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* DeadFic: With the last update coming in January of 2016, and CL having not visited FIMFiction in almost a full year, it's disappointingly safe to say this story may never be completed.
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* GenreSavvy: Firewall and Luna both.
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* IngestingKnowledge: One of Luna's spells--which she soon passes on to Firewall--allows her to burn books and other reading materials, instantly transferring the information on said book to her. She eventually [[UpToEleven pushes this spell to a new level]] by burning [[spoiler: Firewall's phone, which happens to be connected to the Internet. By doing this, she gains near omniscience of Earth's history and knowledge. ([[ArsonMurderAndJaywalking It also makes her quite]] [[GenreSavvy savvy]]).]]
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* IngestingKnowledge: One of Luna's spells--which she soon passes on to Firewall--allows her to burn books and other reading materials, instantly transferring the information on said book to her. She eventually [[UpToEleven pushes this spell to a new level]] by burning [[spoiler: Firewall's phone, which happens to be connected to the Internet. By doing this, she gains near omniscience of Earth's history and knowledge. ([[ArsonMurderAndJaywalking It also makes her quite]] [[GenreSavvy savvy]]).savvy).]]
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'''Luna''': (in her best gravelly voice) [[DragonballAbridged I am an adult!]]
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'''Luna''': (in her best gravelly voice) [[DragonballAbridged [[WebVideo/DragonBallZAbridged I am an adult!]]
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** The summary on FIMFiction borrows rewritten lyrics from [[WebAnimation/HomestarRunner Trogdor]].
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* NotSoHarmlessVillain: For the first half of the FanFic, The Nightmare came across as a second rate DastardlyWhiplash and an overall negligible threat. Then comes [[WhamEpisode Chapter 8]] where The Nightmare [[spoiler: Possesses a weakened Princess Celestia after engineering a trap designed to exhaust her]], and suddenly TheNightmare seems ''[[KnightOfCerebus much]]'' more threatening.
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* '''''[[LargeHam LLLAARRRGE HHHAAAAAAAAMMMMMMMM!!!!!!!!!]]''''': Firewall, a fact that is frequently lampshaded.
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!!This WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic FanFic provides examples of these tropes:
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!!This WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic ''WesternAnimation/MyLittlePonyFriendshipIsMagic'' FanFic provides examples of these tropes:
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* WriteWhatYouKnow: Firewall as a self-insert AuthorAvatar.
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* ItsAllAboutMe: When it comes to smoking, Firewall doesn't care about the fact ''nopony'' can stand the smell. He even gives Luna a [[DeathGlare "dangerous glare"]] when she tries to take away his cigarettes.
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* ReferenceOverdosed: The author ''extensive'' use of Shout Outs, Memes and Continuity Nods can get old pretty fast.
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* WhatTheHellHero?: We can all agree that Prince Blueblood is an arrogant Jerkass. However, [[spoiler: Firewall attacking him out of nowhere and giving him a black eye for an incident Blueblood was already chewed out, humillated and may not even remember definitely comes as DisproportionateRetribution, which Luna angrily calls him out on]].
** [[spoiler: Not so much in the revised version, though. Here, it's only after Blueblood has impeded Storm Wing and Firewall by keeping the A.S.C.A. from taking off, refused to listen to either of their attempts to explain why their search for Luna can't wait, and then outright cut Firewall off and called him a blank-flank, that Firewall punches him (though [[AndThisIsFor he still brings Miss Rarity into it]]). It remains to be seen how Luna will react in this version]].
** [[spoiler: Not so much in the revised version, though. Here, it's only after Blueblood has impeded Storm Wing and Firewall by keeping the A.S.C.A. from taking off, refused to listen to either of their attempts to explain why their search for Luna can't wait, and then outright cut Firewall off and called him a blank-flank, that Firewall punches him (though [[AndThisIsFor he still brings Miss Rarity into it]]). It remains to be seen how Luna will react in this version]].
