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The screenplay was ranked as a finalist in 13Horror.com's 2019 short screenplay contest, and it was published on Amazon on June 19th, 2019.
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The screenplay was ranked as a finalist in 13Horror.com's 2019 short screenplay contest, and it was published and available for purchase on Amazon on as of June 19th, 2019.
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''[[https://drive.google.com/file/d/1KwWt1NrFV-AsholqfTIJbUXu-FznRLTj/view Migraine]]'' is a black comedy/horror screenplay written by Tropers/JoeBlitz.
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The screenplay was ranked as a finalist in 13Horror.com's 2019 short screenplay contest, and it was published on Amazon on June 19th, 2019.
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** Ken's middle name comes from a certain [[Franchise/FridayThe13th horror icon]].
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** Ken's middle name comes from was inspired by a certain [[Franchise/FridayThe13th horror icon]].
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* BiTheWay: Ken's ex-girlfriend Brenda, who reveals that she has moved on and married a woman. Ken feigns his approval.
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* ShoutOut:
** Ken's dismissive "I know that sounds bad..." upon revealing his true colors to a paralyzed Penelope is a direct reference to [[spoiler: Ego's]] line in ''Film/GuardiansOfTheGalaxyVol2''.
** Ken's middle name comes from a certain [[Franchise/FridayThe13th horror icon]].
** Ken's dismissive "I know that sounds bad..." upon revealing his true colors to a paralyzed Penelope is a direct reference to [[spoiler: Ego's]] line in ''Film/GuardiansOfTheGalaxyVol2''.
** Ken's middle name comes from a certain [[Franchise/FridayThe13th horror icon]].
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* MurderDotCom: [[spoiler: Revealed to be Ken's source of income. In Ken's own words, "the more illegal something is to produce, the more people are willing to pay outlandish amounts of money for it"].
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* MurderDotCom: [[spoiler: Revealed to be Ken's source of income. In Ken's own words, "the more illegal something is to produce, the more people are willing to pay outlandish amounts of money for it"].
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* MurderDotCom: [[spoiler: Revealed to be Ken's source of income. In Ken's own words, "the more illegal something is to produce, the more people are willing to pay outlandish amounts of money for it"].
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* AmbitionIsEvil: A core theme to the story is just this, as an ambition in a man like Ken who has no morals is extremely dangerous. Ken admits he only sees two types of players in "life's game"; losers, and those willing to cheat, making him an incredible threat to the safety of others.
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* VillainProtagonist: Kenneth Muntz, inspired by characters like [[Literature/AmericanPsycho Patrick Bateman]] and {{Film/Nightcrawler Louis Bloom}}.
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* VillainProtagonist: Kenneth Muntz, inspired by characters like [[Literature/AmericanPsycho Patrick Bateman]] and {{Film/Nightcrawler [[{{Film/Nightcrawler}} Louis Bloom}}.Bloom]].
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* VillainProtagonist: Kenneth Muntz, inspired by characters like [[Literature/AmericanPsycho Patrick Bateman]] and [[Film/Nightcrawler Louis Bloom]].
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* VillainProtagonist: Kenneth Muntz, inspired by characters like [[Literature/AmericanPsycho Patrick Bateman]] and [[Film/Nightcrawler {{Film/Nightcrawler Louis Bloom]].Bloom}}.
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* PreMortemOneLiner: "Your pain is my profit".
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* PoliticallyIncorrectVillain: Ken Muntz is a virulent misogynist, blaming all women for his falling-out with Brenda, and openly referring to them as "useless bitches" and a "supply of fresh meat just waiting to be slaughtered".
* PreMortemOneLiner: "Your pain is myprofit".profit".
* {{Sadist}}: Ken clearly relishes inflicting pain on others, be it his unhinged laughter after destroying Fred's relationship or his glee at [[spoiler: revealing his true intentions to the helpless Penelope]].
* TheSociopath: A textbook case with Ken, who admits nonchalantly that it's not in him to care about life. He is also remarkable good at maintaining his facade, to the point that Fred at first doesn't believe his confession.
* SerialKiller
* VillainProtagonist: Kenneth Muntz, inspired by characters like [[Literature/AmericanPsycho Patrick Bateman]] and [[Film/Nightcrawler Louis Bloom]].
