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** The very first minute of \
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** The very first minute of \\\"Battle of Beacon\\\" is supposed to be a horrifying scene, with innocent people fleeing in terror from the Grim in every direction. But having Blake and Weiss stand in the middle of this chaos and not react to it \\\'\\\'at all\\\'\\\' adds a certain level of comical suicidal obliviousness to the scene.
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To clarify: I\\\'m not questioning whether parts of the fanbase view the scene as narm. However, it\\\'s pretty clear from both their expressions and the things they say that the two girls are in absolute shock at what they\\\'re witnessing. I\\\'d suggest a rewrite along the following lines. Any suggestions welcome.
** The very first minute of \\\"Battle of Beacon\\\" is supposed to be a horrifying scene, with innocent people fleeing in terror from the Grimm in every direction. Blake and Weiss stand in the middle of this chaos and discuss meeting at the dock. They\\\'re clearly in shock at what they\\\'re seeing, but their muted behaviour downplays the drama happening around them.
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To clarify: I\\\'m not questioning whether parts of the fanbase view the scene as narm. However, it\\\'s pretty clear from both their expressions and the things they say that the two girls are in absolute shock at what they\\\'re witnessing. I\\\'d suggest a rewrite along the following lines. Any suggestions welcome.
** The very first minute of \\\"Battle of Beacon\\\" is supposed to be a horrifying scene, with innocent people fleeing in terror from the Grimm in every direction. Blake and Weiss stand in the middle of this chaos and discuss meeting at the dock. They\\\'re clearly in shock at what they\\\'re seeing, but their muted behaviour downplays the drama happening around them.
Changed line(s) 2 from:
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** The very first minute of \
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** The very first minute of \\\"Battle of Beacon\\\" is supposed to be a horrifying scene, with innocent people fleeing in terror from the Grim in every direction. But having Blake and Weiss stand in the middle of this chaos and not react to it \\\'\\\'at all\\\'\\\' adds a certain level of comical suicidal obliviousness to the scene.
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To clarify: I\\\'m not questioning whether parts of the fanbase view the scene as narm. However, it pretty clear from both their expressions and the things they say that the two girls are in absolute shock at what they\\\'re witnessing. I\\\'d suggest a rewrite along the following lines. Any suggestions welcome.
** The very first minute of \\\"Battle of Beacon\\\" is supposed to be a horrifying scene, with innocent people fleeing in terror from the Grimm in every direction. Blake and Weiss stand in the middle of this chaos and discuss meeting at the dock. They\\\'re clearly in shock at what they\\\'re seeing, but their muted behaviour downplays the drama happening around them.
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To clarify: I\\\'m not questioning whether parts of the fanbase view the scene as narm. However, it pretty clear from both their expressions and the things they say that the two girls are in absolute shock at what they\\\'re witnessing. I\\\'d suggest a rewrite along the following lines. Any suggestions welcome.
** The very first minute of \\\"Battle of Beacon\\\" is supposed to be a horrifying scene, with innocent people fleeing in terror from the Grimm in every direction. Blake and Weiss stand in the middle of this chaos and discuss meeting at the dock. They\\\'re clearly in shock at what they\\\'re seeing, but their muted behaviour downplays the drama happening around them.
