My take on our fairies are different.

So we all know the usual Tinkerbell stereotype right? How about taking fairies back to their roots while adding a nice insect-themed touch to it. in other words, they're essentially bug people.

This race is called the Fynari, a collection of sub-races (tribes) that reside in the realm of Magzaria. I have yet to make a map of it but to give you a basic idea, it's comprised of two landmasses and several islands. The landmass to the left is home to the Seenali, the insectlike Fynari while the landmass to the right is home to the Unseeka, the arachnid Fynari. The two used to wage war against each until they came to the conclusion of a passing a peace treaty. however, prejudice between the two sub-races still remained.

several thousand years ago, the Fynari found a portal in the middle of a pond that leads to a place called earth. it was there that they meet the inhabitants of his realm, Humans. The Fynari were mistaken by the humans for mythical beast which inspired many myths about Gods and creatures of old. Although peace had lasted for many centuries, the connection between Magzaria and Earth have since been severed. But earth still has a connection to Magzaria, albeit, it has cause conditions in Magzaria to worsen somewhat due to Earth's constant pollution. for the last thing to mention: the fynari have a group of powerful warriors who can wield the powers of nature in order to keep the balance between two worlds.

If anyone has any questions, just ask and also tell me any of your thoughts on this.

edited 2nd Jul '17 12:50:34 PM by ewolf2015

How did this contact between the humans and fairies happened?

How exactly they influenced the humans on the old gods and mystic things?

And why and how this contact ended?

Are the old-style "human with eldritch powers" version of the mythological Fair Folk going to show up, or are they all just going to be the pixie-type hand-sized ones fused with bugs? A lot of times, there's an infamously thin line between "fairy" and "god," so it would be really interesting to see whether they're flattered by the "god" mistake, or insulted because being worshiped by humans implies that they're dependent on humans.

Also, how is this story going to feature in the plot? Is it going to be "The Magic Comes Back" situation?

In their world, it appears there about the size of insects but upon entering earth, they are about the size of a human if not taller depending on the sub race of fynari.

Let me specific in why they left earth thing, they're were excused of stealing the humans' children and swapping it for their own, hoping they wouldn't notice. They also thought they had cause some of the disasters to occur. As it turns out, the unseeka were behind them but they didn't know any better but it was too late. The humans had since grew bitter against them and nearly waged a war. The fynari had no other choice but to leave earth, severing the connection between them until the events of kaiego, my main series, occurs. Even then, humans have now advanced their technology, creating a environment that isn't full on habitable for fynari to interact with humans.

Also forgot to mention that the order of scarabs, a group of fynari who's sole purpose was to keep time and space in balance were mistaken for God's due to their abilities. This is where the who Egyptian mythology was created in this world.

bump

Please don't bump threads after a single day or, preferably, at all.

Also, World Building is for asking for help with your world building, not for asking for feedback on things you've written (even if those things you're written are world building background).

General tip: If your first post doesn't end with you asking a question and it isn't the lead up to a question you're planning to ask in a later post, it probably belong in Writer's Block. If you're actively asking for questions about what you've written rather than asking your own questions about what you've written, it definitely belongs in Writer's Block, more specifically the Constructive Criticism Thread (if it fits in a single post).

I'm a tad bit confused?

Do you have something concrete you want help with? If not, World Building isn't the right place to share your work. That's what I'm saying.

Then do I either post it on writers block of not? I tried posting it elsewhere but I never get any replies.

Well, after talking to someone who's more active on Writer's Block than I am, I have to agree with them that this shouldn't go there...

Erhm... Ok, ewolf, are you ok with me giving you some harsh but hopefully constructive criticique?

I ask because I don't want to just throw it out there and cause you to feel attacked.

like other websites, not on here. also if it was, take it as a grain of salt.

edited 1st Jul '17 6:46:31 PM by ewolf2015

Ok, let me just go ahead:

Ewolf, before you delve further into world building (the activity, not the forum) there are some fairly serious issues with your writing you need to address. Specifically the basics. Your sentence structure, grammar and vocabulary all make it hard to parse what you're trying to say.

You have a genuinely interesting concept here and the work you linked to in your profile shows you certainly have the imagination to build a decent world with it.

What you need is the linguistic tools to convey the story you want to tell. And right now that's where you're lacking.

So my recommendation for you isn't to post what you posted in this thread on Writer's Block. My recommendation is for you to practice writing stories and to post those in Writer's Block. And then to use the feedback you get there to improve your basics and continue writing and improving until you have those basics down. Until you've done that, there's really no point in engaging in much world building.

(But certainly don't throw this concept away, it's a very good start that deserves expanding once you have the skills to write a story that does it justice.)

Sigh. Your one of those people, aren't you? Y'know those people who claim you might need to work on your english? You're one of those guys who insist that before I even post here, gotta learn months on end how to english. I guess I'm beginning to realize why no one comments on my post.

... Yes. I am one of those people.

Because I can tell you from personal experience that if you don't improve your English, you will never be a successful writer. You can have the best world building in the world and the greatest characters and idea, but no one will want to read it if they can barely understand what you're saying.

If you don't improve your English and you don't have a language you're more fluent in for you to write in, all the time and effort you spend on world building and thinking up characters and plots and all of that is wasted, because almost no one will get past how bad your English is to really appreciate all the effort you've put into the other parts of your writing.

I know that's harsh, but that doesn't make it less true.

i'm posting this somewhere else but with the grammar fixed. also we're going a bit off topic. also i fixed the first post.

edited 2nd Jul '17 12:50:58 PM by ewolf2015

Ewolf, I hope you're still watching this thread (it wasn't my intention for you to go away).

To get back on topic I've got some comments and questions:

First off, I like that you put a subtle twist on 'fairy' and 'seelie and unseelie' for the names of the insectoid sub-species and their collective name.

What exactly is the balance between the worlds that the warrior caste protects?

Also do the Fynari have the traditional Fae weakness to iron or, given that they are vulnerable to pollution, is it more the presence of iron working industry (which after all requires a lot of (char)coal and water) that bothers them and did that get mythologized into 'they don't like iron'?

In your world are the Fynari only the inspiration for fairies and the Egyptian Scarab cult, or have they are they the inspiration for creatures from other mythologies as well? Also, are the Order of the Scarab only responsible for the prevalence of scarab imagery in Egyptian mythology or is all of Egyptian mythology based on them? And if so, how did insect-sized fairies become worshipped as larger-than-human gods with human bodies and animal heads?

Given that there was once travel between the worlds, were there once or are there now humans living among the Fynari on Magzaria or was the travel always only one way?

Do humans change size when they travel to Magzaria the way Fynari do when they travel to earth?

Do Seenali and the Unseeka still strictly live on their own continent or have some of them migrated to live on each others' continents since the peace treaty? If they have intermigrated, what form does that take? (Across the entire continents, only in the big cities or other select locations? Are they fully integrated or is it more a situation of enclaves on each others' home continent?) If they haven't intermigrated, is there any place where the two sub-species do live together? (Like the small islands, for instance?)

Is the pond with the portal that first led them to discover earth on either of the continents or is it on one of the smaller islands?