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** Wyrm himself could count; depending on how cute you think he is[[note]]At the very least, he's certainly a {{bishonen}}[[/note]], but he is ''definitely'' a psycho.
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** Wyrm himself could count; depending on how cute you think he is[[note]]At the very least, he's certainly a {{bishonen}}[[/note]], PrettyBoy[[/note]], but he is ''definitely'' a psycho.
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* FiveManBand:
** TheHero and TokenEvilTeammate: Wyrm
** TheLancer, TheMedic: Dr. Fang
** TheBigGuy: Wyrm and Rose
** TheSmartGuy: Puzzle and Syra
** TheChick: Tom.
** SixthRanger: Syra. [[spoiler: And later on, the Dead Sea Circus crew]]
** TheHero and TokenEvilTeammate: Wyrm
** TheLancer, TheMedic: Dr. Fang
** TheBigGuy: Wyrm and Rose
** TheSmartGuy: Puzzle and Syra
** TheChick: Tom.
** SixthRanger: Syra. [[spoiler: And later on, the Dead Sea Circus crew]]
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In [[AfterTheEnd post-apocalyptic]] America, a tyrannical government has risen to power. However, there was [[{{Mordor}} one isolated village]] [[CityInABottle that they left untouched]]. [[WhatAnIdiot Which was a really stupid move, actually]].
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In [[AfterTheEnd post-apocalyptic]] America, a tyrannical government has risen to power. However, there was [[{{Mordor}} one isolated village]] [[CityInABottle that they left untouched]]. [[WhatAnIdiot Which was a really stupid move, actually]].
actually.
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** Syra at one point, after finding out that Wyrm wasn't the hero she thought he'd be, goes into a blind rage and chases after him with a meat cleaver. Naturally, [[NeverLiveItDown Wyrm never lets her forget this]].
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** Syra at one point, after finding out that Wyrm wasn't the hero she thought he'd be, goes into a blind rage and chases after him with a meat cleaver. Naturally, [[NeverLiveItDown [[OnceDoneNeverForgotten Wyrm never lets her forget this]].
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* PreAssKickingMutter
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* AuthorAppeal: Wyrm's red hair is treated as InUniverse FetishFuel for many people.
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* AuthorAppeal: Wyrm's red hair is treated as InUniverse FetishFuel a {{fetish}} for many people.
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* ANuclearError: Possibly going to happen, but to put things frankly, [[TheyJustDidntCare I don't care]] [[RuleOfCool and neither will you]].
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* ANuclearError: Possibly going to happen, but to put things frankly, [[TheyJustDidntCare [[CreatorsApathy I don't care]] care]], [[RuleOfCool and neither will you]].
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* UnderestimatingBadassery: Frequent mistake made by members of the elitists regarding Wyrm. However, Huvris is DangerouslyGenreSavvy enough to avoid falling into this.
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* UnderestimatingBadassery: Frequent mistake made by members of the elitists regarding Wyrm. However, Huvris is DangerouslyGenreSavvy enough to avoid avoids falling into this.
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** Rose was a lab rat, who had to watch [[DeadLittleSister Mica]] suffer and die from the experimentations; not to mention nearly dying herself.
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** Rose was a lab rat, who had to watch [[DeadLittleSister Mica]] Mica suffer and die from the experimentations; not to mention nearly dying herself.
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* DeadLittleSister: Mica for Rose Quartz [[spoiler: and Yui, for Wyrm. Except Yui is a subversion, since she's not actually dead]].
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* AboveTheRuins: The opening scene has Wyrm looking back at the [[WhereIWasBornAndRazed town he burned down]].
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* TheRuinsICaused: The opening scene has Wyrm looking back at the [[WhereIWasBornAndRazed town he burned down]].
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* AdultChild: Syra, to a degree.
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** Dr. Fang is this also. He's a revolutionary {{determinator}} hell bent on overturning the malicious government...and has no qualms about manipulating people to accomplish said revolution.