* PreMortemOneLiner: "Your pain is my
* {{Sadist}}: Ken clearly relishes inflicting pain on others, be it his unhinged laughter after destroying Fred's relationship or his glee at [[spoiler: revealing his true intentions to the helpless Penelope]].
* TheSociopath: A textbook case with Ken, who admits nonchalantly that it's not in him to care about life. He is also remarkable good at maintaining his facade, to the point that Fred at first doesn't believe his confession.
* SerialKiller
* VillainProtagonist: Kenneth Muntz, inspired by characters like [[Literature/AmericanPsycho Patrick Bateman]] and [[Film/Nightcrawler Louis Bloom]].
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* AssholeVictim:
** [[AvertedTrope Averted]] with Ken's neighbor Fred. Ken finds Fred and his girlfriend deeply annoying, but they, especially Fred, are really nothing but nice and cordial to him. Makes it all seem insanely petty on Ken's part when he deliberately sabotages their relationship by playing on growing tensions for [[ItAmusedMe shits and giggles]]. [[spoiler: And then murders Fred for no discernible reason at the finale]].
** [[AvertedTrope Averted]] with Ken's neighbor Fred. Ken finds Fred and his girlfriend deeply annoying, but they, especially Fred, are really nothing but nice and cordial to him. Makes it all seem insanely petty on Ken's part when he deliberately sabotages their relationship by playing on growing tensions for [[ItAmusedMe shits and giggles]]. [[spoiler: And then murders Fred for no discernible reason at the finale]].
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**AssholeVictim: [[AvertedTrope Averted]] with Ken's neighbor Fred. Ken finds Fred and his girlfriend deeply annoying, but they, especially Fred, are really nothing but nice and cordial to him. Makes it all seem insanely petty on Ken's part when he deliberately sabotages their relationship by playing on growing tensions for [[ItAmusedMe shits and giggles]]. [[spoiler: And then murders Fred for no discernible reason at the finale]].
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** During his speech to Penelope, Ken references the Greek mythological figure Tantulus. Anyone who knows what Tantulus was involved in can get an idea what Ken has in store for his victims.
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* EvilChef: Ken is revealed to be [[spoiler: is a rather skilled butcher. And people are on the menu]].
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* EvilHasABadSenseOfHumor: A dark example. Ken routinely plays a game with gas station attendant Roy where Roy attempts to make Ken laugh with dark jokes, to no avail. The only time Ken genuinely laughs in the whole story is after deliberately destroying his neighbors' relationship, laughing his ass off as Fred and Kacey have an altercation outside his door.
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* EvilChef: Ken is revealed to be [[spoiler: is a rather skilled butcher. And people are on the menu]].
* EvilHasABadSenseOfHumor: A dark example. Ken routinely plays a game with gas station attendant Roy where Roy attempts to make Ken laugh with dark jokes, to no avail.The One of the only time times Ken genuinely laughs in the whole story is after deliberately destroying his neighbors' relationship, laughing his ass off as Fred and Kacey have an altercation outside his door.
* EvilHasABadSenseOfHumor: A dark example. Ken routinely plays a game with gas station attendant Roy where Roy attempts to make Ken laugh with dark jokes, to no avail.
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* FreudianExcuseIsNoExcuse: Ken admits to himself that no matter what he tells himself, what he does to innocent people is pure evil, but he chooses to do it anyway.
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* ActuallyPrettyFunny: Ken's one moment of humanity in the script has him laughing along with Fred after the latter, in a pot-induced stupor, finds Ken's confession to [[spoiler: serial murder]] hilarious.
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* CrankyLandlord: Sanchez fits this trope to a T, to the point where he expresses visceral delight at the thought of Ken dying on the streets in the cold of winter.
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* {{Anticlimax}}: [[spoiler: Ken kills Penelope, and when Fred comes knocking on his door, one can suspect his reign of terror is over. Ken simply steers his neighbor away, and carries on. The story ends with him on his bed, narrating to the audience about how [[LampshadeHanging disappointed they must be]]]].
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** [[DownplayedTrope Downplayed]] with Sanchez. While threatening to throw Ken out into the streets in the dead of winter and relishing the thought of his frozen corpse is harsh, his anger is a bit justified as Ken has been dodging his payments for weeks. Still, it's a little satisfying when Ken gives him a vicious threat on his life, but this "comeuppance" is [[SubvertedTrope subverted]] when Sanchez simply laughs it off.
