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\\\"I was driven down, carried, tossed about, everything torn from me, Bob disappearing without a sound. They pressed me down while I struggled and screamed, all useless, my mind too full of terror to focus, to defend myself.
And there, in the dark, they \\\'\\\'\\\'tore my clothes from me\\\'\\\'\\\'. I felt Bianca \\\'\\\'\\\'press her naked flesh to me\\\'\\\'\\\', a hideous dream-body that unraveled into a nightmare.
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And their tongues. \\\'\\\'\\\'Soft, intimate, warm, moist\\\'\\\'\\\'. Pleasure that struck me like hammers while I tried to scream against it. Chemical pleasure, animal sensation, heartless and cold, uncaring to my horror, revulsion, despair.\\\"
Emphasis mine.
ETA: Also, Harry reaction immediately after is \\\"humiliation\\\". Repulsion and humiliation don\\\'t point toward brutalization, but rape.
And there, in the dark, they \\\'\\\'\\\'tore my clothes from me\\\'\\\'\\\'. I felt Bianca \\\'\\\'\\\'press her naked flesh to me\\\'\\\'\\\', a hideous dream-body that unraveled into a nightmare.
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And their tongues. \\\'\\\'\\\'Soft, intimate, warm, moist\\\'\\\'\\\'. Pleasure that struck me like hammers while I tried to scream against it. Chemical pleasure, animal sensation, heartless and cold, uncaring to my horror, revulsion, despair.\\\"
Emphasis mine.
ETA: Also, Harry reaction immediately after is \\\"humiliation\\\". Repulsion and humiliation don\\\'t point toward brutalization, but rape.
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\\\"I was driven down, carried, tossed about, everything torn from me, Bob disappearing without a sound. They pressed me down while I struggled and screamed, all useless, my mind too full of terror to focus, to defend myself.
And there, in the dark, they \\\'\\\'\\\'tore my clothes from me\\\'\\\'\\\'. I felt Bianca \\\'\\\'\\\'press her naked flesh to me\\\'\\\'\\\', a hideous dream-body that unraveled into a nightmare.
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And their tongues. \\\'\\\'\\\'Soft, intimate, warm, moist\\\'\\\'\\\'. Pleasure that struck me like hammers while I tried to scream against it. Chemical pleasure, animal sensation, heartless and cold, uncaring to my horror, revulsion, despair.\\\"
Emphasis mine.
ETA: Also, Harry reaction after is \\\"humiliation\\\". Repulsion and humiliation don\\\'t point toward brutalization, but rape.
And there, in the dark, they \\\'\\\'\\\'tore my clothes from me\\\'\\\'\\\'. I felt Bianca \\\'\\\'\\\'press her naked flesh to me\\\'\\\'\\\', a hideous dream-body that unraveled into a nightmare.
...
And their tongues. \\\'\\\'\\\'Soft, intimate, warm, moist\\\'\\\'\\\'. Pleasure that struck me like hammers while I tried to scream against it. Chemical pleasure, animal sensation, heartless and cold, uncaring to my horror, revulsion, despair.\\\"
Emphasis mine.
ETA: Also, Harry reaction after is \\\"humiliation\\\". Repulsion and humiliation don\\\'t point toward brutalization, but rape.
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\\\"I was driven down, carried, tossed about, everything torn from me, Bob disappearing without a sound. They pressed me down while I struggled and screamed, all useless, my mind too full of terror to focus, to defend myself.
And there, in the dark, they \\\'\\\'\\\'tore my clothes from me\\\'\\\'\\\'. I felt Bianca \\\'\\\'\\\'press her naked flesh to me\\\'\\\'\\\', a hideous dream-body that unraveled into a nightmare.
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And their tongues. \\\'\\\'\\\'Soft, intimate, warm, moist\\\'\\\'\\\'. Pleasure that struck me like hammers while I tried to scream against it. Chemical pleasure, animal sensation, heartless and cold, uncaring to my horror, revulsion, despair.\\\"
Emphasis mine.
And there, in the dark, they \\\'\\\'\\\'tore my clothes from me\\\'\\\'\\\'. I felt Bianca \\\'\\\'\\\'press her naked flesh to me\\\'\\\'\\\', a hideous dream-body that unraveled into a nightmare.
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And their tongues. \\\'\\\'\\\'Soft, intimate, warm, moist\\\'\\\'\\\'. Pleasure that struck me like hammers while I tried to scream against it. Chemical pleasure, animal sensation, heartless and cold, uncaring to my horror, revulsion, despair.\\\"
Emphasis mine.
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I posted the entire passage below int he next comment train, but Bianca pressing her naked body to him after they strip him naked? Is, uh, pretty overt.
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Here\\\'s my argument, copied from the comment I made then removed;
RE: RapeAsDrama
* RapeAsDrama: In \\\'\\\'Grave Peril\\\'\\\', it is \\\'\\\'deeply implied\\\'\\\' that [[spoiler:Harry (and likely Justine) was gangraped by Bianca\\\'s Red Court. Harry being, well, Harry, he never speaks about what happened to him explicitly, but several books later still mentions having nightmares about it.]]
What about this phrasing isn\\\'t working for you? I am acknowledging that some may not read it that way, but as someone involved with the fandom I know \\\'\\\'many\\\'\\\' people consider this something that happened that Harry doesn\\\'t talk about because of his issues with consent in the past. There are many moments where Harry is not quite an Unreliable Narrator, but he isn\\\'t a 100% truthful one either.
To refresh memory, this is the pertinent section of \\\'\\\'Grave Peril\\\'\\\':
\\\"I was driven down, carried, tossed about, everything torn from me, Bob disappearing without a sound. They pressed me down while I struggled and screamed, all useless, my mind too full of terror to focus, to defend myself.
And there, in the dark, they tore my clothes from me. I felt Bianca press her naked flesh to me, a hideous dream-body that unraveled into a nightmare.
...
And their tongues. Soft, intimate, warm, moist. Pleasure that struck me like hammers while I tried to scream against it. Chemical pleasure, animal sensation, heartless and cold, uncaring to my horror, revulsion, despair.\\\"
RE: RapeAsDrama
* RapeAsDrama: In \\\'\\\'Grave Peril\\\'\\\', it is \\\'\\\'deeply implied\\\'\\\' that [[spoiler:Harry (and likely Justine) was gangraped by Bianca\\\'s Red Court. Harry being, well, Harry, he never speaks about what happened to him explicitly, but several books later still mentions having nightmares about it.]]
What about this phrasing isn\\\'t working for you? I am acknowledging that some may not read it that way, but as someone involved with the fandom I know \\\'\\\'many\\\'\\\' people consider this something that happened that Harry doesn\\\'t talk about because of his issues with consent in the past. There are many moments where Harry is not quite an Unreliable Narrator, but he isn\\\'t a 100% truthful one either.
To refresh memory, this is the pertinent section of \\\'\\\'Grave Peril\\\'\\\':
\\\"I was driven down, carried, tossed about, everything torn from me, Bob disappearing without a sound. They pressed me down while I struggled and screamed, all useless, my mind too full of terror to focus, to defend myself.
And there, in the dark, they tore my clothes from me. I felt Bianca press her naked flesh to me, a hideous dream-body that unraveled into a nightmare.
...
And their tongues. Soft, intimate, warm, moist. Pleasure that struck me like hammers while I tried to scream against it. Chemical pleasure, animal sensation, heartless and cold, uncaring to my horror, revulsion, despair.\\\"
