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* WeirdnessSearchAndRescue: Ebony briefly ends up trapped in the past until [[Film/BackToTheFuture Marty McFly]] turns up to rescue her.

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* WeirdnessSearchAndRescue: Ebony briefly ends up trapped in the past until [[Film/BackToTheFuture [[Franchise/BackToTheFuture Marty McFly]] turns up to rescue her.

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* CreatorsCultureCarryover: Hogwarts is in Britain, but you wouldn't know it with all the American cultural references this story contains.



* WeAllLiveInAmerica: Hogwarts is in Britain, but you wouldn't know it with all the American cultural references this story contains.

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* GenreLaunch: When this fic came out, a lot of people decided to imitate the eccentric crackfic approach of the author. This new trend resulted in seeing good quality writers purposely produce worse fiction than the worst writers.

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You Keep Using That Word is only about characters being called out In Universe for misusing a word.


** Ebony [[YouKeepUsingThatWord likes the word]] "kawaii", using it incorrectly on almost every occasion: kawaii (pronounced 'kawa-ee', not 'kah-why') doesn't map exactly to the English word 'cute'; rather, 'kawaii' describes the ''concept'' of cuteness, and carries with it overtones of innocence, youthfulness and childhood. It's essentially the concept of looking like/behaving like a child. However, the 'kah-why' pronunciation does give you a similar word, ''kowai,'' which means scary or creepy. The 'Kawai' misspelling gives you a [[http://soundboardmusic.net/yahoo_site_admin/assets/images/kawai-piano-prices.6472638_std.jpg make of piano]].

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** Ebony [[YouKeepUsingThatWord likes the word]] word "kawaii", using it incorrectly on almost every occasion: kawaii (pronounced 'kawa-ee', not 'kah-why') doesn't map exactly to the English word 'cute'; rather, 'kawaii' describes the ''concept'' of cuteness, and carries with it overtones of innocence, youthfulness and childhood. It's essentially the concept of looking like/behaving like a child. However, the 'kah-why' pronunciation does give you a similar word, ''kowai,'' which means scary or creepy. The 'Kawai' misspelling gives you a [[http://soundboardmusic.net/yahoo_site_admin/assets/images/kawai-piano-prices.6472638_std.jpg make of piano]].



%% * YouKeepUsingThatWord
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Up To Eleven is a defunct trope


** [[StealthParody Assuming it's a parody]], the story may be a hugely brilliant Take That at [[{{Hypocrite}} self-righteously "unconventional" teenagers who look down on anyone they regard as "mainstream" despite the fact that they themselves are still conforming, only to a different group]]. Ebony is this sort of snobbery taken UpToEleven, to the point where she can only see the world in terms of "goffs" and "preps". In her world, "goffiness" is the only quality which human beings can be judged by and anyone who fails to meet her standards is a "prep" by default. And, of course, all the "goff" stuff she likes is actually pretty mainstream, just less obviously "preppy", emphasizing her hypocrisy.

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** [[StealthParody Assuming it's a parody]], the story may be a hugely brilliant Take That at [[{{Hypocrite}} self-righteously "unconventional" teenagers who look down on anyone they regard as "mainstream" despite the fact that they themselves are still conforming, only to a different group]]. Ebony is this sort of snobbery taken UpToEleven, up to eleven, to the point where she can only see the world in terms of "goffs" and "preps". In her world, "goffiness" is the only quality which human beings can be judged by and anyone who fails to meet her standards is a "prep" by default. And, of course, all the "goff" stuff she likes is actually pretty mainstream, just less obviously "preppy", emphasizing her hypocrisy.
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Incest Is Relative is an index, not a trope


* IncestIsRelative: Ebony simultaneously expresses a desire to be kin with and have sex with Gerard Way, saying "I'm not related to [[Music/MyChemicalRomance Gerard Way]] but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie."
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reepyCoolCrosses has been renamed to Creepy Crosses as per this TRS threadZero Context Examples and examples that don’t fit the trope will be removed. The trope is about crosses being used as a symbol of the occult.


* WeaksauceWeakness: Apparently, vampires can't even write the word ''cross''. They sometimes not only forget this but wear [[CreepyCoolCrosses cross earrings]]. To top things off, they're also vulnerable to ''steak''.

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* WeaksauceWeakness: Apparently, vampires can't even write the word ''cross''. They sometimes not only forget this but wear [[CreepyCoolCrosses cross earrings]].earrings. To top things off, they're also vulnerable to ''steak''.
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* OverlyLongName: Ebony [[PunctuationShaker Dark'ness]] Dementia Raven Way. Enough said.

