Ever written something... steamy?

Once I wrote a sex scene, because it felt plot-important: it was a love story, and the scene was both protagonists losing their virginity. I didn't feel very happy about it, though, and cut it off before things actually got X-rated. (As much out of discomfort as out of lack of knowledge: it was two guys having sex, which I have no personal experience with.) The novel in question is currently dead, and if I decide to bring it back I probably won't keep that scene.

I'm one of those people who think sex scenes should be left out of fiction unless they actually serve a plot purpose.

Yes.

Yes, and I ran into the language issue as well. However, I was saved, since it was a dare to write a Lemony Narrator narrating a lemon, so he just made excuses and carried on.

edited 2nd Jul '11 8:32:40 AM by Yej

I did it a lot more when I was younger and sexually repressed. Now, I prefer tons of sexual tension. It's not to say that I don't enjoy a good man-on-man sex scene, it's just that I don't see myself writing one anytime soon.

@Morven: True, but the main purpose I had in designing this thread was asking about the kind that's supposed to be at least somewhat hot, since that's more challenging. At least, in my eyes.

My Literotica page.

Abandon all hope, ye who click this link.

@ Yej: I... I want to see this.

Sorry for derailing your thread, Freezair.

edited 2nd Jul '11 3:56:28 PM by melloncollie

^^

Congratulations. You've shown me that I actually have standards.

I told you to abandon all hope.

I've made it absolutely no secret on these forums that most of my Lit stories are Incest Yay.

edited 2nd Jul '11 5:59:23 PM by KingZeal

Okay, you just created an awesome thing to use to shout and end an argument: "What turned you into such a cock hungry monster!?". There is literally no comeback to that under normal circumstances.

edited 2nd Jul '11 5:58:37 PM by Five_X

That's actually pretty damn true.

What's wrong with liking cock a lot? .____.

There's a difference between liking cock a lot and being a cock hungry monster.

Yeah, the latter is a lot hotter.

Upon advice of counsel, I refuse to answer the question pursuant to my rights under the Fifth Amendment.

King Zeal's work is a little uncomfortable-making

I generally don't have a problem with the 'twisted' stuff, but something about your work...squirmy bad

actually, it was less to do with the what than a gut reaction to the characters

edited 2nd Jul '11 6:57:52 PM by pathfinder

Which ones in particular? I welcome criticism.

edited 2nd Jul '11 7:44:55 PM by KingZeal

the Daddy's Little Psychopath

I couldn't even finish the first part. It was like the reaction i had to Lolita, I just couldn't relate to any of the characters

not necessarily a bad thing, but it was a personal response

not to say it was bad. i've read BAD erotica/porn, and i've read erotica/porn on "bad" topics

It (yours) was either bad, or well done

edited 2nd Jul '11 8:11:07 PM by pathfinder

None of my other stories are like the Daddy's Little Psychopath story. And frankly, I put what the story is about right there on the tin.

However, you should know that Literotica does NOT allow stories with sexual content involving minors. Although the story goes through the eponymous character's life from birth to adulthood, nothing happens until she's old enough to consent. So, the titular character isn't meant to be a Lolita at all. The backstory with her as a child is only meant to explain her Despair Event Horizon and why she snapped later on.

Also, I'd like to note that that story was intentionally Creepy Sexy/Nightmare Fetishist Fuel. I wanted to write a story with a Yandere.

edited 2nd Jul '11 8:26:49 PM by KingZeal

wasn't implying that the character was a lolita, or there was sex involving underaged charcters. just that i had the same gut reaction to your story as i did when reading lolita

Well, if that was your intention, then i should say "well written story"

Well, thank you. And my mistake; I don't mean to sound defensive when I said I'm perfectly fine with criticism. Your opinion is your opinion. I'm just trying to dissect your thoughts.

Would you mind explaining where you stopped reading, so that I could learn from it? In P Ms, if you prefer, but whatever.

edited 2nd Jul '11 9:20:17 PM by KingZeal

I know better than to click on Literotica links. Especially when warned. :P

I honestly don't know what I'd do with this story if I finished it. It's not sexy enough for Literotica, it's probably too hot for dA... it's just kind of there. It's somewhat fetishy, but it was mostly created to explore an idea I had with some sex thrown in.

I have a Harvest Moon fic idea which is admittedly kinda like that. It's like Pleasantville, sort of, with the perfectly chaste little game characters realizing that sex (which they vaguely know of, but have never actually participated in) is OK and they like it.

...I get some weird ideas, man.

@melloncollie, you can have it, if you absolutely insist. However, it was specifically a dare to be as squicky as possible, (and ostensibly Avatar fanfic, but... well, I wasn't paying attention to characterization that closely) so I bear no responsibility for any Brown Note-ing.

edited 4th Jul '11 2:22:55 PM by Yej

I'm a hard person to Brown Note.

Where can I find it?

OP: Yeah, I did a lot of research on humidity, water vapor, and heat in general for my second novel, and— *reads rest of post* Oh.