** [[AvertedTrope Averted]] with Ken's neighbors. Ken finds Fred and Kacey deeply annoying, but they're really nothing but nice and cordial to him. Makes it all seem insanely petty on Ken's part when he deliberately sabotages their relationship by playing on growing tensions for [[ItAmusedMe shits and giggles]].
** [[AvertedTrope Averted]] with Ken's neighbors. Ken finds Fred and Kacey deeply annoying, but they're really nothing but nice and cordial to him. Makes it all seem insanely petty on Ken's part when he deliberately sabotages their relationship by playing on growing tensions for [[ItAmusedMe shits and giggles]].
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* TheBadGuyWins: [[spoiler: Ken Muntz, revealed to be a malicious, misogynistic SerialKiller, gets enough income from his illicit dealings to move to a better apartment, and promises to continue his murderous ways until he's caught or killed]].
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* TheBadGuyWins: [[spoiler: Ken Muntz, revealed to be a malicious, misogynistic SerialKiller, murders both his victim and his neighbor, gets enough income from his illicit dealings to move to a better apartment, and promises to continue his murderous ways until he's caught or killed]].
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** Fred, in the midst of a weed binge following his fall-out with Kacey, attempts to confide with Ken. Unbeknownst to him, [[spoiler: Ken is attempting to clean up the scene of his latest murder. When Fred notices two glasses on Ken's table, indicating Ken has a guest, Ken simply replies "what glasses", successfully gaslighting the stoned Fred]].
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* DeconstructedCharacterArchetype: Of the VillainProtagonist. Kenneth Muntz has a sympathetic motive, just trying to make enough money to pay the rent, but his willingness to cross any moral line, his sick pleasure in carrying out his twisted crimes, and his sheer pettiness make him wholly unsympathetic. He also lacks any genuine charisma or charm, leaving nothing but an utterly contemptible HateSink for readers to despise.
* DownerEnding: Ken ruins Fred's love life, [[spoiler: has killed at least seven young women, and makes enough money from selling their meat to move to a new apartment, all with no one being the wiser that a monster is in their midst]].
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* DeconstructedCharacterArchetype: DeconstructedCharacterArchetype:
** Of the VillainProtagonist. Kenneth Muntz has a sympathetic motive, just trying to make enough money to pay the rent, but his willingness to cross any moral line, his sick pleasure in carrying out his twisted crimes, and his sheer pettiness make him wholly unsympathetic. He also lacks any genuine charisma or charm, leaving nothing but an utterly contemptible HateSink for readers to despise.
** Of TheStoner as well. Fred seems like your typical comic relief character when he's first introduced, but it is revealed that his weed habit is so out of control that it has driven a wedge between him and his girlfriend, which allows Ken to effortlessly exploit that linchpin and destroy their relationship. Fred confesses that he knows his habit is destroying his life, but he can't stop because he feels it's all he knows. When [[spoiler: Ken admits that he's a serial killer to a stoned Fred, the man simply thinks he's joking, leading to his doom]].
* DownerEnding: Ken ruins Fred's love life, [[spoiler: has killed at least seven young women, murders Fred for fun, and makes enough money from selling their meat to move to a new apartment, all with no one being the wiser that a monster is in their midst]].
** Of the VillainProtagonist. Kenneth Muntz has a sympathetic motive, just trying to make enough money to pay the rent, but his willingness to cross any moral line, his sick pleasure in carrying out his twisted crimes, and his sheer pettiness make him wholly unsympathetic. He also lacks any genuine charisma or charm, leaving nothing but an utterly contemptible HateSink for readers to despise.
** Of TheStoner as well. Fred seems like your typical comic relief character when he's first introduced, but it is revealed that his weed habit is so out of control that it has driven a wedge between him and his girlfriend, which allows Ken to effortlessly exploit that linchpin and destroy their relationship. Fred confesses that he knows his habit is destroying his life, but he can't stop because he feels it's all he knows. When [[spoiler: Ken admits that he's a serial killer to a stoned Fred, the man simply thinks he's joking, leading to his doom]].
* DownerEnding: Ken ruins Fred's love life, [[spoiler: has killed at least seven young women, murders Fred for fun, and makes enough money from selling their meat to move to a new apartment, all with no one being the wiser that a monster is in their midst]].
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* KickTheDog: The entirety of Ken's interactions with Fred, up to and including [[spoiler: strangling him to death]].