** Rose Quartz is a Type II, being a KnightInSourArmor who believes ScienceIsBad[[hottip:*:Despite being one of the {{Science Hero}}es in the story]] and also a BrokenBird.
** Syra is a {{Yandere}} for Wyrm, who professes that she "has no friends or family". It's clear she has some psychological issues.
* AuthorAppeal: Wyrm's red hair is treated as InUniverse FetishFuel for many people.
** Rose Quartz is a Type II, being a KnightInSourArmor who believes ScienceIsBad[[hottip:*:Despite being one of the {{Science Hero}}es in the story]] and also a BrokenBird.
** Syra is a {{Yandere}} for Wyrm, who professes that she "has no friends or family". It's clear she has some psychological issues.
* AuthorAppeal: Wyrm's red hair is treated as InUniverse FetishFuel for many people.
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** Dr. Fang is this also. He's a revolutionary {{determinator}} hell bent on overturning the malicious government...and has no qualms about manipulating people to accomplish said revolution.
revolution.
** Rose Quartz is a Type II, being a KnightInSourArmor who believesScienceIsBad[[hottip:*:Despite ScienceIsBad[[note]]Despite being one of the {{Science Hero}}es in the story]] story[[/note]] and also a BrokenBird.
** Syra is a {{Yandere}} for Wyrm, who professes that she "has no friends or family". It's clear she has some psychologicalissues.
issues.
* AuthorAppeal: Wyrm's red hair is treated as InUniverse FetishFuel for many people.
** Rose Quartz is a Type II, being a KnightInSourArmor who believes
** Syra is a {{Yandere}} for Wyrm, who professes that she "has no friends or family". It's clear she has some psychological
* AuthorAppeal: Wyrm's red hair is treated as InUniverse FetishFuel for many people.
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** The fact that this is about a pyromaniac should clue anyone in on the fact that there's enough [[StuffBlowingUp explosions]] [[strike: to give MichaelBay an orgasm]] to go around.
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** The fact that this is about a pyromaniac should clue anyone in on the fact that there's enough [[StuffBlowingUp explosions]] [[strike: to give MichaelBay Creator/MichaelBay an orgasm]] to go around.
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* BodyHorror: A'plenty. For one thing, ''anything'' involving the experiments and genetic manipulation.
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* BodyHorror: A'plenty. For one thing, ''anything'' involving the experiments and genetic manipulation.
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** Wyrm himself could count; depending on how cute you think he is[[hottip:*:At the very least, he's certainly a {{bishonen}}]], but he is ''definitely'' a psycho.
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** Wyrm himself could count; depending on how cute you think he is[[hottip:*:At is[[note]]At the very least, he's certainly a {{bishonen}}]], {{bishonen}}[[/note]], but he is ''definitely'' a psycho.
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** Rose was a lab rat, who had to watch [[DeadLittleSister Mica]] suffer and die from the experimentations; not to mention nearly dying herself.
** Quintel J. Fang's [[spoiler: memories actually [[GhostMemory transcend from the past three generations]], in which he had those of his father and grandfather installed into his brain]].
** Quintel J. Fang's [[spoiler: memories actually [[GhostMemory transcend from the past three generations]], in which he had those of his father and grandfather installed into his brain]].
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** Rose was a lab rat, who had to watch [[DeadLittleSister Mica]] suffer and die from the experimentations; not to mention nearly dying herself.
herself.
** Quintel J. Fang's [[spoiler: memories actually [[GhostMemory transcend from the past three generations]], in which he had those of his father and grandfather installed into his brain]].
** Quintel J. Fang's [[spoiler: memories actually [[GhostMemory transcend from the past three generations]], in which he had those of his father and grandfather installed into his brain]].
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* DoggedNiceGuy: Gender-flipped; Syra is more or less aware that Wyrm just isn't interested in being romantically involved with ''anyone'', but she nonetheless insists upon making her affections toward him clear.