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* OverlyLongName: The main charcater's name is Ebony [[PunctuationShaker Dark'ness]] Dementia Raven Way. Enough said.Way.



%% * ShapedLikeItself: ''"He didn't have a nose (basically like Voldemort in the movie) and he was wearing all black but it was obvious he wasn't gothic. It was...... [[spoiler:Voldemort]]!"''

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%% * ShapedLikeItself: ''"He didn't A character wearing black clothes is stated to not have a nose (basically nose, "basically like Voldemort in the movie) and he was wearing all black but it was obvious he wasn't gothic. It was...... [[spoiler:Voldemort]]!"''movie". The character in question is Voldemort.
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** The use of "Hajimemashite". On one occasion, Enoby meets up with one of her friends, and the other character says "Hajimemashite, gurl!" Or some such bullcrap. Hajimemashite is what you say to someone upon first meeting them, not something you would say to a friend.

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** The use of "Hajimemashite". On one occasion, Enoby meets up with one of her friends, and the other character says "Hajimemashite, gurl!" Or some such bullcrap. Hajimemashite gurl!". 'Hajimemashite' is what you say to someone upon first meeting them, not something you would say to a friend.
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* WriterOnBoard: The writer gleefully takes wholesale characterization liberties in order to support the assumption that "goffs" are cool. As a result, none of the folks from the Harry Potter universe bear the faintest resemblance to canon.

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* WriterOnBoard: The writer gleefully takes wholesale characterization liberties in order to support the assumption assumptions that "goffs" are cool.cool and "preps" stink. As a result, none of the folks from the Harry Potter universe bear the faintest resemblance to canon.
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* WriterOnBoard: The writer gleefully takes characterization liberties in order to support the assumption that "goffs" are cool. As a result, none of the Harry Potter characters bear the faintest resemblance to canon.

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* WriterOnBoard: The writer gleefully takes wholesale characterization liberties in order to support the assumption that "goffs" are cool. As a result, none of the folks from the Harry Potter characters universe bear the faintest resemblance to canon.
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Fleshing out ZC Es.


%% * RandomEventsPlot

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%% * RandomEventsPlotRandomEventsPlot: There's no rhyme or reason as to why anything happens in this story -- no logical unfolding of events, no significant feel of cause and effect -- in fact, no proper plot. One could just as easily write the scene summaries on slips of paper, toss them into the air, and pick them up in random order and it would make just about as much sense as the original.



%% * WriterOnBoard: See AuthorFilibuster.

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%% * WriterOnBoard: See AuthorFilibuster.The writer gleefully takes characterization liberties in order to support the assumption that "goffs" are cool. As a result, none of the Harry Potter characters bear the faintest resemblance to canon.
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-->For her shirt, she was wearing a bright pink polo with a little seagull on the (right or left? I can't remember) side. Below that, she was wearing a denim miniskirt with the "destroyed" look on it. Paired underneath that skirt were leggings with a little moose at the bottom. And then Ebony realized, on her shoulder, she was carrying a pretty bag with an eagle on it that said Live Your Life written all over the bag.\\Ebony supressed the urge to scream. Here she was decked out in clothes prep to the extreme wearing stuff from Abercrombie and Fitch, American Eagle, AND Hollister.\\Panicked, Ebony hastily tried to take off the Hollister polo, but underneath it, there was another Hollister polo underneath. Ebony frowned, and looked under her shirt. All she saw was a bra underneath (dare I point out it's from the Aerie line available at American Eagle?). Ebony tried to remove the shirt again. But to her frustration, there was yet again another polo to replace it.

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-->For her shirt, she was wearing a bright pink polo with a little seagull on the (right or left? I can't remember) side. Below that, she was wearing a denim miniskirt with the "destroyed" look on it. Paired underneath that skirt were leggings with a little moose at the bottom. And then Ebony realized, on her shoulder, she was carrying a pretty bag with an eagle on it that said Live Your Life written all over the bag.\\Ebony Ebony supressed the urge to scream. Here she was decked out in clothes prep to the extreme wearing stuff from Abercrombie and Fitch, American Eagle, AND Hollister.\\Panicked, Panicked, Ebony hastily tried to take off the Hollister polo, but underneath it, there was another Hollister polo underneath. Ebony frowned, and looked under her shirt. All she saw was a bra underneath (dare I point out it's from the Aerie line available at American Eagle?). Ebony tried to remove the shirt again. But to her frustration, there was yet again another polo to replace it.
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* IronicHell: Chapter 39 is a hacked-in, hijacked fix-it attempt by another writer to terminate the story and [[Adminstrivia/RightingGreatWrongs right the great wrongs]] the main author has unleashed so far. As part of this, Ebony is sent to Hell and forced to wear "prep" style clothing for eternity -- and when she tries to remove said clothing, another example appears underneath it ad nauseum.

