Alfeme - Whistler's Worldbuilding

I am thinking one of the dragon kingdoms on Meleti, the Alfeme, have their own tongue which needs to be translated. I'm thinking phonemes like this:

/a/ /e/ /f/ /i/ /j/ /k/ /l/ /m/ /n/ /o/ /p/ /s/ /&esh;/ /t/ /u/ /w/

It would probably be written with a featural abugida due to the simple syllabic structure (only /m/, /n/, and /l/ are viable ending consonants). It would have perfect and imperfect cases in the present and habitual case as well in the past. It would have prepositions, but most everything except demonstratives and genitives would be postpositive. Romanization would render /j/ as <y>, /k/ as <c>, and /&esh;/ as <x>.

Here's a few sample sentences:

So what do you think so far?

Actually, maybe it would be better if it had something like an alphabet. Maybe something Hangul-like.

Hangul is fascinating—more so because it was largely invented by a single historical individual: King Sejong in 1446. The idea, of course, is that the shape of every letter indicates how it is pronounced by association with the location of the tongue within the mouth. Tolkein's Elvish language Tenqwar is similar.

Exactly the point—though something that evolved from logographies would be more interesting.

Also, adding /b/ /d/ /g/ to the inventory.

Mixing the vowels and the consonants together is a little weird to me. Also, you dont seem to group the consonants by similarity in speech production: voiceless/voiced x aspirant/stop; ie, the p/b/v/f group, the t/d/th/dh group, the k/g/j/sh, and so forth. Those aren't the only groupings that could be justified, but you see the underlying principle.

I grouped them together to show alphabetical order.

Decided to add allophonic variations to /f/, /s/, and /[sh]/. They now become /v/, /z/, and /[zh]/ between vowels.

Quick thingy I posted in the Conlang Coven:

I thought in my language that there are nominative, accusative, dative, and genitive cases, but dative is only being used in formal speech. The formal second-person pronouns (are also falling somewhat into disuse, though they are still used commonly to refer to Maci (the moon), the sun, and the Fis—the divine king of the island. Even his children refer to him by formal pronouns.

Recently, people have taken to using the informal second-person pronoun when talking to the Fis. This is especially true with those who supported what Fis Poleca had did before the Lelfe overthrew him.

Velar sounds now become palatal before /i/ due to a sound change. /ŋ/ becomes /ɲ/, /k/ becomes /c/, and /g/ becomes /ɟ/. This is similar to how I actually speak English.

I have to say that I am not really familiar with the symbols you are using. Can you provide some examples?

They are found in the IPA. /c/ represents a voiceless palatal stop (like the "k" in "keep"). /ɟ/ is a voiced palatal stop (like "g" in "gear"). /ɲ/ is a palatal nasal (like the "ny" in "canyon"). The n with a hook is the "ng" in "sing."