* DudeHesLikeInAComa: Syra could not have been happier to have an unconscious Wyrm in her house.
* DysfunctionJunction: It's a rule of thumb that no character thus far has a fully normal brain.
* EducationThroughPyrotechnics: Actually, this ''is'' the best way to teach Wyrm something. When Fang wants to get his attention, he pulls out a lighter and flicks it on.
* DudeHesLikeInAComa: Syra could not have been happier to have an unconscious Wyrm in her house.
* DysfunctionJunction: It's a rule of thumb that no character thus far has a fully normal brain.
* EducationThroughPyrotechnics: Actually, this ''is'' the best way to teach Wyrm something. When Fang wants to get his attention, he pulls out a lighter and flicks it on.
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* DoggedNiceGuy: Gender-flipped; Syra is more or less aware that Wyrm just isn't interested in being romantically involved with ''anyone'', but she nonetheless insists upon making her affections toward him clear.
clear.
* DudeHesLikeInAComa: Syra could not have been happier to have an unconscious Wyrm in herhouse.
house.
* DysfunctionJunction: It's a rule of thumb that no character thus far has a fully normalbrain.
brain.
* EducationThroughPyrotechnics: Actually, this ''is'' the best way to teach Wyrm something. When Fang wants to get his attention, he pulls out a lighter and flicks it on.
* DudeHesLikeInAComa: Syra could not have been happier to have an unconscious Wyrm in her
* DysfunctionJunction: It's a rule of thumb that no character thus far has a fully normal
* EducationThroughPyrotechnics: Actually, this ''is'' the best way to teach Wyrm something. When Fang wants to get his attention, he pulls out a lighter and flicks it on.
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* FiveManBand:
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* FiveManBand: FiveManBand:
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* MeaningfulName: "Wyrm" is also the name of a [[OurDragonsAreDifferent type of dragon]], given he's [[LonersAreFreaks solitary]], [[HotBlooded easily provoked]] and a {{pyromaniac}}. Then there's the way people tend to perceive him, (which is generally "lower than dirt"), and [[spoiler: the way he even thinks of himself]].
** Puzzle is...well, [[ShapedLikeItself puzzling]]. He's also very good at puzzles and strategy, and basically named after the symbol of Autism Awareness.
* MedicalHorror: Probably where most of the {{gorn}} comes from.
** Puzzle is...well, [[ShapedLikeItself puzzling]]. He's also very good at puzzles and strategy, and basically named after the symbol of Autism Awareness.
* MedicalHorror: Probably where most of the {{gorn}} comes from.
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* MeaningfulName: "Wyrm" is also the name of a [[OurDragonsAreDifferent type of dragon]], given he's [[LonersAreFreaks solitary]], [[HotBlooded easily provoked]] and a {{pyromaniac}}. Then there's the way people tend to perceive him, (which is generally "lower than dirt"), and [[spoiler: the way he even thinks of himself]].
himself]].
** Puzzle is...well, [[ShapedLikeItself puzzling]]. He's also very good at puzzles and strategy, and basically named after the symbol of AutismAwareness.
Awareness.
* MedicalHorror: Probably where most of the {{gorn}} comes from.
** Puzzle is...well, [[ShapedLikeItself puzzling]]. He's also very good at puzzles and strategy, and basically named after the symbol of Autism
* MedicalHorror: Probably where most of the {{gorn}} comes from.
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* UnreliableNarrator: Wyrm opens up the prologue in his own POV, and it's pretty obvious there are things he's not telling the audience.
* WhatCouldHaveBeen: Originally, Wyrm was supposed to be a {{bifauxnen}} a la SamusIsAGirl in the story.
* WhatCouldHaveBeen: Originally, Wyrm was supposed to be a {{bifauxnen}} a la SamusIsAGirl in the story.
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* UnreliableNarrator: Wyrm opens up the prologue in his own POV, and it's pretty obvious there are things he's not telling the audience.
audience.
