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** All of the other "darklings" shown throughout the story (namely [[LoveableRogue Alex]] and [[spoiler:all of the people who reside in the Dark Temple]]) are generally shown as being nice, friendly people despite their dark-type affinity.
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** All of the other "darklings" shown throughout the story (namely [[LoveableRogue Alex]] Alex and [[spoiler:all of the people who reside in the Dark Temple]]) are generally shown as being nice, friendly people despite their dark-type affinity.
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* FiveManBand: Tobias and his Pokémon form one.
** TheHero: Tobias
** TheLancer: Jinx
** TheSmartGuy: Accemenla
** TheBigGuy: Igneous
** TheChick: Chevron
** TheHero: Tobias
** TheLancer: Jinx
** TheSmartGuy: Accemenla
** TheBigGuy: Igneous
** TheChick: Chevron
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''[[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2146127/1/ Clouded Sky]]'' is a {{Pokemon}} {{Fan Fiction}} by Negrek.
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''[[http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2146127/1/ Clouded Sky]]'' is a {{Pokemon}} Franchise/{{Pokemon}} {{Fan Fiction}} by Negrek.
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* ColorCodedForYourConvenience: People who reside in the temples in Waytar wear colors that correspond to their temple based on the Pokémon type that it represents. (Fire Temple = Red, Water Temple = Blue, etc.)
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* ColorCodedForYourConvenience: ColorCodedElements: People who reside in the temples in Waytar wear colors that correspond to their temple based on the Pokémon type that it represents. (Fire Temple = Red, Water Temple = Blue, etc.)
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* GovernmentConspiracy: The government of Waytar [[spoiler:doesn't want anybody to know the truth about what's really beyond Waytar's Shield and are willing to use some underhanded methods to keep the secret from getting out]], unfortunately for Tobias, who they see as a threat to that.
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* GovernmentConspiracy: The government of Waytar [[spoiler:doesn't want anybody to know the truth about what's really beyond Waytar's Shield and are willing to use some underhanded methods to keep the secret from getting out]], unfortunately out. Unfortunately for Tobias, who they see him as a threat to that.]]
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* GovernmentConspiracy: The government of Waytar [[spoiler:don't want anybody to know the truth about what's really beyond Waytar's Shield and are willing to use some underhanded methods to keep the secret from getting out]], unfortunately for Tobias, who they see as a threat to that.
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* GovernmentConspiracy: The government of Waytar [[spoiler:don't [[spoiler:doesn't want anybody to know the truth about what's really beyond Waytar's Shield and are willing to use some underhanded methods to keep the secret from getting out]], unfortunately for Tobias, who they see as a threat to that.
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* FantasticRacism: Guides who receive dark-type starter Pokémon are greatly discriminated against in Waytar.
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* FantasticRacism: Guides who receive dark-type starter Pokémon Pokémon, known as "darklings", are greatly discriminated against in Waytar.
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* BloodKnight: Accemenla enjoys fighting quite a bit.
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* BloodKnight: Accemenla enjoys fighting quite a bit. At times, Tobias keeps her in line simply by threatening to not use her in battles.
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* ActionSurvivor: Tobias is this to a T. He's just an ordinary kid who happens to have the great misfortune of having received a Murkrow as his starter Pokémon, the consequences being that not only is he mistrusted and held in contempt by everyone, but is also constantly being forced into one life-threatening situation after the other through no fault of his own, and continuing to come out of them all unscathed through sheer dumb luck.
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* ActionSurvivor: Tobias is this to a T. He's just an ordinary kid who happens to have the great misfortune of having received a Murkrow as his starter Pokémon, the consequences being that not only is he mistrusted and held in contempt by everyone, but is also constantly being forced into one life-threatening situation after the other through no fault of his own, and continuing to come out of them all unscathed through sheer dumb luck.
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* ActionSurvivor: Tobias
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* ActionSurvivor: TobiasTobias is this to a T. He's just an ordinary kid who happens to have the great misfortune of having received a Murkrow as his starter Pokémon, the consequences being that not only is he mistrusted and held in contempt by everyone, but is also constantly being forced into one life-threatening situation after the other through no fault of his own, and continuing to come out of them all unscathed through sheer dumb luck.
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* PuppetKing: The master of the Psychic temple and, by extension, leader of the Waytaran government, is somewhat of a literal example. The ones who are ''really'' in charge are the two Xatu that always stand behind him. They control his actions and decisions without him even realizing it by psychically planting ideas in his head.
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* HoldYourHippogriffs: Words and phrases based on real-life animals are occasionally replaced with those animals' Pokémon counterparts. This particular line from Chapter 7 stands out.
--> Alex returned the look with a Mareepish grin, then drew in a deep breath, taking a moment to collect his thoughts.
--> Alex returned the look with a Mareepish grin, then drew in a deep breath, taking a moment to collect his thoughts.