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** [[FullMetalAlchemist THIS RELAXING TECHNIQUE HAS BEEN PASSED DOWN THE ARMSTRONG LINE FOR GENERATIONS!]]
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** [[FullMetalAlchemist [[Manga/FullmetalAlchemist THIS RELAXING TECHNIQUE HAS BEEN PASSED DOWN THE ARMSTRONG LINE FOR GENERATIONS!]]
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*** He also added a "Screw Captain Storm Wing Count," which, just like the Krillin Owned Count, increases for every time Firewall says or thinks "Screw Captain Storm Wing."
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** Let's see, Self-insert, First-Person, black-garbed protagonist, PlayingWithFire as a superpower (in a sense), in love with a goddess/princess, and the dreaded Human in Equestria? All of it ''normally'' adds up to a MarySue. But CL pulled it off brilliantly.
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** Let's see, Self-insert, First-Person, black-garbed protagonist, PlayingWithFire as a superpower (in a sense), in love with a goddess/princess, and the dreaded Human in Equestria? Equestria? All of it ''normally'' adds up to a MarySue. MarySue. But CL pulled it off brilliantly.
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** Let's see, Self-insert, First-Person, black-garbed protagonist, PlayingWithFire as a superpower (in a sense), in love with a goddess/princess, and the dreaded Human in Equestria? All of it ''normally'' adds up to a MarySue. But CL pulled it off brilliantly.
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* Sturgeon'sLaw: CL wrote this story because he wanted to prove that all the tropes that are usually responsible for the 90% can be used effectively to make an excellent story. Given that it has been voted the funniest story on Equestria Daily two years running, it's apparent that he's succeeded.
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* Sturgeon'sLaw: SturgeonsLaw: CL wrote this story because he wanted to prove that all the tropes that are usually responsible for the 90% can be used effectively to make an excellent story. story. Given that it has been voted the funniest story on Equestria Daily two years running, it's apparent that he's succeeded.
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* Sturgeon'sLaw: CL wrote this story because he wanted to prove that all the tropes that are usually responsible for the 90% can be used effectively to make an excellent story. Given that it has been voted the funniest story on Equestria Daily two years running, it's apparent that he's succeeded.
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* CombatPragmatist: Firewall takes this trope and runs with it - which is probably the only reason he's still alive in a setting where almost everyone is more powerful than him. Among his techniques are pulling on hair, using his tail to trip opponents (a technique even Storm Wing admitted he'd never thought of,) and throwing dirt in the enemy's eyes.
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* CombatPragmatist: Firewall takes this trope and runs with it - which is probably the only reason he's still alive in a setting where almost everyone is more powerful than him. Among his techniques are pulling on hair, using his tail to trip opponents (a technique even Storm Wing admitted he'd never thought of,) and throwing dirt in the enemy's eyes. ''Superheated'' dirt.
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** In the rewrite, he does this to Luna after finding her at the R.C.R.P.S. after she absorbed his phone.
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** They even added a "S.C.S.W. Count" in the revised chapters for that particular one. Currently, in all of two chapters, it's up to five. And he only says it once in the first chapter he uses it in.
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You can find my story [[http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/08/story-through-eyes-of-another-pony.html here]]."
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You can find my story [[http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/08/story-through-eyes-of-another-pony.html here]].here]] ([[http://www.fimfiction.net/story/19641/Through-The-Eyes-Of-Another-Pony incomplete revised version]])."
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* TheWebAlwaysExisted: Or rather, there's wireless, up-to-date Earth internet in Equestria, if you have the hardware to access it.
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* DeathIsCheap: Played with. Firewall remarks that he hates stories that feature resurrection as it winds up negating the drama of death. [[spoiler: When he actually gets the fleeting chance to save a fallen ally this way, he doesn't hesitate for a second.]]
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* DoesNotKnowHisOwnStrength: [[spoiler:Human!Applejack]] apparently has a gift for breaking things, courtesy of this trope.
