOSH!"), and the Ten Commandments (or rather "Ten Commons") play a role in the story.
** The fact that anybody who doesn't like the fic is instantly a "stnist" who hates "jEssus" may count, too.
** "11. No BENG GAY!f"
* YouFailLogicForever: The author admits to herself that she is a lesbian after she discovers slash. How reading stories about two men makes someone realise that they like women is a mystery.
** Process of elimination.
* YouFailReligiousStudiesForever: The Clans have never heard of God, nor do they practice any human religions. Yet they still say "Oh my god!" (or rather "OMG!" or "MOGOSH!"), and the Ten Commandments (or rather "Ten Commons") play a role in the story.
** The fact that anybody who doesn't like the fic is instantly a "stnist" who hates "jEssus" may count, too.
** "11. No BENG GAY!f"
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* GenericDoomsdayVillain: Er... what were Hollyleaf and Tigerstar's motives again?
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* CrackPairing: [=Hollyleaf×Tigerstar=]Hollyleaf×Tigerstar
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*** "[[ThereIsNoKillLikeOverkill [=StarPaw=] StarPaw beat [=FireStar=] FireStar 8/10 times once she let him win to make him fel bettar and b y the last one she was alittle tired."]] Good lord.
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** PuritySue: Jesus--er, [=GleamStar=], of course, who gave the caln the Ten Comondants and helped them find Ljess in order to protect them from becoming sinners.
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** PuritySue: Jesus--er, {{Jesus}}--er, [=GleamStar=], of course, who gave the caln the Ten Comondants and helped them find Ljess in order to protect them from becoming sinners.
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* OneSceneWonder / HeroicSacrifice: [=BubbleFur=] (or "Bublesfor").
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* FoeYay: In the middle of a fight, [=HawkFrost=] and [=AshKit=] suddenly start to [[RougeAnglesOfSatin "mack our"]].
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* YouFailSexEdForever: Somehow, [=StarGleam=] has become PREGGANT by the also-female [=JazzSong=]. [=JazzSong=] even [[LampshadeHanging points out that this shouldn't be possible]], but it's still not explained.
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* CrowningMomentOfFunny: [[Funny/{{Ptitleh1qfbg3l}} [[Funny/StarkitsProphecy Here]].