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* MeaningfulName: [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]] in chapter one with Tobias' classmate Marcus Deepriver, who, to nobody's surprise, receives a water-type starter. There's also an intentional in-universe example with Jinx, Tobias' Murkrow, since in Waytar, Murkrows are interpreted as bad omens.
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* MeaningfulName: [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]] in chapter one Chapter 1 with Tobias' classmate Marcus Deepriver, who, to nobody's surprise, receives a water-type starter. There's also an intentional in-universe example with Jinx, Tobias' Murkrow, since in Waytar, Murkrows are interpreted as bad omens.
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* TheReasonYouSuckSpeech: [[spoiler:Accemenla]] delivers one to Tobias in Chapter 37.
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* WhatTheHellHero: Tobias gets called out by [[spoiler:Accemenla]] during a TheReasonYouSuckSpeech in Chapter 37 for his inconsiderate actions in [[spoiler:abandoning the relatively comfortable life he and his Pokémon were leading in Johto to return to Waytar and putting them all in danger]] without considering how any of the Pokémon would feel about it.
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* DarkFic: Compared to the games and show, the battles in this story are portrayed much more realistically, plenty of blood and the occasional bits of gore included. The story can also get very dark, including things such as an oppressive government, murder, and discrimination.
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* DarkFic: Compared to the games and show, the battles in this story are portrayed much more realistically, with plenty of blood and the occasional bits of gore included.gore. The story can also get very dark, including things such as an oppressive government, murder, and discrimination.
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* MeaningfulName: [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]] in chapter one with Tobias' classmate Marcus Deepriver, who, to nobody's surprise, receives a water-type starter Pokémon. There's also an intentional in-universe example with Jinx, Tobias' Murkrow, since in Waytar, Murkrow are interpreted as bad omens.
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* MeaningfulName: [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]] in chapter one with Tobias' classmate Marcus Deepriver, who, to nobody's surprise, receives a water-type starter Pokémon. starter. There's also an intentional in-universe example with Jinx, Tobias' Murkrow, since in Waytar, Murkrow Murkrows are interpreted as bad omens.
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* Frameup: At one point, Tobias is framed for stealing and abusing another Guide's Pokémon, [[spoiler:forcing him to escape and become a wanted fugitive]].
* GovernmentConspiracy: The psychics, who act as the government of Waytar [[spoiler:don't want anybody to know the truth about what's really beyond Waytar's Shield and are willing to use some underhanded methods to keep the secret from getting out]], unfortunately for Tobias, who they see as a threat to that.
* GovernmentConspiracy: The psychics, who act as the government of Waytar [[spoiler:don't want anybody to know the truth about what's really beyond Waytar's Shield and are willing to use some underhanded methods to keep the secret from getting out]], unfortunately for Tobias, who they see as a threat to that.
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* Frameup: {{Frameup}}: At one point, Tobias is framed for stealing and abusing another Guide's Pokémon, [[spoiler:forcing him to escape and become a wanted fugitive]].
* GovernmentConspiracy: Thepsychics, who act as the government of Waytar [[spoiler:don't want anybody to know the truth about what's really beyond Waytar's Shield and are willing to use some underhanded methods to keep the secret from getting out]], unfortunately for Tobias, who they see as a threat to that.
* GovernmentConspiracy: The
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* PosthumousCharacter: Mayan Waytar, the founder of the Waytar region.
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* PosthumousCharacter: Waytar's founder, Mayan Waytar, the founder of the Waytar region.Waytar.
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* Frameup: At one point, Tobias is framed for stealing and abusing another Guide's Pokémon, [[spoiler:forcing him to escape and become a wanted fugitive]].
* GovernmentConspiracy: The psychics, who act as the government of Waytar [[spoiler:don't want anybody to know the truth about what's really beyond Waytar's Shield and are willing to use some underhanded methods to keep the secret from getting out]], unfortunately for Tobias, who they see as a threat to that.
* GovernmentConspiracy: The psychics, who act as the government of Waytar [[spoiler:don't want anybody to know the truth about what's really beyond Waytar's Shield and are willing to use some underhanded methods to keep the secret from getting out]], unfortunately for Tobias, who they see as a threat to that.
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* PosthumousCharacter: Mayan Waytar, the founder of the Waytar region.
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* ChekhovsGunman: The story is quite fond of these. One particularly noteworthy example is Marcus Deepriver, who at first appears to be a throwaway extra character [[spoiler: only to re-appear after ''thirty-three chapters'' as an acolyte at the Water Temple who causes serious trouble for Tobias when he recognizes him from his hometown.]]
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* ChekhovsGunman: The story is quite fond of these. One particularly noteworthy example is Marcus Deepriver, who at first appears to be a throwaway extra character [[spoiler: only [[spoiler:only to re-appear after ''thirty-three chapters'' as an acolyte at the Water Temple who causes serious trouble for Tobias when he recognizes him from his hometown.]]