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* TraumaCongaLine: Happens offscreen to [[spoiler:Twilight]] between chapters 14 and 15. When we rejoin her, we find that she has [[spoiler:had Equestria's artificial nature revealed to her, been confronted with the harsh realities of human suffering and cruelty, been separated from Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy, and was forced to take over for an absent Luna.]] All within a very short timeframe. She lampshades it by noting she's doing amazingly well, despite.
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Suddenly clarifications! Thousands of them! Or just one.
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* AndNowForSomeoneCompletelyDifferent: Chapter 15 very suddenly switches perspectives to [[spoiler:a Russian hired assassin, who meets Fluttershy in the Siberian forest]]. Sure, why not?
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* AndNowForSomeoneCompletelyDifferent: Chapter 15 very suddenly switches perspectives to [[spoiler:a Russian hired assassin, who meets Fluttershy in the Siberian forest]].forest as the latter has been stranded on Earth trying to retrieve Firewall]]. Sure, why not?
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** CL also seems to tease a bit for Silverheart and Storm Wing (screw him for that), particularly in the middle of the story. As of the later chapters, this relationship seems to have been put on hold in favor of Prince Storm Wing (screw him) and Fluttershy. Which is then hinted at by Firewall.
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* [[spoiler: [[ManBehindTheMan Creator Behind the Demon]]: If you thought that the Nightmare's plans seemed a bit too intricate for her shattered mind to formulate, you were right. It was all an elaborate plot by David so that he could "fix" her.]]
* [[spoiler: GodIsInept: Turns out the "Equestria" Firewall is in is actually David's creation: its third draft, to be specific. He'd botched the previous two incarnations pretty horribly, and his attempts to fix the current one weren't particularly well thought out.]]
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* WriteWhatYouKnow: Firewall as a self-insert AuthorAvatar.
* [[spoiler: [[ManBehindTheMan Creator Behind the Demon]]: If you thought that the Nightmare's plans seemed a bit too intricate for her shattered mind to formulate, you were right. It was all an elaborate plot by David so that he could "fix" her.]]
* [[spoiler: GodIsInept: Turns out the "Equestria" Firewall is in is actually David's creation: its third draft, to be specific. He'd botched the previous two incarnations pretty horribly, and his attempts to fix the current one weren't particularly well thought out.]]
* [[spoiler: [[ManBehindTheMan Creator Behind the Demon]]: If you thought that the Nightmare's plans seemed a bit too intricate for her shattered mind to formulate, you were right. It was all an elaborate plot by David so that he could "fix" her.]]
* [[spoiler: GodIsInept: Turns out the "Equestria" Firewall is in is actually David's creation: its third draft, to be specific. He'd botched the previous two incarnations pretty horribly, and his attempts to fix the current one weren't particularly well thought out.]]
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* [[spoiler: [[ManBehindTheMan Creator Behind the Demon]]: If you thought that the Nightmare's plans seemed a bit too intricate for her shattered mind to formulate, you were right. It was all an elaborate plot by David so that he could "fix" her.]]
* [[spoiler: GodIsInept: Turns out the "Equestria" Firewall is in is actually David's creation: its third draft, to be specific. He'd botched the previous two incarnations pretty horribly, and his attempts to fix the current one weren't particularly well thought out.]]
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* CentipedesDilemma: Particularly evident in the rewrite of Chapter 1 (or as [[TheDragon The Bugsydor]] likes to call it, Chapter 1 Mk II), when Firewall first discovers he's a unicorn and attempts to do magic. He'd already been magically lighting his cigarettes without noticing, in addition to pulling them from hammerspace, but he couldn't force a spell out of his horn when he tried to just do "anything". Apparently, it's loads easier to work magic as a unicorn if you don't think too hard about it and just let the magic take care of the how while you think of what you want done.