* WhatCouldHaveBeen: Originally, Wyrm was supposed to be a {{bifauxnen}} a la SamusIsAGirl in the story.
* WhatCouldHaveBeen: Originally, Wyrm was supposed to be a {{bifauxnen}} a la SamusIsAGirl in the story.
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* StealthHiBye: Syra is particularly good at this, given how she once popped out of a fireplace...[[BeyondTheImpossible that had just been put out]].
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* StealthHiBye: Syra is particularly good at this, given how she once popped out of a fireplace...[[BeyondTheImpossible that had just been put out]].out.
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* AxeCrazy: Wyrm, whenever he gets his [[{{Pyromaniac "urges"]], complete with SlasherSmile.
** Syra at one point, after finding out that Wyrm wasn't the hero she thought he'd be, goes into a blind rage and chases after him with a meat cleaver. Naturally, [[NeverLiveItDown Wyrm never lets her forget this]].
** Syra at one point, after finding out that Wyrm wasn't the hero she thought he'd be, goes into a blind rage and chases after him with a meat cleaver. Naturally, [[NeverLiveItDown Wyrm never lets her forget this]].
* DeadLittleSister: Mica for Rose Quartz [[spoiler: and Yui, for Wyrm. Except Yui is a subversion, since she's not actually dead]].
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** SixthRanger: Syra.
** [[spoiler: SixthRangerTraitor: Marionette]]
** [[spoiler: SixthRangerTraitor: Marionette]]
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** SixthRanger: Syra.
**Syra. [[spoiler: SixthRangerTraitor: Marionette]]And later on, the Dead Sea Circus crew]]
**
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* IneffectualDeathThreats: Usually coming from Wyrm, though he'll sometimes try to give the impression that it's for real.
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** Also, Marionette. CuteMonsterGirl with a DarkAndTroubledPast on the outside. On the inside, a very unstable [[spoiler: and {{cannibal}}istic]] WoobieDestroyerOfWorlds.
** Wyrm himself could count; depending on how cute you think he is, but he is ''definitely'' a psycho.
** Wyrm himself could count; depending on how cute you think he is, but he is ''definitely'' a psycho.
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The main characters are:
* '''Wyrm''': A {{pyromaniac}} with a birth defect that rendered him without arms. He serves as the IconOfRebellion for LaResistance, though it's not exactly by choice.
* '''Dr. Quincy J. Fang'''[[hottip:*:PhD]]: A physician leading a revolution against the oppressive government. He professes a love of biological science and will stop at nothing to achieve the revolution.
* '''Puzzle''': A mysterious boy who survived a zepplin crash, who finds Wyrm and eventually follows him back to his hideout. He [[CuteMute cannot speak]], but is shown to be [[TheRainman surprisingly keen in both strategic and calculative matters]]. He also serves as Wyrm's MoralityPet.
* '''Rose Quartz''': One of the test subjects in the "underground experimentations", who managed to escape with a handful of others. Due to the biological modifications made to her, Rose can create crystals out of thin air, [[HeartIsAnAwesomePower which she uses with deadly effect]]. Said power also drains her energy easily.
* '''Thomas Evens''': An ordinary civilian who got [[{{Buttmonkey}} really, really unlucky]]. Essentially the token ChewToy of the group, as [[WhatExactlyIsHisJob no one is exactly sure what his function is]].
* '''Syra Barette''': A somewhat stalkerish {{fangirl}} of Wyrm who eventually joins the team. While she may be [[CloudCuckoolander crazy]], she is also rather skilled in {{Capoeira}}, and has a proficiency in espionage.
* '''Wyrm''': A {{pyromaniac}} with a birth defect that rendered him without arms. He serves as the IconOfRebellion for LaResistance, though it's not exactly by choice.
* '''Dr. Quincy J. Fang'''[[hottip:*:PhD]]: A physician leading a revolution against the oppressive government. He professes a love of biological science and will stop at nothing to achieve the revolution.
