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Reviews Comments: A Shameless Revenge Fic What Chapter 372 Of Fairy Tail Should Have Been fanfic review by Valiona

A lot of fanfics exist to take revenge on canon characters, from a good guy who makes a questionable judgment call who doesn\'t get punished for it, to a villain who commits atrocities against the heroes. Few fanfics, however, are as brazen about or focused on this purpose as this one is, and this isn\'t a good thing

The fic takes place at the start of Chapter 372, in which Erza, now free, is interrogating Kyouka, who\'d previously tortured her for information Erza didn\'t even know. This time, instead of Kyouka escaping from her shackles and attacking Erza, Erza inflicts horrific tortures on Kyouka, completely out of proportion to what Erza suffered in canon.

The preceding paragraph describes the entirety of this fic. The author eschews everything that does not relate to the torture so the fic is written as a Script Fic that consists of character dialogue and the bare minimum description of their action, making it come off as minimalist and lazy.

Erza\'s highly Out of Character here, as while she isn\'t quite as compassionate as people like Lucy or Wendy, she isn\'t a Sadist like she is in this fic, even considering what Kyouka\'s done to her.

Perhaps the worst part is that there isn\'t much of a point to this fic.Kyouka gets tortured, but considering that in canon, Mard Geer did the same thing to her for \"toying with\" humans, and she later gets killed by Minerva, it hardly seems necessary, except as a way of satisfying those who think she should have suffered more.

All in all, I can\'t recommend this fic in good conscience unless you enjoy seeing characters like Kyouka suffer and don\'t care about anything else.

Comments

  • deltanine
  • 23rd Mar 17
I just want to point out your review of my fanfic where you at one point said, that Erza \" she isn\'t quite as compassionate as people like Lucy or Wendy\" but you seem to forget the times in the series where Erza does show compassion.
  • Valiona
  • 23rd Mar 17
deltanine,

I said \"isn\'t quite as.\" Erza\'s a good person at heart, if a bit rougher around the edges and slower to warm up to people than Lucy or Wendy. Of course, that comment was beside the point, and only a prelude to how Out of Character the torture is for her. If anything, Erza showing compassion is proof that she isn\'t the kind of person she is in this fic..
  • deltanine
  • 24th Mar 17
True. What are your thoughts on the real Chapter 372? How was Erza going to get her so-called \"revenge\" on Kyouka?
  • deltanine
  • 27th Mar 17
Well, as the author of this fanfiction, I think that there is a point to it. You see, I don\'t *just* think Kyouka should have suffered more than she did in canon. I also think that Erza should have actually caused that suffering. She should have taken the suffering that Kyouka subjected her to, multiplied it by ten, and bombarded Kyouka with it.
  • SpectralTime
  • 27th Mar 17
...And this invalidates his point how?
  • Valiona
  • 28th Mar 17
SpectralTime,

To put it simply, it doesn\'t. He\'s essentially saying that the point of the fic wasn\'t to take revenge on Kyouka- it was to have *Erza* take revenge on Kyouka. Of course, given that of his four other fics, two are of Marvel comic book characters killing George Zimmerman and one is about [[Web Video/RWBY Blake killing Adam]](the remaining one\'s just \"Expiration Date\" with Saber Tooth members), it\'s hardly surprising that he\'d write this as a Revenge Fic with no other redeeming value to it.
  • SpectralTime
  • 8th Sep 17
I realize this is waaaaaay after the fact, but I was talking to deltanine, not you. I agree with you.

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