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* DownerEnding: [[spoiler: Ken ruins Fred's love life, has killed at least seven young women, and makes enough money from selling their meat to move to a new apartment, planning to continue his spree indefinitely]].
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* {{Anticlimax}}: [[spoiler: Ken kills Penelope, and when Fred comes knocking on his door, one can suspect his reign of terror is over. Ken simply steers his neighbor away, and carries on. The story ends with him on his bed, narrating to the audience about how [[LampshadeHanging disappointed they must be]]]].
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* DrivenToVillainy: Played with with Ken. It's left up to interpretation if his psychopathy is his nature, or how he learned to cope with the cruel environment of his upbringing.
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* HypocriticalHumor: Ken calls Roy out for making a joke about a baby being accidentally castrated. Ken is revealed to have no room to judge...
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* BerserkButton: Ken is an emotionless individual throughout most of the script, but when Sanchez threatens to render him homeless, he completely loses his cool. He similarly flips his lid when he sees his ex-girlfriend at the flower shop, [[spoiler: and his killing spree is partly the result of his other major berserk button: [[PoliticallyIncorrectVillain women]]]].
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* BerserkButton: Ken is an emotionless individual throughout most of Based on his strong reaction to Sanchez's threats, the script, but when Sanchez threatens to render him homeless, he completely loses his cool. He similarly flips his lid when he sees his ex-girlfriend at the flower shop, prospect of being homeless is a big one for Ken. [[spoiler: and his killing His whole murder spree is partly the result of him attempting to avoid this outcome, on top of his other major berserk button: button; [[PoliticallyIncorrectVillain women]]]].
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*EvenEvilHasStandards: Played for laughs, and subverted. Ken calls Roy's joke "sick", which is extremely hypocritical considering he is a violent sociopath who has seen his share of violence himself. This reaction is really just a part of his facade, his "veil of normalcy".
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* KickTheSonOfABitch: Ken's threat to Sanchez, after the landlord manages to genuinely scare Ken with the prospect of being on the streets again. [[SubvertedTrope Sanchez finds it hilarious]], and admires Ken's "balls".
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* NotSoStoic: Ken shows no human emotion for most of the script, until he screams in his car after seeing his ex-girlfriend, who has recently remarried. He starts to slowly become more and more unhinged by this, eventually culminating in his [[spoiler: psychotic meltdown while with his next murder victim]].
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Kenneth Jason Muntz is a seemingly typical American young adult, fending off constant stress headaches and trying his hardest just to keep the lights on at his run-down apartment. A [[DarkAndTroubledPast tough upbringing]] has molded him into an [[TheStoic emotionally cold]] person, and while he projects an outwardly affable persona to his [[TheStoner unwitting neighbors]], he is hiding a dark, dark secret. And with the onslaught of winter approaching and his CrankyLandlord threatening eviction, Ken finds his MaskOfSanity slowly start to slip...
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Kenneth Jason Muntz is a seemingly typical American young adult, fending off constant stress headaches and trying his hardest just to keep the lights on at his run-down apartment. A [[DarkAndTroubledPast tough upbringing]] has molded him into Ken is a loner by choice, noted by his few acquaintances as an [[TheStoic emotionally cold]] person, and while he projects an outwardly affable persona to his [[TheStoner unwitting neighbors]], he is hiding a dark, dark secret. And with the onslaught of winter approaching and his CrankyLandlord threatening eviction, Ken finds his MaskOfSanity slowly start to slip...
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** And, of course, there's the [[spoiler: drawer full of cellphones that he uses to frame Fred as a philanderer. The fact that he has all these phones implies shady dealings.]]
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** After seeing the homeless man at the gas station, Ken recalls his own childhood simply smiles grimly, then drives off without a roof over thought. This is the first glimpse into his head. Upon coming back to his senses, he immediately drives off, not paying "survival of the impoverished fittest" mentality, as he sees the homeless man any mind, his indifference seeming weird considering he was once in the same situation. [[spoiler: Then his status as a heartless egotist is revealed, and it all makes sense.]]
** And,just another "loser" of course, there's the [[spoiler: drawer full of cellphones that he uses to frame Fred as a philanderer. The fact that he has all these phones implies shady dealings.]]
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* MotiveRant: The entire climax is just one big motive rant from [[spoiler: Ken]] to [[spoiler: Penelope]].
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