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My own take (two are keepers, a third can be salvaged with a rewrite, and remove the rest):
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* The last bit is a comment suggesting that perhaps, instead of being the villainous arsehole he's portrayed as, perhaps he was distraught by what just happened to Neo. That bit could be salvaged into an example. The rest, remove for being motive/backstory WMG.
* WMG about something the show's never delved into. Remove.
* Assumptions about things that have never been claimed in the show -- such as, why does being from Mistral mean there's a traditional way to honour the fallen by cremating them? The show's never talked about such a thing. Remove.
* WMG about something the show's never delved into. Remove.
* Assumptions about things that have never been claimed in the show -- such as, why does being from Mistral mean there's a traditional way to honour the fallen by cremating them? The show's never talked about such a thing. Remove.
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* The last bit is a comment suggesting that perhaps, instead of being the villainous arsehole he\'s portrayed as, perhaps he was distraught by what just happened to Neo. That bit could be salvaged into an example. The rest, remove for being motive/backstory WMG.
* WMG about something the show\'s never delved into. Remove.
* Assumptions about things that have never been claimed in the show -- such as, why does being from Mistral mean there\'s a traditional way to honour the fallen by cremating them? The show\'s never talked about such a thing. Remove.
* WMG about something the show\'s never delved into. Remove.
* Assumptions about things that have never been claimed in the show -- such as, why does being from Mistral mean there\'s a traditional way to honour the fallen by cremating them? The show\'s never talked about such a thing. Remove.
