YMMV / The Legend of Rah and the Muggles

  • Angst? What Angst?: People tend to underreact to a lot of things.
    • An example: At the height of his...erm evil, Zyn apparently has taken to stealing from the Muggles, injuring them, setting fire/blowing things up, and psychologically breaking various Muggles into being his lackeys. The author even calls him a "terrorist". The rest of the Muggles act like he's a standard rebellious teenager, shaking their heads and referring to his behavior as "naughty pranks".
  • Anvilicious: According to the prologue, the nuclear wars could ultimately be traced back to the abuse of eminent domain laws...which, according to the author, are inherently evil anyway.
  • Author's Saving Throw: There's a revised version that drops the discussion of eminent domain and the "piercing screams for help" line, among others. Sadly, only the prologue appears to have gotten any attention.
  • Creator's Pet: Rah
  • Critical Research Failure: Too many examples to list, perhaps the most blatant of which being the cloud of nuclear fallout (referred to as "radiation") that blocks the sunlight but not the moonlight. Somehow.
  • Designated Hero: Rah, who does absolutely nothing to try to help Zyn when he goes off on his downward spiral. Even after we're told that Zyn is forcing Muggles into submission to obey him and attacking other people, Rah doesn't do a freaking thing!
    • Heck, Rah never does anything heroic at all!
  • Designated Villain: The book makes every effort to make readers believe that Zyn is a horrible person, even calling him and his followers "terrorists" at one point. The only things we actually see him do on screen is act ridiculously nasty towards his followers and plan to move to an island.
  • Esoteric Happy Ending: Rah is saved and the Muggles are happy again...except that Zyn is still trapped in a cave with his starving Nevils and would not go out, still fearing the Shadow Monsters.
  • Hilarious in Hindsight: The scenes at Lemonade Lake, which is a location in Candy Crush Saga.
  • Idiot Plot
  • Marty Stu: Rah.
  • Mary Suetopia: The Muggle village
  • Narm: There's plenty to go around.
  • Padding: Lots of it, but two examples are especially bad standouts:
    1. A chapter dedicated to ripping off the Fawlty Towers episode "Communication Problems".
    2. A five-page poem that doesn't advance the plot, or even scan properly, and is bad enough to make a Vogon cringe.
  • Painful Rhyme: A five-page poem is built on these.
  • Shocking Swerve: The whole work, relative to the Cold War paranoia of the intro.
  • Squick: At one point, Stouffer felt the need to describe how the twins moved around inside Lady Catherine's womb. That is so disturbing and wrong on many levels.
  • Strangled by the Red String: Catherine and Walter
  • Strawman Has a Point: Zyn
  • Tastes Like Diabetes: At times
  • They Wasted a Perfectly Good Plot: The "plot" is disjointed and incoherent because of its tendency to skip several years between chapters, missing countless storytelling opportunities along the way.
  • Uncanny Valley: The depiction of the Muggles might be unsettling to watch, due to their unnatural design, which is supposed to be "cute" according to the author.
    • It gets worse: In an interview, Stouffer stated that she based the design of the Muggles is based on her own little brother, who was diagnosed with tuberculosis at birth. Sweet dreams, everybody!
  • Unfortunate Implications: