I am currently writing an assignment for a creative writing class, and I am worried that, with the plot I have planned out, it might get confusing and / or have some things come outta nowhere.
I am trying to make a dramatic fantasy feel, wherein two guys from different walks of life meet during the days before a battle at a castle that is doomed to failure.
The first is Siegren, a noble knight who saw his unit eliminated almost to a man by the Dark forces, his best friend Kieren taking a lance to the chest for him.
The other is Nasch, a Dark Elf who was a part of a reclusive Mage's College that has led a troubled life. He seems very, very nice and withdrawn, to contrast the louder and more assertive Siegren. He often reminisces for a lost loved one, and his "Master" died in a magic duel with the Big Bad
, "King of Demons" Silmarill and his Dragon Dhalak
The main plot twist I want to set up is that Nasch
summoned Silmarill to this plain of existence, engineered his master's death, engineered his college's death and later personally murders Siegren and raises him as a Geig of the Aiphas Rank
Because he faced racism from them because he was the lone Dark Elf there, and they outright threatened the woman of his dreams out of loving him back, and she ended up getting knocked up by some random magic user and died in despair. And when Nasch tried to have a funeral, some teenage Mages set fire to his Dark Elf traditional proceedings
I want to do this, have Nasch ultimately be the main antagonist of the piece, and not have it come out of the blue, and slowly reveal Nasch's trauma before revealing him to be the Big Bad
, while laying out exactly why its not unbelievable for him to feel this way.
The feel I want is to have Nasch basically not change his demeanor at all. Stay calm, affable and friendly, but be doing really bad things.
How do I do this without turning Nasch into a Complete Monster
? Is his Freudian Excuse
sufficient to him wanting to basically commit localized omnicide?