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* [[spoiler: GodIsInept: Turns out the "Equestria" Firewall is in is actually David's creation: its third draft, to be specific. He'd botched the previous two incarnations pretty horribly, and his attempts to fix the current one weren't particularly well thought out.]]
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* BerserkButton: Anything that threatens kids in any way absolutely enrages Firewall. [[spoiler: Nightmare]] learns this the painful way when [[spoiler: the villains kidnap Apple Bloom.]]
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* BerserkButton: Anything that threatens kids in any way absolutely enrages Firewall. [[spoiler: Nightmare]] The Nightmare learns this the painful way when [[spoiler: the villains kidnap Apple Bloom.]]Bloom.
* BewareTheSillyOnes: None of the ponies take Firewall seriously, as he tends to respond to danger by laughing his plot off at it. This does NOT mean he cannot be a credible threat. When [[LetsGetDangerous pushed too far]], he will melt your freaking face into a puddle, and then incinerate said puddle. See the examples under CrouchingMoronHiddenBadass below.
* BewareTheSillyOnes: None of the ponies take Firewall seriously, as he tends to respond to danger by laughing his plot off at it. This does NOT mean he cannot be a credible threat. When [[LetsGetDangerous pushed too far]], he will melt your freaking face into a puddle, and then incinerate said puddle. See the examples under CrouchingMoronHiddenBadass below.
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* CrouchingMoronHiddenBadass: Firewall, though not really a moron, does act rather [[CloudCuckooLander goofy]] at times, which usually annoys the ponies around him. However, don't mess with him or his friends. [[spoiler: Shadow Shot]] learns this the hard way.
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* CrouchingMoronHiddenBadass: Firewall, though not really a moron, does act rather [[CloudCuckooLander goofy]] at times, which usually annoys the ponies around him. However, don't mess with him or his friends. friends.
** [[spoiler: Shadow Shot]] learns this the hard way.
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* LukeIAmYourFather: Firewall learns that [[spoiler: Azure Flora, TheDragon to the Nightmare]], is Storm Wing's mother. She doesn't know he's her son yet, though.
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* NotSoDifferent: Firewall is Compared to [[spoiler: David; but by Winter Sky. David was silly, tried hide human culture from the ponies, and was only serious if ponies were in danger too.]] Firewall has yet to come up with a serious difference between the two, aside from himself being somewhat philosophical.
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* NotSoDifferent: Firewall is Compared to [[spoiler: David; but by Winter Sky. David was silly, tried to hide human culture from the ponies, and was only serious if ponies were in danger too.]] Firewall has yet to come up with a serious difference between the two, aside from himself being somewhat philosophical.
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* SpitTake: Of all ponies, [[spoiler: '''''Princess Celestia''''']] does this around a campfire, after learning [[spoiler: how most humans view her as a cruel tyrant]]. Twice, in fact, though the second time, [[ButtMonkey Firewall]] ends up covered in cider.
* SufficientlyAdvancedAlien: [[spoiler: Is what David might actually be.]]
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* SufficientlyAdvancedAlien: [[spoiler: Is what Davidmight actually be.is.]]
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* [[spoiler: [[ManBehindTheMan Creator Behind the Demon]]: If you thought that the Nightmare's plans seemed a bit too intricate for her shattered mind to formulate, you were right. It was all an elaborate plot by David so that he could "fix" her.]]
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* NewPowersAsThePlotDemands: Played with. When the Mane Six discover new abilities granted to them by the Elements just in time for a decisive battle, Firewall and Luna are pleased but deeply suspicious. [[spoiler: They are right to be.]]
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* VaguenessIsComing: [[spoiler: David]] constantly, constantly makes references to some terrible fate in Equestria's future and how all of his actions are to prevent it. He NEVER elaborates on this. Firewall lampshades it a few times.
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* BlessedWithSuck: A pony that is heavily and repeatedly exposed to Inmanipulon becomes immune to magic... rendering them unable to interact directly with magical objects in the process, and cutting them off from their own special talent.