* '''Puzzle''': A mysterious boy who survived a zepplin crash, who finds Wyrm and eventually follows him back to his hideout. He [[CuteMute cannot speak]], but is shown to be [[TheRainman surprisingly keen in both strategic and calculative matters]]. He also serves as Wyrm's MoralityPet.
* '''Rose Quartz''': One of the test subjects in the "underground experimentations", who managed to escape with a handful of others. Due to the biological modifications made to her, Rose can create crystals out of thin air, [[HeartIsAnAwesomePower which she uses with deadly effect]]. Said power also drains her energy easily.
* '''Thomas Evens''': An ordinary civilian who got [[{{Buttmonkey}} really, really unlucky]]. Essentially the token ChewToy of the group, as [[WhatExactlyIsHisJob no one is exactly sure what his function is]].
* '''Syra Barette''': A somewhat stalkerish {{fangirl}} of Wyrm who eventually joins the team. While she may be [[CloudCuckoolander crazy]], she is also rather skilled in {{Capoeira}}, and has a proficiency in espionage.
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* AdultChild: Syra, who acts mature most of the time, but turns into a {{squee}}ing rabid {{fangirl}} the moment [[MrFanservice Wyrm]] walks in.
* AnimalMotifs
* AnimalMotifs
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* AdultChild: Syra, who acts mature most of the time, but turns into to a {{squee}}ing rabid {{fangirl}} the moment [[MrFanservice Wyrm]] walks in.
degree.
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** The entire ''DarthWiki/DeadSeaCircus'' have their own AnimalMotifs, being hybridized sea creatures themselves.
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** Syra is a {{Yandere}} for Wyrm, who offhandedly mentions that she "has no friends or family". It's clear she has some psychological issues.
* AuthorAppeal: The very first thing focused on in the story is Wyrm's feet. And within the span of one chapter (as I've thus far written), a whole town and a zeppelin have been set on fire.
** Wyrm's red hair is focused on occasionally, and a couple of times treated as FetishFuel InUniverse.
** Science is a big factor in the plot.
** The whole setting in general has a very SchizoTech theme to it; GeneticEngineeringIsTheNewNuke, but zeppelins are still used as the means of air travel. It's essentially {{steampunk}} with shades of DieselPunk and CyberPunk.
* AuthorAppeal: The very first thing focused on in the story is Wyrm's feet. And within the span of one chapter (as I've thus far written), a whole town and a zeppelin have been set on fire.
** Wyrm's red hair is focused on occasionally, and a couple of times treated as FetishFuel InUniverse.
** Science is a big factor in the plot.
** The whole setting in general has a very SchizoTech theme to it; GeneticEngineeringIsTheNewNuke, but zeppelins are still used as the means of air travel. It's essentially {{steampunk}} with shades of DieselPunk and CyberPunk.
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** Syra is a {{Yandere}} for Wyrm, who offhandedly mentions professes that she "has no friends or family". It's clear she has some psychological issues.
* AuthorAppeal:The very first thing focused on in the story is Wyrm's feet. And within the span of one chapter (as I've thus far written), a whole town and a zeppelin have been set on fire.red hair is treated as InUniverse FetishFuel for many people.
**Wyrm's red hair is focused on occasionally, and a couple of times treated as FetishFuel InUniverse.
** Science is a big factor in the plot.
** The whole setting in general has a verySchizoTech theme to it; GeneticEngineeringIsTheNewNuke, but zeppelins are still used as the means of air travel. It's essentially all kinds, especially {{steampunk}} with shades of DieselPunk and CyberPunk.DieselPunk.
** The fact that this is about a pyromaniac should clue anyone in on the fact that there's enough [[StuffBlowingUp explosions]] [[strike: to give MichaelBay an orgasm]] to go around.
* AuthorAppeal:
**
** Science is a big factor in the plot.
** The whole setting in general has a very
** The fact that this is about a pyromaniac should clue anyone in on the fact that there's enough [[StuffBlowingUp explosions]] [[strike: to give MichaelBay an orgasm]] to go around.
