We start chapter 3 with an authors note saying - 'STOP FLAMMING DA STORY PREPZ OK!' What does that even mean? I am so confused.
Apon reading the chapter,there is very little detail. The description of the clothing is.... Alright, but the next line might as well have zero detail. In exact quotation- - I felt a little depressed then,so I slit my wrist.
If that had a reason as to why she was feeling depressed,it wouldn't be to bad,but that is all the information that is given. The sentence is far too simple for my liking.
As I continued reading this... Sorry excuse for a fanfiction,I basically facepalmed so hard my face was red. Draco being the 'bad boy' he is, he has a license plate that is 666.. You do realise license plates consist of more than three numbers,right? Besides, it's not even that cool,if that's what you're going for,you failed... Horribly.
Next paragraph Ebony calls Joel 'hot' and Draco goes all sensitive. She catches on and says she doesn't like Joel more than Draco,so then he goes all protective and happy and other shit. Okay? Draco takes Ebony into the Forbidden Forest after the concert and chapter three ends.
Time for chapter four!
Ebony's being a whiney bitch,screaming at Draco angrily. But then Draco looks at her with red coloured contact lenses that appeared out of no where and all is good. Yes horny time is a coming.
-Then he put his thingie into my you-know-what and we did it for the first time.
Is it just me,or is this line in the writing age of a horny three-year old? No? Okay then..
Some person yells:
-'WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING YOU MOTHERFUCKERS!'
Woah,woah,woah,wait. Dumbledore? What? In what world does Dumbledore swear? I'm... Sigh. The chapter ends just over a quarter of a page. Again, how lazy can you get?
That's it for now. Enjoy..
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