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* IronicHell: Chapter 39 is a hacked-in, hijacked fix-it attempt by another writer to terminate the story and [[Adminstrivia/RightingGreatWrongs right the great wrongs]] wrongs the main author has unleashed so far. As part of this, Ebony is sent to Hell and forced to wear "prep" style clothing for eternity -- and when she tries to remove said clothing, another example appears underneath it ad nauseum.

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Removed the commented out Freudian Slip example — not this trope. Also removed commented out Giftedly Bad for the same reason. Fleshed out ZC Es.


%% ** Tara occasionally substitutes her own name for Ebony's.



%%* GiftedlyBad: Tara.



%% * HormoneAddledTeenager: Everyone.

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%% * HormoneAddledTeenager: Everyone.All the teen "goffs" are promiscuous, pretty much [[ReallyGetsAround having sex with whoever strikes their fancy at the moment]].



%% * IronicHell: Ebony, when the fic gets hijacked.

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%% * IronicHell: Ebony, Chapter 39 is a hacked-in, hijacked fix-it attempt by another writer to terminate the story and [[Adminstrivia/RightingGreatWrongs right the great wrongs]] the main author has unleashed so far. As part of this, Ebony is sent to Hell and forced to wear "prep" style clothing for eternity -- and when she tries to remove said clothing, another example appears underneath it ad nauseum.
-->For her shirt, she was wearing a bright pink polo with a little seagull on
the fic gets hijacked.(right or left? I can't remember) side. Below that, she was wearing a denim miniskirt with the "destroyed" look on it. Paired underneath that skirt were leggings with a little moose at the bottom. And then Ebony realized, on her shoulder, she was carrying a pretty bag with an eagle on it that said Live Your Life written all over the bag.\\Ebony supressed the urge to scream. Here she was decked out in clothes prep to the extreme wearing stuff from Abercrombie and Fitch, American Eagle, AND Hollister.\\Panicked, Ebony hastily tried to take off the Hollister polo, but underneath it, there was another Hollister polo underneath. Ebony frowned, and looked under her shirt. All she saw was a bra underneath (dare I point out it's from the Aerie line available at American Eagle?). Ebony tried to remove the shirt again. But to her frustration, there was yet again another polo to replace it.
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Fleshing out ZCE


%% * MexicanStandoff: [[LampshadeHanging Ebony points one out in the final chapter, though she accidentally calls it a "Latin standoff".]]

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%% * MexicanStandoff: In the last chapter, Harry, Diablo, Navel, and Voldimort pull out guns and aim them at each other, all holding their adversaries at a disadvantage while gaining no real leverage for themselves. [[LampshadeHanging Ebony points one out in the final chapter, this out, though she accidentally calls it a "Latin standoff".]]
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%%* PlotHole
* PointOfView: The Fic is primarily told in first-person, but very briefly switches to ''second-person'' in Chapter 37.

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%%* PlotHole
* PlotHole: Scads and scads of examples. Several story ideas are dropped and not taken up again, and characters do things for puzzling and often OutOfCharacter reasons. Characters even die and reappear without explanation. The fic makes Swiss cheese look airtight.
* PointOfView: The Fic story is primarily told in first-person, but very briefly switches to ''second-person'' in Chapter 37.
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* LargeHam: Way too many examples to name. Characters constantly deliver lines in a [[MundaneMadeAwesome histrionic, overly dramatic]] fashion.

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* LargeHam: Way too many examples to name. Characters constantly deliver lines in a [[MundaneMadeAwesome histrionic, overly dramatic]] fashion.fashion loaded with ObligatorySwearing.
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* SelfHarm: Ebony slits her wrists when she's unhappy about something -- which is apparently a frequent occurrence.

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* SelfHarm: Ebony slits and her friends slit their wrists when she's they're unhappy about something -- which is apparently a frequent occurrence.
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* FavorsForTheSexy: The salesman in one of the punkgoff stores decides to give Ebony a dress for free because she looks seductive in it.
-->'''Salesman:''' You know what I am gona give it to you free cause u look really hot in that utfit.
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** Draco ''commits suicide''. No, he does not ''attempt'' suicide, he ''commits'' it, and is found dead. This is ''never mentioned again''.

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** Draco ''commits suicide''.suicide'' at the end of Chapter 10. No, he does not ''attempt'' suicide, he ''commits'' it, and is found dead. This is ''never mentioned again''.again'' -- and in fact, he simply reappears with no explanation four chapters later.

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