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* DoggedNiceGuy: Gender-flipped; Syra is more or less aware that Wyrm just isn't interested in being romantically involved with ''anyone'', but she nonetheless insists upon making her affections toward him clear.
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* RunningGag: Wyrm's pyromania when it isn't being PlayedForDrama.
** Wyrm frequently brings up the time Syra came after him with a meat cleaver and tried to kill him, usually either comparing how she's [[CharacterDevelopment toned it down since]] or in comparison to someone not as crazy as she is.
** Wyrm frequently brings up the time Syra came after him with a meat cleaver and tried to kill him, usually either comparing how she's [[CharacterDevelopment toned it down since]] or in comparison to someone not as crazy as she is.
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See also ''DarthWiki/DeadSeaCircus'', a SpinoffSeries of the saga.
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See also ''DarthWiki/DeadSeaCircus'', a SpinoffSeries spinoff of the saga.
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* {{Expy}}: Believe it or not, Wyrm was inspired by another [[FieryRedhead redhead]] [[GogglesDoNothing with goggles]] and [[DeadpanSnarker a dry sense of humor]]. He's basically Matt from DeathNote.
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* {{Expy}}: Believe it or not, Wyrm was inspired by another [[FieryRedhead redhead]] [[GogglesDoNothing with goggles]] and [[DeadpanSnarker a dry sense of humor]]. He's basically Matt from DeathNote.Manga/DeathNote.
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* GogglesDoNothing: Wyrm and Rose Quartz. The former has these as a result of being an expy of Matt from DeathNote. They are actually a subversion as they keep his eyes from burning should he end up caught in his own fires. Rose's are purely aesthetic.
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* GogglesDoNothing: Wyrm and Rose Quartz. The former has these as a result of being an expy of Matt from DeathNote.Manga/DeathNote. They are actually a subversion as they keep his eyes from burning should he end up caught in his own fires. Rose's are purely aesthetic.
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* AdultChild: Syra, who acts mature most of the time, but turns into a {{squee}}ing rabid {{fangirl}} the moment [[EstrogenBrigadeBait Wyrm]] walks in.
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* AdultChild: Syra, who acts mature most of the time, but turns into a {{squee}}ing rabid {{fangirl}} the moment [[EstrogenBrigadeBait [[MrFanservice Wyrm]] walks in.
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* WriteWhoYouKnow: Granted, I have a bit of a habit of making characters who have ''something'' in common with me, but it didn't fully hit me until I'd established [[StalkerWithACrush Sira]]'s character.
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* WriteWhoYouKnow: Granted, I have a bit of a habit of making characters who have ''something'' UnreliableNarrator: Wyrm opens up the prologue in common with me, but it didn't fully hit me until I'd established [[StalkerWithACrush Sira]]'s character.his own POV, and it's pretty obvious there are things he's not telling the audience.
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* ShownTheirWork: In regards to the way Wyrm's pyromania is portrayed, his symptoms are actually very close to real-life pyromania.
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** A far, far more [[HighOctaneNightmareFuel frightening]] twist on this occurs with [[spoiler: Marionette]].
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* [[DudeShesLikeInAComa Dude, He's Like, In a Coma]]: At one point, Wyrm is rendered unconscious and has only Syra to aid him. Naturally, she's thrilled about this.
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* [[DudeShesLikeInAComa Dude, He's Like, In a Coma]]: At one point, Wyrm is rendered DudeHesLikeInAComa: Syra could not have been happier to have an unconscious and has only Syra to aid him. Naturally, she's thrilled about this. Wyrm in her house.
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So they later come to meet a former lab rat who was [[HalfHumanHybrid genetically manipulated]] to have wings...except they don't work for flying. She however, does possess amazing powers, that no less [[BlessedWithSuck come with major drawbacks]]. And then they pick up a [[UnluckyEverydude civilian]], a [[LoonyFan crazy fangirl]], and several others. There's a few kinks in the story, but it's so far coming along well.