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* ChekhovsGunman: The story seems to be quite fond of these. One particularly noteworthy example is Marcus Deepriver, who at first seems to be a throwaway extra character [[spoiler: only to re-appear after ''thirty-three chapters'' as an acolyte at the Water Temple who causes serious trouble for Tobias when he recognizes him from his hometown.]]
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* ChekhovsGunman: The story seems to be is quite fond of these. One particularly noteworthy example is Marcus Deepriver, who at first seems appears to be a throwaway extra character [[spoiler: only to re-appear after ''thirty-three chapters'' as an acolyte at the Water Temple who causes serious trouble for Tobias when he recognizes him from his hometown.]]
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* DarkFic: Compared to the games and show, the battles in this story are portrayed much more realistically, the descriptions at times being downright gory. The story can also get very dark, including things such as an oppressive government, discrimination, and murder.
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* DarkFic: Compared to the games and show, the battles in this story are portrayed much more realistically, plenty of blood and the descriptions at times being downright gory. occasional bits of gore included. The story can also get very dark, including things such as an oppressive government, discrimination, murder, and murder.discrimination.
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** All of the other darklings "darklings" shown throughout the story (namely [[LoveableRogue Alex]] and [[spoiler:all of the people who reside in the Dark Temple]]) are generally shown as being nice, friendly people despite their affinity with the dark type.dark-type affinity.
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* ActionGirl: Accemenla, the only female Pokémon on Tobias' team, can be quite the [[{{Badass}} badass]].
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* ActionGirl: Accemenla, Tobias' Tarsix (an original Pokémon species native to Waytar) and the only female Pokémon on Tobias' his team, can be quite the [[{{Badass}} badass]].badass]] in a fight.
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* MeaningfulName: [[LampshadeHanging Lampshaded]] in chapter one with Tobias' classmate Marcus Deepriver, who, to nobody's surprise, receives a water-type starter Pokémon. There's also an intentional in-universe example with Jinx, Tobias' Murkrow, since in Waytar, Murkrow are interpreted as bad omens.
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** TheSixthRanger: Wake
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* FamilyUnfriendlyDeath: [[spoiler:George]] and [[spoiler:Cass]] are [[spoiler:crushed by a falling light]] and [[spoiler:dropped through a hole in the ground onto solid rock on the floor below]] respectively. Also [[spoiler:Chris]] who [[spoiler:explodes]].
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* FamilyUnfriendlyDeath: [[spoiler:George]] Quite a few towards the end of the Lighthouse Challenge arc. Namely, [[spoiler:George, Cass, Jenny, and [[spoiler:Cass]] Chris]], who are [[spoiler:crushed by a falling light]] and [[spoiler:dropped light, dropped through a hole in the ground floor onto solid rock on the floor below]] respectively. Also [[spoiler:Chris]] who [[spoiler:explodes]].below, shot in the head, and blown up]], respectively.
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* OneSteveLimit: Averted with Marie [[spoiler:the Johtoan trainer]] and Marie [[spoiler:the Dark Temple acolyte]], but otherwise played straight.
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* NotSoStoic: When Igneous unleashes his fury on a Girafarig during the second level of the Lighthouse Challenge by senselessly beating it to a pulp, completely ignoring Tobias' commands.
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* NotSoStoic: When Igneous unleashes his fury on This occurs with Igneous, the protagonist's normally [[TheStoic very stoic]] Magmar. During a Pokémon battle, an enemy Girafarig during the second level forces him to accidentally injure one of the Lighthouse Challenge by senselessly beating it his allies and, due to his constant fear of unintentionally hurting those close to him, he flies into a pulp, rage and starts mercilessly pummeling Girafarig, completely ignoring Tobias' his trainer's commands.
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** All of the other darklings shown throughout the story (namely [[LoveableRogue Alex]] and [[spoiler:all of the people who reside in the Dark Temple]]) are generally shown as being nice, friendly people despite their affinity with the dark type.
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* ActionSurvivor: Tobias. The boy has an almost supernatural ability to not die no matter how many crazy and dangerous situations he's put it.
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* ActionSurvivor: Tobias. The boy has an almost supernatural ability to not die no matter how many crazy and dangerous situations he's put it.Tobias
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* AddedAlliterativeAppeal: '''T'''obias '''T'''alltree, '''D'''amien '''D'''arksand
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* AddedAlliterativeAppeal: '''T'''obias '''T'''alltree, '''D'''amien '''D'''arksandAlliterativeName: Tobias Talltree, Damien Darksand
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It's hard to say much more without spoiling anything, but it has a very well written and mind-blowingly twisty plot that makes it an incredibly fascinating read.
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* BloodKnight: Accemenla seems to enjoy fighting quite a bit.
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* BloodKnight: Accemenla seems to enjoy enjoys fighting quite a bit.