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So they later come to meet a former lab rat who was [[HalfHumanHybrid genetically manipulated]] to have wings...except they don't work for flying. She however, does possess amazing powers, that no less [[BlessedWithSuck come with major drawbacks]]. And then they pick up a [[UnluckyEverydude civilian]], a [[LoonyFan [[AscendedFangirl crazy fangirl]], and several others. There's a few kinks in the story, but it's so far coming along well.
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** Quintel J. Fang's [[spoiler: whole family is dead]], and the government is looking to kill him next.
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** Quintel J. Fang's [[spoiler: whole family is dead]], memories actually [[GhostMemory transcend from the past three generations]], in which he had those of his father and the government is looking to kill him next.grandfather installed into his brain]].
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** Even a few bad guys get this too. Marionette was in a different set of lab tests, but the end result still left her a mishmash of human, animal and machine. She may still be TheWoobie even ''after'' you find out [[spoiler: she's a cannibal]].
* DirtForcefield: Averted. Think of a SchizoTech UsedFuture with plenty of SteamPunk to go around.
* DyeOrDie: Wyrm occasionally needs to employ a wig when entering into the public. As does anyone who naturally has red hair.
* DirtForcefield: Averted. Think of a SchizoTech UsedFuture with plenty of SteamPunk to go around.
* DyeOrDie: Wyrm occasionally needs to employ a wig when entering into the public. As does anyone who naturally has red hair.
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** Even a few bad guys get this too. Marionette was in a different set of lab tests, but the end result still left her a mishmash of human, animal and machine. She may still be TheWoobie even ''after'' you find out [[spoiler: she's a cannibal]].
* DirtForcefield: Averted. Think of a SchizoTech UsedFuture with plenty of SteamPunk to go around.
* DyeOrDie: Wyrm occasionally needs to employ a wig when enteringTom eventually gets in on the party, once the scientists turn him into the public. As does anyone who naturally has red hair.an EldritchAbomination]]
* DirtForcefield: Averted. Think of a SchizoTech UsedFuture with plenty of SteamPunk to go around.
* DyeOrDie: Wyrm occasionally needs to employ a wig when entering
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* EducationThroughPyrotechnics: Actually, this ''is'' the best way to teach Wyrm something.
* EverybodyWasKungFuFighting: Expect any given character to know some kind of martial art. Or if they don't, [[TookALevelInBadass they will learn it]].
* EverybodyWasKungFuFighting: Expect any given character to know some kind of martial art. Or if they don't, [[TookALevelInBadass they will learn it]].
to:
* EducationThroughPyrotechnics: Actually, this ''is'' the best way to teach Wyrm something. \n* EverybodyWasKungFuFighting: Expect any given character When Fang wants to know some kind of martial art. Or if they don't, [[TookALevelInBadass they will learn it]].get his attention, he pulls out a lighter and flicks it on.
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** TheHero and TokenEvilTeammate: Wyrm.
** TheLancer, TheMedic and ManBehindTheMan: Fang
** TheBigGuy: Rose Quartz and Wyrm
** TheLancer, TheMedic and ManBehindTheMan: Fang
** TheBigGuy: Rose Quartz and Wyrm
to:
** TheHero and TokenEvilTeammate: Wyrm.
Wyrm
** TheLancer,TheMedic and ManBehindTheMan: TheMedic: Dr. Fang
** TheBigGuy:Rose Quartz Wyrm and WyrmRose
** TheLancer,
** TheBigGuy:
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** TheChick: [[TheArthurDent Tom]]
** SixthRanger: Syra
** TheHeart: Rose
** SixthRanger: Syra
** TheHeart: Rose
to:
** TheChick: [[TheArthurDent Tom]]
Tom.
** SixthRanger:Syra
Syra.
**TheHeart: Rose[[spoiler: SixthRangerTraitor: Marionette]]
** SixthRanger:
**